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word count 14664
date submitted 27.09.2008
date updated 04.08.2009
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Romance, Comedy...
classification: moderate
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Kissing Frogs

alchemist

Sassy Emma gets addicted to online dating with hilarious results. Will she meet her Mr Right?

 

Freelance journalist Emma is commissioned to write an article on online dating. Despite disastrous dates and cringy chat-up lines she gets hooked and throws herself body and soul in the obsessive quest for the perfect chemistry.

 
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15 January 2007 

Yep, it’s January, the time of drought. December was a mad scramble of triple bookings, turning down work I’d kill for, except I’d been booked by the cunning chief subeditor of Plastic Bulletin two months before and I’d never cancel.

Damn, I could have worked for Fashionista instead, in the heart of the West End! But it’s first come, first served and I don’t want to upset people, you never know, the glossy magazines might cut their freelance budget, while bread-and-butter subediting gigs at boring trade magazines are up for grabs most of the time.

But after spending two weeks at home, patting my festive tummy and trying to resist switching the TV on, I’ve reached my breaking point. I’ve emailed all the magazines I could think of with no result. And I am about to get a huge credit card bill for my Crimbo holiday at a five-star hotel in Rome. It’s going to be grim if I don’t land some work soon.

As I reach for a digestive biscuit to dunk in my tea, my mobile phone rings in the distance. Work? Shit, I left it downstairs in the kitchen. I run down the stairs in my slippers, skid and do the steps on my back, my bum dusting them all the way down. As I lay at the bottom of the stairs, stunned, the mobile stops. Wincing, I drag myself on all fours towards the kitchen, pull myself up by grabbing the worktop and pick up the mobile. I breathe a sigh of relief when I realise the caller has left a message.

I listen to the voicemail while aching all over and yes, it’s somebody wanting me to go in… today! I call them back and say I’ll be there in an hour. I drag myself upstairs, feeling like I’ve been tramped all over by an elephant. My back aches, my bum is bruised and I twisted my right foot, but yes, I will be going to work. It’s a new client and I’m not letting this opportunity slip through my fingers!

 

 

20 January 

I’m in paradise. The sun shines, the sea is blue, I’m holding a frozen margarita in my right hand and adjusting my sunglasses with my left. A tanned hunk is sprawled on a towel by my side and I feel fabulous. Then an irritating beep, beep, beep shatters the blue sky. I get up and look out of the window, it’s threatening rain, again! I am about to dash downstairs for a shower when I realise it’s Saturday.

My flatmate Andy pops out of his room. ‘Bloody hell, why do you have to get up this early on a Saturday?’ He mutters and I go back to bed, where it all comes back to me.

Yesterday it was my last day at the ad agency and they had a do to celebrate the end of the project, so last night I came back a bit worse for wear and set the alarm clock by mistake.

And what a week it has been! I stumbled into Creative Biz on Monday afternoon, my body black and blue from the fall and was taken to the stationery cupboard by a posh work experience girl called Selina. There was a computer on a rickety desk and a dodgy chair. Instinctively, I looked up to check if there was an air-conditioning vent above, too. Yes, don’t you love it when they run out of space and you get the spare desk, the one with the slow computer, the torture chair and the freezing aircon vent above?

But forewarned is forearmed and I always carry a freelance survival kit. So when Selina left, I inflated my plastic cushion, sat on it, switched the computer on and awaited my briefing. Five minutes passed and nobody came. So I tried to log onto the internet and found that there was no connection. Great, I muttered. How am I going to know if anybody emails me about any work?

I grabbed my bag and made my way towards the kitchen to get a hot drink. I opened a few cupboards, but there was nothing there, except a solitary kettle. I got a mug, tea bag, plastic spoon and dried milk sachet from my kit and made myself a cup of tea. When I stepped back into my cubby-hole, a glamorous brunette was waiting for me and gave my cuppa a funny look.

‘Oh, how organised,’ she gushed, ‘but didn’t Selina say that we have a free account at Starbucks? You ring the number on the phone and they deliver.’ Then she looked at the desk and realised there was no phone. ‘Oh, I’m sorry, it’s just for today, you’ll get a proper desk tomorrow.’

‘Well, thanks.’

‘My name is Fenella, I’m the creative director for this project. Anyhow, you will find the work that needs doing in the folder called To Do on the Special Projects Server. Save a copy on your desktop and when you’ve finished, just pop your version into Done.’

‘Do you have a particular house style?’ I asked.

