The Last Nephilum

William Guy, in my opinion, is one great storyteller in the first chapter. Hey religious folk, I challenge you to read the f irst chapter and see if you agree.

IMO the second chapter bogs down a little with too much telling and extended explanations of relationships, until the part where the last Nephalim goes on his extended hunting trip. Then it gets exciting for a bt, but again, the discussions of the extended hunting trip would benefit from more "showing" of direct actions rather than re-telling them from the point of view of the grandfather. The story might also benefit from some ruthless cutting. Less is more: Stay with the action and let the concrete details speak for themselves. The device of having the granddad talk about the past will only carry you so far.

OK, a tremendous start, a little slow in the middle, but because you pulled it off in the first chapter I think you can do that again ... and again, all the way through. A lot of the details are biblical but I can't remember them anyway. Remember the KISS principle: Keep it Simple for the Stupid!

Nephilm have been such an intriguing race of what appear to be super-humans as ancient texts indicate. Just the thought of such beings have always captivated me, causing my imagination to run wild as a boy and even still today as an adult. How fun to read a historical-fiction on these ancient beings that once existed on Earth. Guy's meticulous detail reminds me of Clancy's style of writing though a tad mechanical in cadence. THE LAST NEPHILUM will inspire you to re-read the biblical account, blessing you all over again with God's timeless Word. Well done Dr. Guy.

THE LAST NEPHILUM: I read some of this book a few months ago and backed it. This evening I came back to revisit it and, believe you me, I found it as intriquing and fascinating as ever. The author seems to have an in-depth, first hand acquaintance with (what we Christians call) the "Old Testament," and he has the creativity to know what to do with that knowledge in order to make a fascinating read. I recomment this book. FEL

The Last Nephilum.

Intriguing and catchy premise that seeks to synthesize received truth through illustration. A courageous and bold venture, accomplished by uwavering narrational authority that mixes fact, fiction belief and perception into a mapped shawl.

Short, sharp sentences that do not waffle – businesslike prose

Some nits to be tidied up, like “didn’t they not”, leftovers from the virtue of rewriting.

The prologue has captured the first person narrative of the nineteenth century reflector and delicately inserted it into the flow of contemporary narration.

Backed.

Azam Gill
“Blasphemy!”

Thank you for your kind review of my book! Your eloquence is impressive! I will check out Blasphemy right now.

Reading, enjoying, learning. Very exciting and most original. Backed.
Tom Balderston
The Wonder of Terra

The Last Nephilum.

Intriguing and catchy premise that seeks to synthesize received truth through illustration. A courageous and bold venture, accomplished by uwavering narrational authority that mixes fact, fiction belief and perception into a mapped shawl.

Short, sharp sentences that do not waffle – businesslike prose

Some nits to be tidied up, like “didn’t they not”, leftovers from the virtue of rewriting.

The prologue has captured the first person narrative of the nineteenth century reflector and delicately inserted it into the flow of contemporary narration.

Backed.

Azam Gill
“Blasphemy!”

I am fascinated by this book, and I will read more.

-Chantelle.
'GarnetCore'

Simply, a nice journey. Good read! Backed.

blessings
jim
jack & charmian london

Wow! I am hooked. My sons occasionally have talked about the Nephilim and the various theories about them. I am looking forward to reading more. I am happily backing your book.
Treega,
Mary Magdalene; My Story.

When using ellipses ( ... ), only use three dots. Using two or four dots is unusual and will pull the reader out of your story while they try to determine what you mean to imply with the unusual number of dots. You don't want that to happen. Other than that, this is a gripping historical fantasy. Smart. Fresh. Bold. You have a talent for description and you use it masterfully here. Your dialogue is crisp. Your polished narrative has wonderful literary undertones and well as worldly wisdom. Your plot pulsates with drama. An exceptional read. Backed.

I've only browsed through some of your book and read over the synopsis. Just one minor point on your title and the Genesis themes you are drawing. The English spelling/pronunciation of the offspring of the angels and women in Gen 6:4 is "Nephilim" (with an "i" not a "u"); this is how the Hebrew is vocalized. Not sure if this matters to you or not.

