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date submitted 16.09.2010
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THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB Memoirs of The Making of A Pope

L. D. Glowicki

MASTERFULLY EXPLORES
THE MYSTERIOUS ROLE OF THE SPIRIT
IN THE ELECTION OF A POPE.
A TIMELESS, DIVINE STORY,
AND A TRUE HUMAN SAGA.

 

As an author and layman, my involvement in actually electing a pope happened by a gradual evolution of events in my life. To understand how this occurred this non-fiction book will substantiate the truth of such a bold assertion.
Complete @ about 145,000 words.
Agents or Publishers please contact Ldglo@yahoo.ca

 
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CarolinaAl wrote 579 days ago

Fresh. Insightful. Inspiring. Your brilliant inspirational story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters with spiritual depth. Crisp dialogue. Exquisite narrative. Vital writing. A life changing read. Backed.

Bocri wrote 587 days ago

The Sacrificial Lamb is testament to faith and belief. In my opinion it is persuasive, by example, and logical in its arguments, or statements, and does not ostensibly seek to convince but rather to consolidate and strengthen existing beliefs. It does this by telling a story of a family; their individual histories, their interconnectivity and the narrator's police service, his bouts of depression and his eventual recovery & conversion to Catholicism. The conversion is the first step to his participation in the election of the Pope. Thoroughly engrossing, well told and quietly passionate. BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run.

KJKron wrote 584 days ago

First, I like the title and what the book promises. There is something about John Paul's brief term as Pope I find unsettling - hence the title? You also catch my attention - how could you have something to do with his election?

One thing I found rather frustrating is the first 6 chapters are basically intro, preface, et al. They could be all combined since they leave the reader frustrated as he or she tries to find the beginning. As the story starts, I found the snippets to be a good length and you have a little flair or style that keeps me engaged. It reads like a memior. Well, that's what it is. At times I think you could cut down what you've written - especially when I see the entire piece is 165,000 words.

Still, I could see myself getting into this story and enjoying it. I've already backed you and wish you well...

Sheila Belshaw wrote 602 days ago

THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB

Lorne,

I am bowled over by the freshness of this writing. It is utterly unique. Scholarly, insightful, brave, ground-breaking, intriguing -- there are not enough words to describe what an impact this had on my. I just wish you would hurry up and finish it so that we can all see it in the bookshops where it belongs.

Good luck, and best wishes,

Sheila Mary Taylor (Pinpoint)

