The Survivor Who Didn't

I have read the first four chapters and really enjoyed them. I like the way you end each chapter with a hook. Guaranteed to get the reader turning the page. The idea of basing this on a reality TV show makes it stand out from the usual crime thriller book. I would think most people have seen a reality TV show at some point. They seem to be all the rage although personally I can't stand them. It's good to have a chance to look behind the scenes though and it's obvious you have put in a fair amount of research. Your style of writing is smooth and the dialogue is well done. Good work.

Kim (Pain)

The Surviver Who Didn't.
by Lee Enderlin.

I thought this was a very good thriller, full of intrigue and mystery.
A compelling read I must say.
Good description and the authors ability to provide twists and turns throughout the book, makes for an excellent read...this is so well put together. Well done!
I was drawn to 'The Surviver Who Didn't' by the excellent pitch.
I would certainly choose this book if it happened to be in a book shop.
Full of suspense it's how a thriller should be.
Pleased to star rate it high and will shelve as soon a space is free.
On my list!

kind regards,

Neville. The Secrets of the Forest - The Time Zone..

OK I've finished,

First reaction - oh no!

Second. The prologue doesn't really tie into the actual story that well. What was Eric's plan? It sounded a lot more complicated than it really was.

Good story, though I was expecting something a bit more complicated than it really was.

And who was S? The inclusion of S isn't really needed for the story to work. Ted could just come to the conclusions himself, after all he is quite good at his job.

Anyway food for thought.

21: Spelling of Bogeys and bogie

Last section of Chapter 20 - changing POV again.

I stress this only change it if you feel it doesn't work.

On Chapter 19
3 points

1) Spelling in S's last email - where and were, of course that could be deliberate but if it is then have ted notice it.
2) The instant coffee. It had rained on the island after the murder, so if they were from the time of the murder they would have dissolved, so they were from later on so the murderer had returned?
3) The line about Janet lying about Kate, I'm reading it from Ted's POV so he wouldn't know.

up to Chapter 14 - A few typos in other chapters (a 4 in shelters) bas instead of bad and some funny use of quotes

Off to read the rest of it - got my interest up

Chapter 4

Again suggestions – feel free to ignore.

Should it be ‘wanted to see you’ in the first paragraph.

What’s a monster formula? Does it just mean something really successful? – Ah just got it you’re talking about Marooned.

Take out the ‘one by one’.

The paragraph starting, ‘The suits were, surprisingly,’ I think you need something to indicate a major scene shift. (Also I would take out the commas)

Underlining is not a common way of emphasising words.

Chapter 5
Missing word (look) in the sentence about showering.

Could be a difference between US and British English, but I would have said the TV crew ‘were’ as there is more than 1 member of the crew.

I’m not sure what Ted found odd.

Are they not wanting all TV footage seized? That would be the first thing I would do. Oh they are!

Brilliant – end of Chapter

‘Who later told Ted gave the quintessential interview’. That sentence doesn’t read right. I know what you’re trying to do with POV (I think) but still….
I would say something like ‘The first interview Janet …. All the others were similar – or something like that.

I have no idea about how police works in America, but with a murder and one as potentially high-profile as this one, wouldn’t there be more involvement than Ted and Janet?

There were three things that threw me in ‘Chapter 3’

Firstly, the phrase Ted and Janet Breckenridge. I read this as they were a couple. I know you’ve just introduced Ted but it reads like they’re a couple.

The paragraph that starts ‘Janet entered’, has changing POV, as starting the paragraph with her name indicates it is from her POV, but then it is from Ted’s as she was the sort of girl he had given up on.

Why was there a grass roots counter-movement? (I would have hyphenated grass-roots even though ‘word’ doesn’t like it) I would have thought declaring it a National Wildlife Refuge would be something people wouldn’t complain about.

As I will say about all my comments, get other people’s opinions, before changing things I’m not Jay and don’t claim to be a guru, only comment on how I read things.

Hi, I read both the prologue and chapter one and found both to be smooth and unique. Both drew me in and kept me reading. The writing flows well and the voice is clear and different. Sorry it took me so long to get around to commenting.

