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rank 5463
word count 10694
date submitted 03.09.2010
date updated 05.09.2010
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Popular Culture,...
classification: moderate
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Whips and Scorns

Zachary Kaplan

Revenge is a theme that has been present throughout time. Good guys and bad guys. Twist and turns. Los Angeles.

 

Richard Patrick’s first mistake was killing the wrong woman. His second mistake was not killing her husband. Arrogance or stupidity, it didn't matter which but Patrick ignored the rules of the game: don't leave anyone alive, especially a widower with nothing to live for but revenge. Colin Black, the avenging husband, teams up with his detective brother and a team of Holly-weird characters to destroy crime boss Richard Patrick. Colin Black’s life was taken from him; his beautiful wife, his ability to easily do what able-bodied individuals take for granted. In his mind, he has two options; pack it in and kill himself or at least try and assuage his loss with more blood. He enlists the help of his Detective brother, Dane, and together they carefully plan the destruction of the man that took away everything. The two brothers learn that even the most careful planning does not always yield the desired results when dealing outside the law. In the end, who gets hurt and who is left standing does not matter, simply that revenge is only sweet to those whose thirst for blood is unquenchable.

 
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Linda Lou wrote 618 days ago

WHIPS AND SCORNS- Zachary Kaplan
hullo Zachary. Ooh, one mistake will lead to another, and another, ect. richard has a think about severing appendages; arms and pinky fingers. very good. Already shelved and backed.
Please take a look at my book if you have not and thanks for that.
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

Tom Bye wrote 623 days ago

HI ZACHARY ' WHIPS AND SCORNS'

just read the first few chapters. liked the pitch as it set up the storyline very well.
Have we all cruly pubic hair? as you state in the first paragraph, joking aside, this is a great snapppy and edgy read with tongue in cheek humour and a pager turner as it moves a great pace' backed
TOM BYE '# FROM HUGS TO KISSES'
Please back mine only if you like it th;anks

Vanessa Darnleigh wrote 625 days ago

Excellent opening...flawless writing and terrific dialogue...well done!
Stewart

aldousremoved wrote 626 days ago

Your pitch might be good but your book is great! My only concern is where's the rest of it? Please let me know when you've uploaded more, I'd enjoy continuing with this. The underlying plot is superb and it reads like a film treatment come script, which isn't a criticism but points to its pace. It could do with a bit of editing, spelling and grammar corrections, etc, but they all can (mine included). If the remainder of the story maintains the standard across the first four chapters then this deserves to be on real bookshelves, not just those of this website. Best of luck with it! Cheers, Anthony

zan wrote 626 days ago

Whips and Scorns

Zachary Kaplan

Your plot as gleaned from your pitches had me shaking in my boots - revenge, murder and the like. Your opening was good - must some back and read more soon. Ha! Had to laugh at that super-thin cellular phone which Max could barely handle. Prett soon they'll be thinner than cardboard! Like your phrases - "...my brain just sent the bill to my j-bag." The writing is very entertaining - heavy stuff going on but there is a lightness to the writing which makes it very enjoyable to read. happy to back you and best with it.

philip john wrote 627 days ago

Good pitch with some slick writing to follow. Good, real world dialogue, too.

Philip John

Eveleen wrote 627 days ago

Whips and Scorns
You've got a very good pitch, and the writing is good also
Backed
Eveleen
(Turning a new leaf)

lizjrnm wrote 627 days ago

Your pitch is perfect if that's possible (wow! say that ten times) seriously - you have a knack for drawing the reader right into the story proper which is exactly what the book flap or back cover do in an effort to sell the book. Id buy this so Im backing it and I will certainly read more later.

PS: Get a decent looking peice of cover art and with your catchy title, nine out of ten readers will pick this off the shelf to have a peek at the pitch. Cha-ching!

Liz
The Cheech Room
A Fine Pickle

Barry Wenlock wrote 628 days ago

Hi Zachary,
This is a great opening chapter and I loved the over-eager waiter who vanishes (like they do) when he is finally needed.
Nice dialogue as we hear of the MC's promotion and then, most surprisingly, he goes down to a punch and he and Betty are bundled into a van. Wow. This, and Max taking the number and shaking as he phones is a good hook to chapter two.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Frank James wrote 628 days ago

Hi Zachary Kaplan (Whips and Scorns)

I liked this one, well as much as I've had time for. This is a no holes barred job that I believe could travel to the top of the greasy pole quite fast. You have my best wishes and I'm BACKING you.

Frank James (The Contractor)

name falied moderation wrote 628 days ago

Dear Zachary


I loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

celticwriter wrote 628 days ago

You owned me by your first line. Wonderful, terrific consistent writing. Backed.

sincerely,
jim
Jack & Charmian London

name falied moderation wrote 628 days ago

Dear Zachary

II have your book and some others on my WL at present. just started readin and will comment in little while

Denise
The Letter

Cariad wrote 628 days ago

'a destitution of light.' love that. I wasn't sure of this at first, but the way you told it just kept me reading. Before I knew it I was in the urinal with the ice. I really like the way you relate the scenes, almost from a remove, no self conscious telling. I'm not sure what I think of the MC yet - can't work him out, but I like the writing very much - spare, no words wasted. Neither is the atmosphere the same all the time, it changes. You think you know where you are - but then, no, not sure. 'Now my suit is ruined for certain.' oh my. It turns nasty like the flick of a coin or a knife, keeping me on the edge of my reading toes. Very much like this one and will keep reading.
Polly
STONES.

Jack Hughes wrote 628 days ago

Wow! You certainly don't pull any punches with this one! A hard edged thriller, very well written. Almost reminisent of the old film noir classics of the forties and fifties in its theme. I like this kind of fiction and would advise everyone on the site to keep an eye on it. This one will fly.

Backed, best of luck.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 628 days ago

You capture the shifting moods and situations very well and we would all like to think that we are capable of avenging the murder of a loved one so this is a great plot, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

eurodan49 wrote 628 days ago

Nice writing, good balance of narration and dialogue.
I only had time for Ch 1 but I'll be back for more reading and commentary.
Backed for now

SusieGulick wrote 628 days ago

Dear Zachary, I love that Dane had such an amazing father. :) Would that a father stand up for his son!! :) Hopefully always. :) Would that the whole world learn a lesson from this! :) Your pitch had me rooting for Dane all of the way. :) You gave me a smooth read with your crisp dialogue & paragraphs. :) Hope you'll write many more books. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back mine? Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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