Wombat Sushi

I am in love with this. It's my favourite genre and i'm also part japanese so this has had me hooked for the last ten minutes. And now I feel like crying because there's no more to read. Anxiously awaiting the rest so please please upload! Rated and watch listed because your witty imagery just cracks me up. Addictive - kind of like honey roast peanuts. Great job!

Alex

I had to reback this book. Joy Taylor

HI Joy,
Thanks for trying to back me, but I don't think it has worked as I am not on your shelf.
Apparently there are problems with cookies or something. It's all a bit techie for me. The only cookies I understand have chocolate in them...
Regards,
Rhonda Louise
Wombat Sushi

I had to reback this book. Joy Taylor

Hi
I've been lurking for a while and this is the first book I have backed! The title drew me in, and the tone of your blurb sounded witty. I could tell your writing would have pace, the dialogue is funny and a great start. Look forward to reading some more!

Jo

Started out laughing!

Elizabeth Love
(Pouring the Cup)

Liked this. Great flow. Loved the description of the "Darnsar". You seem to know you subject and you have a great way of bringing it to life. Great writing. Backed with pleasure. If you have time, please have a look at my little number Hotel Carousel.

Good luck to you.

Sara

Smart, witty, funny, engaging, and completely enjoyable, with colorful, believable characters (mostly due to Rhonda Louise’s finesse with writing dialogue.)
Backed with pleasure…
Rodney Jones
(The Father)

I loved the title, and I loved what I read right up to 'this is not a good start' and indeed it was not, except for the reader. Best. Backed

I loved the wicked sense of humour that is the bed rock of this, it has produced something that is funny, sharp and completely entertaining.
Having said that, sense of humour alone can't support a whole book, but here it doesn't have to because there is the edition of someone with a ear for dialogue, an eye for character and a great readable writing style.
I found the dancing background fascinating, confirming what I have long suspected, its about as glamourous as digging ditches, ie hard physical work in difficult conditions, the only difference is ditch diggers to it in sensible clothes and shoes.
I found I was very disappointed when this ended just as they arrived in Japan, I think the best of this book is still to come. In the meantime, backed with pleasure.

I enjoyed the first two chapters over a lovely plate of Chinese food, and I am proud of myself for not choking. I'll back it tonight :)

Wendy
January Black

I am really enjoying this so far. Would love to know what happens next. I think you have got great comic timing and this made me laugh out loud in places (usually Darryl or his mum!). I think the use of first person works really well - in fact it's what drew me in because the lack of self-confidence at the beginning is something we can all relate to! Overall I think your characters are well-defined and great that they each have their own voice, and distinct personalities have been created in a relatively short time for what is actually quite a lot of characters, in comparison to the first 3 chapters of many books. If you see what I mean!

Good luck with the rest of it.

Delightful read. I almost always right in first person, present tense. Happy to back this. I have a few constructive criticisms you may or may not want to consider.

1. Change 'so I've got to ask myself one question' to 'So I ask myself one question' (removes the passive)
2.Consider changing 'Carly is sweet and friendly and reminds me of a Saint-Bernard' to 'Carly is sweet. She reminds me of a Saint Bernard'. (gets rid of the 'ands' and minimizes the descriptives).
3. In chapter 2, I would consider removing the sentence 'Unfortunately for Annabella, she is about to be thwarted on all accounts.' for two reasons. One, you are righting in present tense so you MC can't foresee the thwarting. and Two, don't give that away to the reader. Just let your reader see it happen instead.
4. Lastly, I'd change 'Annabella looks like she has swallowed a penknife' to 'Annabella looks like she just swallowed a penknife' to get rid of the 'has'.

Cheers and good luck with your writing,
Jennifer - A MATTER OF CONSCIENCE-

really good book, the name pulled me in and i immediately took an interest in the narrative. though, only a little though i would have preferred it written in the past tensem, but that's just me. backed with pleasure, hoping you can check out this book THE SEVEN PIECE STONE, backing would be appreciated, thanks.

Wombat Susi is a brilliant name for this book and now that we are all hooked and they have arrived in Japan, we need to have more to read. You tempt us with a mere three chapters that’s unfair. Your ensemble of characters is well drawn, there is enough to give us diversity. This is great chick lit I hope it does well.

