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date submitted 01.07.2010
date updated 21.12.2010
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Jacob's Letters

C.S.Adams

What possessed Hitler's deputy, Rudolf Hess, to fly to Scotland in 1941? The answer involves a genuine esoteric secret... the true identity of Christian Rosencreutz.

 

Journalist Rhona Baird is given a black bound notebook, left in the back of a Glasgow taxi. In it is the handwritten testimony of an Edwardian accountant, who claims to have blacked out in his office one Spring morning in 1908 and awoken a century later. Intrigued by the flawless copperplate, she enlists a local hack to help trace the 'author'.

When clues in the text take them to a newspaper archive, where they find a drawing of a man of the same name, who vanished in 1908, the journalist decides she's being conned. But is she...?


 
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PART ONE… 142    

 

 

The dream is always the same..

 

.. he’s chasing a black 40’s limo down a tenement street and through the oval rear window he can see a girl and she’s mouthing something, but before he can make out what it is, a black shape comes shooting out at his feet and he’s falling through this shrill insistent jangling, hands groping for the source of the sound, then a voice shouts in his ear

'.. McEwan..?'

'..mmnnn..'

'Where the hell are you?'

He blinks at the receiver

'.. What time is it?'

'Don't tell me you're still in your pit!!'

'Shit, Ronny, I'm sorry.'

'Sorry? I'm sitting here with this Yank and you’re still in bed!!'

'Ok ok! I'll be there in fifteen.'

'Make it ten!'

The line goes dead.

 

He fills the basin, seeing the girl’s eyes in the ripples, like an aftertaste on his tongue, then he plunges into the icy water, feeling the faraway pound of blood as he counts to ten, before emerging, gasping..   tequila.. god, never again!!  

 

Five minutes later he's in the Vdub, sailing through a grey wash at close on sixty. He downs the window half an inch, flicks out the sparking butt, pain resurfacing with the airwhine.. what the hell had he been thinking about.. last night of all nights.. and on tequila, a drink he didn’t even like. Last he could remember, he was in the Horseshoe with Sandy then suddenly he was coming to in a doorway, like some jakey jagged up on meths. His eyes glance back in the mirror, self contempt seeping through the bloodshot, for they’ve seen such falls from grace many times before, and given the highs of the last seven days, this latest was always just a matter of time

 

 

 

 

Sunday 16th

 

The Clyde splits Glasgow North to South, but the real division is East to West. Stroll through the West End and you’ll find fine houses, leafy parks, fashionable restaurants, but head East and you enter a different world.

 

It was to a particularly grim part of the East End that Ronny Baird was sent that May night in 1999, after two bodies were found in a BMW just off the notorious Barrachnie Road. Having done the rounds of the local shops and pubs garnering quotes, she was sitting in a rain spattered staff car, watching the forensic team go about its morbid business, when her mobile rang.  

'Ronny. It's Calum. We have an address for the wife’s family.'

She intook breath.

‘I thought you wanted me to cover the police statement..?’

‘Alec Nairn’s on his way over. Just go and get a photo.’

 

The house was in the kind of quiet cul de sac that fate usually passes by. As they drew up, across the road, a lace curtain moved an inch.

'I’ll only be ten minutes.'

The driver yawned, unfolded a copy of the Racing Times.

'Aye! Good luck.'

 

They were in their sixties, husband in another space, wife doing the ritual tea-making. She kept repeating that her son was only a taxi driver, a family man, a good provider who had nothing to do with gangs or drugs. Ronny nodded, as if  providing a shoulder to cry on, when in reality, she was waiting for the moment to broach the subject.. and when she did, it was the usual wedding shot.

 

Back at the Daily Record Newsroom she cobbled a hundred words round the woman’s quotes, filled out with a rehash of the spate of shootings. The sub-ed glanced up as she laid the copy and the photo on his desk.

‘Where is everyone?’

He sniffed.

‘Down in the Deadline watchin’ the big match.’

 

What she needed now was a curer in the company of hardened hacks, immune to niggles of conscience, but football was not her thing, so she phoned a cab.

 

Twilight was bleaching purple as they headed South, sky full of fractal swirls of starlings, rising up from the dark girders beneath the bridge.

