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date submitted 25.08.2010
date updated 08.05.2011
genres: Fiction, Comedy
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Gernickyz

Lezander Gernickyz

A modern day pirate tale, only better!

The captain says and does increasingly more things that
‘the mind finds hard to reconcile’ for poor Nicklaus!

 

Lezander has a map to the 'higher levels' and a treasure chest
of 'funny' just waiting for his next prissy reader!

"Say the wrong thing and you'll be swimming with the mermaids!"
"My brother was richer than the man that invented Escargot."
There's a new Sheila with every voyage.
...............
...............
Gernickyz keeps things normal enough for young Nicklaus at first,
at least until the strange amber glow comes out in the 7th chapter.

That's when the captain pulls out the bag of 'higher level' stuff
and tries to leave a bread trail so Nick can grip onto it all.

"What are you?"
"What are we Nick, that's the true question!"

By the time they finish up in the restaurant (8th chapter)
it should become obvious that Gernickyz is much more than
just a pirate adventure looking for laughs from the next rump.

Altogether the tale is twenty three chapters wide.

 
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Millie's Tavern

Just say the wrong thing and you'll be

swimming with the mermaids…

 

A lone constable was patrolling the docks along the edge of the water.  The moon provided him more light than any of the night lamps that were still working.  He looked up to watch the markers from an airplane blink across the sky above him.  For now everything’s superbly quiet, but in a few hours that will all be changed as the city emerges from a well earned day of rest.

Across from the docks there’s a tavern, and in it this particular night you could find the drunken crew of the clipper ship Casperia, each man trying his hardest to run out the whiskey.  The ship’s cargo and supplies were already loaded.  Come first light they would be leaving port and returning to the open seas.

The shipmates had nothing more to do until the vessel sailed again but  for Captain Gernickyz, this was his busy time.  Like many instances before, he sat in the back of the tavern with his charts and navigation tools scattered out across a few tables.

Only two other people are permitted to join him.  One is his First Mate, Sedgwick, who’s been with him from the beginning.  Like a true and tested friend, Sedgwick is involved in every small detail of the captain’s business.

Next to the captain and sitting rather close to him at his table is his latest female companion, Sheila.  Unbeknownst to the poor girl, the captain selected for himself a new Sheila with every voyage.  Sadly, the women are never on board the ship by the time that the boat returns to port.

    Everything seems respectable enough for the Casperia, at least on the surface and in the eyes of the world.  Captain Gernickyz hires her out as a cargo ship to make his living by day.  It’s only on the return trip home that he engages in a bit of pirating.  That’s when he makes his real money and by the way, that's pronounced Grrrrr......nickey. 

In a modern day world of cell phones and high speed Internet technology, you might say that he’s old fashioned to be using a clipper ship for his pirating.  However, he’d discovered a method that was proven to work time and time again.  “So why change it?” is what he would say to that.

More importantly for the captain, by using such an outdated ship- it helped keep the Casperia operating under the radar.  The authorities did not yet suspect him or his crew of any kind of wrongdoing, other than being complete scoundrels.

The captain conducted his business wisely.  It was his father who originally taught he and his younger brother James the wayward trade of looting ships.  There are but two simple rules to live by according to him, “Use the cover of darkness to do your deed, and leave no witnesses behind to tell the tale.”

Earlier in the evening a courier had delivered a sealed document to the tavern, addressed to the captain.  The document revealed a list of ships that would be out sailing the seas at the same time as the Casperia.  It also showed their proposed manifests and destinations.  In fact, the list contained all the information needed to be able to intercept and hijack any ship of his choosing.

This was certainly his favorite part of the trip planning.  As the captain scanned over the document, you could see (by the raising of his eye brow) that he had found his next treasure.  Looking up at his First Mate, he then turned the list around so that the others could see his choice.

Sedgwick looked over the list of ships. He found the entry that was marked by the captain and asked inquisitively, “The Tarkinuba?”