Kris
Killing Death
Fusillade

I read this and enjoyed it. It reads so smoothly. It is an easy read because you plotted it and wrote it so well.
Janet is a wonderful character.

I made it to chapter 3. I enjoy how dialogue driven your narrative is. Characters seemed well developed and I look forward to seeing where they can go. I like your introduction of S in the very beginning. It is to the point and well done. Not too wordy as many people can be on this site. I also enjoy that you aren't overusing an exclamation mark. It is one of my pet peeves. All in all, a great read. 5 stars for the originality of the story idea! Good luck with this!

Best,

Ashley
"Maddy Hatfield and the Magic Locket"

gripping! hooked me right in. looking forward to reading on. your writing flows effortlessly making for easy reading - my kind of book.

I'm really enjoying this. It rattles along and keeps you interested. I like the two cops and their interplay and their dialogue comes over as authentic.
I'm trying to decide if I like the constant p.o.v shifts or not. It doesn't interfere with the flow.
I did find a sentence I couldn't quite make sense of. "The D.A. was quiet for amount, thinking."
Even if you add 'an' amount, it still doesn't work. 'an amount of time' does, but then why not just, 'quiet for a time'?
I look forward to reading on. Good luck with this,
Sylvia.

Really good read, hooked me right in, like the way you write, great whit to this and for the first book Ive read just fantastic

Recommended to me and happy it was.

Happy to re-back this as it's a cool take on the reality TV theme and might end up being prophetic - it surely can't be long before someone on one of these shows loses it! A great read, and may it continue to climb the charts. E McP.

Nice premise, original, great writing, fantastic hooks to keep me turning the pages. Really really enjoyed this.

This reminds me very much of one of Ben Eltons books where a murder is committed inside the Big Brother house and there are no witnesses!
You have a sharp writing style and the pace is good which sets the tone well early on. I am enjoying this one and happy to back and return to for more soon.

Pete

Dear Lee,
An exceptional opening with the macabre murder of inmate 420-849. As a fan of a good thriller, i knew i was going to enjoy The Survivor Who Didn't. Great hook at the end of every chapter that prompts the reader to keep turning the page.
I enjoyed your descriptions of the island and film crews immensely, sort of gave it a Robinson Crusoe's flavour, even though it's a great version of Lost.:)
Two things caught my eye that perhaps you'd like to change: :)
McNally's age 37, into thirty seven, and also on chapter four, two words are repeated in the interaction between John and Maria Mazza.
"I need to know to know where we are going to be or I'm not going."
Overall this is an awesome read. Six well deserved stars :).
Best,
Maria
Dark ofthe Moon

I'm not a fan of prologues, but yours worked perfectly. It set the stage well, dropping your reader right into the center of conflict. It grabbed my attention.

You do a great job of tapping into your characters' heads. Though it's third person, you express your characters' perspectives as well as if you were writing first person.

I love how tightly written this is. It's extremely polished, avoiding unnecessary info, adverbs, tags, etc. It's nice to be able to sit back and enjoy reading this without jotting down a bunch of notes.

Great job with the exchange between Janet and Ted. You write believable, fast-paced dialogue. Nice subtle humor in their conversation as well. There's a lot of characterization here, which is good since you're just now introducing them.

The plot is in full swing by the end of chapter 2, which is what I like to see. You finish with a good hook, tying the first chapter to the second. I'm definitely curious to see where this goes.

Suggestions: Is it necessary to call it the prologue? Why not just chapter one? Since chapter one and chapter two are written from different perspectives anyway, I don't see the need to call it the prologue. Just a thought. Maybe break up the paragraph starting with Breakneck Island was one of the stranger..."

Typo: "The D.A. was quiet for amount..." Do you mean a moment? Other than that, I was impressed with how well-edited this was.

I'm totally hooked by this. Phenomenal writing, awesome story, and believable characters. Six stars easily. I highly recommend checking this one out!

WLd.