'You’re with the Daily Record, aren't you Miss?'

She turned from the window.

'Why do you ask?'

'Just that I picked up a fare from the Deadline Bar about half an hour ago and the guy left a briefcase on the back seat. Chap called Holmes.’

‘I don't recognise the name. Just hand it into the security desk and they'll make sure he gets it.'

'I meant to do that, but it’s my last hire. I'm off on holiday early in the morning.'

Their eyes met in the mirror. His face was thin, cheeks pitted with acne.

She sighed.

'.. I suppose I could take it in for you.'

 

She closed the door behind her, threw the scuffed brown briefcase onto the sofa, and poured herself a G&T. Then, suitably prepared, she checked the ansaphone. There was only one message. Her eyes closed in relief as she heard the voice...

'Ronny, it's Sylvia. If you get in by nine, ring me about lunch tomorrow.'

 

She stood in the shower, letting the heat untie the knot in her shoulders. The calls had started four days ago, just the merest hint of breathing, then silence..  she should have contacted the phone company, but being ex directory, they’d want the list of the people who had her number and it wasn’t long. Guy’s face appeared unbidden, little smile lighting the dark eyes. Sylvia was convinced it was him, playing mind games. She sighed, turned into the stream, cleansing the long day from her hair.

 

In the mirror, her body was ceramic white.. she ran a hand across the curve of her stomach..so flat.. a flicker of pain clouded her eyes, an echo of the low point,  not long after the termination, when out of the blue, she’d seen him arm in arm with the blonde, the clack of her heels echoing as they went sublimely on their way...  She unclawed her fingers, pulled on the dressing gown, walked through to the kitchen, filled the kettle, dropped a teabag into the mug. What she needed now was a holiday on an island, faraway from Guy and the Daily Record.

 

In the lounge, the leather briefcase lay where she'd dropped it. She undid the frayed buckle, opened the flap. Inside was a little black book, bound in textured plastic. On the inner cover was a name and date: 'S. Holms. 12th April' . Opposite was a few lines of delicate longhand, written with a broad nibbed fountain pen.

 

“According to the business cards in my wallet, my name is Stanley J. Holms, but if that is the case,  my family and friends must be long dead, so perhaps the amnesia is a blessing. That said, I am plagued by flashes of deja vu, seemingly triggered by trivial things like the smell of the subway, or a swell of clouds above a row of sandstone villas. The sense of desolation which pervades me then is hard to bear, but despite all this, I have decided that I must record what happened during those first dreadful hours, even if it may never be read by anyone with a sufficient degree of knowledge to understand what has befallen me. God knows, I do not want to face that pain, but relive it I must."

 

She hesitated.. it was a diary, full of his secrets. But with no daily entries, just a continuous flow of perfect copperplate, so lighting a cigarette, she began to read:

 

"The wall that separates me from my former life must lie somewhere near the top of West George Street, for my first recollection is strolling down it on a bright blue morning and turning left up the steps of number 142. Just as I reached the entrance, a young woman in a white dress and straw hat came through the door. I stood back to let her pass, and as she bade me Good Morning,, a hackney went rolling by. That image is with me now, like some photographic frame, frozen in time.

 

The next hour is incredibly clear. I climb four flights to the top landing. Down the corridor is a leadglass door and on it, in gold stencil: "Borland, King, Shaw & Co. Chartered Accountants." Crossing the reception area, I open the second door to my right. This is a small oak panelled office with a desk and chair, a cabinet and on the wall, framed certificates, and a clock.  On the desk is a gold inkwell and a perpetual calendar, which I turn to Tuesday the 8th.. Now I open a book with columns of figures, make a tick here, a cross there. Time passes, then comes a tap on the door and a boy enters carrying a tray with tea and biscuits. I thank him, and sipping the tea, continue to work. Presently I rise, and slide back one of the wall panels to reveal a small safe. I twirl the knob, open it, take out a company seal, and back at the desk, apply it to the papers. Then suddenly I become aware of a faint burning smell. This detail is crucial, for accompanying it came a terrible throbbing in my head, pulsing like an electric current. Desperate for fresh air, I staggered to the window, but before I could open it, the room began to swirl, sucking me down into unconsciousness."

