Ignorance

Very compelling read. I just had to get to the end of your first chapter. Worth returning for more. Backed. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Hi AL

Brilliant opening and situation - it's almost got the feel of Kafka, the starkness of symbolism of that wall, the sinister oppression of a secret that everyone knows but you, the flight, the fear. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

A.L, I found your first chapter had to ignore. Very descriptive and visual. A truly great read.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Excellent start to what appears to be a winner! Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

Ignorance

A. L. Thomason

"Ignorance" is a good name for a book. Backed a few days ago. Your storyline is of interest to me and you seem to have some fresh ideas here. Not bad following Alexandria's journey for a bit. Good luck.

Dear A.L.,
There is something about your pitch that, more than most, really draws the reader in. You cover with the stark black and white scene adds to the mystery. I think you've done a great job here!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Here is your chance to get a double backing. My friend, homewriter, and I have similar taste in writing and trust each other's judgment. Back my book and leave it on your bookshelf. Then do the same for his, "The Harpist of Madrid." Once the backings register, he will give you a return backing guaranteed. Just let him know in an email that you've backed my book as well as his. You might have to be a bit patient as we're 6 time zones apart. But you'll have two backings guaranteed on your excellent book. Of course, comments are always welcome too!

Dear A.L. Your pitch is tremendously addictive, enough so that had I found this book in a bookstore, I'd have purchased it on the strength of your synopsis. Best of luck with it, I will return with further comments once I've read further chapters.
Backed with pleasure
Helen
The Last Dream

I do like your use of the first person narrative voice. It allows you to full explore, and you do it well, Alexandria's feelings, thoughts, emmotions and observations. You have crafted a most interesting storyline and your imaginative writing makes your science fiction fantasy a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Interesting that in ch1 you refer to the father as superstitious and the the mother as suspicious.There's a sense of paranoia here, the helicopters and men in black storming the nearby house; the family's constant moves. And though you describe interiors a lot there's no sense of homeliness but claustraphobia.
It's a very atmospheric, well-written read. Backed. Lynn

Ignorance

A. L. Thomason

I love your title and your cover.
(Re long pitch - not different "than", but different "from".)

Nice original storyyline and I like your writing style. "I was about to find out just how foolish I had really been." Great line. I look forward to seeing this rising in the charts here. Good luck with it.

Finished all six chapters you have posted here and I must say PLEASE POST MORE!! :) This is very well written and exciting. I can't wait to see what happens to Alexandria. Great job.

-Melissa

Welcome aboard, A.L. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. Congrats - both pitches work. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

I loved the first chapter so much. You kept me waiting in suspense to find out the secret :-) I love the way you write the narration. It makes me keep wanted to read more.
Well done!
Backed,
Sofia (The Lost Inheritance)

And the answer is that your writing is excellent. I don's say it lightly, I mean it. You, your younger sisters, your parents and the people and environment around you, how centred this story is. Then you could develope your strory to an extent to keep your reader hooked until they finish reading your book, very important. I rate your writing excellent as I said, I normally dont do that with others. So good luck and backed.

Shah

I enjoyed your first chapter very much! I want to know what "the secret" is as well! :) I love the lines about the meatloaf. "Grotesquery"!!! :D The narrator's voice is fresh and original and makes me want to keep reading her story. Well done. Happily backed.

-Melissa
THE SEVENTH BLESSING

Ignorance
A good opening
Backed
Eveleen (Turning a new leaf)

Dear A.L.
Loved yo pitches as they took me to really want to read your book. Just a suggestion for your long pitch, a para, so it does not give the impression of being too long. Of course it is not but that potential publisher of your will read this before anything else, me thinks. So well crafted and well worth the read, I wish I had half your talent.
BACKED for sure by me
I do hope you can cross over to my genre and review my book, please comment ( this assists me in honing my skill) and if you feel, back it.
Thanks and BEST OF LUCK WITH YOUR BOOK
Denise
The Letter

IGNORANCE
This is an interesting story. The beginning is intriguing: the sudden move, the brand new house, the odd explanation about the disease . . . really locks a reader into the story. You have a good main character in Alexandria; she’s likable and sympathetic because her life is so confusing and she knows she’s being lied to. Makes this a good story. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

9ood opening chapter, settiing the scene, leaving us wanting more- on my watchlist...
read SEASONS...

Dear A.L., I love your adventure of this girl & all she is trying to do - it always nice to run into friends. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs (longer ones, you may want to cut in 2 or more for us with short attention spans who tend to miss the middles) & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :) Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

This is information from authonomy (so beware of any other untrue information you may receive that is spam & not quotes of authonomy):
"When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"
"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."
backed :)
Love, Susie :)