I really liked your book. You've got a great sense of humor fused in with your character's dialogue and also have an interesting way of getting the early descriptions of them out of the way through the dialogue. I like the whole mysterious S thing, and the prisoner thing as well. Only critique I can think of would be breaking up some of your really long paragraphs into 2 or 3 paragraphs, otherwise it's great. Most importantly, you have an exciting plot going. Really like it, 5 stars.
Dina of Halo of the Damned and 33

I like your intro. Backed and will soon read.
Dina of Halo of the Damned and 33

I like your intro. Backed and will soon read.
Dina of Halo of the Damned and 33

Lee,
I must say the gritty, in-your-face prison scene had me snapping to full attention right at the beginning of "The Survivor Who Didn't." And aptly so because the pace didn't let up from there. I latched on to your two chartacters as they raced to find the perpetrator of a brazen murder on the set of t.v. show. What a page-turner, Thank you so much for the entertaining read.

Kenneth Edward Lim
The North Korean

I thought this was a very good thriller, full of intrigue, a compelling read in it's own right.
Good description and the authors ability to provide twists and turns throughout the book, makes for an excellent read...this is so well put together. Well done.
I was drawn to 'The Surviver Who Didn't' by the excellent pitch.
I would buy the book if it happened to be in a book shop.
Pleased to star rate it and will shelve when a space is free.

kind regards,

Neville. THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST - THE TIME ZONE.

Neville,
Thank you so much for the extremely kind words. I will be happy to view "Secrets" and pass along my comments as well. Was there any aspect of "The Survivor Who Didn't" that you especially enjoyed?
Lee

I thought this was a very good thriller, full of intrigue, a compelling read in it's own right.
Good description and the authors ability to provide twists and turns throughout the book, makes for an excellent read...this is so well put together. Well done.
I was drawn to 'The Surviver Who Didn't' by the excellent pitch.
I would buy the book if it happened to be in a book shop.
Pleased to star rate it and will shelve when a space is free.

kind regards,

Neville. THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST - THE TIME ZONE.

Neville,
Thank you do much for the extremely kind words. I will be happy to view "Secrets" and pass along my comments as well. Was there any aspect of "The Survivor Who Didn't" that you especially enjoyed?
Lee

Hi Lee,

I started reading this without any expectation – and was pleasantly surprised by the intricacy of the plot. The opening through me off a bit, and I know there will be a tie-in later, however I did find the writing to be just a bit more choppy and you used a few words repeatedly which interrupted the flow. The numbers used to identify the prisoners worked well in that they aren’t “personified” – they are just items in a system.

Your characters are interesting, and I would like a few more hints about the mysterious “S” who appears early in the story. I read to the end of Chapter 5, so I can see how you are starting to bring all the bits and pieces of the story together, which will make for a great “who-dunnit” kind of book.

I’m not sure where you are in the writing and editing process, but there are a number of typos, repeated words, missing words and grammar issues that need attention. I find this one of the most tedious parts of editing because after you’ve reworked something a hundred times, your eyes just slide over the mistakes. You might want to consider getting someone to do a thorough reading (when you’re ready), or perhaps just try to read the work aloud – you’ll be amazed at what you’ll find.

Over all, I like the premise, the story-line and the characters. I am looking forward to seeing where you go with this and will keep it on my WL so I can check back on it as you make revisions.

Jenny

have added you to my watchlist to read at a later date; would appreciate any input you could give me on my story. looking forward to reading the survivor who didn't.
kendra ann ziems/autumn lullaby

Duane,
Thanks for the comments. I think your remarks about Ch. 1 and the description of Janet in Ch. 3 are something I need to look into. As for S's limited computer time, all I can say is, you must be an Agatha Christie fan. You picked up on a clue that no one else has. The question you asked is a hook. I'll be interested to discuss this with you when you finish the book. And the TV production I described in some detail for verisimilitude and because the characters there are key to the story. If I let it get bogged down, at least there was a reason for it.

Again, thanks and I look forward to hearing from you more.

Hi Lee,
Here are a few specific and general comments.