 

She smiled.. melodrama indeed...

 

"The shock of awakening into impenetrable darkness is still with me, as is the sense of panic as I began to grope about, only to find that the window had shutters and that the room around me was completely empty! Fear took me then, as I scrabbled on all fours, clawing at the darkness, but on the brink of terror, I drew back, for within me came a voice telling me that I had more to fear from panic than any hermetically sealed room. So taking a deep breath, I crawled to the wall, and feeling along the wooden panels, I found the handle of the door. As I pulled it open, a wave of relief ran through me, for down the corridor was a ribbon of light below the door. But the relief was short lived, for I had blacked out in broad daylight, so why had no-one come to my aid? Moving silently down the corridor, I put my eye to the keyhole. Before me was a man, seated at a desk, reading a book and on the wall behind him, the clock said two.."

 

She gave a start as the phone rang. Could it be Sylvia? Unlikely at this hour. She waited as the ansafone kicked in, gave it another minute. The voice announced a new message, then silence, but this time, in the background came a sound like a swish of tyres, then it was stifled, as if a hand had covered the mouthpiece. She lifted the receiver, dialled 1471, but as always, the number had been withheld.

 

In bed, she killed the lamp and for the nth time, began to relive those weeks, searching for the nuances that should have told her he would abuse her trust.. but then, she’d been blinded, for love was like a spell in which you were held in another's admiring gaze, vanity seduced by its own disguise. But even as the thoughts formed, weariness was dragging her down and soon she was drifting into another space, hips swaying as she descended a flight of stairs towards blinding sunshine, and she was blonde and comely and dressed in white and as she reached the bottom step a man stood back to let her pass and she glimpsed dark eyes, a kindly face, then sunlight consumed her. 

 

 

 

 

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Elizabeth.NYC wrote 561 days ago

This story is pure intrigue for me - opening with a lost journal and escalating in perfect timing to a mystery laced with occult theory and the most notorious time and people in contemporary European history. The character of Rhona is perfect, because she's not a mysterious or quirky character herself, and so I believe readers will relate to her as she seeks to uncover the truth. Beautifully written and polished, this book, in my opinion, is ready for publication. If I could download it to my kindle right now, I would.
Bravo,
Lizzi
(Out of Sync)

Stark Silvercoin wrote 624 days ago

Jacob's Letters is an intriguing book that will take you by surprise. I was expecting a spy thriller involving Rudolf Hess, but what I got was a time-traveling mystery that will resonate soundly with today’s readers. Author C.S. Adams has created a believable plot that starts innocently enough with a book found in the back of a cab. Only the book is quite old and the author claims to have advanced a full century while unconscious. The secret turns out to be rooted in Nazi Germany, deep within their blending of occult and science. Unlike just about every other sci-fi novel I’ve read, and I do read a lot of them, Jacob’s Letters actually seems completely believable due to the author’s blending of historical facts and mysteries into the story. Also, the towns in Scotland are described in great detail to the point that I suspect Adams lived there, visited frequently, or did a heck of a lot of research. Very crisp dialog (also believable) is icing on the cake for this sci-fi tale that will appeal to sci-fi enthusiasts and laymen alike.

John Warren-Anderson wrote 650 days ago

This is my kind of book. The style is crisp and lean, no wasted words. A hard boiled tale of the Lee Child, Mickey Spillane type. The premise is fascinating. I hope it gets through then I'll be able to read it properly.
You handle it very proffesionally, and there is nothing I can tell you.
Good luck with it, Chris.

CarolinaAl wrote 645 days ago

An outstanding story with an intelligent plot and fascinating characters. Rich imagery. Crisp dialogue. Polished writing. Backed.

