Digging Deeper

ARISE, AUTHONOMY GHOST!

Ease those weary, withered limbs from your coffin. Push away the stone from the mouth of the tomb.

You have one last task to perform. One last, sacred shelf to confer.

Whether you were plugger, spammer, gusher or troll, whether you flirted or fought in the forum or beavered away in the shadows, now is the time for your resurrection.

One last time. Marshall your strength, muster the last vestiges of your power and carry out your final Authonomy act:

Back my book, MIRROR IN THE SKY.

Then, only then, you may rest easy in your Authonomy grave.

Nick Poole2 (formerly known as NickP)

Hello there. I really enjoyed this, wasn't at all sure where it was going. I do think there's too much "telling and not showing" in chapter one, and it takes a while to get going, but apart from that, it's a page turner. I will be sure to read more when you post it.

This is good. I like the itallics where is is talking/thinking to himself. I am looking forward to reading on. Clare

I really want to know what happens next! I liked the humour, and I also like the fact that I don't know where it's heading at this stage - there are lots of questions I want answered: give me more chapters, please!!!

Really enjoyed this - it's a very dark subject, yet written with real humour. Hooked!

Great Book thoughly enjoyed chapter two.

Wonder

Well i must say i didnt think i`d like this book but i really enjoyed it, cant wait to read more of your books.

I'm left wanting to read more. Dark in places but elements of humour and not quite sure what to make of Will. The fact I want to read more is a good sign though as I wouldn't normally read this sort of thing.

I love the fact that we're straight into the action with this, good hook. Also liked hearing Will's internal anxiety. Very descriptive passages, especially in the lane. Good work.

Quick and compelling - I only meant to dip in and found myself at the end of chapter 4 before I knew it! My only comment would be that some of the paragraphs could probably benefit from being broken down a bit further. All in all though, great stuff.

Wow I loved the book. I just could not put it down

Well written, no nonsense and good pace. Loved it.

I actually bought this book, for all the wrong reasons, because I saw it had been reviewed by Mark Radcliffe. Good to see your work on here, Lee. I guess I should only be commenting on the chapters that are uploaded, which is hard when you know what's to come. I don't agree with some of the previous comments. Unlike Worlds Apart (where I feel the opening/back story) does drag on a little bit, I think we're quickly into the action with this one and intrigued to find out what happens next. I can only say it's get better from here on in.

Thanks for your comments. They're all very interesting to read. It's funny how some people like reading Will's internal thoughts for the humour and others think it doesn't work as it makes him appear a bit wet.

I'm writing the film script at the moment and I think Will comes across completely different as we don't "see" his internal thoughts. Less fun but more gritty.

If you like the humour, may I suggest either of my other two books.

Thanks again

From the moment I read "What would you do? Will sat in his car eating a muffin" I knew I was going to love your writing. Wonderful sense of humour. Looking forward to reading more.
Laura.

Thanks for all your comments and will take on board the issue with the length of the chapters.

Thanks again. Anyone want to read any more?

Well I definately want to find out what Will is going to do next - which makes Ch1 a success. Perhaps one v.slight criticism - maybe you could find a way of trimming it a little? I found some of the 'lets fill in the background' passages long, but perhaps I'm just being nit-picky. V.nice work, Lee. A great idea, delivered with panache.

I do like the build-up in tension in this, and the stand-off between the two men - but I wonder how it would be if you actually cut the whole of Chapter One (or what stands as Chapter One here) and started with Chapter 2? That way you could get into the action more quickly and still drip-feed the info from Chapter One over the course of the novel. Just a thought anyway - feel free to ignore!

Anne B
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At first, I didn't think I was going to enjoy this story, but it really comes alive in chapter 2 when we're treated to more of Will's humour and the action starts to pick up. And does it ever pick up - what a disaster is Will? I read through all six chapters. Just one suggestion for improvement: some of those very long, daunting paragraphs really should be broken up. The whole thing would look better and read more easily with shorter paragraphs.

What a gripping story. I'd love to read on to see what Will's going to do and what Finn was really up to. There's perhaps a bit too much exposition in chapter one and the start of chapter three that slows things down a bit, but, once the action got going, I was hooked.
K

I really enjoyed this. You write fluently and I believed in the main character. I especially liked the way you added humour to the internal dialogue as it gave real insight into how he was torturing himself and debating about the best way to deal with his situation. Well done.
Sarah