GLO-WICK wrote 603 days ago

I've inserted the TABLE OF CONTENTS of THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB here for those who wish to see the structure and full scope of my work. As a note, the majority of the sub-headings are very short and snappy snippets.
Chapter 1:
Historical Importance; Genesis (1); Young Love (2); Love and Labour (3); Marriage (4); Homes and Births (5); Father's Background and Various Jobs (6); The Police Force (7); Caught In The Act (8); Hang On? (9); The Police Call Box (10); The Chase (11).
Chapter 2::
The North-End (12); My Old Home Grounds (13); Overdose (14); Main Street and The Old Market Place (15); Danny (16); Stella Park (17); The Red River (18); Pritchard Pool (19); Drunk? (20); Aberdeen School (21); Pets (22); Compound Fracture (23); Car Accident (24); Selkirk Avenue (25); Mother's Background (26); Residences and Births (27); What's In A Name? (28); The Dominion Café (29); My Youthful Domain (30); The Mission (31).
Chapter 3:
Fire and Ice (32); The Christmas Crunch (33); The Police Report (34); The Backlash (35); The Chain of Command (36); Mystical Celebration (37).
Chapter 4::
Numbers (38); Final Breaking Point (39); Diagnosis (40); Medical Treatment (41); The Imitation of Christ (42); The Discharge (43); Suicide? (44); Slight's End (45); The Understatement (46); Vocational Setback (47); Conversion To Roman Catholicism (48); The Insignia (49); The Revelation (50); My Son's Name and Birth (51); The Burning Bridge (52); A Consuming Fire (53); The Pope (54); Affirmation (55); Potential (56); Spiritual Development? (57); The Answer Is Blowin' In The Wind (58); Faith (59); Harbinger (60).
Chapter 5:
Release of Fear (61); The Peak Experience (62); Shattered (63); The Broken Limb (64); Spiritual Evaluations (65); A Big Difference (66); Residual Effects (67); The Pyramid of The West (68); Folklorama (69); Moving The Rock Gibraltar (70); The Prince and The Pauper (71.)
Chapter 6:
The I.O.F. (72); "Doc" Meader (73); Mobile Office Camper (74); The Last Move (75); The Halloween Report (76); Transcendental Meditation (77); The Apology April Fools' Day (78).
Chapter 7:
The TM Retreat (79); The Other Woman (80); The Torrid Times (81); Divorce (82); Reflections (83).
Chapter 8
The Other Man (84); Dynomite (85); The Other Woman (86); Negative Effects (87); All Expenses Paid (88); Investigations (89); Criminal Activity (90); Absolutely No Doubt (91); The Custody Report (92); The Custody Hearing (93); A Higher Power (94).
Chapter 9:
Appeal? (95); Unrequited Love (96); Spirit-Guides? (97); Desperation (98); Avalanche Upon Avalanche (99); Storm Upon Storm (100); Physical Effects (101); The Great White Throne (102); Stigmata (103); The Supernatural (104); The Baptism In The Holy Spirit (105); The Baptism of Suffering (106); The Evolution of The Answer (107); A Litany of Questions (108).
Chapter 10:
The Child Psychiatrist (109); Spiritual Opposition To The Holy Eucharist (110); A Psychiatric Debate (111); The Hospital Discharge Summary (112).
Chapter 11:
Rebuttal (113); The Nadir Bed (114); The Psychiatric Interview (115).
Chapter 12:
More Money (116); Police Correspondence (117); Some Thoughts to Think About (118); Another Sworn Affidavit (119); Doctor, Doctor, Where Is The Doctor? (120); The Resurrection of a Christmas Past (121); Spiritual Warfare? (122); A Breath of Relief (123).
Chapter 13:
The Winds of Change (124); The Fulcrum (125); The Charismatic Prayer Meeting (126); The Moment of Truth Has Come (127 A); The Ministry of Meditation (127 B); The Prophetic Dream 127 C); A Dream Fulfilled (128); The Instant Conclave (129); Sudden Death (130); The Polish Pope (131); The End of The Schismatic Archbishop (132); Displacement of TM. (133).
Chapter 14:
The End of the Contempt of Court (134); A Good Samaritan (135); Let Him Be Whatever He May Be (136), More Jobs (137).
Chapter 15:
A Pope Comes To Canada (138); Attempts At Reconciliation (139); Parental Alienation (140); The Crisis of Faith (141); Irene's Fate (142); Reconciliation Is Still Needed (143); It Is Finished (144);The Final Answer (145).
End Notes.

I'm also making A COMMENT ON AN EARLIER COMMENT:
Dear Sherry, You say, “Tell me why it matters that you in particular had a part in electing a pope."
Well, Sherry, I guess where I'm coming from this kind of thing just doesn't happen every day – if ever (unless I've been missing something). You go on to ask, Is your story one of overcoming hardship? Is it a historical account of the Pope before he became Pope? Who is the story about - you or him?”
All those are very good questions. And for any discussion group, I'll even throw in another one that you wouldn't want to miss, and that is: "Who really is The Sacrificial Lamb in this story?" Unfortunately, to answer that question, if it ever can be conclusively known, my book must be presented in its entirety, and then all questions will be answered. It also may be helpful to read the Preface in Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 for a better understanding of this book. Thanks sincerely, Lorne.

ReeBuba wrote 488 days ago

I'm really enjoying this read. Your style is quite academic and interesting. I am looking forward to sitting down with this again this evening!

SusieGulick wrote 501 days ago

You are totally fantastic, L.D.!! :) How can I ever thank you enough for backing my memoirs/testimony book? :) God bless you. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I just looked to see if I had ******-ed your book & it is ******-rated (6 gold ******'s) :) Every ****** -ing & backing more than 24 hours moves our books up authonomy's lists. :) I want to ask you if you could please keep my book on your bookshelf because I'm 5 on the editor's desk & have to be in the top 5 to be chosen, the end of January :) - I had a mini-stroke Nov. 10 with slurred speech for an hour & numbness of tongue still & over 24 smaller ones where I couldn't speak since & I"d sure like to cross the finish line of the editor's desk after 10 months trying on authonomy. :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart for helping me :) - I have lost 3 sisters to strokes & my last sister, Mary had 2 heart attacks this past year.

Rose Princess Kaysielynn wrote 565 days ago

I read through the first five chapters and scanned the sixth and found myself wondering throughout most of it what in the world the events depicted had to do with electing a pope. There were a lot of details given (street addresses of a wide variety of places, mortgage payment amounts, prices of things in the 1930s, etc.) that I felt really hindered the flow of your story. I loved reading all of that (especially the bits pertaining to your work as a police officer, as my own father was a police officer once upon a time), but I think what you have here are two separate stories - one being the story of your life, the other being the story of how you were involved with electing the pope.