HarrietG wrote 641 days ago

I like this. I really do. It's clever, complicated and set largely in Glasgow (tho' the trip up to Eigg conjured memory, for which many thanks). I'm still trying to bend my brain round the time travel elements. Or is a it timeslip to an alternative reality? There are all sorts of good things here: masonic conspiracies, war time, secrets, Scottish dynasties, architectural motifs. The city itself felt real and solid; a indispensable part of the story and not just a backdrop to a tale. Your use of dialogue to convey plot is well done although, perhaps because of this, I don't get a terribly strong sense of character at times (I mean I can't always tell who is speaking merely from the words they say. I don't mean the dialogue is hard to attribute - it's not - rather that many characters share similar vocabularies despite originating from diffferent times and places). On the other hand I haven't finished it yet so such a judgement may be premature and, if no one else has mentioned it, it might just be me. All readings are subjective. But you have a really strong plot and the sense not to rush it. The ground is prepared properly so that the construction is sound. Very best wishes with this, Harriet

Wanttobeawriter wrote 143 days ago

JACOB’S LETTERS
This is an interesting story. Made me wonder if I received a copy of someone’s diary if I would read it. Decided I probably would – but it wouldn’t be as interesting as the one the main character in this story discovers. I like the whole idea of this: part mystery; part scifi. I’m adding it to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

elina914 wrote 191 days ago

Here is an intricate story crammed with twists and turns that poses a new question and delivers a new clue in every chapter; plus, it is dotted with cliffhangers, eclectic vocab and interesting local idiom. Jacob´s Letters is a truly enjoyable script.

At Chapter 10 the journalist, McEwan, has emerged as the main character, and this is not surprising: When we let a well rounded, profoundly thought through character loose, he just takes off and romps all over the script, making room for himself. His caustic sense of humor and cheeky remarks make me look forward to his next quip, particularly those about the so-called fairer sex.

Backed and starred with pleasure. You are too funny, C.S.

Elina
CLASH

parachutist wrote 416 days ago

Fabulous writing and hugely intriguing the way the narrative time travels. There’s a line about Caplin orchestrating things from the grave and this is the feel of the book, that the past is still pushing up shoots, still an active force in the composition of the present day. Really enjoying this, Chris.

Miss Wells wrote 422 days ago

Fabulous writing and architecturally ambitious. There’s a haunted quality to this. We feel as we read that we’re being called upon to decipher a secret code, fit together the pieces of a puzzle. I like the fact that you give us very little solid ground at the beginning. It’s like a ghost story. Big thumbs up from me.

Cariad wrote 479 days ago

Re-visiting this. Very impressive read. The tone is great - immediate and accessible so that I whizzed down the first page - not an easy thing to achieve. Your subject matter should be a winner, too. Second world war, nazis, the occult, mystery, all extremely popular with readers, but you've added a new twist and new possibilities. I have rarely wanted to go to a new chapter on here as much as I did at the end of yours. Carrying on now. Consider yourself backed at shelf change.
Cariad
STONES.

Pia wrote 481 days ago

Chris -

Jacob's Letter - Already the hangover scene impresses. And, ah, the famous Clyde. And sentences like ... the house was in a quite cul de sac that fate usually passes by ... or ... fractal swirls of starlings ... all sketches drawn in Zen-like fashion to introduce us to Ronny, of who we learn much in a very short time. A synchronistic moment and Ronny is drawn into a mystery, a story which hauntingly interweaves. Hugely enjoyable read. I wished the book was in my hands. I came back to refresh an earlier comment and well-rate your book, Pia

Nigel Fields wrote 497 days ago

Hi CS,
Great start to this book. Your crisp, edgy prose is at a standard I hope to achieve someday. Six stars.
John Campbell
(Walk to Paradise Garden)

Nigel Fields wrote 502 days ago

CS,
This is a substantial, rich offering. Great premise. Great writing. Six stars and on my WL with intent.
John B Campbell . . . Walk to Paradise Garden, historical fiction.

Susanna.K.James wrote 504 days ago

This is an absolutely stunning piece of writing, the best I have read on here for a long time. You clearly have an 'intriguing' plot which has hooked myself and many of your other readers. But in addition to this you also have a fabulous style of writing which flows effortlessly and delivers (sometimes quite shocking) information with ease: 'the flicker of pain clouded her eyes, an echo of the low point, not long after the termination...' I also loved: '...to find his morning detritus, suspended in time, waiting for McGodot's return...' (I have entered that apartment, many times ;) You skill was also in evidence with the extracts from the journal, which brilliantly capture the more flowery style of Edwardian writers. The only advice I can offer is to suggest that, to help the reader understand what is happening, you add a couple more sceptical thoughts from Rhona about the journal as she begins to read it. I appreciate that that at the end she dismisses it as 'melodramatic' but I felt you could have broken up the lengthy sections of the journal with a couple of wry thoughts. (I never read the pitch before I start a book on here so at that point I was beginning to wonder what the hell was happening and needed some reaction from Rhona to guide me through it.)
Backed with pleasure and highly starred. Well done.
Susanna
'Catching the Eagle'

