Thomas Fairchild

Thomas Fairchild really hits the mark. A book about an intellectually impaired child, as your short pitch suggests, will draw a compassionate audience no matter the age. I think what you have achieved here is remarkable. The visuals alone conjure up a spiritually exciting theme; Thomas born with a brain injury has been chosen and he must get his angel wings. Adults will enjoy reading this to children, re-opening a childlike world many thought they had left behind. But what’s so special about this book is its magic. It spreads like fairy dust and I believe it will linger with those that read it for quite some time. With Fri’ knowing what Thomas is thinking, the dialogue is natural and fast paced and I like how you have introduced the notion that the Great Father removes all memory of the Yonder Realm. I have often wondered this myself, forgotten only so that we don’t feel homesick and unable to fulfill his plan. The colors and auras which reveal children’s feelings are so clever, nice children having vibrant colors and mean children having murky ones. But with the option to change them for something better. This struck me as the most encouraging, bringing hope to the story and livening up the plot. A marvelous story rich in hope. I will definitely be coming back for more. Highly starred. Claire ~ Chasing Pharaohs.

This is interesting concept for the younger set. I love when writers use their fantasy world to explain ordinary imponderables like using colors to describe emotion or the the meaning of yawning. I thought some of the more esoteric explanations ran a bit long and could use some trimming, but not too much. Otherwise, the pace is fine and the voice is wonderfully gentle.

This has a great premise, is written well, and has a unique - sweet tone.

It could do with a little tightening in places, and I've put a couple below.

No need to have 'sat' or 'lay' with down. Both imply down.

With 'where the voices were coming from' - try eg. 'where the voices came from'

I feel the explanation about dropping the 's' that is in brackets could be removed and you could just let the dialogue speak for itself.

Good luck with it.

A really wonderful book for all children, it should be on all families bookshelves.
Backed ealier, just managed to catch up this far.
Norman.

What an inspirational tale. Some children facing loss or serious illness could well benefit from a story like this, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Thomas Fair Child
A wonderful cjhildren's book
Backed
Eveleen

You have crafted a most compelling storyline and your use of imagery is excellent. Your character development of Tom is well done and the dialogue is crisp and realistic. All of this coupled with your descriptive writing ensures that your work will appeal to the children's audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Sounds like a lovely tale mixed with a very profound message, one that might be too often avoided in real life. -Susan
I'm backing.
Maybe you might want to check out my "Drowning"

Dear Eunice
Loving this book cover for sure...What a good book. I started reading this some time ago and just wanted to let you know, now finished. I have already commented and backed your book a while ago, but cannot see the backing anywhere. So i am taking the time to back it again because I believe your book is WORTH IT

BEST OF LUCK
Denise

Thomas Fairchild

Eunice Attwood

This looks like a lovely, inspirational, educational story for your target readership.
Looked at your pitches and chapter one " Fri' ". Thomas is immediately sympathetic, born with a brain injury and having trouble with writing and speech. I think your writing here should be easily accessible to children and I wish you all the best with it. Happy to give it a spin on my shelf Eunice.

Dear Eunice, Well, this is your 3rd book that I am backing - I love them - amazing that it's based on your grandson - I'm sure he's totally honored. :) So is there a 4th book, now? Love, Susie :) p.s. Could you please take just a moment to back my 2 memoir books? Thanks. :)