‘Style? Of course you need plenty of style, it’s a major health account. Today you’ll be writing bits and pieces for us. I hope it’s OK, your CV says you also write.’

‘Yes, I did advertorials for several women’s magazines. Can I ask, where did you get my CV? I don’t remember sending it to you.’

‘Oh, it was emailed to me. A friend’s friend who works at a trade magazine in Surrey. He positively recommended you. Anyhow, must dash now, give Selina a shout if you want a drink, she sits by the door.’

‘Thanks.’

When she’s gone, I sink back into my inflatable cushion in disbelief, it could only be the bloke from Plastic Bulletin! Dull like ditchwater and located in the sticks, but £170 a day covered the train fare nicelyplus he got me another gig! 

 

 

22 January

So I spent last Monday afternoon writing about some fizzy tablets that claimed to perk you up so you could recover your ‘get up and go’ attitude and forget all about modern stresses... yeah, right, I thought while I tried to find some interesting causes of stress to spice my copy with. Perhaps working in a cupboard might work as number one.

On Tuesday I received glowing feedback and was given copy to edit about a multi-vitamins brochure and other bits and pieces that kept me occupied till the end. I wrote, guzzled free hot drinks, taking pleasure in ordering the most expensive coffee combos from Starbucks and was quite happy, despite the fact that I was still stuck in the cupboard.

Fenella was off and nobody had bothered to fix me a space elsewhere. Wednesday was much the same, same space, more health copy, more pricey coffees. I started to enjoy the fact that I was left alone to get on with it, it is far worse when the chief sub is constantly breathing on your neck with faux-kind enquiries such as: ‘So, how are you doing with that feature on the menopause’ and giving me premature hot flushes as I attempt to cut ten lines, write the headline and sell and give it a final read in under half an hour.

There wasn’t any sociable vibe in the air anyway, people worked with their heads down and their bums stuck to their seats. I hardly saw them leaving their stations to go to the toilet or wander around the water dispenser. They must be as well seasoned as camels. I nearly felt like a freak with my regular toilet and drink breaks.

Fenella called Selina on Thursday to give her some instructions for me and to apologise for leaving me all alone in the cupboard, but they were all struggling to finish the project on time and she hoped I didn’t mind pitching in. I refrained from glaring when Selina related all this - if there’s one thing I hate it’s when they treat you like a freelancer (dodgy desk, no perks) but try to make you work as hard as a staffer (unpaid overtime, unrealistic workload, scary deadline, bitching about you when you’re not there).

I ended up working late on Thursday like everybody else. To add insult to injury, the staff were able to order some food in, but there was no budget for me. ‘I’m sorry about that,’ said Selina, maybe we can share some vegetarian noodles,’ she offered. I resorted to scoffing the packet of biscuits out of my kit.

On Friday morning Fenella stepped in the cupboard, apologised profusely about the food mishap and invited me to join the team at a bar for free drinks and nibbles. ‘It’s the least I can do, so sorry for the food and for leaving you here on your own for a week. I am quite happy with your work and I will definitely call you again. The good news is that thanks to yesterday’s hard graft, we don’t have as much to do today, so you’re free to have a long lunchbreak. Just be back by 3pm to polish up some copy.’

I smiled, trying to look grateful but felt like strangling her. I would have preferred to work today and avoid staying late yesterday. And I had lost the chance of a free press screening of a movie I really wanted to see. Still, free drinks, here I come!

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Zara Mohammed wrote 43 days ago

A fun, enjoyable read. Flows well, realistic dialogue. Love the title :) Good luck!

Zara M.
The Breakup Project
xx

pwinkle wrote 755 days ago

Great voice. Backed

Andrew W. wrote 919 days ago

Kissing Frogs,

I loved this, why isn't it going up in the charts...great stuff - Andrew W.

Andrew W. wrote 959 days ago

Kissing Frogs

Hi,

What a great style you have for this market and what a funny and appropriate title. You have a lovely warm humour behind your words and your character is immediately sympathetic without appearing wet and useless. She is a little self-obsessed, but that absolutely goes with the territory. I forgot that I was meant to be criting and simply got on and read it. A really effective piece of chick-lit with a lovely first person voice. Best of luck with this, it deserves to go far.