I think you have a lot of talent as a writer, but I think this story is a bit all over the place. Good luck!

figsi wrote 569 days ago

I'm sorry L.D but it does not work. Your register is all over the place. At times this reads like an experiment. Shoot into the story chapter 4 and avoid all the pronouns "we, you, ". Your narrative is all over the shop as well. I apologise if I'm missing something and it is a post modern masterpiece. I also apologies because it's a very brave thing to do to put a book up and I loved the premise but for me it's not working at the moment.

Tari wrote 576 days ago

This is electrifying. I can see even from the pitch that it is something that draws the reader in and not let go . The Prologue is beautiful and one I will print off and keep in my study.
Your preface and references to Mark as the unknown son is so moving. Even though you both may have had differences I am sure he will be proud of this book, this loving tribute from his father, a treasure to keep.

Albeit the introduction is lengthy it promises to be an absorbing book - exciting, poignant and beautiful.

I wish you every success with this. Backed with pleasure.

Best wishes,

Katy.xx
Phobic Dawn.

flnaturelover wrote 577 days ago

The Sacrificial Lamb can be good. However, the way it is, it is too long winded in my opinion. It seems like forever, before you hit upon a point. Too much unecessary information. Don't give up. You will get there.

C.S. Poulsen
THE INSIDERS mg/ya

healthpolicymaven wrote 578 days ago

HI, I read the first four chapters and the 10th and I think you take too long to draw the reader in, why not start with The Fulcrum? I like the Winnipeg reference as I grew up near there. That chapter shows more evolution in terms of creating atmosphere in the book. You reference you need to cut some from this book and I think do so at the front. The story of Pope John Paul is a mystery and he was only a pope for 33 days, so keep it lean. I don't think you need so much justification, just tell the story. Also, remember all good writing is about telling good stories, whether or not they are true, so a memoir is telling a story. Maybe less retentive detail and more gripping reality? Anyway, those are my suggestions.
Roberta

CarolinaAl wrote 579 days ago

Fresh. Insightful. Inspiring. Your brilliant inspirational story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters with spiritual depth. Crisp dialogue. Exquisite narrative. Vital writing. A life changing read. Backed.

Swisscheese wrote 580 days ago

To me this story tells us an important message about holding onto your faith. I also admire your bravery in writing it in a stream of conscience type manner, but I thought you could (as already suggested) combine the first three chapters.I also understand this is a book which must be studied and I personally admire that. Backed for it's message and brave format.

punkpaladin wrote 581 days ago

this sound very autobiographical and i'm wondering if this is all for a long-winded exposition purpose of if this is the general structure of your novel which would be unsettling. these are a lot of intimate details which allows us to get to know the character on a superficial level, but only at that level because there are few revealing details about his attitude and character. it sounds like youre writing a memoir for someone who cares about mundane details like the roads your character used for his milk runs. i apologize if these are authentic details of your own life, which if they are not it is impressive as to the extent that you expanded a fictional character's life to include random street names and full family bios. when i read a novel i like to escape to a more unique world, rather than this which sounds far too much like my own life, or any other catholic son of an immigrant's life in America. so you, or your main character marries a 17 yr old girl and then becomes a cop. at section 9 we finally get some semblance of an entertaining novel and you use rudimentary grammar and punctuation, who uses three question marks??? you have reverted here from what i thought was an aged man's outlook on the past, economically, socially, into a mundane detective mystery with lots of unnecessary exclamation points where you attempt to build suspense but i have no sympathy for this pedophilic character or his endeavors as a catholic policeman.

Noizchild wrote 581 days ago

You have some potential with this story. You have a strong hook with chapter four. One thing I would suggest is take the first three chapters and combine them into one. I feel like I digging for treasure in a sea of papers. Other than that, I would suggest that you work on it a little more. I feel that you're onto something.

Duncan Watt wrote 582 days ago

Hi Lorne ...

First: I am sorry but at this stage I find that I cannot back you. The reason, this really needs a lot of work. In your short pitch, the first word will put a lot of readers off, 'Masterfully'. By using this word others will put it down for it has already been decided by the author this book is better than anything else on the subject.