The captain’s excitement, which never amounted to more than just a small smirch of a grin affirmed his reply, “Aye, dya-monds!  It’ll be four days out and four days back, and we’ll need to have a bigger bank than they can make!”

After a brief celebration, Sedgwick studied the sea charts for a bit more and then put all the equipment away.  Captain Gernickyz spent most of the rest of the evening at his private table drinking and having close conversations with Sheila.  They had met no more than a month ago.  He was getting to know her a bit better before they took to the open seas.

Hours later, as the sun finally peeked out over the port city, the sound of four sets of hard shoes came stomping along the docks.  The marching ceased abruptly in front of the tavern door.  Two constables walked side by side followed by a man in an expensive gray suit, who was himself followed by another young man about seventeen years old.  They wasted no time bolting through the door and after looking around a bit, all four of them surged through the crowd, heading directly over to the captain’s table.

Gernickyz snarled, “Whatever it is I’m accused of I didn’t do it, I’ve been in here all night!”

He pulled his pistol from its holster and set it down on the table, the busy end was pointing towards them.  As a show of support, the crew also cluttered around in a loose circle behind the men and drew their pistols, knives, and some broken bottles.

Now the captain knew from experience that a drunken crew with so many ways to die all pointing in his general direction would be sure to end in catastrophe, so he took the initiative and wailed out, “Just say the wrong thing and you’ll be swimming with the mermaids!”

That appeased the crowd for a moment as they erupted in a good hearty laugh.  The man in the fine suit took off his hat and spoke up rather boldly saying, “Captain Gernickyz, my name is Robert Creekstone, attorney at law.  I’ve traveled here from the United States to see you.  I’m sorry to say that your brother James is dead.” 

At that statement the entire crowd went mute, but only for an instant.  They knew just how the captain would likely respond to something like that.  As if in concert the gang exchanged glances and let out a bellowing roar.  Gernickyz slowly reached for his pistol and pulled back the hammer.  Creekstone gripped his hat tightly with both hands.  He was understandably reluctant to speak after that but had much more that he needed to say.

“And how did my dear brother die?” asked the captain.

“Well…” Creekstone cleared his throat and muttered, “Doctors aren’t quite certain but they think that it was in something he ate- maybe, yes perhaps food poisoning.  But your brother left a sizeable inheritance and that’s partly why I’m here this morning.”

Oh how sweet this sounded, it was music to the captain’s ears!  Upon hearing that piece of news, he then motioned for the crowd to turn away and to go back about their own business.  He also carefully lowered the hammer of his pistol and returned it to its’ holster.

“My brother was richer than the man that invented escargot!”

“Well, yes I suppose he was,” said the attorney.  “And now his entire fortune is to be divided up between you and several other beneficiaries.  There’s going to be a reading of the will in New York on the 25th of this month.”

“Why do you look familiar to me?” Gernickyz asked.

He replied, “I’m from the offices that manage your grandfather’s trust fund, Jedediah Creekstone is my uncle.”

“You said that’s partly why you’re here?” asked the captain.

“Oh yes,” Creekstone said.  He moved to the side a little and brought the young man more forward. “This is Nicklaus Hastings.  Before your brother passed on, he asked me to present him to you and read this letter out loud.”

Gernickyz looked over the boy with an irritated eye as the lawyer began to read the letter:

__________________________________________

Dear brother, it would appear that you have outlived me after all.  It’s been way more than fifteen years since we had the falling out and parted ways that day.  Time heals many things, and so it is in this case that I have moved on and decided that it wasn’t all your fault.  You had no right to take Sheila the way you did but I realize that it takes two people to make a choice like that.  Standing here in front of you is living proof that everything you do on the sly will one day be made known to everyone, it’s all recorded in the book that matters. 

Sheila says that there’s no way for us to be certain, so this young man Nicklaus could be either yours or mine.