If you have the time to take a peak at my book that would be great, if not no worries

Andrew W.
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

beegirl wrote 962 days ago

Great humour. I think this is charming and one that we girls can all relate to well. You have a easy humour that goes well with the story. I think that we get more and more involved in Emma's life as the story progresses. Well done.
Shelved,
Barbara
The Sea Pillow

B. J. Winters wrote 962 days ago

Your page was right - this is is a cute read. I read chapter 1 and chapter 8 and found the main character enjoyable and frighteningly easy to empathize with. Definite market potential -- who can't relate to the guilt of green and planning a weekend to try and compensate. And putting composting and dating so close together it's all too easy to draw the linkages. :)

Best of luck with this.

Jenni_James wrote 1005 days ago

Ack! You make me so happy I'm not a freelance writer! Lol! Seriously, the poor girl! I love the diary format you have here. Your MC has a cut chatty voice that rings of realism. I enjoyed her insights and downright frustration and rudeness at times. I definitely felt like I knew her!
Well done.
I wish you the best of luck with this.
Shelved.
Jenni James
The Northanger Affect

hot lips wrote 1023 days ago

Quiet humour, realistic, well written, I could pick this up and read to the end. I chose it because I loved the cover and the brief and to the point pitch. I think it deserves my vote.

Paolito wrote 1037 days ago

Kissing Frogs...

Since I'm an expert at kissing frogs, I'm more than competent to provide you with feedback on your novel, wouldn't you agree? Let's hope that your MC finds her prince; I've yet to find mine, unfortunately.

I'll be honest, which I hope will help and not discourage.

I love your concept and your MC, and would be more than willing to spend a whole novel with her. My only concern is that with so many internet dating stories out there, how do you differentiate yours? Not sure your pitch does that job well enough.

Your opening chapter felt a bit long to me. I'd find a way to tighten, perhaps by eliminating the stuff that doesn't reveal her character enough. Look for the deepest character revelation bits and concentrate on those.

Similarly, the beginning of c.2 felt like more of the same to me...I'd get to the internet dating assignment faster, because this is really where your story starts--the earlier stuff is set-up.

This is a funny and topical story. If you can find a way to pitch it so that it has an unusual hook, you've got a winner.

Shelved, of course.

Cheers,
Sheryl
IN ALL THE WRONG PLACES (would love your honest reactions)

C.P. wrote 1037 days ago

The life of a freelance writer. I'd didn't realize how frustrating it could be. What stress. But with your wit you have made an enjoyable read. Good luck Backed C.P

datingcoach wrote 1037 days ago

Hey,
This made me laugh out loud at several times - lucky I'm on my own here today! Chapter 5 has one of the best ever starts I've read. Our books have some similar themes so naturally I wanted to take a look! How much of it is from real experiences?
James
Insider's Dating Bible

berni stevens wrote 1038 days ago

Ooh I can relate to the woes of a freelancer too . . . I'm a freelance designer and have often gone in to places where I got the Mac with not enough memory to use Photoshop, no email or internet access, no phone - oh and often no access to the font server either - which for a designer is pretty important. Your observations are spot on and had me laughing aloud. Especially when everyone takes off for lunch, leaving you alone . . . !

I love this . . . it's so brilliantly written. Good luck with it. I'm popping you up
on my shelf for a deserved spin :)

Berni
(Fledgling)

Alecia Stone wrote 1038 days ago

Hi Alchemist,

This is an enjoyable read. I could do with a margarita right now. This is very well written. Great vivid descriptions. Convincing dialogue. I’m getting used to this diary form of writing, it’s very engaging. Well done.

Shelved!

Shinzy :)

Ayrich wrote 1042 days ago

I dont think you should have to explain yourself in the beginning. That its a blog comes through pretty well and I dont hink it would be there in published form. Trust your readers to a little thought. If we cant come to it on our own, it should be revised.
the story is great and I love the humor. Its totaly believable.
Backed.

aislingb wrote 1042 days ago

This is great stuff. There is a lot of energy in your writing. I couldn't see any typos. I would suggest that you shorten some of your paragraphs as long paragraphs make it difficult to read. Also, I've seen a lot of chick lit books with the same title. You want to stand out among the other books. Fab writing. shelved

Roe wrote 1044 days ago

Worked for me, quirky and amusing. A pick up and put down read, ideal for light reading. Backed and good luck

divilthebit wrote 1044 days ago

Hi there this is good fun and well written. Perhaps you may get comparisons with Bridget JOnes but that's a risk you'll have to take. As ever an education into the furiously swirling female mind and that all helps :) Backed! Michael

SKD wrote 1044 days ago

I'm really liking this. Great pace. Great characters. Great fun.
And I felt her pain when she slid down the stairs. I've done that twice. it HURTS!
Just really enjoyed this.
:)Shelved
Sarah

B.J. Chalmers wrote 1049 days ago



This is very funny. Emma is very funny! I like the bit where her bum takes the stairs instead of her. Determined in the face of hilariousness (if there is such a word). A book that should be way higher. Shelved :)

Bj

Hannah Dunham wrote 1182 days ago

Adding you to my watchlist so I can read more soon!
Hannah x

Linton Robinson wrote 1229 days ago

This is pretty funny stuff.