Second: With all the addresses it reads like a telephone directory and by the time I reached the end of the first real chapter (7) I lost the will to live. Although it is non-fiction, it does not need to read like a diary. You have dates and times, talking of typing skills, writing reports, out in patrol cars, but it is all listed: At such a time, I did this' later I did this'

Fiction or non-fiction the reader needs to find a reason for reading and you have not given one. I would suggest you take time off from promoting and spend a week reading your story, but as a reader not the author. Remove the first six chapters of explanatory notes they are not needed. Then cut everything mentioned above. On advice from people on here, I spent an entire weekend editing my story, up until five in the morning and re-wrote all 124,000 words. I cut a good 25-30% and found a much stronger novel underneath. Go back to basics. Blueboy gives some very sound advice.

I apologise for being so negative but if you are going to ask people to read you need to have the novel ready. I have been here since the first month and have seen too many books reach the desk on praise, only to be savaged by HC. Unfortunately publishers only ask one question these days: 'Is it profitable?' As it is written now, the answer would have to be 'no'. Sorry once again. Regards ... Duncan.

Roger Thurling wrote 583 days ago

There might be the basis of a good book here - unusual experiences can very often be made into an interesting and saleable book - but I'm sorry to say that a great deal of editorial re-organisation will be needed before an agent or a publisher is likely to be interested in this. Despite your attempts within the text to make clear the nature and course of this book, most readers will be left struggling to find out what's going on - what is important to your book, and what is not. There is a very steep hill ahead for you and your editor.
RT

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 583 days ago

I read some of this work previously. Excellent. Backed again. Chuck

KJKron wrote 584 days ago

First, I like the title and what the book promises. There is something about John Paul's brief term as Pope I find unsettling - hence the title? You also catch my attention - how could you have something to do with his election?

One thing I found rather frustrating is the first 6 chapters are basically intro, preface, et al. They could be all combined since they leave the reader frustrated as he or she tries to find the beginning. As the story starts, I found the snippets to be a good length and you have a little flair or style that keeps me engaged. It reads like a memior. Well, that's what it is. At times I think you could cut down what you've written - especially when I see the entire piece is 165,000 words.

Still, I could see myself getting into this story and enjoying it. I've already backed you and wish you well...

livloo wrote 586 days ago

Hi, I read through to chapter 11 in this but must admit I struggled to work out what you were trying to say. It seemed to read to me like a simple and honest memoir - nothing wrong with that - but I don't think from your pitch that that is what you were aiming for. Maybe it is me not understanding the concept fully. It is not from lack of religious understanding as I am a cradle Catholic .

Best of luck with this, I think it is that I am simply not your right audience!

Clare
A Policeman's Lot

blueboy wrote 586 days ago

For unknown reasons you messaged me saying that you had improved chapters twelve and thirteen of this work. I looked, and have a few comments. Take a deep breath, because this is going to sting:

You’ve not done your homework as diligently as you should have. As a result you’ve missed some important things.

1. A new speaker requires a new paragraph.

2. You’re far more verbose than required. For example, you use three words, “In the meantime,” when “meanwhile” will do. You say “attended and answered,” following a knock o the door, when the fact of answering it is inherent in the mention that someone knocked. I’d guess that you can remove close to ten percent of the prose with no change of meaning or voice, for more impact.

3. You have many unnecessary tags.

4. You stop the scene’s action to drop in things a reader doesn’t need to know, or that can be shown as needed and where needed. This kills all momentum by stopping the scene-clock.

5. You’re presenting the transcription of a verbal conversation you might have with a visitor, and expecting the reader to play you, and know how you would speak the words aloud, complete with tone, expression, and body language. That’s not possible without performance notes because the reader doesn’t know what a given like says till it’s been read. And then, it’s too late.
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The short version: You need to visit your local library and devour the section on fiction writing. It’s not a matter of your talent, or potential, it’s that as Mark Twain once said, “It ain’t what you don’t know that gets you into trouble. It’s what you know for sure that just ain’t so.”


Jay G. Is anal and full of shit.

first off: a new speaker does not "require" a new prargraph. anyone who has every read any ofo the classics knows that. read Tolkein, Hess, Nabokov, there are numerous examples from numerous writers, in which dialgoe and such can take place in the same prargraph especially if to do so increases the flow of the narrative.


second: thre is no requirement for how "verbous" someone should be. you can say what youi like as long as you say it beautifully, interestingly, fluidly, and in a way that carries the reader's attention. in short, if you are going to break a "so-called rule" make sure you break it well enough to be memorable.


third: ask him how he defines "unnecessary" tag. he did not support thias staement, but i'm sure whatever his reasoning is, its full of shitn as well.

fourth: ok, he's got you there. you must alawsy consider flow. never ruin flow top adda detail. and go sparingly on details that do not move you plot forward. he has a point here, but i stand by my opinion that he is an ass.




and fifth: due to his inability to convey his meaning adequately, thes line or so of this makes no sense. But i'm sure its full of shit.


blueboy

Bocri wrote 587 days ago

The Sacrificial Lamb is testament to faith and belief. In my opinion it is persuasive, by example, and logical in its arguments, or statements, and does not ostensibly seek to convince but rather to consolidate and strengthen existing beliefs. It does this by telling a story of a family; their individual histories, their interconnectivity and the narrator's police service, his bouts of depression and his eventual recovery & conversion to Catholicism. The conversion is the first step to his participation in the election of the Pope. Thoroughly engrossing, well told and quietly passionate. BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run.