I was planning to bring him on board with me on his 18th birthday and teach him the trade that our father imparted to us, but now it’s for you to do since I’m gone.  Besides, I think the boy looks more like you than me.  Bring him with you, both of you together when my estate is divided up and you will receive everything you’ve got coming to you.

Finally my brother, Lezander, I think it’s time to return the pink parasol to it’s rightful owner, bring that along too- I must insist.

Yours truly,

Skiffy1

__________________________________________

 

“Her name was Sheila too!” Sheila commented to the captain as she clung to his arm.

“That’s right, my dear, Sheila is a very pretty name indeed.”

    Creekstone handed an envelope to the captain, explaining, “These are the directions to my offices in New York, along with hotel reservations and the time of the meeting.  Now do you agree to bring both Nicklaus and the pink parasol with you to New York as your brother James requires?”

    The captain closed his eyes and calculated for a minute, then replied, “Yes, I suppose I can do that.”

    He asked Gernickyz, “Do you plan to fly?”

    “No, I have a ship that needs sailing.”

    “Then you’ll need to provide a certified DNA sample as soon as possible and have it forwarded to my offices in New York.  Inside the packet that I just handed to you there’s a pamphlet, and I’ve identified several locations where you can have this done nearby.”

    The lawyer tried to wind up the conversation by saying, “So we’ll see you about the 25th.  Have a pleasant voyage.  Oh, by the way…”  He reached into his case and handed a second envelope to the young man.  He added, “Remember what we talked about, Nicklaus, you will be old enough to participate in this year’s family tournament.  These are the game rules and regulations established by your great grandfather years ago.”

    He looked at Gernickyz and continued, “So Lezander, you’ve won the ‘big game’ for each of the last eight years.  Maybe you would be kind enough to go over some of the dynamics with Nick, and bring him up to speed on being the family trust fund overseer- things he’ll need to know for when he wins.”

    The captain protested, “You mean ‘if’ he wins!”

Creekstone’s countenance turned angry.  “Correct.  ‘If’ he wins.  Wouldn’t that make for a wonderful after-party, if you finally handed over the reins to someone else in the group for a change.  I’m sure that the rest of your family would be in Hillbilly Heaven!“

The captain fired back. “No one in my family has ever been hung as horse thieves, Robert.  You’d be wise to remember that.  You Creekstone’s have come a long way since those days, but dippin’ horse apples in chocolate doesn’t make them taste any better.”

Robert cleared his throat- a little embarrassed by his family history.  “Well, all your other family members have agreed to reschedule the game for the 28th, just days after the reading of the will since the whole family will be gathered together already.”

After saying this, he and the constables withdrew from the tavern, leaving the young man with the captain.

Gernickyz invited the lad to sit down across from him with a firm gesture.  Everything written down on the pages that follow are from my recollection of all that has transpired, since first being introduced to the captain in the tavern.

I am that Nicklaus Hastings.

 

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Gernickyz wrote 638 days ago

Gernickyz is a tale about modern day pirates

B A Morton wrote 538 days ago

Great fun, loved the humour and quick wit. Starred and on my W/L
Babs

vivalasbradleys wrote 576 days ago

I like the concept but that old bugaboo known as POV threw me for a loop at the end of the first chapter -- i.e., if this is being told form Nicklau's POV, and he arrived in the tavern with the attorneys, etc., how would he know what was taking place there before his arrival? Also, parts of this seem wordy -- nothing that can't be resolved with some good editing and polish. Still, I am backing this because it sounds like fun. Modern day pirates -- and not a Somali in the mix.

Jed Oliver wrote 588 days ago

Marvelous! and 23 chapters wide! Backed with pleasure. Try mine, if you will. Best Regards, jedward (Knut)

EltopiaAuthor wrote 592 days ago

The book has an enjoyable, spoofy feeling to it. Well, at least I read Ch 1 and was about to read Ch 2 when the site got hung up ... the infamous spinning dial.

