Dragons Versus Dinosaurs (Xtoriez)

I really like the names and this wonderful mix of Vikings and Dragons. I'm curious about where the Dinos come in. Quite interesting and fun so I'm backing it.

K
NIck Keen's Guide to Ghost Cleaning

The style here I think would really appeal to the YA audience (but I can't see if you have it tagged as such. Of course, that doesn't mean adults won't like it, too. I think you can tighten to improve pace, but your grammar/punctuation seems to be strong. Admittedly, I don't read much of this style of fantasy (mostly only Urban Fantasy), but I think this is good for it's target audience. Is there a reason you marked it as lit fic? Anyway, an enjoyable read with great characters. you have a vivid imagination!

xBeccaX
The Forever Girl

excellent premise that had me hooked from the title alone and this is evolving into a cracking gem of a tal that is brimming with imagination, backed

wow vivid imagination your a hellova storyteller
Gingernut

1 - read your opening and see how many times you have repeated yourself. Cut all the things you've said twice or more down to one instance. You've used, for instance, the word "young" 5 times in para 5.
2 - wherever you've used any other word than "said" for verbal communication, ask yourself whether you need to use a verb at all, and whether you really need a special word. Eg, uttered, declared, scoffed, ordered. Your dialogue flows much more smoothly where you've forgotten about these and just used "said" or "asked".
3 - check tenses. "the ground it trod upon" (not "tread")
4 - check plurals - "craft" referring to boats is an unchanging plural, "one craft, two craft." "Crafts" are what we do with our hands to make things.

The idea of deriving power from dragons is a promising one :)

Your opening is enthralling and I liked the way you moved the description from the spear to the boy. One or two commas are missing, but that is only to be expected. You seem to have a mastery of sentence structures.

Backed,
Dagura
'Rising Seas'

GL

Vivid descriptions, active verbs, stimulates the senses - sound, sight, emotion. Lovely writing. Your one word and short sentences work withan immediacy - Splat, Clank, Dragons.

Backed.

Will you take a look at God of the Cocoa, and let me know what you think. If it deserves it, I would be grateful if you would back it.

Thanks and best of luck.

Marilyn

Nicely written. We all need a dragon or two to keep the dynosaurs busy. Personally, I'd call pest control, but they might have to ship out for bigger cages. What do you really do with a dragon, anyway? You can't pet it. If you go hunting with it, there's nothing left to take home. It will literally eat you into the poorhouse.

Anyway, congrats on a great read. I'm enjoying it still.

Check mine out, Satan's Daughter Goes to Pittsburgh. In the meantime, I'm backing this.

It's sometimes hard to come up with a good first paragraph, but you did a great job here. It kept me wanting to read more. I really enjoy your writing style and find this story very fun and think this would be a great story that people will enjoy. Backed!

Great opening chapter. Great detail, fantastic character development. I like the flow and ease of reading. Backed.

Jason
Gateway to the World of Light and Shadow

Terrific storyline - a bit reminiscent of CS Lewis "Chronicles of Narnia," but with a twist. I like it.

Backed!
Justis Call
Prestidigitations

Great to meet a dinosaur face-to-face in chapter 1! The story will absorb you target audience and I predict great success for the author! Backed. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Intriguied by the title, a bit puzzled (but in a good way) by the pitch. Read the first chapter, and I like it. Backed!

Intriguied by the title, a bit puzzled (but in a good way) by the pitch. Read the first chapter, and I like it. Backed!

Talented writing with an intriguing storyline makes this easy to back!

Liz
The Cheech Room
A Fine Pickle

Dragons Versus Dinosaurs

G. L. Strytler

Good title! I didn't see a YA tag, which I looked for after reading your pitches so I am assuming you meant this for a wider audience which would cover older folks like moi. I wasn't sure what to make of your storyline as gleaned from your pitches and decided much of it would have to be symbolic - well, at least by my interpretation. "Dinosaurs fight Dragons." I think it's the other way around - usually the more powerful initiates the fight as he thinks he stands a good chance of winning, and I think dinosaurs would be too slow to feel confident they can win a battle against fire-spitting dragons so it should be "Dragons fight Dinosaurs? Or not? Will have to read more to see which makes more sense given content.
So, Prince Christopher and Princess Elsie, with the help of Vikings and their dragons, set sail toward Asia. Ha! This must be Christopher Columbus in disguise in another life. Then the Asian army and their dragons set sail toward Scotland. Both accidently arive in America and discover dinosaurs. I am thinking your dinosaurs are the old world folks - native americans, and Aztecs, Mayans, and all sorts of Amerindians encountered in the new world (or old depending on perspective). Okay, I see now why this wasn't tagged as YA. Everything was planned by the jokester Brass dragon, Guffaw. So the prince, princess, a cave boy named Og, and an Asian boy named Ki, must stop the war. They recieve help from the silver dragon, Bashra, and the Asian, Red Dragon of Happiness. I'll have to read beyond your first chapter to decipher exactly what is the Red Dragon of Happiness. Your story is like a grand puzzle - at least to me, and I love the potential for interpretation - it's a lot like abstract art really, or poetry. Well done. "Are you implying dear sir, that the world is round?" I think this will be one hell of a history lesson!! Great fun so far - for now, like the king, I prefer to sit in silence and meditate upon what a wonderful plot you have here - for some reason the humour/satire of it remind me vaguely of The Gods Must be Crazy. This is one I would definitely love to own when in print.