Chapter One
"And Inmate 543-085 had killed him"
* No need to say this - it is strongly implied and you say it again two sentences later

Chapter Two
If S has a fast cable connection, why was his computer access often limited?

Chapter Three
You describe Ted but do not describe Janet - after your general remark about "brunette, sharp of both mind and looks", I'm interested in a little more.

I'm not sure, but I got a bit bogged down in your (too?) detailed descriptions of the island, the TV production and the TV crew

After four chapters, I am beginning to see the threads of the story coming together. It has a lot of promise!

Of course, that is an issue also affecting my book. A reader needs to be a bit patient to let a story develop. Many agants, unfortunately, make a decision after reading only a few pages. Your first chapter does serve to grab a reader's attention!

I am shelving this and will continue to read!

Cheers
Duane

Hi Lee,
Here are a few specific and general comments.

Chapter One
"And Inmate 543-085 had killed him"
* No need to say this - it is strongly implied and you say it again two sentences later

Chapter Two
If S has a fast cable connection, why was his computer access often limited?

Chapter Three
You describe Ted but do not describe Janet - after your general remark about "brunette, sharp of both mind and looks", I'm interested in a little more.

I'm not sure, but I got a bit bogged down in your (too?) detailed descriptions of the island, the TV production and the TV crew

After four chapters, I am beginning to see the threads of the story coming together. It has a lot of promise!

Of course, that is an issue also affecting my book. A reader needs to be a bit patient to let a story develop. Many agants, unfortunately, make a decision after reading only a few pages. Your first chapter does serve to grab a reader's attention!

I am shelving this and will continue to read!

Cheers
Duane

Hi. I only had time to brows through your work. I found the story interesting and plan to return for more reading and a detailed comment. As I’m very much pressed for time, tell me which chapter(s) you want me to pay special attention to.
Meanwhile, could you please check TO KILL A DEAD MAN? I will appreciate it.
Dan

Lee
I like the way that you've set this up, with seemingly random events which will no doubt converge at some future point. The convict, cleverly turning his error to his advantage, the mysterious S and his obsession with murder, the struggling tv producer and the dogged detectives. Got to the end of ch5 and the blood stained spears and thought...Lord of the Flies, they've all gone feral...but I'm sure that's not the case and there'll be twists and turns aplenty. Starred and reading on. Good luck with this Lee.

Babs

I understand this Lee

But an editor is more professional and an agent is a middle-man. I've had criticism off them in the past and have never got angry about it. I'm not annoyed and I did say I welcome all criticism etc but you offered nothing for me to work with in your explanation part from telling me what needs changing.

If you had've read on properly then you'd find out what goes on and that's why I felt a little cross because you're making judgmentsbased on the first chapter or so and now you're telling me you only skimmed chapter 23 when Kespian is involved throughout the whole story..

Nothing in the prologue actually ruins the plot because the biggest twist is regarding Searle and no one knows what that is until later and what the Emperor's intentions are.

It's simply telling people that their Goddess has vanished, he is the new heir and he treats the people disgracefully. He then goes onto say "the time will come..." but what is he referring to? The story is then set seven years later. We know nothing of what he is talking about at this stage apart from his desire to be like Anesidora but we don't know what he is going to do nor where she is.

Nothing here ruins any of the plot because we don't know what he actually intends to do but more so, how he intends to do it.

Why are they in the Underworld? What is the Emperor's game? What did he do? These are the questions that are later answered.

The story revolves around Searle because he is the key to it, hence the title. Again, if you read further, you'll find all this out.

Thanks

Will have a read of yours this weekend, hopefully, if not, next week.

Emma

I very much look forward to hearing what you have to say!

Lee

I understand this Lee

But an editor is more professional and an agent is a middle-man. I've had criticism off them in the past and have never got angry about it. I'm not annoyed and I did say I welcome all criticism etc but you offered nothing for me to work with in your explanation part from telling me what needs changing.

If you had've read on properly then you'd find out what goes on and that's why I felt a little cross because you're making judgmentsbased on the first chapter or so and now you're telling me you only skimmed chapter 23 when Kespian is involved throughout the whole story..