But I like the book cover, I like sea stories and this one seems that it is starting out just a bit different, more light hearted in a way, though some dark foreshadowings, for example the lady by the captain's side doesn't realize what's in store for herself.

Good luck. Sorry I could not read more.

FEL

Laurence Howard wrote 594 days ago

A great read! Very enjoyable and entertaining. It is well written with convincing dialogue and good characterisation. This has the hall mark of success. I hope it is. Well done! Backed.
Laurence Winchester,
The Cross of Goa.

WriterGurl1 wrote 594 days ago

Fun! Of course, I want to read more but understand keeping the ending to your "treasure" for those who will buy your book:). Best of luck and backed!
Would you mind taking a look at mine? Thanks!
Sincerely, Heidi
An Unexpected Obsession

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 602 days ago

Marvellous, stylish writing. I wish I had more time to read all your chapters.
Backed with best wishes, M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

homewriter wrote 604 days ago

Hi Lezander, what a great idea for a modern day pirate, an old ship that stays below the radar. I love the first chapter and the subtle ambiguity: the Sheila who was not on board when the ship returned to port. Where was she, dropped off at another port, chucked over the side? The reader's mind can think what it likes! Deserves success so backed with pleasure. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

homewriter wrote 604 days ago

Hi Lezander, what a great idea for a modern day pirate, an old ship that stays below the radar. I love the first chapter and the subtle ambiguity: the Sheila who was not on board when the ship returned to port. Where was she, dropped off at another port, chucked over the side? The reader's mind can think what it likes! Deserves success so backed with pleasure. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

yasmin esack wrote 605 days ago

What a wonderful book. Modern day pirating using an old method. This is clever and you write really well. The story is exciting and well weaved with the main character well drawn.

A pleasure to read and back
best

Dima Dupere wrote 605 days ago

I love the opening. Your writing style is seamless and flows well.... GRRR nickey..... I look forward to reading more!

Backed

Gingernut wrote 605 days ago

You ho ho me harties - this is a fun read and I really enjoyed it
Gingernut

Eunice Attwood wrote 609 days ago

This is very funny. I know they are modern day pirates, but there is certainly an essence of the "Olde Worlde" type of pirate. The colourful characters are brilliant, as is the dialogue. Very amusing. Backed with pleasure. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

lfk wrote 614 days ago

I like the mix of old style pirates and modern day setting. It flows well and promises to be entertaining. There is a typo in para 5 - woman instead of women. Some general editing needs to be done. Good luck.

Lorraine
Mannin Boy

La Marmonie wrote 614 days ago

Your story flows well. The style is gentle. I like it. Your dialogue moves the story on, which is good.

BACKED

Best Wishes
Marilyn

Bonzo147 wrote 618 days ago

I'm an old salt so anything ocean based is ok by me. Very well crafted and worth consideration by publishers looking for a good yarn....backed without prejudice....good luck.

Angus Shoor Caan

Nikki B wrote 627 days ago

I'm enjoying your story--stories with pirates are always fun! This has already been mentioned, but you do switch from past to present tense a couple of times in the first chapter, which is a little confusing, but other than that the story reads very well.

If you have a chance, I have two books up on line, I'd appreciate any comments on them!
Thanks,
Nikki B

eurodan49 wrote 628 days ago

Not much wrong with it. The narration flows nicely and you do a lot of “showing.” The dialogue’s adequate for the story and moves it at a steady pace. Overall, first chapter draws the reader in for more.
Chapter two is even a faster pace. Careful so your characters don’t sound all the same. And a little more fleshing would help. The captain’s character should be developed a bit more…if we’re going to love to hate him.
By end of Ch 3 the story’s rolling and the narrator’s voice is established. Careful…in first person there is a danger to assimilate narrator’s voice. Your POV must be steady, right now you’re mixing it and that’s a big problem. Decide: first person voice, one POV or third person and then you can have multiple POVs.
I like the story and I’m backing it.

