Christina Rose

Wow, the first chapter is fantastic. Read through Ch4. Well-written and I'm curious to know what the "voices" Christina is hearing are? Not sure yet how she's related to the family in the first chapter either. This reads like a great suspenseful story.

Happily Backed
Denise

The author's prologue nearly prevented me from continuing to chapter 1, so gripping and nasty in its effective presentation, especially making the character a woman. Readers can relax in the opening chapters while the author sets the stage for the drama to come, tying in the prologue with well-written action sequences and commanding dialogue.

Renee,

Your pitch is fantastic. I'm so happy to have found this book. Your writing style speaks for itself. Thank you so much for sharing with us.

Laura
"Jhevalia"

HI RENEE MARIE . CHRISTINA ROSE'

WHAT A GRILPPING PITCH.
' i know you who are you? and it gets better in the prologue , certainly held my attentioln and again so grilpping, wanted to read on , read some more and have to say that this is very good and a most enjoyable read,
has all the primise of been an interesting story and somewhat unique

tip use your tags, will be of great benifit to the reader and your book of course
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'
please back anc comment mine if time thanks

Dear Renee, I love the intrigue of your story & at the end of chapter 18, I found out that it still isn't over, so I'll write the ending in my mind that she never gets it. :) Your pitch & prologue were concise, so I was prepared for your story - tragedy, actually - well done. :) Crisp dialogue & paragraphs made for a fast read, not to mention your suspenseful story. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take just a moment to back, my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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Christina Rose
Very interesting pitch, the opening is good
Backed
Eveleen
(Turning a new leaf)

Your work is enthralling and grabs the reader in.

Good writing

backed happily
The mind setter

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Rose. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing ensures that your work will appeal to the YA audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Certainly an action packed start with tense and threatening scenes. The glass-cutter sounds strange, 'Started it' is it petrol driven? something like that can put the reader off and that would be a shame. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Glass cutters, the ones I researched, are small hand held objects that a re run on batteries.

Certainly an action packed start with tense and threatening scenes. The glass-cutter sounds strange, 'Started it' is it petrol driven? something like that can put the reader off and that would be a shame. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

It's a bit tense for my liking...'snuck up' put me off soon after the start. Quite a bit of cosmetic work needs to be done.
Good luck
Stewart

CHRISTINA ROSE
This is quite a tense novel, although I would have preferred more dialogue as what you have written is good. A good sound voice and written in a fair hand. Backed
Faith
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

Hi there, Renee.
I read the prologue and a few chapters…really enjoyed your voice.
The narration flows well (though more “show” and less “tell” would make a difference). The dialogue has a realistic sound to it and advances the story.
There’s enough tension to make the reader turn those pages.
The prologue’s a little on the lengthy side…maybe you could trim it.
Good job. I hope you land representation.
Dan
PS. Could you pls check mine? Comment/backing will be appreciated.

Hey thanks for reading and commenting! It means a lot to me. =) Thanks for your suggestions also. As for the prologue, it makes more sense once you read the end of the book. One of those tie in stories. The book is actually completed and self published, but I didn't upload the entire thing because I wasn't sure I would even get any readers. But if there's interest I will upload the rest. =)

Again, thank you so much for your comments, your interest, and your crit. To everyone. =)

<3 <3 <3, R.M.P.T.K

Hi there, Renee.
I read the prologue and a few chapters…really enjoyed your voice.
The narration flows well (though more “show” and less “tell” would make a difference). The dialogue has a realistic sound to it and advances the story.
There’s enough tension to make the reader turn those pages.
The prologue’s a little on the lengthy side…maybe you could trim it.
Good job. I hope you land representation.
Dan
PS. Could you pls check mine? Comment/backing will be appreciated.

Hi Renee, you owned me with your synopsis. Nice story, terrific journey you've laid out. Sentences follow logically one into another, a very interesting style. You have your own voice. You'll do well. :-)

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

:) comment to follow - read & commented on 18 hours later :)