I am working on a fiction/fantasy novel that draws on this same starting point. I haven't gone live with it yet on this site, but keep an eye out for it. I would value your feedback since we are both building stories off of this fascinating and perplexing verse in Genesis.

A. B. Perrin ("Morning and Evening in Atlas")

Chapter 1. OMG. This is about as fascinating as any novel I have ever read. Absolutely wild. A master story teller. He takes the readers' doubts upon himself and keeps us engaged. I was almost holding my breath to see what happened next.

Anyone who has ever pondered the Nephalim is bound to be attracted to this, whether to love it or to hate it I cannot say. But is is so engaging.

Funny thing, lately I have often found myself thinking about the fact that moderns do not have the same idea of angels at all as what peoiple held in the days of the old and new testaments. We tend to think of angels as cuddly little girls with wings, but in the scriptures those who saw angels inevitably were so frightened as to pass out on the spot, to faint with fear. These beings must have been something to look at, you reckon?

Well, just so with these other creatures, the Eldil, that William Guy describes. Ugly, terrifying, sometimes.

Anyway, just a fantastic story, I can't wait to read on. Meanwhile, backing this one for sure.

FEL

Thank you for you supportive and kind comments AND for the correction! I was quite encouraged and I will take a look at Ethiopia today!

Chapter 1. OMG. This is about as fascinating as any novel I have ever read. Absolutely wild. A master story teller. He takes the readers' doubts upon himself and keeps us engaged. I was almost holding my breath to see what happened next.

Anyone who has ever pondered the Nephalim is bound to be attracted to this, whether to love it or to hate it I cannot say. But is is so engaging.

Funny thing, lately I have often found myself thinking about the fact that moderns do not have the same idea of angels at all as what peoiple held in the days of the old and new testaments. We tend to think of angels as cuddly little girls with wings, but in the scriptures those who saw angels inevitably were so frightened as to pass out on the spot, to faint with fear. These beings must have been something to look at, you reckon?

Well, just so with these other creatures, the Eldil, that William Guy describes. Ugly, terrifying, sometimes.

Anyway, just a fantastic story, I can't wait to read on. Meanwhile, backing this one for sure.

FEL

Thank you for you supportive and kind comments AND for the correction! I was quite encouraged and I will take a look at Ethiopia today!

Chapter 1. OMG. This is about as fascinating as any novel I have ever read. Absolutely wild. A master story teller. He takes the readers' doubts upon himself and keeps us engaged. I was almost holding my breath to see what happened next.

Anyone who has ever pondered the Nephalim is bound to be attracted to this, whether to love it or to hate it I cannot say. But is is so engaging.

Funny thing, lately I have often found myself thinking about the fact that moderns do not have the same idea of angels at all as what peoiple held in the days of the old and new testaments. We tend to think of angels as cuddly little girls with wings, but in the scriptures those who saw angels inevitably were so frightened as to pass out on the spot, to faint with fear. These beings must have been something to look at, you reckon?

Well, just so with these other creatures, the Eldil, that William Guy describes. Ugly, terrifying, sometimes.

Anyway, just a fantastic story, I can't wait to read on. Meanwhile, backing this one for sure.

FEL

You motioned for him to "set" on the couch. You may have meant to "sit" on the couch.
FEL

This is a fascinating book. You are a master craftsman indeed. I can see a great deal of research was necessary before putting pen to paper ( or fingers to keyboard). It is a very intelligent work, thought provoking and inspiring. It deserves to climb up through the ranks to the editor's desk, and they would be mad not to publish it. Backed with pleasure. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

You have made an incredibly professional job of this book. It is just the type of thought-provoking work enjoyed by many. Even if the reader does not accept the accuracy of the 'facts' presented or is not convinced by the summary he can certainly enjoy the ride. This is one of the best of its genre and I wish you every success. Patrick Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Dear William Guy,

I don’t understand the ways of the world and don’t understand the publishing industry. Yes, I know it’s a business. Yes, I know agents look for books that will sell millions of copies, but what I really don’t understand is why are there so many mediocre books published and on library shelves and in book stores, and what seems to me to be a tremendous book The Last Nephilum, why isn’t this out there? Yours is an outstanding story and I wish you the best with it.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School
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You're the best!!! What is CBGB?