eurodan49 wrote 628 days ago

Not much wrong with it. The narration flows nicely and you do a lot of “showing.” The dialogue’s adequate for the story and moves it at a steady pace. Overall, first chapter draws the reader in for more.
Chapter two is even a faster pace. Careful so your characters don’t sound all the same. And a little more fleshing would help. The captain’s character should be developed a bit more…if we’re going to love to hate him.
By end of Ch 3 the story’s rolling and the narrator’s voice is established. Careful…in first person there is a danger to assimilate narrator’s voice. Your POV must be steady, right now you’re mixing it and that’s a big problem. Decide: first person voice, one POV or third person and then you can have multiple POVs.
I like the story and I’m backing it.

Vanessa Darnleigh wrote 629 days ago

An interesting tale...another Sheila sounds a bit like Australian slang! There are mixed tense issues at the beginning that need to be sorted out...check for other grammatical errors. Wish you the best
Stewart

scrapper2675 wrote 629 days ago

This is cute, very funny and a great tale! Well written with likable characters! Backed!
Christi Watson
Wonder- Heart of Captivation- A Thief of Life Novel

Fromante wrote 630 days ago

So funny and so well written, I wonder why so many books like this have not been picked up by the publishers.
Great Stuff Lezander. Backed with Good Luck.
Norman. (Fromante).

Beval wrote 630 days ago

Wonderful.
You write with all the swashbuckling verve a piratical novel demands.

Lynne Ellison wrote 630 days ago

An entertaining humourous adventure

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 631 days ago

Dear Lezander,
I very much like the suggestive humorous tone of your opening chapter. It does have a feeling of being set in the past until one reads about cell phones, etc. Poor Nicklaus, not sure who his true father is. I enjoy the inclusion of the letter - it breaks up the text a bit which is nice. Great job!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

T.Rhyder wrote 631 days ago

Good show! Backed. Check In The Mud: An American Odyssey if you find the time.

Thanks,
T. Rhyder

Ann Mynard wrote 632 days ago

Lezander,
Stories about ships and sailing are favourite for me (see Windshadow). You've written this way and added comedy. That's terrific!
Just one little thing - I find the first chapter a little bit of a mixture. You have started in first person and without any small dividing signal, continued the chapter in past tense. Later, you put in little dividing lines, but I wonder if you think the beginning might be less confusing with a definite break between the tenses instead of an indefinite drift. Later, you have Tomkins saying 'stooper', instead of 'stupour'. Perhaps you meant that intentionally as part of the comedy, but if that is so, again perhaps that should be made plain for the likes of me. This is all my meanderings to try to help with your original and humourous writing, good enough for me to back and wish you all the best with it.
Backed,
Ann Mynard (Windshadow)

Green H wrote 632 days ago

Very good write, aspecially the humour. Sheila being my favourite of course.
backed with pleasure
Green H
through green's eyes

CarolinaAl wrote 632 days ago

You've given us a clever contemporary pirate tale with believable characters and vivid scenes. Snappy dialogue. Confident narrative. Spot on wit. Artful use of language. Inspired writing. Backed.

homewriter wrote 633 days ago

What a tremendous start. I loved your style and humour. Backed without question! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Gernickyz wrote 633 days ago

Lezander, you've laid a treasure trail before us...with enough pieces of eight strewn along it for even the ships' cats among us to want to follow it.

Your comments are certainly next level positive!
I'd bet money that you like escargot and wear musk perfume.

Thanks

Gernickyz wrote 633 days ago

All of your comments are so wonderful... thankyou.
Everyone is invited over for dinner, we're havin' hausenfeffer and cake!

LG

Kaychristina wrote 633 days ago

Lezander, you've laid a treasure trail before us...with enough pieces of eight strewn along it for even the ships' cats among us to want to follow it.

Great style and a story the likes of which I've never witnessed before. A comedy with a plot - as rare these days as a Pink Panther diamond. And characters as large as those in Treasure Island. Grrrr-nickey, Sedgwick the faithful, Sheila - all of them, and young Nicklaus himself.