Backed with pleasure Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley – Please spend a moment to take a look

I really like this. I don't find a lot of comedies that are actually funny or truly smart. This bit was one of my favorites: "I get points because I am reasonably intelligent, but I lose them because the smartest thing about me is my mouth. Add ten points for being kind to strangers, lose ten points for being kind of strange."

Brilliant!

Anne
Closeted Courage

The title alone drew us in! This totally hilarious! We are happy to “BACK” your work. Best Wishes.
CC Brown
Dark Side

Lots of fun and very entertaining.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

This is a lot of fun. I enjoyed the read- you paint a vivid picture. The only thing- at the very beginning, is the advert supposed to say "experienced dancers wanted, no experience necessary?" If that is purposeful, it does fit the surreal tone of the story, so I think it's OK to leave in. I loved the portuguese 'que'!! Backed.

Hi Giuletta,
Yeah it is supposed to say that.
It's supposed to alert the reader that things may not actually be as they appear to be to the narrator Zoey, who initially thinks the production will be very glamorous and that she will not be good enough for it.
Thanks for the feedback - much appreciated.
Kind regards
Rhonda Louise
(Wombat Sushi)

This is a lot of fun. I enjoyed the read- you paint a vivid picture. The only thing- at the very beginning, is the advert supposed to say "experienced dancers wanted, no experience necessary?" If that is purposeful, it does fit the surreal tone of the story, so I think it's OK to leave in. I loved the portuguese 'que'!! Backed.

Lovely, giggly read, I can see this hitting the chick lit market right in the centre - you've got the perfect comedic voice and you've also managed to come up with a unique premise .. well done ! Backed with pleasure
Diane
Good Blood

Very funny. Love the Darnsar ref. Backed with pleasure. Usually it's spelled Aussie, not Ozzie, btw

HI Zenup,
Thanks for the tip.
Rgds,
Rhonda Louise
(Wombat Sushi)

This book is hilarious! You have a sense of humor I can really appreciate. The title and pitch of your book caught my attention. Your writing held it. I've only read the first chapter so far, but this definitely needs to go on my picks, and I'll be reading further.

Very funny. Love the Darnsar ref. Backed with pleasure. Usually it's spelled Aussie, not Ozzie, btw

First of all, it's a killier title...well, at least for the Wombat. This is just a good read! It's well written and funny. You also write in a way that the story just clips along and flows so well.

Lockjaw

Many thanks for the positive feedback Lockjaw - glad you liked it.
Rgds,
Rhonda Louise
(Wombat Sushi)

Great stuff and clearly straight from your heart , this reverberates with poignancy and reveals so much about the world you portray. Superb dialogue and clever self deprecation which resounds in all creative types. Backed with pleasure.

Best wishes

Richard

Many thanks Richard you are too kind.
Rgds,
Rhonda Louise
(Wombat Sushi)

Great stuff and clearly straight from your heart , this reverberates with poignancy and reveals so much about the world you portray. Superb dialogue and clever self deprecation which resounds in all creative types. Backed with pleasure.

Best wishes

Richard

Ingenous. Riveting. A superb comedic tale. Real characters. Well-drawn dialogue. Vivid narrative. Unique storyline. Spot on humor. Astute writing. An infectous read. Backed.

First of all, it's a killier title...well, at least for the Wombat. This is just a good read! It's well written and funny. You also write in a way that the story just clips along and flows so well.

Lockjaw

Well I’m glad I’m not a dancer! This could be a journalistic exposé of a dancer’s working life if it wasn’t so brilliantly funny. It has perfect comic timing and clever one liners: “Designer labels discreetly drawing attention to themselves,” and “Maybe their phones take notes.” Magic, I’ve thoroughly enjoyed it so far, I’m sure I won’t be alone.

