Trey Alexander - Quantum Boy Book 1 The Stuxnet Virus

YOUR Book has all the earmarks of a best seller ! the story is engeging and the characters interesting . I liked the plot and your pitch, so , goodluck withit !!!

This is great. I think you've pitched it just right at your audience, which can be a difficult group of people to engage with. Your characters are good too - detailed and with good dialogue - enough depth to make them believeable.

I would love to find out more about Trey and his vanishing phenomenon. Good luck!

If you get chance I would really appreciate feedback on my children's book - for a much younger audience! - 'The Cloud Drivers: The Giant's Storm'.

Best wishes
Clare Morris

You have mixed sci-fi with some other great genres to create something that feels new. You have an impressive way of getting your character across, he felt real to me, which is important! The beginning is awesome too, you definitely know how to hook the reader! Nice job on your book, I think it's got a ton of potential!

Missy
Mark of Eternity

A clever comedic science fiction adventure with well developed characters. Vivid settings. Lively dialogue. Strong narrative. Twisted wit. Well thought out plot. Accomplished writing. A delightful read. Backed.

This could well be the next big thing

Nice use of the first person narrative and interpolative author. I think that the resistant style is a good angle to use to hook the YA audience. I would definitely consider using this in a classroom and I do think that the YA would enjoy it indepently.

BACKED

I love the way this starts, the whole tale of two cities thing, wish my opening was that good. It flows very well, is honest and humourous and I love funny books. It's so straight forward and easy to read. Excellent stuff.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

very good, humorous and polished. I was suprised at how well you portrayed the lazy cynic as a central character.

Spell check aside, you should go through this for grammar. Lots of run-on sentences.
fourteen-year-old (both dashes need to be there)
papier mache (papier-mâché is the correct way to write it), not paper machete. I don't think a paper machete (a very big knife with a curved blade and a short handle) would do much good in either case.
Tried instead of tired.
Lose the quotes around words you are emphasizing. They are not necessary. Use italics or, in most cases, let the words stand alone.
There are a lot of nits to pick.

The beginning is a bit long getting to the point, but acceptable. The tone and tenor is that of a fourteen-year-old with just the right conversational tone and asides. Trey is quite engaging, if a bit irritating at times (goes with being 14 years old) and the story flows well once it gets going. Should be a hit with the YA market

JMC
Among Women

My teens would have loved this, you have hit all the right spots, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

You have captured the soul of a fourteen year old very effectively. I like the stream of consciousness ideal that flows through each chapter. The dialogue is well constructed as is the relationship between Dana and the protagonist. i'm sure this will do well. Good Luck.K.J. Rabane - According to Olwen

Great idea, though IMO you take a lot of time on set up before the disappearing act(s). And in Ch 4, 'my Mom might have feinted on the deodorant aisle having witnessed me disappearing with a deodorant stick.... etc.' I think it's spelled 'fainted'. Also, 'Quantum Boy' sounds better, I think. Backed.

Dear M
just getting to love this science fiction category on site, your writing is well paced and original , also had me on the edge a few times, w\quite exciting. CONGRATS on a well crafted book
BACKED FOR SURE BY ME
Denise
The Letter
please take time to comment and back my book if you feel so, if not that is OK also thank you and the VERY best of luck

I think it's great. I like the way you address the reader. Makes it more personal. Best of luck with this! Backed, Jedward (Knut)

M I do like your book and when I first looked at it the "disappeared" caught me right off. Kids wil also love the book and they need lots of good exciting reading. Beth Anne
PS I am a story teller and not that great with editing so can't help you there sorry. Hope you have a look at my books when you have time.

M I do like your book and when I first looked at it the "dissappeard" caught me right off. Kids wil also love the book and they need lots of good exciting reading. Beth Anne
PS I am a story teller and not that great with editing so can't help you there sorry. Hope you have a look at my books when you have time.

M I do like your book and when I first looked at it the "dissapeard" caught me right off. Kids wil also love the book and they need lots of good exciting reading. Beth Anne
PS I am a story teller and not that great with editing so can't help you there sorry. Hope you have a look at my books when you have time.

I really like this. Good 'voice'. It reminds me of Haddon's Curious Incident of the Dog in the Nightime. I'm guessing your MC is somewhere on the sliding scale of Asbergers - not as Autistic as Haddon's MC, but still pedantic and obsessive (in a good way). You could make him older - 15 or 16 - to suit those who say he sounds older than a 14yr old, but that's up to you.

I would back it, but it's listed as incomplete so I'll put it on my Watchlist for now. Let me know when it's finished.

- NaomiM

Do fourteen-year-olds in the States really speak like that? Well it doesn't really matter...I can't share your love of science...laughs, yes but I didn't come across too much here to laugh about so I guess this one's not for me...you're a talented writer though so well done and backed!
Stewart

Dear M, I love that it was "a wild theory anyway." :) Your pitch & prologue drew me in, especially of being "quantumized." :) Tight dialogue & paragraphs moved me right through your exciting story. :) I love that it is all in 1 chapter, so that I didn't have to keep waiting for chapter to come up. :) Great write. :) Hope you'll write a lot of books. :) What an imaginative mind, you have! :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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Nice work and you have a clever theme. You need to tie down the plot a little.

Good work

The Mind Setter

...until he started disappearing during gym class.

That sort of thing just does not happen every day. Unfortunately for Trey, it made an exception... What made an exception? State the plot points clearly and keep it simple.

I look forward to reading more. Quantum Physics is my favorite avocation.

Good luck,

JMC
Among Women

You describe perfectly the plight of the unpublished writer in your opening paragraphs to Trey Alexander-Quant Boy. Your story has great appeal to a youthful audience with a great imagination. Backed with pleasure.

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Trey. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice as this allows you to convey his thoughts and feelings. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing ensures that your work will appeal to the YA audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Wow, thank you very much. I will read yours too. Question - I uploaded a cover image but it hasn't showed up yet. Does it take a while?

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Trey. I also like your use of the first person narrative voice as this allows you to convey his thoughts and feelings. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing ensures that your work will appeal to the YA audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

This is great, especially for young adults! You write a little like Darren Shan only better! Well done and backed so far!

Liz
The Cheech Room
A Fine Pickle

TREY ALEXANDER
An interesting pitch. Reading the first chapters I think this will appeal to teenagers,especially those who like a different type of story. Trey is a complicated boy and i couldn't help liking this character. Backed. When you get a chance to take a look atmy book I would appreciate it. Thanks
best Wishes
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

Started to read, liked your voice, but got a call and must run.
I’m backing it and will return with comments.
Dan
PS Could you pls look at mine, comment and backing will be appreciated.

:) comment to follow - read & commented on 10 hours later :)