Nothing in the prologue actually ruins the plot because the biggest twist is regarding Searle and no one knows what that is until later and what the Emperor's intentions are.

It's simply telling people that their Goddess has vanished, he is the new heir and he treats the people disgracefully. He then goes onto say "the time will come..." but what is he referring to? The story is then set seven years later. We know nothing of what he is talking about at this stage apart from his desire to be like Anesidora but we don't know what he is going to do nor where she is.

Nothing here ruins any of the plot because we don't know what he actually intends to do but more so, how he intends to do it.

Why are they in the Underworld? What is the Emperor's game? What did he do? These are the questions that are later answered.

The story revolves around Searle because he is the key to it, hence the title. Again, if you read further, you'll find all this out.

Thanks

Will have a read of yours this weekend, hopefully, if not, next week.

Emma

Hi Lee

Regarding the feedback on my work, I think you're being too nit picky and it's really annoying me now. I've spent ages re-editing and changing the beginning too many times and this is what everyone much prefers. Whilst your are clearly not into fantasy - or have any imagination - it's a story and there isn't an answer to everything. The prologue is setting the scene for who Kespian is and what he is doing to the people - this is why it's a prologue and yes, it is necessary because without it, we don't get a full understanding of how everything is the way it is.

In addition, if you managed to read all the way to chapter 23, and being as analytical as you are, then you've clearly paid enough attention to want to read as far as you have - that to me, makes it a page-turner. You contradict yourself: you want more explanations of things, and then you say not to give too much away about Kespian and yet you also say what I've written is unecessary because we don't hear from him until chapter 23. It's almost like you're finding faults in my work that aren't actually there, rather than just reading the story and understanding what happens as it goes. I've written it like this to create mystery and awe, not to have all the answers splashed out but so the reader can figure it out as s/he goes. You also find out all this information later on when Casius talks to Searle - everything is revealed then so I don't understand what the problem is?

As for the Requiescat Palace, I did write that it is the former home of anesidora and you'll also find little things like the beautiful palace was now replaced with etc etc - even without these hints, it's pretty obvious that this new palace was once hers particularly since I said everything was replaced by evil i.e. statues of serpents etc.

As for the per se, I know I've already changed it but at the time of upload, it was 1am, I was very tired and probaly didnt scan through it properly. I know it's latin and know what it means but I believe it is right because he isn't quite her butler but effectively he acts as though.

Whilst I appreciate all feedback and understand my story isn't going to be to everyone's taste, I don't just want pages and pages of dialogue - I want imagination on paper not just explanations of the entire story.

I've already been writing the second one so a lot of answers are revealed then, too.

Just think, the biggest twist in history was when Luke Skywalker discovered Darth Vader was his father - if this had been revealed straight away, would it have had the same impact? No.

It's a fantasy...same with my story - it's supposed to be about Searle and the truth he unravels along the way.

I'm not going to change anymore of it. I think it runs smoothly and well, with plenty more action and dialogue than it used to have and twists that are later revealed.

Either way, whatever I do, I'm never going to satisfy everyone.

Whilst this is your opinion and you're entitled to it, you have offered nothing constructive but rather, told me basically it all needs changing again.

I do understand certain elements might not be to everyon'es taste but I'll be here forever til I'm old and grey with conflicting views about more description, too much dialogue, too little etc etc so I'm sorry to disappoint you but this is not going to be changed yet again.

Emma

Well, excuse me. Just trying to help. I did miss the reference that they were two different palaces, and I thank you for pointing that out. For the record, I did think you did a fine job of creating mystery in your prologue, but its ending gave away a bit too much, thus taking away some of the mystery you did create. That's all. You seem to think I want you to put everything in the prologue. Of course not. Your second prologue was much better than the first one I read, more action, less exposition, and when you look at it objectively, it actually tells somewhat less. That's good. It's what creates the mystery. Just suggestions, nothing more. You can do what you want. To be honest, I didn't read the whole 23 chapters. I just skipped ahead to find out when we ran in Kespian again. What I did read, though, I liked. If you're going to get annoyed if someone offers an opinion, you're going to have a very hard time working with an agent or an editor because they don't offer opinions. They will offer you hard and fast suggestions and you'd better be ready to defend yourself without getting annoyed with them. Trust me, I was not trying to annoy anyone.