Hudson wrote 588 days ago

Well Lorne, This is promising to be an extremely interesting and provocative story. It is an interesting presentation in that you are writing it as if it were a history book and giving every precise detail as you go along; every location and address meticulously recorded, even the amount of the monthly mortgage. I feel that this is essential to the story you are telling, more so as the story progresses than in the early stages but you are making the reader get used to the importance of detail because of what he is to read later on in the book.
It is well written and the characters are well drawn and we are content to let the story take us where it will.
I was happy to back the book on the strength of the prologue alone and everything I have read has merely strengthened that decision.
I wish you all the best with this. Hudson, (The Power of the Pegalore).

Strayer wrote 588 days ago

And now I want to know how things turned out. This is journey that you have told very well. I'm impressed.

Bill Carrigan wrote 589 days ago

Greetings Lorne, Thanks for your message about the changes in your manuscript. The ten chapters I've read strike me as uplifting in places, disturbing in others, but always authentic and well written. In fact, a remarkable achievement. At times it's difficult to find the borderline between religious experience and mental illness, but that attests to your faithfulness to the introspective reality. Apart from content, "Sacrificial Lamb" is a compelling, heartfelt memoir, which I'll enthusiastically back on its literary merit alone. Could I ask you, Lorne, to take a look at my novel, "The Doctor of Summitville"? a spiritual journey on another level. Best regards, Bill

Laura Freeman wrote 591 days ago

First of all, the writing quality is excellent.
Second, I found it refreshing to read something inspirational and uplifting, especially after some of the blasphemous filth I've seen lately.
Nice job. Backed.

Laura Freeman
Writers on the Storm

Lenore wrote 593 days ago

Forgive the cryptic notes. You asked for a review of the two chapters and I'm happy to give. The idea for this book is unique. My notes to you are designed to tighten a book that has promise. I would try to use fewer but stronger words and phrases to establish this personality. There's no need to keep saying the same thing more than once. Your readers will understand. Good luck. Best regards
Lenore
Surviving the Seaweed
Review of 5:
Much better. I'd still like to see more: lose personal, actually, happened with, instead of came about, lose of a series. lose completely, jump from non-fiction book to will substantiate, use truth instead of credibility.

Third graph, lose to that much of an extent. say I am using this next chapter to assure...

Third graph, start with It is my honor.

Review of 6:
Lose the exclamation point. Verb tense in first graph varies. Maybe you could lose the entire first paragraph?
Lose the dash before "but. Comma is all that is necessary. Lose the "tell you more" it's redundant. Lose "simple fact of the matter, too cliche.

drachat wrote 594 days ago

Hello,

I read through ch 7. It is a very well-thought out book. I do agree with many of the comments; especially since I, too, am writing non-fiction and have received many valuable suggestions on this site. The first is, my opinions are just that, my opinions and subjective. This is your book. However, to get to the heart of a reader one must learn from this and improve.

My suggestions, as given to me, are first, you use a lot of exclamation points, sometimes 3 together. I was told that is a big no-no. If you can't convey your emotion without it, then leave it out. They have their place, but minimally. Not a big deal, minor editing.

Also, and I was guilty of it myself, in non-fiction it's important to show more than tell. It's more interesting. Instead of saying, I ran after the man down the alley, you can say "With my heart beating in my chest, I lifted my legs as far as they would go and ran like my life depended on it towards the intruder." Not the best example but you know what I mean. It's more descriptive and puts the reader in the action with you. However, the hardest part is doing this in the non-action sections as well. My first edit after getting that suggestion was very time-consuming. Not easy.

Overall it's a good story and I have happily backed it.
Denise

Your suggestions on my story are highly welcomed. I, too, still need to work on it.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

If you are going to go way back to the birthing of children, you better make darned sure those birthings are essential to your story. Everybody was born. Unless there is something so significant about the birth (Is it a virgin birth?) that it compells telling, then leave it out. If you are going to leave it in, then tell the readers why you are including this. Don't expect them just to "trust you" to have a decent reason for this other than forcing people to read more words. Wordiness kills stories.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

Your short description reads, "Masterfully explores ..." Da-dah da-dah da-dah.