Wishing you a chest-load of eight, with a mere backing from me - KC (of "Waystation to Prosperity Street")

Andrew Burans wrote 633 days ago

You have written a very interesting, funny and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Nick. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

klouholmes wrote 635 days ago

Hi Lezander, Amusing from the outset with the idea that the Captain sails a clipper ship like an antique - maybe it's a good ploy for pirating modern ships. Also funny were the Sheilas and then Niklaus being the son of one. That's all lead up to excellently and the last line of Chapter 1 - good start. There are a few typos: "this year(' )s family tournament" finess(e). An enjoyable read and an odd idea that seems apropos for the Captain after awhile. Happy to shelve - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

zan wrote 635 days ago

Gernickyz

Lezander Gernickyz

"A modern day pirate tale, only better!" Agreed!

Backed for originality and entertainment value. Best in finding a publisher.

Su Dan wrote 636 days ago

great idea, brilliantly written. narrative and dialogue all work well= on my watchlist..
SEASONS...

GK Stritch wrote 636 days ago

Dear Lezander Gernickyz,

Horatio Hornblower, there's a new salt on the high seas and he's taking no prisoners.

Best and backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Andy M. Potter wrote 637 days ago

Hiya LG, fine sea tale. love the sly humour.
on my shelf.
possible small typo: first mention of the captain's girlfirend: "Shiela" - is it "Sheila"?
best wishes, andy

J.S.Watts wrote 637 days ago

This really doesn't come across as a romance, so I think you're right to leave that genre off your description.

This is an original book with promise but it does need a decent edit to sort things out. For example, your opening paragraphs(which you want to be a smooth and polished as possible) mix past and present tenses.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Barry Wenlock wrote 637 days ago

Hi Lezander, This is very funny and I really enjoyed your first three chapters and seeing the plot unfolded. You have some special characters and an original setting and premise. I really think it has potential but it needs a little loving kindness (ie. a quick edit) in order to fulfill this.
I hope these thoughts are useful. Feel free to ignore, of course.
Your opening paragraph is past tense (seemed, was), but your second para is present (there's).
Again in the next paragraph you switch from 'this is his busy time (pres) to 'he sat' (past).
I don't think you need 'between the three of them'.
'seemingly old fashioned' (you don't need the adverb 'seemingly')
Look out for other things like this to tighten your very promising work.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

lisawb wrote 637 days ago

Enjoyable, entertaining and different!

Backed,

Lisa

Christian Piatt wrote 637 days ago

Lezander:
This feels very much in the spirit of one of my favorite authors, Christopher Moore. A little on the absurd side, naturally, but all for the sake of good laughs. A fun, imaginative journey for sure.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

Jim Darcy wrote 637 days ago

Great romp, very entertaining! :)

caribe wrote 637 days ago

Lots of fun -- a wild ride on the high seas with fascinating characters and good doses of humor. Backed.

Burgio wrote 637 days ago

GERNICKYZ
This is an interesting story. I like the way it begins with the Captain in the tavern and the announcement of the will; gets a reader into the heart of the story immediately. You have a good character in Nicklaus; he’s likable and altho a “fish out of water” kind of guy, a reader wants to follow him to see how this will all play out. There aren’t many updates on pirate stories out there so you have a market here all to yourself. I’m happy to add this to my shelf. If you have a moment, would you look at mine (Grain of Salt)? I’m in 3rd place but only holding on by my teeth. Burgio

lizjrnm wrote 637 days ago

This is hilarious! Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

fh wrote 638 days ago

GERNICKYZ
Swashbuckling pirates - intrigue and adventure on the high seas. Great fun! Well writen in an open easy hand. Backed
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

BJ Otto wrote 638 days ago

This promises to be a grand adventure, love the characters, developed perfectly. This is a nice easy read with a steady flow. Backed.

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 638 days ago

I could not upload this for a review, I will try again later. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

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