Gernickyz

Gernickyz is a tale about modern day pirates

Great fun, loved the humour and quick wit. Starred and on my W/L
Babs

I like the concept but that old bugaboo known as POV threw me for a loop at the end of the first chapter -- i.e., if this is being told form Nicklau's POV, and he arrived in the tavern with the attorneys, etc., how would he know what was taking place there before his arrival? Also, parts of this seem wordy -- nothing that can't be resolved with some good editing and polish. Still, I am backing this because it sounds like fun. Modern day pirates -- and not a Somali in the mix.

Marvelous! and 23 chapters wide! Backed with pleasure. Try mine, if you will. Best Regards, jedward (Knut)

The book has an enjoyable, spoofy feeling to it. Well, at least I read Ch 1 and was about to read Ch 2 when the site got hung up ... the infamous spinning dial.

But I like the book cover, I like sea stories and this one seems that it is starting out just a bit different, more light hearted in a way, though some dark foreshadowings, for example the lady by the captain's side doesn't realize what's in store for herself.

Good luck. Sorry I could not read more.

FEL

A great read! Very enjoyable and entertaining. It is well written with convincing dialogue and good characterisation. This has the hall mark of success. I hope it is. Well done! Backed.
Laurence Winchester,
The Cross of Goa.

Fun! Of course, I want to read more but understand keeping the ending to your "treasure" for those who will buy your book:). Best of luck and backed!
Would you mind taking a look at mine? Thanks!
Sincerely, Heidi
An Unexpected Obsession

Marvellous, stylish writing. I wish I had more time to read all your chapters.
Backed with best wishes, M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Hi Lezander, what a great idea for a modern day pirate, an old ship that stays below the radar. I love the first chapter and the subtle ambiguity: the Sheila who was not on board when the ship returned to port. Where was she, dropped off at another port, chucked over the side? The reader's mind can think what it likes! Deserves success so backed with pleasure. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Hi Lezander, what a great idea for a modern day pirate, an old ship that stays below the radar. I love the first chapter and the subtle ambiguity: the Sheila who was not on board when the ship returned to port. Where was she, dropped off at another port, chucked over the side? The reader's mind can think what it likes! Deserves success so backed with pleasure. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

What a wonderful book. Modern day pirating using an old method. This is clever and you write really well. The story is exciting and well weaved with the main character well drawn.

A pleasure to read and back
best

I love the opening. Your writing style is seamless and flows well.... GRRR nickey..... I look forward to reading more!

Backed

You ho ho me harties - this is a fun read and I really enjoyed it
Gingernut

This is very funny. I know they are modern day pirates, but there is certainly an essence of the "Olde Worlde" type of pirate. The colourful characters are brilliant, as is the dialogue. Very amusing. Backed with pleasure. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

I like the mix of old style pirates and modern day setting. It flows well and promises to be entertaining. There is a typo in para 5 - woman instead of women. Some general editing needs to be done. Good luck.

Lorraine
Mannin Boy

Your story flows well. The style is gentle. I like it. Your dialogue moves the story on, which is good.

BACKED

Best Wishes
Marilyn

I'm an old salt so anything ocean based is ok by me. Very well crafted and worth consideration by publishers looking for a good yarn....backed without prejudice....good luck.

Angus Shoor Caan

I'm enjoying your story--stories with pirates are always fun! This has already been mentioned, but you do switch from past to present tense a couple of times in the first chapter, which is a little confusing, but other than that the story reads very well.

If you have a chance, I have two books up on line, I'd appreciate any comments on them!
Thanks,
Nikki B

Not much wrong with it. The narration flows nicely and you do a lot of “showing.” The dialogue’s adequate for the story and moves it at a steady pace. Overall, first chapter draws the reader in for more.
Chapter two is even a faster pace. Careful so your characters don’t sound all the same. And a little more fleshing would help. The captain’s character should be developed a bit more…if we’re going to love to hate him.
By end of Ch 3 the story’s rolling and the narrator’s voice is established. Careful…in first person there is a danger to assimilate narrator’s voice. Your POV must be steady, right now you’re mixing it and that’s a big problem. Decide: first person voice, one POV or third person and then you can have multiple POVs.
I like the story and I’m backing it.

Not much wrong with it. The narration flows nicely and you do a lot of “showing.” The dialogue’s adequate for the story and moves it at a steady pace. Overall, first chapter draws the reader in for more.
Chapter two is even a faster pace. Careful so your characters don’t sound all the same. And a little more fleshing would help. The captain’s character should be developed a bit more…if we’re going to love to hate him.
By end of Ch 3 the story’s rolling and the narrator’s voice is established. Careful…in first person there is a danger to assimilate narrator’s voice. Your POV must be steady, right now you’re mixing it and that’s a big problem. Decide: first person voice, one POV or third person and then you can have multiple POVs.
I like the story and I’m backing it.

An interesting tale...another Sheila sounds a bit like Australian slang! There are mixed tense issues at the beginning that need to be sorted out...check for other grammatical errors. Wish you the best
Stewart

This is cute, very funny and a great tale! Well written with likable characters! Backed!
Christi Watson
Wonder- Heart of Captivation- A Thief of Life Novel

So funny and so well written, I wonder why so many books like this have not been picked up by the publishers.
Great Stuff Lezander. Backed with Good Luck.
Norman. (Fromante).

Wonderful.
You write with all the swashbuckling verve a piratical novel demands.