The readers will determine whether it masterfully explores. Since this is non-fiction, be sure to document. Doncumentation will go a lot further than bragging about how masterfully you explore the facts.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

Chapter 7, and at last I am actually into the story. I think. And now I am still looking for the drama. For the action. For the scene setting. For some semblance of a conflict. You know what, in my opinion, very few readers are going to have the patience to wait for you to get around to whatever it is you are -- hopefully -- planning to get around to.

You want my interest? Start with some kind of conflict. Start with visual imagery. Start with startlingly visual details that set the mood or create the atomosphere.

You are, after all, telling a story. Entertainment. Don't think "I will be coy and make the reader wait, and wait, and wait to know what I am up to. It simply won't work.

If you need a formula, try this: "Tell them what you are going to do, then do it, then tell them what you did." But don't forget this is entertainment. The moment it stops entertaining, your story is dead.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

Chapter 5 and still not into the story. This time it's an "about the author." That's what the "About Me" page is for?

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

Argh! I am in chapter four and still in Prefaces! The story -- I WANT TO READ THE STORY!

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

Too much stuff before I get to the story! And in CAP LOCKS SHOUTING AT ME!

EltopiaAuthor wrote 594 days ago

The font appears to be bold faced type. It's so black it hurts my eyes!

vessels wrote 595 days ago

"Precisely, you are but a well-delivered Word of God". I love that -- the definition of your son Mark's name and the impressive detail and witness included in your story, not to lose sight of the ties to your point in the Foresters. Your letter to Cardinal Flahiff in 1976 -- was it answered? Did God resolve the matter on the Court house steps? How do we go from there back to Pope John Paul 1? At times I felt like I was reading a Dickens novel and may have missed a connecting paragraph, but you tell your history well and leave me wanting to understand.
Katherine
of vessels

Angie S. wrote 596 days ago

I most enjoyed what I have read thus far. I must point out however, that 168,000 words seems like quite a lot...of course, this is just my opinion. I don't write memories so I'm not an expert in any sense. I do like your story and your writing style.

There a few punctuation errors (missing comma's mostly) and some sentence fragments (some I know are okay in this type of writing) but I would advise you to check anyway. Some of your paragraphs are also too long, break them up more.

I also noted that you did not start a new paragraph for each new person speaking. Anytime a new person begins to speak they should have their own separate paragraph. Another thing I might suggest, something I did and continually do to keep myself fresh and abreast to what is going on in the industry, I read books in my genre. I do this to see the style the author uses, the word choices, the layout and sometimes for the enjoyment of the story...LOL

Also, I've read that the use of semi-colons should be minimal because though you are excited about what you wrote the reader may not share that same feeling and my think it awkward if used too much.

I really did enjoy what I've read thus far and will back your story. I hope my advice helps.

Angie S.

Regina Tittel wrote 597 days ago

I've only read to the end of ch. 4 but am compelled to continue to the finish. However, I don't want to wait until I then to back this. May God bless you through what you've sacrificed.
Sincerely,
Regina Tittel
Abandoned Hearts

Robert Craven wrote 597 days ago

This is a compelling read, but might suggest sone minor tweaks with the layout in Chpts 9&10, I'd break the dialogue into seperate indented paragraphs & the same for the inward thoughts, it might make the text flow a little more freely.

backed

ROB

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klouholmes wrote 597 days ago

Hi L.D., Although the lead-up to the memoir caused me to expect more spiritual material right away, I found myself enjoying the details of the narrator's life in Winnipeg. It was really easy to get involved in the backtracking; the parts about the race track, the jobs, and the police work were colorful and you did a fine selection of detail, keeping a clipping pace. Once in, I'm bewildered at how the narrator will figure in a Pope's election. He's so down-to-earth! I'll have to dip in again. The material is interesting at once so I wonder if you need to power up rather than suggest at first. Well-written and easily shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

greeneyes1660 wrote 598 days ago

Lorne, After reading your book I truly hope you get the chance to read my Layers of the heart, I think you will understand why once you have had a look. I understand a great deal of what you have written, since I myself have experienced and witnessed one being filled all AT ONCE by the holy spirit. Though each of our experiences are unique, as are our bodies, though similar, the dna is unique to us; as is this amazing and indescribable experience. What they all share in common is that people try and label them in a human capacity which is impossible to do, as it is a spiritual encounter, and above the human comprehension as far as descriptive puposes goes.

