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rank 5463
word count 12932
date submitted 02.09.2010
date updated 31.10.2010
genres: Fiction, Fantasy
classification: universal
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Finnegan's Quest

Gloria Piper

Who is Finnegan the young red fox's guru? Is it the bear who terrorizes Squiggly Wood, or the crow with the evil foot?

 

This story parodies political, social, and commercial manipulation. Simultaneously it takes the reader on the archetypal search for one's place and purpose in life.

Finnegan, a young red fox, is bored with Mama's lessons--Sit up straight, Don't hit, Never trust a crow. An itch enters his blood and chases him into Squiggly Wood to seek the charisma and sophistication of a real guru, preferrably one who is big and scary. He almost thinks he finds it in Duh Fuz, a monster bear whose red glare shivers his bones. In fact, no one in the woods welcomes Finnegan, except Crookshank, a crow reputed to have an evil foot. It is twisted and throbs with secret messages. Through it, Crookshank is called by the sacred Spirit to mentor Finnegan. Finnegan does find comfort in her company, but Mama's lessons stick like leeches, particularly the one that blinds him to feathered gurus. Nevertheless, while continuing his search for a mentor, he partners with Crookshank to investigate ridiculous and dangerous happenings that threaten the critters of Squiggly Wood.

 
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allegory, bear, bullfrog, crow, fantasy, fox, guru, humorous, insightful, spiritual, weasel

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T M Robinson wrote 573 days ago

Hi Gloria,

I read the first four chapters of your novel trying to fathom where you're going with this. The writing is quite nice. The story seems to wander from a children's story to an adult morality play. Like the Harry Potter books, it seems to defy categorization. But as an adult I'm having difficulty embracing the story. It's very 'story book'. The language seems too advanced for children. I think you're having difficulty defining your audience.

If this is directed at young adults, you might consider parallel stories - Finnegan the fox and Finnegan the inner city kid living in the projects. Perhaps Finnegan the fox is a child's way of escaping the bullies and monsters living in the real world. Interweave the beauty of Finnegan's fantasy world with the horror of his everyday life in the projects. I feel like the story needs something real for the reader to relate to.

Just my thoughts - TM Robinson - Progeny

PS - thanks for your comments - very appreciated

Pia wrote 581 days ago

Gloria -

Finnegan's Quest - Oh, mothers, how they worry. This is a delightful tale with much wisdom embedded. I'm enticed to read on.

Pia (Course of Mirrors)

cat5149 wrote 585 days ago

A very charming read. Backed, with pleasure.

Carol

EltopiaAuthor wrote 589 days ago

Wow, I don't know how anybody has the patience to write something like this, but hey, if the author enjoys it.

What I am wondering is, have you run a readability check on this? You should be able to find edu sites online that will check readability levels for you automatically, then you can target your content accordingly. The thing about writing for children to young adults is that there are such big leaps in brain growth/development, and such wide gaps in topics of interest between the age levels.

At any rate, I would never try to publish a book without having a pretty good, objective, idea what the readability was. Then I would look at that age level's interests.

For example, some authors mistakenly write to young children's topical matter while aiming the readability at middle school, while others do the opposite. For success you have to match both readability/vocabulary and content/interest with the targeted age groups, and those targets can be quite narrow.

Wish you best of luck.

FEL

nenno wrote 597 days ago

This is a lovely read and an opportunity for some parent-child bonding, because it reads like it is targeted at children's more than young adult.. ?? It is not written 'down' either so children will be challenged from time to time to understand, which is a good thing, in my humble opinion. Ah, this niche thing, so confusing. Best of luck FOUR BETTER FOUR WORSE

Sly80 wrote 600 days ago

This is clever, almost Brer Rabbit-ish, but with a voice all of its own, 'an itch in his blood chased him into the world to seek another guru'. Everyone knows better than Mama - hers are 'Rules for a kit. Trash for an adult'. Still 'her teachings clung like leeches'.

Seems the forest is a jungle, with all sorts of rackets and extortion. Top dog is the bear, who is now on Finnegan's heels - dive for the stream 'hitting with a ploosh among reeds and cattails'. He escaped, but Crookshank didn't, thus she was crippled. Now she listens carefully to the voice of the Spirit, 'Is whipped cream good, or does it mean another broken leg?' Meanwhile, in search of his own answers, Finnegan negotiates a bureaucratic maze...

