Vengeance or Justice (You decide)

Wow, I think most of would struggle with the grandfathers descission here. The outcome was good a child alive it was a bit bloodthirsty in places and I was not convinced by the reacxtions of the woman hostage. Dont give up on it you have some good stuff here a s you say its unedited but still a read that hooks you in.
Amelia
A Date in the Diary

Hi Peter.
I emailed you the other day to say I would read this. I think you have a very powerful story and although a killer you can empathise with the Grandfather for what he went through and how guilty he feels. You cxange perspective a couple of times but knothing that isnt easily sorted. The one thing that did puzzle me was where was he and the woman sitting in the car was it near the killing or did he drive somewhere.
Its quite gruesom in places but I think that under the circumstances its acceptable. The story is powerful as is the motivation a quick edit could sort out the odd problem.
I wish you luck with it.
Sue - KNowing Liam riley & Grace

Vengeance or Justice.

The storyline is good and the characters interesting. You have observed life from close up, and can record a video scene. You have taken notes, but those are personal notes. You now need to submit to a critical audience. Although you may pay a proof reader, in doing so you will miss out on the most important training available to a writer: to rewrite his draft. Your draft is only ready to be proof read when you have nothing more to change.

On my watchlist.

Azam Gill
“Blasphemy!”

Dear Pete, I love that you put me right there with you in your story. :) Your pitch set the scene. :) Tight dialogue & paragraphs moved your story right along. :) I'd hate to be Susan, let alone your hero (if he was a hero for vengence?). What an intriguing read, more even so, as it went along. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

Dear Pete
I have started to read your writing and must say that it is compelling. Already you have established your animated characters in my head, ( they are not leaving soon) and i feel strongly to back your book now. I feel sure you
feel like me that it is your baby and you so want to see it succeed. I do wish you all the best in rising and also
getting this book of your published. ( I wish I had half the talent some of you have on this site)

Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also
The VERY best of luck to you
BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Denise
The Letter

I know it's still not right and I am trying to get help with puntuation, spelling and the whole setting out of the story.
Please bare with me.

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