An entertaining humourous adventure

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

Dear Lezander,
I very much like the suggestive humorous tone of your opening chapter. It does have a feeling of being set in the past until one reads about cell phones, etc. Poor Nicklaus, not sure who his true father is. I enjoy the inclusion of the letter - it breaks up the text a bit which is nice. Great job!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Good show! Backed. Check In The Mud: An American Odyssey if you find the time.

Thanks,
T. Rhyder

Lezander,
Stories about ships and sailing are favourite for me (see Windshadow). You've written this way and added comedy. That's terrific!
Just one little thing - I find the first chapter a little bit of a mixture. You have started in first person and without any small dividing signal, continued the chapter in past tense. Later, you put in little dividing lines, but I wonder if you think the beginning might be less confusing with a definite break between the tenses instead of an indefinite drift. Later, you have Tomkins saying 'stooper', instead of 'stupour'. Perhaps you meant that intentionally as part of the comedy, but if that is so, again perhaps that should be made plain for the likes of me. This is all my meanderings to try to help with your original and humourous writing, good enough for me to back and wish you all the best with it.
Backed,
Ann Mynard (Windshadow)

Very good write, aspecially the humour. Sheila being my favourite of course.
backed with pleasure
Green H
through green's eyes

You've given us a clever contemporary pirate tale with believable characters and vivid scenes. Snappy dialogue. Confident narrative. Spot on wit. Artful use of language. Inspired writing. Backed.

What a tremendous start. I loved your style and humour. Backed without question! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Lezander, you've laid a treasure trail before us...with enough pieces of eight strewn along it for even the ships' cats among us to want to follow it.

Your comments are certainly next level positive!
I'd bet money that you like escargot and wear musk perfume.

Thanks

All of your comments are so wonderful... thankyou.
Everyone is invited over for dinner, we're havin' hausenfeffer and cake!

LG

Lezander, you've laid a treasure trail before us...with enough pieces of eight strewn along it for even the ships' cats among us to want to follow it.

Great style and a story the likes of which I've never witnessed before. A comedy with a plot - as rare these days as a Pink Panther diamond. And characters as large as those in Treasure Island. Grrrr-nickey, Sedgwick the faithful, Sheila - all of them, and young Nicklaus himself.

Wishing you a chest-load of eight, with a mere backing from me - KC (of "Waystation to Prosperity Street")

You have written a very interesting, funny and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Nick. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Hi Lezander, Amusing from the outset with the idea that the Captain sails a clipper ship like an antique - maybe it's a good ploy for pirating modern ships. Also funny were the Sheilas and then Niklaus being the son of one. That's all lead up to excellently and the last line of Chapter 1 - good start. There are a few typos: "this year(' )s family tournament" finess(e). An enjoyable read and an odd idea that seems apropos for the Captain after awhile. Happy to shelve - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Gernickyz

Lezander Gernickyz

"A modern day pirate tale, only better!" Agreed!

Backed for originality and entertainment value. Best in finding a publisher.

great idea, brilliantly written. narrative and dialogue all work well= on my watchlist..
SEASONS...

Dear Lezander Gernickyz,

Horatio Hornblower, there's a new salt on the high seas and he's taking no prisoners.

Best and backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Hiya LG, fine sea tale. love the sly humour.
on my shelf.
possible small typo: first mention of the captain's girlfirend: "Shiela" - is it "Sheila"?
best wishes, andy

This really doesn't come across as a romance, so I think you're right to leave that genre off your description.

This is an original book with promise but it does need a decent edit to sort things out. For example, your opening paragraphs(which you want to be a smooth and polished as possible) mix past and present tenses.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Hi Lezander, This is very funny and I really enjoyed your first three chapters and seeing the plot unfolded. You have some special characters and an original setting and premise. I really think it has potential but it needs a little loving kindness (ie. a quick edit) in order to fulfill this.
I hope these thoughts are useful. Feel free to ignore, of course.
Your opening paragraph is past tense (seemed, was), but your second para is present (there's).
Again in the next paragraph you switch from 'this is his busy time (pres) to 'he sat' (past).
I don't think you need 'between the three of them'.
'seemingly old fashioned' (you don't need the adverb 'seemingly')
Look out for other things like this to tighten your very promising work.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Enjoyable, entertaining and different!

Backed,

Lisa

Lezander:
This feels very much in the spirit of one of my favorite authors, Christopher Moore. A little on the absurd side, naturally, but all for the sake of good laughs. A fun, imaginative journey for sure.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

Great romp, very entertaining! :)

Lots of fun -- a wild ride on the high seas with fascinating characters and good doses of humor. Backed.

GERNICKYZ
This is an interesting story. I like the way it begins with the Captain in the tavern and the announcement of the will; gets a reader into the heart of the story immediately. You have a good character in Nicklaus; he’s likable and altho a “fish out of water” kind of guy, a reader wants to follow him to see how this will all play out. There aren’t many updates on pirate stories out there so you have a market here all to yourself. I’m happy to add this to my shelf. If you have a moment, would you look at mine (Grain of Salt)? I’m in 3rd place but only holding on by my teeth. Burgio

This is hilarious! Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

GERNICKYZ
Swashbuckling pirates - intrigue and adventure on the high seas. Great fun! Well writen in an open easy hand. Backed
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

This promises to be a grand adventure, love the characters, developed perfectly. This is a nice easy read with a steady flow. Backed.

I could not upload this for a review, I will try again later. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)