A nice way 'teach' about nature, with that lavish list of flora: foxtail, goosefoot, elderberry and oak. Plus a love of language that doesn't balk at neologisms or rare and delicious words: behemoth, denizens, myriad, infraction, cerulean. It's impossible to read this and not be delighted with all aspects of the writing: 'the landscape shook against his eyeballs', 'life was like a field of strawberries', 'it tossed a banquet of odors that said this country was lush with opportunity'. What an enjoyable way for a young person to absorb so many lessons ... backed.

Possible nit: 'dropped [placed?] something ... dropped the payment'.

(Just a word of advice on editing your chapters on authonomy, in case you haven't already: use UPDATE to load the edited chapters. Don't use DELETE and then reload as this can cause problems.)

Bocri wrote 601 days ago

01 October 2010
Creative, lively and graphically vivid. Especially noteworthy is the personification of each character and how the qualities and temperament of each are illustrated. The pace is optimum for a 'quest' tale of this nature with each segment bringing dimension and substance to the players. BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run.

Peter Wild wrote 601 days ago

I absolutely love this. Charming, original and written with just the perfect voice, this is an exceptional piece of work, and should go far. I hope so. Backed with great pleasure.
Peter Wild
Double Action

Roger Thurling wrote 602 days ago

Very wise and full of fun; the adult will recognise so much of this, and the child, (maybe!), learn from it as well as being vastly entertained.
RT

teremoto wrote 606 days ago

Lyrical and charming, Finnegan draws one in immediately.

klouholmes wrote 608 days ago

Hi Gloria, An enjoyable first four chapters and its being for YA seemed to fit with Finnegan's looking for answers in his adventure rather than food. Liked the bridge toll and the payments that would be about food, especially the insurance reasons. Crookshank's cloud and spirit level was well-done and the dialogue about karma too.
The narrated start made me anticipate encounters and dialogue - maybe dialogue with Mama and a scene with her near the beginning? The signs near the Forbidden City were clever and gave pace to the reading but I wondered about a fox responding to signs?
This has consistency though, working at the animal and spiritual level, succeeding in amalgamating them with the dialogue and terse narration. I felt I was in the place with the description of the flora. It's different and written well to express the guru intent. Easily shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

JupiterGirl wrote 611 days ago

Whimsical and with a good natured narrative. Your story is sure to delight many a reader, young and old. Shelved. JupiterGirl (Twins of the Astal Plane)

MickR wrote 618 days ago

Gloria,
I find the writing here very good, but I thought the prose to be too cute for YA. I think childrens lit but I didn't get far enough in to determine that it is suitable throughout.
Good luck,
MickR - The Nightcrawler

Greta wrote 618 days ago

I enjoyed the read. It's the sort of thing I would have read back in the day. You write well and Finnegan's cocky character is clearly drawn. Duh Fuz is a convincing villain.

I confess I winced a little at the list which Fin buries. My imagination instantly came up with a Peter Rabbit scenario and a mother fox in a dress standing on her hind legs to write out a list of rules. The rest of it doesn't read like that. Except the reference to shaking hands - or hands at all. I think if you're going the anthropomorphic route, the story will hold less appeal for older kids. Perhaps also you might consider replacing the names of flowers with descriptions. Anne's lace, sunflowers and chicory (for instance) won't conjure up an image for everybody. Including me - I'm Australian. Best of luck with it.

Best of luck

Walden Carrington wrote 618 days ago

Finnegan's Quest
I love these stories written from an animal's perspective. Your descriptions are enchanting. I look forward to seeing the complete work. Backed with pleasure.

Jim Darcy wrote 623 days ago

This made for a fun read over afternoon coffee! Finnegan has all the hallmarks of a cult figure in the making! dialogue is funny and description enough to add depth without swamping the reader with detail. Well done!
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's Crown

missyfleming_22 wrote 623 days ago

Wow, this is incredibly original and fun! You've got a great character in Finnegan, very unique! I think this will find a very loyal following, something about it reminded me of the board game Uncle Wiggly (I think that's the name of it). You've got a wonderful imagination and very creative writing. I couldn't find anything wrong with this. It was a fun read, delightful and creative. Wonderful job!

Missy
Mark of Eternity

Bookster wrote 623 days ago

I love quests and good writing. This book has both and reminds me a little of Watership Down. Wonderfully atmospheric, great characters and storyline.
Eric Wilder - Prairie Sunset

zan wrote 624 days ago

Finnegan's Quest

Gloria Piper

An imaginative alternative guru story for the YA crowd. I like Finnegan. And your other introductory characters. Nice names for some of them. Duh Fuz throttled a carp? Some of this is really zany - and I love it! "Glub, glub, glub" was all the carp could say. "Fun read, fun read," is all I can say for now until I read more. Simply delightful and I have no constructive criticism as I think, in my humble opinion, this is entirely convincing. You have a very creative imagination - happy to have given it a spin on my bookshelf.

