The Short End of a Long Book

Good stuff. Stretch yourself write the big one. You know you can!

Hi Nakanaeia, Unreliable Insanity grabbed me at once. I wondered when the narrator said that the woman followed her into her workplace. It's very odd since she says she loves her husband and seems to project her real feelings if she's guilty. Good pace and a curious narrator from the start. I would read more. Shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Hi Nakanela
These stories are nicely written and easy to dip into. You develop the plot quickly and draw the reader in. The first one was my favourite as I didn't know where it was going to go. Very refreshing.
DP Walker
Five Dares

Dear Nakanaela,
I read your first story. It's clear the woman herself is the killer. I like the way you've created a mystery woman that no one else sees. Very clever psychological drama!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Didn't see the killing of her husband coming, well done, good short stories.

Nakanalea:
You present clever writing in a fresh voice, and in digestible chunks for casual reading. In a climate often mired with overly self-important literature, I'm always pleased to find lighter, well-written and enjoyable work like this.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

Good, solid coffee time reading, short, pithy and to the point - in fact, just what you look for in a short story. :)
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's crown

Hi Nakanaela,
I read Unreliable Insanity and Reunion by the Senses. Most enjoyable and well -done. You know how to tell a good story.
Backed with pleasure, Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Nakanaela. Finished reading it all. Still enjoyable [ hopefully the finish will be with a 'bang' of a short story.. Backed as mentioned in last text.
Appreciate any comments / backing / or trashing of my childrens book. Jerry [paperbat adventures]

Dear Nakanaela
Your short pitch took me to your long pitch which is very well crafted and promises an interesting original read. I I am amazed as I see the books on this site, with the minds, and the talent which produce writtings with such skill. How characters can be depicted to vividly using words as colors, and at how a story can be told and it depicts a movie on the mind. I do wish to congratsulate you on your book. I have not read all your writing but I do wish to back this book so it may asssit you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, comment which is important to me, and back my book. if not that is OK also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

Interesting. The first story is quite intriguing. Reunion by The Senses would benefit from a bit of an edit: "there untenable state" should be their untenable state, for example and "two polar opposite things" might read better as two polar opposites.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Dear Nakanaela, I loved the first one and fully intentd to come back for more. It takes a lot of imagination to write a volume of short stories. Well done. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Hi Nakanaela!
Nice style you have. Not pretentious, very real. Great way you paint with words. :-) Lovely! Backed.

sincerely,
jim
jack & charmian london (love your own comments! thank you)

The Short End of a Long Book

Nakanaela Bell

"Unreliable Insanity" is interesting - good plot. Pity the MC didn't utilise the servises of an expert witness to attest to her state of mind re the recurring images of "that woman". You present that state of mind very well to the reader.

I read the first and second stories and they are very well written - especially the framed lawyer! Love this collection and the writing is excellent! Backed 100%

Liz
The Cheech Room

SHORT END OF A LONG BOOK
This is a good collection of short stories. I read the first one, then the one about the lottery ticket and the last one. Enjoyed all three. You have a good technique for short stories; you know how to describe enough detail so a reader knows where he is and what is happening; not so much you turn your short story into a long one. The same with the way you’re able to flesh out characters with only a few words. I’m happy to add these to my shelf. If you have a moment, would you look at mine (Grain of Salt)? I’m in 3rd place but only holding on by my teeth. Burgio

Hello Nakanaela Bell

I have backed your book of short stories, and am wishing you much luck. Please take a look at my work- No Do Overs ...and other truths. I would appreciate your backing.

Thanks and Good Luck,
Carla Marie

Hello Siphernin,

I have backed your book of short stories, and am wishing you much luck. Please take a look at my work- No Do Overs ...and other truths. I would appreciate your backing.

Thanks and Good Luck,
Carla Marie

I keep getting 'Page Error' today. I will come back and try later. Good luck. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

THE SHORT END OF A LONG BOOK
hi there. you have a nice collection of stories here - well written and varied. Lots of people will enjoy dipping into these. Backed. If you want to take a look at my book I would be grateful
Faith
THE ASSSSINS VILLAGE

Dear Nakanaela, I love that you took that creative writing class :) - you're a pro. :) Hope you write many more stories. :) I've backed your book :) - hope you'll take a moment to back my 2 memoir books. :) Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

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Good first short story, hooks you right away and makes you want to learn who the woman is who is stalking the protaginist. Good twist at the end when you realize the woman is mentally ill at best, perhaps insane, and the "other" woman she sees is really herself. She has detached herself from that reality. And it really made it believable as you saw it through her eyes.

Good first short story, hooks you write away and makes you want to learn who the woman is who is stalking the protaginist. Good twist at the end when you realize the woman is mentally ill at best, perhaps insane, and the "other" woman she sees is really herself. She has detached herself from that reality. And it really made it believable as you saw it through her eyes.

Your book looks interesting. I love short stories, and know they arent easy to write. Good effort. Will add this to my watchlist and take a closer look later.

Alicia

I enjoyed the first story.

There was a bit of telegraphing, I thought, and some of the language
was anachronistic (ie, 'wench') but for the most part the writng was clear,
suspenseful, wry, and had a good pace.

I thought there could be more paragraphing, and dialogue. The scene with
Paul could be more immediate.