I love the premise and the significance of this story, and I am truly elated that you acknowledged and followed your purpose.Although we may have ideas of what will come from our fulfillment, only God knows His divine plan, whether it be to reach a specific person who may develop a cure for cancer, or millions of those seeking the word and truth, only He knows for sure, and all we know, is that we have fulfilled our God given destiny.

As far as the story goes I would have liked more interaction with your relationshop with your immediate family. You gave glimpses at times of the difficulties your wife had in embracing your journey at times, but we didn't get to experience it at all, or your relationship with your children, and since it was the birth of Mark that awakened the revalation I would have loved to encounter your early relationship with him and what took place.

I back this book and I know that it will go to the heights and reach all the people God intended it to. Much success Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

chuckgnx wrote 599 days ago

Perhaps a "true imaginative story of religious fascination," but actually quite well written, and cleverly paced so that one chapter leads readers inevitably to the next; Puzzling though it may be, it holds your attention.
Backed.

chuck -- Marshall Warren -- "Sunrise, Sunset"
My novel is based on a true story of Politics, Sex, Mother Earth and Money -- 42 chapts. shown here

happypetronella wrote 599 days ago

I'm backing this because of the idea of it, and also because I enjoyed the being a policeman parts a whole lot.

Linda Lou wrote 602 days ago

THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB-LD Glowicki
hullo LD. I will say that this is a well written account of experiences related to the Catholic religion. Already shelved and backed.
Please take a look at my book if you have not and thanks for that.
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

Dagura van Acra wrote 602 days ago

This is not what I would usually read, but it looks good. I would say that the pitch being typed all in capitals put me off somewhat.

Backed,
Dagura
'Rising Seas'

Vanessa Darnleigh wrote 602 days ago

Having arrived at this point I believe it is time for you to post more on the site...after all, you have taken the reader this far on the strength of your words alone...now let the truth be told as you have promised and don't stretch your readers' credibility too far!
Best wishes
Stewart

Sheila Belshaw wrote 602 days ago

THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB

Lorne,

I am bowled over by the freshness of this writing. It is utterly unique. Scholarly, insightful, brave, ground-breaking, intriguing -- there are not enough words to describe what an impact this had on my. I just wish you would hurry up and finish it so that we can all see it in the bookshops where it belongs.

Good luck, and best wishes,

Sheila Mary Taylor (Pinpoint)

Jim Darcy wrote 602 days ago

Section 9. Books like this are difficult to quantify as they are so individual. All I can say is that the mixture of recollection, scripture and comment make for an interesting if, in places, perplexing read.

grantdavid wrote 602 days ago

Very voluble, at times garrulous, Lorne, but I appreciate your sheer fervour, and think I see where you're heading. If you could only clear the way, I'd certainly back the book. I'll put it on my WL and wait and see. Best wishes!
David Grant,
"Pompey Chimes"

grantdavid wrote 602 days ago

Very voluble - at times garrulous- but I'm still impressed and think I see where you're heading, Lorne. I would certainly back the book for its earnestness, fervour, and other virtues. I'll wait to see if you can clear the way through. Best wishes!
David Grant
"Pompey Chimes"


Tom Bye wrote 603 days ago

HELLO D GLOWICKI ' THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB'

I WAS DRAWN IN BY YOU POWERFUL COVER and the pitch , i like bookd that have christian content
i have just read chapter 13 and 14 and will read more because i concur with one of the comments that it is inspirational and meaningful to say; the least. interesting and intriguing in it's own way
it is also well wriltten and researched
b acked with pleasure and deserves to the top
backed with pleasure
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'