I was cheered to see another "journalist/columnist" book here. You might get a kick out of mine, also:

http://www.authonomy.com/ReadBook.aspx?bookid=4851#chapter

alchemist wrote 1269 days ago

What is about the size 8? I was size 8 and got bullied for it. I'm planning to write about how my size lost me a job because my boss hated me being thinner than her!

wainwright& priestley wrote 1269 days ago

Yeah - the size 8 bit might alienate some females!! Love the diary/blog style though - makes it easy to read on. I will put you on my shelf

Anli wrote 1296 days ago

sorry life is too hectic, you have been on my bookshelf since the weekend! It needs work, but I like the storyline and see a potential. Good luck!
Anli

alchemist wrote 1311 days ago

Thanks for comments. I added a little note to first chapter as people are getting confused about it. It is not a novel in the traditional sense, more like a diary/blog. It was originally published on an internet magazine (not running anymore) but I'm expanding it and adding new material.

rixi wrote 1311 days ago

Mmm. Finished your first chapter. I got confused a little at who was saying what as you don't change paragraph, line or even have prose between the speech.

I like your MC. You made her instantly believable, and the way she babbles about her work is amusing.

I'm not really sure what to say about this on the whole, it didn't leave me excited to read on (the main reason I decided on this and not The Alchemist's Apprentice was the potential for humour) but it didn't leave me running away from the screen either. I think a little indication that we are getting to the premise of the pitch by the end of this chapter would be slightly more encouraging.

Other than that and a general proof, this is well-written and amusing and watchlisted.

Bruna Iotti wrote 1312 days ago

Cara Alchemist, Grazie del suo comentario sul mio libro. Anch'io parlo italiano perchè ho vissuto e studiato in Italia per alcuni anni. Vivo in Brasile adesso, perciò trovarmi un amico inglese qua che se ne intenda di libri sarà quase che impossibile. La mia migliore opportunità sarà sul Authonomy. Faccio tanti auguri anche a te! Questo libro Kissing Frogs sembra essere molto interessante, l'ho messo nel mio watchlist. Bruna

alchemist wrote 1313 days ago

Sorry about the size of the character, I was that size before my child arrived and got harrassed about it, which will become apparent in future instalments.

Schnappi wrote 1313 days ago

Nice fluid voice, although I agree that it would be better to start a new paragraph when another character speaks.

This was a very interesting insight into the world of freelance journalism, which I thought more glamorous as well. Some very nice imagery (dustparticles falling into giant hourglasses!).

I was a little taken aback to find that the character is model-slim (are we all picturing Briget Jones here?), but on the other hand I like it that you don't describe her reflection in a mirror or something, as so many writers do :)

paul house wrote 1316 days ago

I love reading things done in a diary format and this is no exception. I like the easy tone of the writing - which is essential if written in this fromat - and I enjoyed the dialogue. I am going to put this on my watchlist for now until I have a bit more time to enjoy some more.

katekasserman wrote 1321 days ago

Hi Alchemist! This is a fun read, very light and fast and sparkly. The chapters flew by. Emma is funny and sharp, and she makes a great protagonist -- even the BOREDOM of freelance mag work is charming when she describes it -- heh heh, and she describes it well...

I have not yet found a main thread through the story. If there is one, it's developing late; and while I enjoyed myself thoroughly through chapter 7, I wonder whether the interest could be sustained through a whole book structured this way. Now, if there IS going to be a central thread, I think it's likely to focus on either: (a) Emma's escalating addiction to online flirtation/dating or (b) Emma really does settle her mind on one of these frogs, only it proves difficult to catch him. I *thought* that's where we were headed with our charming Scottish Joker, but chapter 7 made me doubt myself... HOWEVER! It might still be the case (and if it is, I recommend either adding more chapters to your sample -- hey, do that anyway so I can read more! -- so that you end after another Joker incursion or else truncate your sample so we end on 6 -- but this parenthetical is just about the authonomy excerpt, not the book as a whole, of course...).