rivergirl wrote 513 days ago

the story doesn't dawdle -- moves with a deft eye and hand, plot-driven commercial fiction -- reminds me of a dean koontz novel. starred and backed. hope this gets picked up. k x

Alice T wrote 538 days ago

A fabulous book and recommeded to me by my mother. I thoroughly enjoyed the first 3 chapters and will come back for me. I've given this high stars too - backed.
Alice

brinskie1 wrote 541 days ago

Jacob's Letters - This is one of the very best openings I've seen here and the pitch is good. I'm shelving now and will return with comments after reading more if I think I have anything of interest to mention.

G
Einstein's Road Trip [ I would like to see your take on Einstein, mystical realism in an offbeat lit. fiction, when your time allows. Thanks.

Tom Bye wrote 547 days ago

C.S.ADAMS JACOB'S LETTERS'

The pitch brought me in and the mention of Rudolph Hess, and the line ' is she being conned? which makes for intrigue. books written in that period of time, the 40s usually very interesting, and this book certainly hold up. The author John Banville came to mind making you feel there and involved in the story, its quite detailed.and thats a compliment. i had only intended reading a chapter of two but got so engrossed that i found myself reading on and on.
it's quite a complex read and one has to get one's head around , however the dialogue is smart fast and crisp
and brings the book along and makes this an enjoyable read.
backed with pleasure and good luck with it
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'

Tom Bye wrote 547 days ago

C.S.ADAMS JACOB'S LETTERS'

The pitch brought me in and the mention of Rudolph Hess, and the line ' is she being conned? which makes for intrigue. books written in that period of time, the 40s usually very interesting, and this book certainly hold up. The author John Banville came to mind making you feel there and involved in the story, its quite detailed.and thats a compliment. i had only intended reading a chapter of two but got so engrossed that i found myself reading on and on.
it's quite a complex read and one has to get one's head around , however the dialogue is smart fast and crisp
and brings the book along and makes this an enjoyable read.
backed with pleasure and good luck with it
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'

Suzanne Adams wrote 558 days ago

The premise of Jacob's Letter's is clever - your pitch attracted me even though I wouldn't have thought it my genre! Altogether an exciting/intriguing read and with editing should stand a real chance of publication.
Now I'm not one of the world's competent punctuationist! But I think you have the edge over moi. Chapter three; for example, opening sentence must be the longest on record - I know what you are trying to get across but I don't think that a publishing editor will have any truck with it? My advice - for what it's worth- read the whole through aloud as for an audio book. It will become clear where you have to correct. And I'm willing to bet that you will not get through that chp.3 sentence without becoming breathless!

fh wrote 558 days ago

JACOB'S LETTERS
A fascinating story this and what a wonderfyl story-line. I too funnily enough have a journal within both my books, and I find this to be a great catalyst to a story.
Mysterious, dark and brooding at times with excellent descriptions, well spoken dialogue that fits for the period and rounded and believable characters. Well done, I liked this before and I still think this is one of the better books on here.
Backed
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

Elizabeth.NYC wrote 561 days ago

This story is pure intrigue for me - opening with a lost journal and escalating in perfect timing to a mystery laced with occult theory and the most notorious time and people in contemporary European history. The character of Rhona is perfect, because she's not a mysterious or quirky character herself, and so I believe readers will relate to her as she seeks to uncover the truth. Beautifully written and polished, this book, in my opinion, is ready for publication. If I could download it to my kindle right now, I would.
Bravo,
Lizzi
(Out of Sync)

Benjamin Dancer wrote 564 days ago

I went for weird. Ch 10, I took notes as I read and posted them here:

The dialogue helped me anchor myself--since I missed 9 chapters.

The scene felt fairly modern and I kept trying to place it in time. Didn't feel 70 years old. So I assumed someone from the present was investigating the past.