GLO-WICK wrote 603 days ago

I've inserted the TABLE OF CONTENTS of THE SACRIFICIAL LAMB here for those who wish to see the structure and full scope of my work. As a note, the majority of the sub-headings are very short and snappy snippets.
Chapter 1:
Historical Importance; Genesis (1); Young Love (2); Love and Labour (3); Marriage (4); Homes and Births (5); Father's Background and Various Jobs (6); The Police Force (7); Caught In The Act (8); Hang On? (9); The Police Call Box (10); The Chase (11).
Chapter 2::
The North-End (12); My Old Home Grounds (13); Overdose (14); Main Street and The Old Market Place (15); Danny (16); Stella Park (17); The Red River (18); Pritchard Pool (19); Drunk? (20); Aberdeen School (21); Pets (22); Compound Fracture (23); Car Accident (24); Selkirk Avenue (25); Mother's Background (26); Residences and Births (27); What's In A Name? (28); The Dominion Café (29); My Youthful Domain (30); The Mission (31).
Chapter 3:
Fire and Ice (32); The Christmas Crunch (33); The Police Report (34); The Backlash (35); The Chain of Command (36); Mystical Celebration (37).
Chapter 4::
Numbers (38); Final Breaking Point (39); Diagnosis (40); Medical Treatment (41); The Imitation of Christ (42); The Discharge (43); Suicide? (44); Slight's End (45); The Understatement (46); Vocational Setback (47); Conversion To Roman Catholicism (48); The Insignia (49); The Revelation (50); My Son's Name and Birth (51); The Burning Bridge (52); A Consuming Fire (53); The Pope (54); Affirmation (55); Potential (56); Spiritual Development? (57); The Answer Is Blowin' In The Wind (58); Faith (59); Harbinger (60).
Chapter 5:
Release of Fear (61); The Peak Experience (62); Shattered (63); The Broken Limb (64); Spiritual Evaluations (65); A Big Difference (66); Residual Effects (67); The Pyramid of The West (68); Folklorama (69); Moving The Rock Gibraltar (70); The Prince and The Pauper (71.)
Chapter 6:
The I.O.F. (72); "Doc" Meader (73); Mobile Office Camper (74); The Last Move (75); The Halloween Report (76); Transcendental Meditation (77); The Apology April Fools' Day (78).
Chapter 7:
The TM Retreat (79); The Other Woman (80); The Torrid Times (81); Divorce (82); Reflections (83).
Chapter 8
The Other Man (84); Dynomite (85); The Other Woman (86); Negative Effects (87); All Expenses Paid (88); Investigations (89); Criminal Activity (90); Absolutely No Doubt (91); The Custody Report (92); The Custody Hearing (93); A Higher Power (94).
Chapter 9:
Appeal? (95); Unrequited Love (96); Spirit-Guides? (97); Desperation (98); Avalanche Upon Avalanche (99); Storm Upon Storm (100); Physical Effects (101); The Great White Throne (102); Stigmata (103); The Supernatural (104); The Baptism In The Holy Spirit (105); The Baptism of Suffering (106); The Evolution of The Answer (107); A Litany of Questions (108).
Chapter 10:
The Child Psychiatrist (109); Spiritual Opposition To The Holy Eucharist (110); A Psychiatric Debate (111); The Hospital Discharge Summary (112).
Chapter 11:
Rebuttal (113); The Nadir Bed (114); The Psychiatric Interview (115).
Chapter 12:
More Money (116); Police Correspondence (117); Some Thoughts to Think About (118); Another Sworn Affidavit (119); Doctor, Doctor, Where Is The Doctor? (120); The Resurrection of a Christmas Past (121); Spiritual Warfare? (122); A Breath of Relief (123).
Chapter 13:
The Winds of Change (124); The Fulcrum (125); The Charismatic Prayer Meeting (126); The Moment of Truth Has Come (127 A); The Ministry of Meditation (127 B); The Prophetic Dream 127 C); A Dream Fulfilled (128); The Instant Conclave (129); Sudden Death (130); The Polish Pope (131); The End of The Schismatic Archbishop (132); Displacement of TM. (133).
Chapter 14:
The End of the Contempt of Court (134); A Good Samaritan (135); Let Him Be Whatever He May Be (136), More Jobs (137).
Chapter 15:
A Pope Comes To Canada (138); Attempts At Reconciliation (139); Parental Alienation (140); The Crisis of Faith (141); Irene's Fate (142); Reconciliation Is Still Needed (143); It Is Finished (144);The Final Answer (145).
End Notes.

I'm also making A COMMENT ON AN EARLIER COMMENT:
Dear Sherry, You say, “Tell me why it matters that you in particular had a part in electing a pope."
Well, Sherry, I guess where I'm coming from this kind of thing just doesn't happen every day – if ever (unless I've been missing something). You go on to ask, Is your story one of overcoming hardship? Is it a historical account of the Pope before he became Pope? Who is the story about - you or him?”
All those are very good questions. And for any discussion group, I'll even throw in another one that you wouldn't want to miss, and that is: "Who really is The Sacrificial Lamb in this story?" Unfortunately, to answer that question, if it ever can be conclusively known, my book must be presented in its entirety, and then all questions will be answered. It also may be helpful to read the Preface in Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 for a better understanding of this book. Thanks sincerely, Lorne.

LittleDevil wrote 603 days ago

I'd skip the first thirteen chapters and just get on with the book if I were you. Sorry, I'm probably not your target audience.
Best of luck
Sue

Rusty Bernard wrote 603 days ago

Backed with pleasure!!!

RB

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