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word count 110393
date submitted 25.11.2010
date updated 25.03.2011
genres: Historical Fiction, History, Christ...
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Dearest Florence

Graham Hodgson

Fictional correspondence weaving a story of love and loss around the real life-story of Joseph and Florence Batemen at the time of the Great War

 

Swept along by the huge swell of patriotism at the start of the Great War Joseph Bateman was happy to enlist in the South Staffordshire Regiment to serve his King and Country.
That was until he read wife Florence's first letter...
He had made the biggest mistake of his life and spent the next three years trying to put it right but in doing so he faced the Irish Republican Rebels in 1916 Dublin as well as the full horror of life in the trenches on the Western Front and a constant battle with himself and the British Army.
Painfully Joseph comes to realise that he has more than one call on his life but that these are often in conflict. Struggling to rationalise his mixed-up emotions Joseph experiences one disappointment and loss after another and even letters from Florence aggravate matters as she struggles to cope without him.
Their story, drawing on the experiences of many families of the time, is more poignant because it is based on the real experiences of Joseph and Florence Bateman including how their lives were touched by what is considered by many historians as the most shocking aspect of that war.

 
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ianhenley wrote 8 days ago

Thanks for the recommnedation. Good read and well written. SHould do well.
Ian

strachan gordon wrote 279 days ago

Extremely touching and poignant and I think the format of interspersed narrative and letters is an interesting and effective one. The drama of the 1stWW always adds drama , but particularly when war is juxtaposed with love , possibly the most powerful fictional device of all . Extremely well written and shows good knowledge of the 14-18 period. Watchlisted.With best wishes, Strachan Gordon .

Graham John Philip wrote 362 days ago

Many thanks Dee - especially for your final sentence. I write largely with Joseph in mind but obviously have also tried to imagine how Florence would have felt, the fact that your comments focus very much on Florence is a great encouragement.

Graham

dee farrell wrote 362 days ago

Dearest Florence is an interesting read. I like the letters interspersed with the narrative. The details of soldier life, food, lack of uniforms, etc. lends authenticity to the setting and helps the reader feel Joseph's circumstances and emotions too. Florence's struggles are painful to read but our sympathies are aroused for a woman and the women who sacrificed along with their husbands in a war fought long ago. Good historical fiction should ignite these emotions and understandings in us and here it does.
This would make a great addition to anyone's study of the period.

Dee Farrell
Warrior Heart

Graham John Philip wrote 400 days ago

Hi Sandy,

Many thanks for the encouraging comments and I am glad that you like my book. I like your phrase 'gentle style' as I very much wanted Joseph to be largely outside the brutality that we normally associate with the Great War but could not stop himself being sucked into and damaged by it .
Best wishes. Graham

Sandy Mackay wrote 402 days ago

Hi Graham. The writing is good and the idea of the correspondence is excellent. You convey the idealism and innocence of the people who were drawn into that terrible wasteful war with a gentle style that is very easy to read. Will back and star and read more asap. All the best. Sandy.

Graham John Philip wrote 426 days ago

Thank you John, I really appreciate your comments.
I do not consider myself a writer but just someone who has a story to tell and so I am not really sure what you mean by passive but am willing to investigate and make changes if necessary. I am wondering if it is a similar thing to the previous comment from Alison about 'showing NOT telling'. Anyway, I hope you do read more of Joseph and Florence's story and please comment again.
Best wishes
Graham

Graham,
I read the first seven chapters, finding your story engaging. Much of your writing here is passive. I am fine with passive now and then, but during the reworkings of my book, I was often discouraged from using it so. In this day and age, this might be something you may have to address in pursuing publication. But, I found Joseph to be a very real character, whom I liked. I'll pop back to read more soon.
Cheers!
John B Campbell

Nigel Fields wrote 427 days ago

Graham,
I read the first seven chapters, finding your story engaging. Much of your writing here is passive. I am fine with passive now and then, but during the reworkings of my book, I was often discouraged from using it so. In this day and age, this might be something you may have to address in pursuing publication. But, I found Joseph to be a very real character, whom I liked. I'll pop back to read more soon.
Cheers!
John B Campbell

Butler's Girl wrote 431 days ago

I think that this is a charming, well written tale.
For me, this could be improved with a little showing NOT telling, but on the whole this is excellent stuff.
Best,
Alison Butler

Graham John Philip wrote 432 days ago

Many thanks for backing my book.
I think that you will like the ending.
Graham

well done,
j
what every woman should know

scargirl wrote 433 days ago

well done,
j
what every woman should know

Graham John Philip wrote 436 days ago

Thank you so much Ruth.
I have really enjoyed writing the story and especially the letters. I think that history for me is about us getting something of an insite into the lives of ordinary people in the past and I hope that this is what I help portray. The basic historical facts are true and I have tried to weave a story around them.
Best wishes

This is a great read, and will appeal to anyone who is interested in WW1. It is a collection of wonderfully written letters. Written by Joseph and florence to each other during WW1. It gives a real insight into the feelings of people at that time, and what they had to deal with.
Well written
Ruth
A New Day

Ruth Hannah wrote 437 days ago

This is a great read, and will appeal to anyone who is interested in WW1. It is a collection of wonderfully written letters. Written by Joseph and florence to each other during WW1. It gives a real insight into the feelings of people at that time, and what they had to deal with.
Well written
Ruth
A New Day

Graham John Philip wrote 442 days ago

Thank you Gervois, I was beginning to get a bit disheartened as no one seemed to be looking at my book. I am in the process of adding another 15 chapters and making some changes to those already on the site so you might like to look again in a few days time. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

Very good interlinking between narrative, dialogue and correspondence - really pulls the reader along. Your opening chapters clearly convey the essence of the times. On my Watchlist.

