Annamensis

A singular beginning that quickly involves the reader and pulls them into the story. You may wish to consider trimming a few adjectives eg do youneed both acrid and burning to convey the sensation? Also, keep an eye on how many 'ly' words you use. More often than not the verb is sufficient by itself. Otherwise, plenty of promise here.

Your pitch has me hooked, love the twist on Men In Black who deal in thousands of souls, your visuals are good, your concept clear and well thought out, backed with pleasure

I agree with Soldatos below...it's a pity so much of this is long-winded since you're a really talented writer with class and style...tidy up your text and tighten the narrative!
Backed with pleasure
Stewart

Not ordinarily my cup of tea, but the writing, I must say, is rather excellent! Dense, well-woven, cinematic and lively description. Perhaps a tad too much of it in the paragraphs after the prologue, but smooths out nicely after that.

Happily backed!
I. Soldatos
Bad Bishop

Dear Andrew
yes your book had me on the edge a few times, great original read and very well put together. I am so amazed at the world you have created in my head, congrats and
BACKED FOR SURE BY ME

I do hope you take the time to look at my book, comment and if you feel back it.
BEST of luck
Denise
The Letter

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable cast of characters. I do like Martin. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your science fiction thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Dear Andrew, I love that your Annam, your hero is trying to do his very best :) - would that everyone was as determined as he is :) - what a wonderful world it would be. :) You have a wonderful adventure. :) Hope you'll write many more. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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