I became interest in the story by reading you pitch. Then, I also read the prologue and next chapter. Interesting and delivered in a strong voice.
The narration (a little long in places) does a good job at placing the reader in the scene. A good blend of “show” and “tell” makes it an enjoyable read. Your dialogue is almost credible (a little editing should make it even more realistic). Watch how you ID the speakers…sometimes you give too much unnecessary detail.
Overall a good job and I’m backing it.
Good luck.
Dan
PS. Could you pls look at mine?

I will indeed look at yours. I greatly appreciated your criticism. You have good insight as an author. I agree with your assessment and as I edit this thing I will keep what you have said in mind.
Thanks!

Bill

Dear William Guy,

I don’t understand the ways of the world and don’t understand the publishing industry. Yes, I know it’s a business. Yes, I know agents look for books that will sell millions of copies, but what I really don’t understand is why are there so many mediocre books published and on library shelves and in book stores, and what seems to me to be a tremendous book The Last Nephilum, why isn’t this out there? Yours is an outstanding story and I wish you the best with it.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Thank you for your exceedingly kind and generous comments! You have made my day!!!!!

Your basic premise is incorrect. Ham was not righteous, indeed it was Noah who allowed his nakedness to be seen (Genesis 9:21) which is a failure of 'God's deputy authority' and it was Ham who told his brothers outside of their father Noah's nakedness (9:22) and it was Shem and Japheth who took a garment and covered Noah's nakedness, walking backward so they did not see their father's nakedness that brought blessing on Japheth and Shem (9:25-27), but Ham--he was cursed (Genesis 9:25), (Deuteronomy 27:16) and so was Ham's line after him, so he was not righteous before God, nor Cush, nor Nimrod, the first human government.
If it's not in the Holy Bible, I would submit nothing catastrophic happened after the flood--God confounded the people's language following Nimrod's tower of Babel--the result is nation after nation turning away from God through various forms of human government and an ache for comprehension they cannot understand because they have turned from God to 'isms' and 'eists'--searching further into darkness and any attempt to explain it otherwise only serves to cast doubt on the truth of God's word, and is a marker--indicia, of Satan's work in turning people away from God by making them question His truth, throughout the Bible, and our lives.

Sin was never eradicated by the flood--it's in our flesh, so although Noah and his sons Shem and Japheth were righteous before God, even they were not sinless--it was Ham who gave way to his sinful nature.

God bless you,

Katherine
of vessels

You write beautifully not to mention scholarly. This is refined, provative look at events in history. I applaud you

A fantastic read.

best

THE MIND SETTER

Dear William Guy,

I don’t understand the ways of the world and don’t understand the publishing industry. Yes, I know it’s a business. Yes, I know agents look for books that will sell millions of copies, but what I really don’t understand is why are there so many mediocre books published and on library shelves and in book stores, and what seems to me to be a tremendous book The Last Nephilum, why isn’t this out there? Yours is an outstanding story and I wish you the best with it.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

William,
The Last Nephilum is a unique and compelling story. I love this type of historical fiction which takes the reader back to Biblical times. Backed with enthusiasm.

Dear William
your prologue is genius. your writing compelling, skill yes, talent yes. and you kept me stuck to it till the end.
You have also given a good account of some of the bible that could well be lost to many, those that bypass. CONGRATS on this .
BACKED FOR SURE BY ME
Denise
The Letter

If you can find time to comment and back my book I would be so happy, if not that is OK also
The very best with your book

Great prelude to a potentially exciting story. How little we know about the 'Nephilim' (the spelling I always used and as in the NIV Bible). Cain's associations were Nephilim. But you are right as only the descendents of Noah would remain to propagate the pagan world after the flood. God wanted to rid the world of the pagans. Is polytheism the work of man, making man god, and many men, many gods. The idols that God disliked were many and have been present in the hearts of the sinful man historically. Polytheism has always been. I will read.
Tom Balderston
The Wonder of Terra

The prologue intrigues and casts a huge hook, then chapter one sets the scene well and by this time the reader is engaged. The end of chapter one is good as well as I wanted to continue to find out what sort of a person was the father of Persus. This is an interesting book and I wish it was not virtual so it would be easier to read more. I like the title, content and cover and think this has potential as it is also very different.

