One Spring

what a terrific idea for a story - I'm sooo jealous and wish I thought it myself!!!! I'm only up to where Brian has spoken to Marco Howard's mother, and I want to know what happens next! Will read more tonight. But am totally delighted to put this on my bookshelf right away. You've really got something here. Goood luck. Ceeds
'JOE'S NAN'

Dear Lee Veinot,

One Spring is an intelligent read for young people, especially sensitive young ones who suffer with allergies. The book contains many good life lessons, including knowing the value of one’s elders and respectfully loving a dear mother. By the way, some adults have quite the imagination, too.

Best and backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Got up to chap 12 when an error occurred whilst loading the text. I am glad the power came back on. perhaps it should have been a different sort of fault so that the phone could still work. Perhaps just a fuse? You wrote that he lied in bed. I think lay in bed would be more correct. I did enjoy the concept of the tale so far and therefore I will give it a whirl on my shelf. Regards, Anne

Whilst I love the concept of this book I have one question.......if there's no power then how does the phone work??

Mrdog

Now this one I really like. Crisp, original, moving and natural dialogue. Well done and I hope we see more like this.
Kevin

Im really enjoying this book so far great concept I love Brian already because I can understand his fear as a child as well as his misunderstandings of the world surrounding him...keeping writing and Ill keep reading

You have written a very intertaining, unique and compelling storyline and created a most memorable character in Brian. Your character development of Brian is excellent and you set up your story well in the Prologue. I really like your use of the first person narrative voice, the dialogue is well written and the pace of your story flows nicely. This along with your descriptive writing is sure to appeal to children and their parents. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Lee,

I like the style of writing in One Spring - have only had a quick flick through and will get back to it over next few days. Backed

This was an interesting story. I thought Brian ringing the old lady Tabitha was really good and typical of a bored child. I preferred this to your first book, it flowed better. If I had a suggestion, it would be to avoid keep using 'said'. Try answered, shrugged, agreed. I feel it takes away what can often be stilted conversation . Although I notice from chapter four onwards, you are doing this to a degree. Put on my watchlist to read more later. Dargarma

Hi Lee, Allergies and rashes are common enough but this description from Brian's perspective is interesting while Brian is a quirky kid. His wanting to stay in the kitchen surprised me. There is some nice phrasing here and the language seems right for the age. He's apparently going to be resourceful and his way of meeting people sounds entertaining. Shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Excellent storyline and well written.
Backed

Dawn
Sammy and the Wise Willow

Thanks for backing Finding Little Big Foot. Read a bit here and liked it ,very realistic and believable dialog. Both short and long pitches are very good. On my WL.

It's delightful really. I can't say much more than that. It invites me into the mind of a child (which is always an excellent place to be). I love how you take something so simple, something quite comical, and turn it into the pathways toward serious things... his father's death... his fear of the world.... the kidnapping of a child. Because children see the world in such a unique way, they are often the most truthful, clearheaded, and curious in the best of ways. You have taken that and created a touching book. I look forward to finishing.


Backed with pleasure.

Laura
"Jhevalia"

-I want to thank you for backing my book. If, as you read some of the chapters, you have any comments/advice, I would be so grateful. I are clearly a gifted writer. Thanks Again!!

"Chicken pox" is definately a fearful thing to encounter. The prose has the even pace of a storyteller using comfortable words to present first person reactions of the protagonist to his surroundings. Backed

Dear Lee
Your short pitch took me to your long pitch which is very well crafted and promises an interesting original read. I I am amazed as I see the books on this site, with the minds, and the talent which produce writtings with such skill. How characters can be depicted to vividly using words as colors, and at how a story can be told and it depicts a movie on the mind. I do wish to congratsulate you on your book. I have not read all your writing but I do wish to back this book so it may asssit you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
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The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

This is very original and could easilly be adapted for an adult version with a film in mind. You should do very well with it. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Lee:
An interesting commentary embedded in a fresh fictional narrative. Your protagonist comes across as very three-dimensional and believable from the outset.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

The premise for this story is quite original. Each chapter has kept me reading on to the next one. The character of Brian is well-drawn, his thoughts come through clearly. The dialogue is real. I will come back to this because I want to know what happens!!!
Small nit - the past tense of lie (to lie down) is lay.

I will look at your other book tomorrow.

Patricia West Hays
The Witness Tree

this is so crying out for a movie, I loved the pitch and was immediately hooked, and who thought of the aple pie thing, that's the sort of sideways thinking that grabbed me and held me. the innocence and imagination of kids never fails to astound me, So like this, very good luck.

One Spring is an enchantingly childish tale about something I used to do when I was Brian's age. Backed.

I can't remember that last time I read a narrative that centred on someone called Brian. The questions are exactly the humorous things that set the YA audience alight. Wonderful.

backed

Dear Lee, Well, here I am on your 2nd book that I have backed :) - hope you'll back my 2. :) What a wonderful imagination you have - all from the kitchen. :) I am now ready for your 3rd book. :) Love, Susie :)