I was right.

"out slides..." right? With an 's'?"

When I got to the digits my interest really peaked.

The entrance into the office is rich with tension: dark, old, etc.

If there were any way to slow that scene down, to build it up, drag it out--you'd have some serious suspense. Maybe you've already provided the background of the building, set the setting so the anticipation is high. I hope so.

The dialogue makes the characters come alive. Remember I've only met them here. You get a real sense of their personalities.

Hell of and ending. You can guess what I did. Yep, turned the page.

You got a real mystery thriller here. Very hard to put down. This story grabbed me and held on.


Eric Joseph wrote 566 days ago

Hooked, lined and sinkered..after three chapters!

Eric Joseph wrote 566 days ago

Hooked, lined and sinkered..after three!

Widget wrote 573 days ago

Intriguing thriller. I find this topic very interesting. You have a unique voice and style that takes your story to a new level. On my watchlist as a must read. Well done. All the best, Katherine - The Quizzical Wizards of Id

HannahWar wrote 575 days ago

Hi Chris, there are some things I don't understand about this site and the ranking of your book is one of them. What an extremely well-written, original, perfect work you have composed. Your language is sublime, this is literature! You own the words you write, you own your characters, you own the story. Why does your work stay at 1000 when some books under 100 are second-rate repetitions of second-rate authors? Anyway, don't worry! It's brilliant, so keep believing in your talent. Backed Hannah

Marcus Woolcott wrote 616 days ago

Really well written. Love the pace and idea. It's a strong piece of work and I see no reason why it shouldn't be published.

Reminded me a lot of Lightning by Koontz.

Happily backed. Marcus

S.C. Thompson wrote 620 days ago

Glad to back this. An intriguing premise, presented with assured style.
sc

Stark Silvercoin wrote 624 days ago

Jacob's Letters is an intriguing book that will take you by surprise. I was expecting a spy thriller involving Rudolf Hess, but what I got was a time-traveling mystery that will resonate soundly with today’s readers. Author C.S. Adams has created a believable plot that starts innocently enough with a book found in the back of a cab. Only the book is quite old and the author claims to have advanced a full century while unconscious. The secret turns out to be rooted in Nazi Germany, deep within their blending of occult and science. Unlike just about every other sci-fi novel I’ve read, and I do read a lot of them, Jacob’s Letters actually seems completely believable due to the author’s blending of historical facts and mysteries into the story. Also, the towns in Scotland are described in great detail to the point that I suspect Adams lived there, visited frequently, or did a heck of a lot of research. Very crisp dialog (also believable) is icing on the cake for this sci-fi tale that will appeal to sci-fi enthusiasts and laymen alike.

rab14 wrote 624 days ago

This is the type of book my husband would love and having read a few of his when I'm at a loose end I must say this is better than most. The exchange of dialogue in ch. 3 is so well written, without the superflous attributions, that I never once felt that I had to start at the beginning again to see who was speaking. Fast paced and exciting. The little black book and its contents are fascinating. Good Luck K.J. Rabane According to Olwen.

Sandra Davidson wrote 624 days ago

I'm a sucker for time travel stories, so I read the first 6 chapters of your story with interest. Ill finish reading when I get a chance.

My only criticism is it takes a leap of faith to believe how easily the characters connect Hess with Holms and whatever secret is going to be revealed. But I do want to believe because I love stories like The Di Vinci Code, that reveal ancient secrets.

That you chose Nazi Germany for your secret is brilliant. I'm curious as to how it will all work out, so for that reason I am backing your book.
Sandra Davidson - COLD MOON RISING

Roger Thurling wrote 625 days ago

Good characters, good plot, excellent prose; I liked this very much. Backed unreservedly.
RT

lj reads wrote 627 days ago

Great job!! You formatted it quite well. Interesting content as well. Captivating!

JD Revene wrote 628 days ago

Chris,

In the opening dream scene (do you have any idea how many works on Authonomy open with dreams?) you make extensive use of elipses. Perhaps too extensive. Be that as it may, you should know elipses have three dots, not two.

Otherwise, though, the writing is clean (just a though, but setting the diary in italics makes it difficult to read on screen, normally such matter would be set with a double indent, but I'm not sure how well Authonomy accommodates that).