Joy Taylor

Delightful literary fiction

backed
THE MIND SETTER
I hope you will consider mine

Great title - it attracted my attention and I wasn't dissapointed. Great, train of thought writing style, kept my interest. I think this will do well. Backed. Clare

This is actually quite funny! I am sorry if I envisage it all from a Kylie Minogue look-alike point of view but she is the only female Australian I know who fits the role. (Nicole Kidman doesn't work)
Humourous, touching and excruciating in places but, darhling, so addictive. :)

Rhonda, Zoey is a very likeable character - her doubts and self-depecrating humor are great ingredients for a successful character. A lot of fun so far. Backed. CW (To Save the Sun)

Great Pitch

what more can i say, sounds great :)

matt

Dear Rhonda

intriguing pitch and the ingredients necessary for a feast of fun are falling into place nicely. Love the way you start on the edge of the action and show an important aspect of Zoeys character. You are carefully crafting a wonderful troupe of comedy characters here and your insider knowledgeof the reality of life amongst the underbelly of showbusiness energises the action. Feel we should get to know more about the MC soon, she seems to be a passive observer of the action mostly so far. Cant wait for themall to get to japan and for you to plumb the comedy potential of the culture clash there.Really good stuff and you have an original and appealing style.

regards

Brian

hI RHONA ' WOMBAT SUSHI'

YOUR writing style is effortless and your book is so funny and full of humour, enjoyed what i have read.
its so crisp ;and up to the miunte it well do very well
backed with pleasure
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'
this is the second comment i have made, however the first got lost when i presse save sorry
read mine if you have time thanks

You have written a very interesting, whitty, funny and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Zoey. I also really like your use of the first person narrative voice as this allows you to explore all of her thoughts and emmotions. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

A faux- exotic and amusing story nicely packaged. Zoey is a good narrator--her internal demons and clever turns of phrase make the action fly by, and you give her a fine cast of characters to turn her wit loose on. Backed.
Niobrara Kardnova (Family Irregulars)

best title ever, great story, this will go far

Pamela Frost
HOUSES OF CARDS

WOMBAT SUSHI
This is a fun read - lots to captivate the reader - good dialogue and interaction between the excellent characters. Good fast pace and well written. What more can you ask?
Faith
The Assassins Village

I love this, the the conversations with paranoia remind of those cartoons with the devil on one shoulder and an angel on the other. Plenty of 'Laugh out loud' moments and all in all a very entertaining read, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Clever, fast paced, great characters, each is unforgettable by your quirky descriptions. Your story promises a unique story line. I think Wombat Sushi could be very popular with a broad audience. Best of luck with this.
Caroline
K C Hart
Summer Rose

The words skip across the page with far more talent than the hapless dancers. Since joining this site I've read far more chick lit. than I thought I ever would but this is one of the few that made me laugh out loud at the images you've created.
Backed
Robert Davidson
THE TUZLA RUN

Hi Rhonda, Superb. I'm a fan. i made a few notes but I've no quibbles with this.
If I'd seen that ad in the Herald, I've have applied myself!

Your knickers up Zoey's anxiously clenched bottom -- a lovely image (I laughed aloud).

The conversation with 'paranoia' is a familiar one, but shows us your MC's angst and lack of confidence. As we always support the underdog, she's winning our hearts already, so this is good writing. She chickens out, rethinks, considers being a lost Portuguese tourist(!) and finally commits.

The Telly-Tubby Fuhrer of a choreographer is brilliantly depicted -- seriously scary.

Phobe and Felicity -- the terrible Geordie twins -- Darnsers, Darryl with a garage on his head -- Mum --the toilet paper contract -- brilliant.

This is the funniest thing I've read in a while.

Good luck, backed with pleasure.
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Great fun, entertaining and engaging. Happy to back

Dear Rhonda

I would buy it for myself for sure. well crafted, and soooo real to me...that is due to your writing skills. such talent and ability with words to create quite the animated movie in my head
CONGRATS I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also
The VERY best of luck to you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Denise
The Letter

"Actually she is the size of a garage" sets the scene of this comedy of errors very well. I love the -out-of-the-frying-pan-and-into-the-fire feel to this. Just go to Japan without knowing what will come. Australian ladies recruited to work in Japan as dancers. Three months of work in a hotspring resort in Sendai. Dancers? Uh-huh, the imagination flies. "Don't do anything stupid," are excellent final last words. I'm enjoying this and will read more if you upload a couple more chapters. Backed for now.

This is abslutely wonderful. What a great wit you have. Loved the pitch - who wouldn't? Luckily I am not allergic to nuts. This deserves to climb the charts to number one. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

You made me laugh. Wonderful storyline.
Good job and happy to back your book.
Bamboo Promise

Dear Rhonda, I love your delightful story & can't believe the ending. :) What a wonderful write! :) Your pitch prepared me for your fun story & I really liked it. :) Tight dialogue & paragraphs moved it right along. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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