Chaste Lovers of Pompeii

Good story telling. Solid structure. Backed!

blessings
jim
jack & charmian london

Beautiful sentence structure, gorgeous descriptions, and an intriguing topic, reincarnation. This is an intelligent well-written novel that gets a space on my shelf.

My only crit is to break up the chunks of text into paragraphs. For someone such as myself with eye problems, this was a real challenge to read.

Patricia
Super-Nature Heroes

This reminds me a little of book entitled "Replay" by Ken Grimwood. In that story a couple relives their own lives over and over. In your story they jump through the ages. It is a captivating read.
Nicely done,
Sharon Van Orman
Eve, an Eden's Exiles novel

This is a very good read, well written and lyrical prose that evokes the different places and eras wonderfully. My only comment, the layout is disguising your words by virtue of such enormous paragraphs. Blink and it is easy to lose one's place. Dividing the sections up would make for easier access. The visual shape of the lines on the page is an important as the auditory flow of the words when read aloud.

Hi Wulfgar,

really well written & a fascinating switch across aeons - my only suggestion would be to break the dialogue in to separate paragraphs for an easier read.

backed & look forward to going back & reading more.

Rob

GET LENIN

Like this very much . Have only read the first Ch this pm and will read the next hopefully this evening. Have backed it already and gldaly so. Good tale.

good luck

david
the collector of tales

I love historical fiction and this was a nice little treat! it's nice to be able to read an entire story too! You've got something unique here and it was refreshing to read. The writing style is great as is the locations. I enjoyed this very, very much. Nice job!

Missy
Mark of Eternity

This is absolutely rivetting and impossible to put down. The descriptive work is perfect, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

This is a very dense read (not a bad thing) - packed full of swiftly coming images, ideas, description and commentary. This was like eating a meal full of varying flavours, with no time to stop for breath. It worked, however, I liked being whirled along. I enjoyed the rush of ideas. Reading the comments below mine now, I see my comments mirrored, but I think it's a style that many people will like being immersed in.

I shall carry on to chapter two - so there you are - I'm reading on. Will back at shelf change.

Minor points: It is a VERY long first chapter - and quite a block of type, densely written - could be broken up a little more?
and:
'Silver wide vase' ? 'Wide, silver vase' ? wasn't sure.
You typed 'blinked' instead of 'blink when he's driving along at the start. ('that made him blinked..')
Cariad.
STONES.

An original and interesting depcition of life in differnet historical periods

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

You have an interesting premise. It reminds me of The Descent of the Sun, which is an Indian love story that takes place over many life times.

An intuitive problem right off the bat though, intuitive issues are very distracting so be careful to eliminate them (cars have no consciousness and thus, can’t ignore anything. “The driver ignored...and so on. Also look at “interceptions”


The narrative elements are compelling and your imagination is remarkable. The voice is strong, but could be better. My main comment would be that you rely too heavily on narration. This is a bit dense and i think if you weave in some action and dialogue your voice would improve greatly. Large amounts of dry prose can get tedious to read and you do not want your reader to be labored. All and all a very good read. Based on the premise and the first couple of chapters I think this will do well if polished up. I will definitely be willing to back your book after I’ve read a bit more of it. In the meantime, please read some of my book when you have time and let me know what you think. And goodluck with your manuscript


blueboy

( The Age of Rhinestone )

Well!!! A veritable assault on the readers' senses leaves one rather reeling from the impact...Intense indeed but I feel a bit excessively so. I think the narrative is so heavy at times it feels like wading in deep water...tough going! No aspersions cast on you as a writer as such...perhaps you are too enthusiastic...you know where you are going but you cannot see how you are getting there...slow down and exercise more control over your pen. Great promise so backed.
Cheers
Stewart

This is incredibly amazing. I went to Parque Avila in Caracas so I found the opening civilization remarkably believable. Great intensity and i applaud your style and theme.
This is a work of genius.

Truly

backed
THE MIND SETTER

Which epochs, civilizations, and times? The pitch is your chance to tell the bones of your story and hook an agent or editor. Keep it simple. Be direct.

Good luck,
JMC
Among Women

I’m pressed for time and only read your pitch on opener. I'm a sucker for historicals and like the story and your voice, so I’m backing it.
If you want me to, I could return a give you a more in-depth comment.
Please take a look at mine…comment and backing will be appreciated.

Wulfgar,
Chaste Lovers of Pompeii is an enthralling work. I started reading the opening paragraphs and was mesmerized by the intricate prose. Your headings indicating precise dates from the distant past make the story believable and shows the reader that the author has done tremendous research to bring the story alive. Backed with pleasure.

CHASTE LOVERS OF POMPEII
Historical fiction - my favourite and you've certainly know your stuff here. Very interesting, intense and full of imagination. Pompeii has always been one of the best ancient sites and best loved. visited Arykanda and Olympos in Turkey this week on holiday - more fab sites. Happy to back the book and hope you can find time to look at mine.
Best Wishes
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

A heart wrenching historical story that is compelling to say the least! Backed 100% so far!

Liz
The Cheech Room
A Fine Pickle

Dear Wulfgar, I love how you put me right there with you in all of your adventures through time. :) Your pitch prepared me for your time changes in history & your great storyline brought me right through. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoir book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I've also backed your 2nd book & will comment on it soon. :)

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You have written a very interesting and unique short story. which I do like. Your use of imagery is excellent. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Hi Wulfgar,this is a deep story with a lot of tragedy involved.
You have painted the reader some vivid pictures throughout the book.
Have always liked Italy and Pompeii is a wonderful place to see, to observe its history on a visit is very enlightening.
A great read and very well written, like the style.
SHELVED.

kind regards,

Neville THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST - THE TIME ZONE.

:) comment to follow - read & commented on 1 hour later :)

Hi there, I like the look of your pitch.
I have therefore backed your book and will come back to it later to do a proper read which I look forward to.

Could you please take a look at my 1st book THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST – THE TIME ZONE?
I would be very pleased.

Kind regards,

Neville (The Secrets Of The Forest – Series)