Gervois wrote 443 days ago

Very good interlinking between narrative, dialogue and correspondence - really pulls the reader along. Your opening chapters clearly convey the essence of the times. On my Watchlist.

Graham John Philip wrote 462 days ago

Thanks for the encouraging comments and for backing my book. I do hope you enjoy reading more and please feel free to comment again - even critically.
Best wishes and thanks again.

I love reading books in the style of letters home or diaries. I thoroughly enjoyed the diary of anne frank. From what I have read so far I think I will enjoy reading this book as much as I did that. I also have a strong interest in history, especially war, thus this book is right up my alley. I feel the change of title was definitely a move in the right direction. Even having only read a few pages, I can tell straight away that the soldiers who fought for this country sacrificed a great deal and also suffered great hardship. We should all be very proud.

debdaniels wrote 463 days ago

I love reading books in the style of letters home or diaries. I thoroughly enjoyed the diary of anne frank. From what I have read so far I think I will enjoy reading this book as much as I did that. I also have a strong interest in history, especially war, thus this book is right up my alley. I feel the change of title was definitely a move in the right direction. Even having only read a few pages, I can tell straight away that the soldiers who fought for this country sacrificed a great deal and also suffered great hardship. We should all be very proud.

Emma Cope wrote 479 days ago

I definitely agree with the new title and think it is a better reflection of what the book is about, i.e. a collection of letters. Loving the book so far! Are you putting any more chapters on here?

Graham John Philip wrote 480 days ago

'I Have Nothing To Say' has been retitled 'Dearest Florence'

I have changed the title of my book to highlight the fact that the story unwinds around letters written by Joseph and Florence to each other throughout his time in the Army. I always intended them to be key points in the narrative that would signpost the direction that the plot was to take and reflect a major aspect in the life of a First World War soldier far from home. The fact that these letters unintentionally sometimes caused pain allows Joseph to struggle with his feelings about duty to King, Country, God, wife and daughter and hopefully allows the reader a glimpse into the troubled mind that is Joseph.

Nigel Fields wrote 484 days ago

It's a monumental task to bring to life real history like this. Bravo. I understand, I think, your intent for the title, but agree with Lawson that it might not be as effective head on, to compell someone to pick the book from a shelf. It is powerful afterward, of course. But titles, like beginnings, are dashed difficult to settle on. I struggled immensely with both. I thought your prose was appealing with good dialogue. Highly starred and WL'd.
Cheers!
John B Campbell (Walk to Paradise Garden)

GrahamandPaula wrote 490 days ago

Thank you for your comments. I shall give some thought to the title. I am beginning to realise that all aspects of the book are important and not just the story. My idea was to write letters that were joined by prose but perhaps it should be prose that is supported by letters. I wonder if these are the sort of changes an editor would require or should I make them myself and see how people react?

LawsonBlacklock wrote 490 days ago

I love books that have basis in fact and that was what drew me to this story. I'm not so keen on the title... 'I have nothing to say' in all honesty doesn't seem like an appropriate title for a book (I think it will repel rather than draw readers in) but the writing is solid and flows nicely. Be careful not to let the letters swamp the novel- most readers of fiction novels like being drawn into the novel through prose, attaching themselves to the characters along the way. With letters, a reader can sometimes feel as though they are intruding on something personal, as opposed to being invited into the story. All the best with this one. I was happy to back it.x

Graham John Philip wrote 490 days ago

Thank you for taking the time to comment and also for the encouragement. I will take on board your suggestions when I edit this draft in a week or so.

I like the history and I like very much the letters. I feel they add a depth of color and character. I've learned, especially Joseph's inner thinking. Your voice is great. One suggestion, the font, most books are printed in serif fonts like Times Roman because they're easier to read. Also, a larger font would be easier. Good luck with this.

Caroline Hartman wrote 491 days ago

I like the history and I like very much the letters. I feel they add a depth of color and character. I've learned, especially Joseph's inner thinking. Your voice is great. One suggestion, the font, most books are printed in serif fonts like Times Roman because they're easier to read. Also, a larger font would be easier. Good luck with this.

Graham John Philip wrote 500 days ago

Thanks CR, this is my first attempt at writing like this and came from my research into local history - it just seemed to be a story that needed to be told. I am knew to authonomy and just finding my way around the site intending to look at other people's work. Will speak again soon. Graham

Graham, good writing and a great story. I'm enjoying the war perspective and the sadness of the story rings true. Of course I backed it and gave it 6 stars for your great efforts. Will continue reading. Your friend, CR.

CR Harding wrote 503 days ago

Graham, good writing and a great story. I'm enjoying the war perspective and the sadness of the story rings true. Of course I backed it and gave it 6 stars for your great efforts. Will continue reading. Your friend, CR.

Graham John Philip wrote 504 days ago

Thanks Ellie, I am glad that you are enjoying it. Let me know if there is anything that you don't like as well as which bits you really do like. However, you do not have to read the whole lot unless you want to.

Ellie Hodgson wrote 504 days ago

Very good uncle Graham, I've read the first three chapters so far and It's really good!!!! :P

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