Neville wrote 624 days ago

Hi Gloria, a facinating book, well written and a joy to read.
I think the higher age group will take to this as well as Y/A.
I back it . SHELVED.

Thanks for backing my book.

Neville (The Secrets Of The Forest - Series)

SRFire wrote 624 days ago

I loved Finnegan! Young readers should also love to hear of his tail! :-)
All the best, Sana x

Suzalex wrote 625 days ago

Fun and well done, though I can see it more for the middle reader age group versus YA. Great word choices: dithered, shimmied, waddled . . . "Glup, glup, glup," was all the carp could say. Tons of fun.

Suz

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 625 days ago

Intriguing and original. I will come back and read parts of this again just for the pleasure of it. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 625 days ago

Excellent work. Backed. Chuck

name falied moderation wrote 625 days ago

Dear Gloria

ooops backed it again ( no coincidences) best of luck

Denise
The Letter

Christian Piatt wrote 625 days ago

Gloria:
I found your story to be delightfully relateable for readers at any age. Outting universal human experiences into a fantastic context like this makes for a fund read, either for young readers on their own, or for parents to enjoy alongside their kids.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

fh wrote 626 days ago

FINNEGAN'S QUEST
This is a delightful read - I just love the fox and the way he walzes into his world. Nice touch with all the biological things -flowers, herbs etc as a fellow biologist I appreciate this.
Wonderful characterisation and nicely crafted throughout. I have placed this on my WL and will back asap. Best wishes
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

SusieGulick wrote 626 days ago

You are totally fantastic, Gloria! :) How can I ever thank you enough for backing my memoir book? :)
God bless you. :) Love, Susie :)

lamiel wrote 626 days ago

Finnegan's characterization is strong and charming. A fox dressed up, and going to see his guru. Though at first I was recalcitrant to entering this fantasy world, as this is not what I usually read, I was pleasantly drawn in. There's a nonchalant mood that I enjoy, though adventures are on their way. It's quite refreshing to read Finnegan's Quest.

MIguel
Absentee Bidder

yasmin esack wrote 626 days ago

Your writing is very polished and I love your characterization of the fox, Finnegan. It is a most enjoyable read and the details you weave into what appears to be simple, is remarkable.

Best
THE MIND SETTER

Benjamin Dancer wrote 626 days ago

Your scientific training pays off. 1st in your ability to say it--just enough words--precision. Second in your observations, the setting. And third, only a biologist would be so precise on the biology of its characters. I really enjoyed these aspects.

Your creativity is not hindered in any way by the scientist. Your profile reminded me a little of Sarah, one of my characters.

I laughed many times. Especially Rattus in this last chapter.

Your dialogue propels both character and plot. You use minimal tags--as is the current fashion. The word choice is just fantastic: charming and hilarious--and fricken precise, as in a lab report.

This is a real winner.

You've got a gift. Not many people, even on this site, write so well.

Andrew Burans wrote 627 days ago

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Finnegan. Your perspective from a fox's point of view is nicely done. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing ensures that your work will appeal to the YA audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

name falied moderation wrote 629 days ago

Dear Gloria

I loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

TalulaJane wrote 629 days ago

Enchanting to say the least. Just in this first chapter of Finnegan's venture, I am longing for more. Like chips...in these chapters, you cannot only have one. Read on. Read on. BACKED.
Carrie
The Darkwood Tales: Demouri's Defeat

gloria piper wrote 629 days ago

Dear Gloria, I love your delightful story & it's underlying message of proper behavior. :) Your pitch was so informative & prepared me for my read :) - tight paragraphs & dialogue made for a wonderful read. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoir book? Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

This is information from authonomy (so beware of any other untrue information you may receive that is spam & not quotes of authonomy):
"When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"
"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."

SusieGulick wrote 629 days ago

Dear Gloria, I love your delightful story & it's underlying message of proper behavior. :) Your pitch was so informative & prepared me for my read :) - tight paragraphs & dialogue made for a wonderful read. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoir book? Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

This is information from authonomy (so beware of any other untrue information you may receive that is spam & not quotes of authonomy):
"When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"
"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."

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