An interesting effect of the long IM sections is that, as Paul quite correctly points out, the LOLs and the quick references to (blush) and whatnot actually manage to convey the FEEL of an in-the-moment conversation in the book's text, and very efficiently -- well, just as they do in real life. This lets you get away with rather longer exchanges than I thought I would have the patience for!

Emma's horrible one-night stand is referred to only in the before and the after. This kind of stuck out to me; even if Paul IS going to be the MacGuffin that Emma seeks, her online adventures are still a critical part of the story. No, I'm not asking you to bring that DILDO in to play after all -- EEK!! But some description of her date with the sex-starved idiot might be nice. It's bound to be funny.

E.'s tendency to sponge the ethos of whatever magazine she's at is a nice touch -- first it's all beauty goodies; now it's eco-everything! Heh heh...well, at least the lad mag didn't seem to have any too deleterious effects, other than she got in a few rounds of billiards...

Anyway, nice work, and I'd be curious to see more if you post it, so please drop me a note if you do -- Emma's adventures are fun, and if they pick up a central plot (even a slight one), I think this could be very commercial.

Kipper wrote 1322 days ago

Hi there,
I work full-time in an office at the m,oment but commute for an hour each way, which is when I get most of my writing done, better than sleeping on the train like the other corpses!
Sarah

Kipper wrote 1323 days ago

I've been a freelance journo and the worst part was the times inbetween jobs, a feeling that you capture perfectly here. The boredom and the fear... I like your story and will certainly read more.
Thanks also for your kind comments on The Seven Wonders. I haven't plugged that one at all;)

DEMO wrote 1323 days ago

Last half of chapter two is a hoot! I love it. Yay you.

DEMO wrote 1323 days ago

it is so very clean! And so very easy to read. And the clean referred to the writing. I love it. Two things got me especially: one was the dust particle into the hourglass and one was throwing the chair. Funny, happy stuff. Come, Alchemist, read mine. Fix it and make it just as pretty :). I am shelving it, getting a drink, and reading more.

KR wrote 1330 days ago

Hi alchemist
I sort of stumbled into this when clicking around the site for a few minutes and thought I'd take a quick look – apologies that my comments are only about chapter one.

I like the idea, that she'll take the job too seriously but as chapter one was mainly scene setting, I'm not gripped yet – hopefully the following comments will be some use.

I got a bit confused by the tense the story is related in. If it's diary entries, should it all be past tense? Some was present as if it was just being narrated. I like the voice so it didn't bother me too much but was a bit inconsistent. I did also wonder if a smoother narrative might suit the story more. The diary entries can be a bit jerky and cold where straight narration would allow for more scene setting and characterisation – I think I saw that you said this came from a blog, which explains the jumpiness I suppose. I just think I'd prefer a smoother read and a bit more suggestion that she has a life outside of work (or doesn't as the case might be). I don't think you managed to give us her name either, so I was finding it hard to engage with Emma.

I really liked hearing so much detail about a career I know nothing of, and think that behind the scenes of a magazine would be an appealing setting for a lot of readers. And dating is always a popular subject after all!
K

alchemist wrote 1331 days ago

Thanks for comments. This is not Bridget Jones, it is not my inspiration at all (mock horror). The character is not inept, not fat, not a smoker and a tad more sensible. She is a bit more abrasive and cynical than Bridget.
This started as a blog published on an internet mag and it's fun to write so I'm expanding it. I hope my next chapters are not predictable.
Demo, you nailed it, journalism is not as glamorous as people think. This was based on real experiences, of course there is an element of fiction.

Richard P-S wrote 1332 days ago

Hi Alchemist, when I started reading this, I thought it might be a touch Bridget Jones derivative, but it isn't actually. The voice doesn't sound as down on itself as Bridget, and I enjoyed reading all the 5 chapters that are up here. However, I'm not sure where the story is going, and I think it might be quite predictable whom she might meet on her next date. Maybe I will try your serious book next, because what did come across is that you can write (subject to a little editing). R

alchemist wrote 1334 days ago

It is easier because I do light and fluffy for a living, I work for magazines, not for the Economist!

NickP wrote 1334 days ago

How wrong you are. It is not easy to do "light and fluffy" at all.

I'll have a look at your serious book.

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