You've got quite an adventure going on in here. High fantasy and high flying. This will do well, no doubt.

Crazy, fun, amusing and very well written. Your cover says, Adventures for boys, but that halves your market. Girls would like this, too.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Consider reducing the number of exclamation marks by half. Overuse diminishes their effectiveness. Other than that, this is an engrossing fantasy. Cinematic descriptions. Very believable characters and vivid scenes. Convincing dialogue. Inventive, robust storyline. Confident writing. A first rate read. Backed.

This is a brilliant idea for a story and spooky as I seem to keep getting dragons and dinosaurs mixed up lately. I love dragons and I love your cover, excellent use of purple, my fav colour. I absolutely love your opening paragraphs, something very exciting is happening and you make the reader want to read on and find out what it is. Your descriptions are incredible and very vivid, this is so well written. Backed with great pleasure.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Dragons Versus Dinosaurs

G. L. Strytler

Pitch

Arive...typo....arrive

C1

Can you chuckle a grunt ? Mmmm I’m not convinced.

C2

My spell check brought up mountain tops as two words. ?

Why would a new light reveal smells...I thought that conflicting.

OK , so now you’re thinking I’m a moaner. I’m not really, that’s all I could find to point out to you. A fast moving tome written by someone with a vivid imagination. I enjoyed it and wish you well.

Wilma1 - Knowing Liam Riley - I hope you enjoy it

I think this would appeal to young readers. Just a small niggle in one of the early paragraphs Ch1 you have used young' five times. Maybe you can find some alternatives. I notice that there is a tendency to repetition but this could be easily fixed with some editing.

Gook luck
Lorraine
Mannin Boy

Dragons Versus Dinosaurs is a fun read that mixes a lot of elements together into a cohesive story. In a sense it reminds me a bit of The Wheel of Time series with Asian and European mythology all meshed together. Author G. L. Strytler does the almost impossible: taking what would otherwise be an absurd story and making it into a world with believable characters. There is so much cookie-cutter junk on the fantasy bookshelves these days, it’s so refreshing to find something different, and Dragons Versus Dinosaurs fits that bill! I hope more chapters are added soon.

Dear GL

Great writing and very well crafted, original storyline also
your characters seem to have taken up permanent residence in my head, and though I have quite enjoyed them , they do have to go home soon. Loved your writing, and the way you use words to paint such vivid scenes and also your characters. so animated, i do wish I had some of your talent for sure.

if you would find time to COMMENT and BACK my book I would be so happy, if not that is OK also
I wish you the VERY best of luck

Denise
The Letter

Quick and fun reading. The title reminded me a bit too much of the animated movie of a similar name a year or so ago, but the pacing and writing is well-tuned to younger readers.
Best of luck with your book. BACKED.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

Hi G.L.,

I have backed your book because I was hooked by the pitch, loved the introduction and read on. How much more I read depends on time and commitment.

Enjoy everything and good luck.

Rusty Bernard
The Mental Pause

This is quite cute, yet adventurous, kids love dinosaurs and dragons so it should be an enticing read. The main characters come across well and it is fairly easy reading.

Backed,

Lisa

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created most memorable main characters in Price Christopher and Princess Elsie. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your fantasy a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

obsurd and brilliant. written very well- would work as a great comedy horror movie= on my watchlist..
read SEASONS...

Fun. Backed.

Dear G. L., I love your adventure of princess & dragons which are good & bad. :) Your pitch is concise, preparing me for my read & your tight paragraphs & dialogue are smooth sailing. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please back my memoir book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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An easy book to become absorbed in and fantasy fans will love it, well done. Two small nit-picks,"Very ground it tread upon" should be "Trod upon" "Course skin" should be "Coarse skin." Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

I liked it when the peasants started laughing at the prince and princess. "It was just a flying bunny rabbit!" one of them yelled. Their sarcasm was a realistic reaction to the young kids who pretended they were in control. Of course, they have to get back to the castle because the vikings are back. It ends up that the vikings have not attacked but need help in making an surprise attack on the orient. They go west on ships powered by dragons. That's different and unexpected. Of course, the king accepts and decides to take his two heirs (the young prince and princess) with him. Isn't that risky? Well, it's time to attach ropes to the dragons and set sail west towards China and kick some ass. I take it, though, the North American continent will get in the way? Well, I be back to read more when I can. This is an intriguing fantasy for young adults (I gather) that has a nice balance between the dialogue and description. Backed for now.

DRAGONS VERSUS DINOSAURS
Oh I like this! You’ve given us a great set of characters, well fleshed out and believable.
Your descriptive passages and phrases are well thought, and you give us plenty of vivid images to deal with.
I enjoyed this; snappy dialogue, vivid pictures and good imagination. Lots of action, mystery and suspense - full of adventure!
You write well andI am happy to back this. When you have a moment I would be really pleased if you would take a look at my book. Thanks and good luck on here.
Faith
THE ASSASSINS’ VILLAGE

Brilliant. Backed
Helen
The Last dream