Backed,

Lisa

You have written a very interesting and unique biblical storyline, which I do like, and created a rich cast of characters. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

I became interest in the story by reading you pitch. Then, I also read the prologue and next chapter. Interesting and delivered in a strong voice.
The narration (a little long in places) does a good job at placing the reader in the scene. A good blend of “show” and “tell” makes it an enjoyable read. Your dialogue is almost credible (a little editing should make it even more realistic). Watch how you ID the speakers…sometimes you give too much unnecessary detail.
Overall a good job and I’m backing it.
Good luck.
Dan
PS. Could you pls look at mine?

THE LAST NEPHILUM

ThePrologue is enough to decide on backing. Backed.
TMN
"NEVER LOSE..."

This has the genuine feel of a classic horror story transposed to a modern setting...the voice is excellent but language issues at times make the progress a little laboured. Nothing that an edit can't sort out...very promising indeed!
Backed
Stewart

Great book. Well written andenjoyable.

This is a great book. well written and laid out. I enjoyed this very much.

NIce! Wonderful! Terrific! I'm not a critic, just a guy who enjoys a good story I can disappear in, and simply enjoy.

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

What a riveting story. I love your title, anything that starts with The Last has a definite sense of that's it, there will be no more. Your opening was a joy to read. There are so many wonderful things that I cannot list them needless to say this was a joy to read and is backed with great pleasure.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Hello William, by great food fortune I saw your book on someone else's shelf and took a look. I am so glad I did.
Apart from some typo errors and the messy layout I have nothing but praise for your book.
Backed.

Child - Atramentus Speaks

Chapter 1. This is an intriguing premise and I really like the mix of myth and speculation with geological occurrences. Only crit would be that, at present, your format is not doing the excellent content any favours. You need to separate dialogue into discreet pieces - check out some of the other stuff here to see what I mean, even my own book! I also like the way you use words and treat your reader as an 'adult' rather than as incapable of understanding 'imbibed' etc. :)

THE LAST NEPHILUM
This is an amazing piece of work , your research is incredible. I certainly enjoyed reading this.
Backed
Faith
THE ASSASSINSVILLAGE

Utterly amazing. The connection between the Ten Plagues in the Bible and the eruption of Santorini (and the subsequent destruction of the Minoans) is fascinating and presents all manner of historical possibilities, a subject as intriguing as any work of speculative fiction. As already mentioned, you might want to split up the narrative (separate lines for dialogue, a little more definition of plot and settings, etc) to make it seem more like a story than a dissertation but that's all. This is a brilliant and very well researched work and I wish you every success with it.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

The pitch would be easier to read if broken into paragraphs. Your premise is fascinating and takes in a lot of territory, quite a challenge with the different secular and religious accounts of before and after the flood. This first contact, the pitch, with agents and editors, should be clean, simple and easy to read in order to hook them and get them interested in reading your book.

Good luck with your endeavor.

JMC
Among Women

Hi there,

As a pastor's daughter, I find the premise of this novel fascinating. You have a gift for words, but if I were you, I would break the narrative up and show it with dialogue and other characters rather than have the narrator tell so much. Readers usually prefer to be shown, rather than told. That is only my opinion, however. As you know, reading taste is subjective. You have a great imagination and talent for writing.

Good luck on the site! I have backed your novel with pleaure.

Best,
Cori
"Princess"

PS
If you get a chance, I would love to hear your thoughts on my novel, "Princess". Thanks! :)

Dear William,
The Last Nephilum...... Well !!!!! Where to start? Originality, essence, great writing skill, and a story that will have its readers wanting for more with every turn of the page.
Backed with pleasure and wishing you much success.
Helen
The Last Dream

Dear William, I love your epilogue :) - yes, Jesus is where it's at. :) What a wonderful story. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs/testimony book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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