I like the style, economic with the words, the odd descriptive passage well chosen, and more hinted at than said.

Backed

andrew skaife wrote 629 days ago

As I can offer no additional comments that have not been covered already...

I offer you my BACKING

Lulubanks wrote 630 days ago

An absorbing read...the smooth, vivid prose brings the scenes alive...this is good...

Daniel Manning wrote 631 days ago

Investigative reporters Rhona Baird and Jim McEwan are in interested in the disapearance of a Mr Stanlely Holms a chartered accountant who lived in the early twentieth century. A briefcase containing his writing is their only clue, but when they visit an address, it has changed beyond recognition.
Stylish mystery and a great inside look at the cut and thrust world of journalism, where a range of information comes from cab drivers and barmaids.
Nicely written contemporary and upbeat, as Mc Ewan tries to beat drink driving wrap by evading the police, and inadvertently finds another lead.
Backed with pleasure
Daniel Manning

Fabrice Stuyvesant wrote 632 days ago

Solid thriller, good opening (read the first 3 chapters). Looks like a well constructed tale and certainly engages the reader. Nice touch to have cliffhangers in the writings of the notebook. Like the long pitch which is actually quite short. I can see how this works, raising all sorts of questions.

Happily backed! Fabrice, Club Wars

Becca wrote 635 days ago

I really love your dialogue style--Quick, Sharp, To the Point. I like that you made it clear at the start it was a dream--good call. I wish I had more to add, but the content isn't my usual choice of read. The writing seems polished to me, though.
xBeccaX
The Forever Girl

Vall wrote 639 days ago

Well written, well paced. Happy to back this
Vall
Midwyf

HarrietG wrote 641 days ago

I like this. I really do. It's clever, complicated and set largely in Glasgow (tho' the trip up to Eigg conjured memory, for which many thanks). I'm still trying to bend my brain round the time travel elements. Or is a it timeslip to an alternative reality? There are all sorts of good things here: masonic conspiracies, war time, secrets, Scottish dynasties, architectural motifs. The city itself felt real and solid; a indispensable part of the story and not just a backdrop to a tale. Your use of dialogue to convey plot is well done although, perhaps because of this, I don't get a terribly strong sense of character at times (I mean I can't always tell who is speaking merely from the words they say. I don't mean the dialogue is hard to attribute - it's not - rather that many characters share similar vocabularies despite originating from diffferent times and places). On the other hand I haven't finished it yet so such a judgement may be premature and, if no one else has mentioned it, it might just be me. All readings are subjective. But you have a really strong plot and the sense not to rush it. The ground is prepared properly so that the construction is sound. Very best wishes with this, Harriet

Ann Mynard wrote 643 days ago

Chris, Intriguing, involving and very well crafted. Just the kind of story I like to read. Best of luck with it.
Backed,
Ann Mynard (Windshadow)

CamilleS wrote 644 days ago

Well done! Hooked me then reeled me in! Didn't get to read much, but liked what I read. Backing.

Camille
Curse of the Golden Fly

Pia wrote 644 days ago

Chris -

Jacob's Letter - Already the hangover scene impresses. And, ah, the famous Clyde. And sentences like ... the house was in a quite cul de sac that fate usually passes by ... or ... fractal swirls of starlings ... all sketches drawn in Zen-like fashion to introduce us to Ronny, of who we learn much in a very short time. A synchronistic moment and Ronny is drawn into a mystery, a story which hauntingly interweaves. Hugely enjoyable read. I wished the book was in my hands.

Backed with pleasure, Pia (Course of Mirrors)

CarolinaAl wrote 645 days ago

An outstanding story with an intelligent plot and fascinating characters. Rich imagery. Crisp dialogue. Polished writing. Backed.

John Warren-Anderson wrote 650 days ago

This is my kind of book. The style is crisp and lean, no wasted words. A hard boiled tale of the Lee Child, Mickey Spillane type. The premise is fascinating. I hope it gets through then I'll be able to read it properly.
You handle it very proffesionally, and there is nothing I can tell you.
Good luck with it, Chris.

Romilla wrote 650 days ago

C.S. Adams: Jacob’s Letters

Dear Chris,
This is a rather unusual read and one that differs so much from the typical Nazi reads we get in the market. The plot is unique and the idea of a diary surfacing that spells eventually some connection to a Nazi past, remains the factor that drew my interest.

Your writing is profound and your sentences, though long, are beautifully connected. Language flow is so important and what matters is a read that draws interest and some connection with the reader, so yes….I would applaud this manuscript for the interest it beckons me, for the lucidity in language flow and most of all, for the imagination that it stirs within its covers!

Fascinating read and shelved!

Romilla
Forgetting Sally

Daniel Delacy wrote 650 days ago

Pitchwise it's a cracker. What the hell has an Ewardian accountant/Rip van Winkle got to do with a madman like Hess? Simply had to read to find out. Then the quality of the writing, the mysterious dream in the haze of waking from a Tequila fueled sleep, the quick icy wash before the dash across town. Absolutely loved it. Backed

Crowel wrote 651 days ago

Wow. I only read the first chapter because I need to do some catching up but this is one that I'm going to keep reading. I love the voice in the diary entries and how you tie Ronny in right at the end in a very subtle, yet obvious way. And the writing... well you're clearly talented that's all I can say. Definitely backed.

Lacey

missyfleming_22 wrote 652 days ago

I'm going to stop briefly before I read the last four chapters. I'm kind of anxious for the end, right now everyone seems to be in different times so I need to get back. Anyway, as far as the structure of the story, you've made it seem effortless. Anytime you use different times or time travel, it gets hard to fabricate it enough to feel believable or even to follow. I didn't get any of that with yours. I'm fascinated by old documents and books too so this really was fun for me. Plus, I picked it up quickly as I remembered reading the first three chapters earlier.

The only problem I had with this was with the dialogue. Don't worry the dialogue itself is great, it flowed and felt natural, really accented your story. I just got confused as to who was talking, you don't use a lot of dialogue tags. It may be a style thing but a few times I found myself going back over it to see who said what. Another thing related to dialogue was you had something like,

'I have to go.'

He grabbed his coat.

'See you guys later.'

I'm just used to seeing it as 'I have to go.' He grabbed his coat. 'See you guys later.' all in one line or paragraph. I think if you did it that way it would tighten up some of your chapters, condense them down a little. But again, it might be a style thing. If that's the case, don't listen to me!

That's honestly the only parts that I stumbled on. You have a couple really long paragraphs here and there that with a thriller like this you may wanna break them up. But it's not a huge deal. I have enjoyed this immensely and I'm really glad I came back and asked to read more. People are missing out by only reading a couple chapters! I love books that combine history and thrills and adventure (as you can see by my writing) so I'm a little impartial but your book is well thought out and written. I admire the hard work you put into this!

I hope that is helpful even just a tiny bit, I get so distracted by reading most times I seem to miss a lot of editing issues!

Missy

mvw888 wrote 652 days ago

I was enthralled with your style--so immediate, so vivid and evocative. Raymond Carver came to mind but I think not for the style--yours is much more poetic--but for the sharp-edged feel of this, the sense that this is humanity, exposed. You introduce enough elements at the start to engage the reader and keep us reading. Really a strong start; I'm happy to back this.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Katy Christie wrote 657 days ago

'A culdesac that fate passes by' - love it. I do enjoy your style of writing; it's kind of sharp and succinct. It's also rather nostalgic as I grew up just outside Glasgow and went to college there. Sorry, digressing - excuse the self indulgence. Back to the book. The atmosphere is set in the first chapter and we're in for a bumby ride - I can tell this is going to be a good read.
Katy Christie
No Man No Cry

tisseurdecontes wrote 657 days ago

I've finished the first three chapters and find this a fascinating read. The pitch and your tags added to the interest. This is well written and so far I have not found anything out of place on which to comment.

I will be reading more and will comment as appropriate.

Backed.

Steven Lloyd
THE AUDACITY OF HOPE AND CHANGE

nsllee wrote 658 days ago

Hi CS

What a lovely writing - you can do gritty world-weary hack, realistic dialogue, and also something altogether more lyrical. There's more to this than the usual thriller cliches. Backed.

Nicole
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