Hi Lee

Regarding the feedback on my work, I think you're being too nit picky and it's really annoying me now. I've spent ages re-editing and changing the beginning too many times and this is what everyone much prefers. Whilst your are clearly not into fantasy - or have any imagination - it's a story and there isn't an answer to everything. The prologue is setting the scene for who Kespian is and what he is doing to the people - this is why it's a prologue and yes, it is necessary because without it, we don't get a full understanding of how everything is the way it is.

In addition, if you managed to read all the way to chapter 23, and being as analytical as you are, then you've clearly paid enough attention to want to read as far as you have - that to me, makes it a page-turner. You contradict yourself: you want more explanations of things, and then you say not to give too much away about Kespian and yet you also say what I've written is unecessary because we don't hear from him until chapter 23. It's almost like you're finding faults in my work that aren't actually there, rather than just reading the story and understanding what happens as it goes. I've written it like this to create mystery and awe, not to have all the answers splashed out but so the reader can figure it out as s/he goes. You also find out all this information later on when Casius talks to Searle - everything is revealed then so I don't understand what the problem is?

As for the Requiescat Palace, I did write that it is the former home of anesidora and you'll also find little things like the beautiful palace was now replaced with etc etc - even without these hints, it's pretty obvious that this new palace was once hers particularly since I said everything was replaced by evil i.e. statues of serpents etc.

As for the per se, I know I've already changed it but at the time of upload, it was 1am, I was very tired and probaly didnt scan through it properly. I know it's latin and know what it means but I believe it is right because he isn't quite her butler but effectively he acts as though.

Whilst I appreciate all feedback and understand my story isn't going to be to everyone's taste, I don't just want pages and pages of dialogue - I want imagination on paper not just explanations of the entire story.

I've already been writing the second one so a lot of answers are revealed then, too.

Just think, the biggest twist in history was when Luke Skywalker discovered Darth Vader was his father - if this had been revealed straight away, would it have had the same impact? No.

It's a fantasy...same with my story - it's supposed to be about Searle and the truth he unravels along the way.

I'm not going to change anymore of it. I think it runs smoothly and well, with plenty more action and dialogue than it used to have and twists that are later revealed.

Either way, whatever I do, I'm never going to satisfy everyone.

Whilst this is your opinion and you're entitled to it, you have offered nothing constructive but rather, told me basically it all needs changing again.

I do understand certain elements might not be to everyon'es taste but I'll be here forever til I'm old and grey with conflicting views about more description, too much dialogue, too little etc etc so I'm sorry to disappoint you but this is not going to be changed yet again.

Emma

Lee,
The Survivor Who Didn't is a mesmerizing story with all the elements needed for a successful thriller. The plot is highly original and the element of suspense is present throughout the captivating narrative. This is one game show I would never want to be a contestant on. Besides, my favorite with always be Pyramid. I've rated The Survivor Who Didn't with six stars.

Walden Carrington
Titanic: Rose Dawson's Story

Thanks for the stars. I read several chapters of "Titanic" and placed it on my bookshelf. Not quite sure it's my cup of tea and it's a little long for me, but I can certainly see a market for it. That's why I decided to back it. I think it deserves a close looksee by the HC editors. It's too bad you didn't write this when the movie was popular. People would have been absolutely clamoring for "the rest of the story" as Paul Harvey used to say. Good luck.

Lee Enderlin

Lee,
The Survivor Who Didn't is a mesmerizing story with all the elements needed for a successful thriller. The plot is highly original and the element of suspense is present throughout the captivating narrative. This is one game show I would never want to be a contestant on. Besides, my favorite with always be Pyramid. I've rated The Survivor Who Didn't with six stars.

Walden Carrington
Titanic: Rose Dawson's Story

A real who done it. You have a mystery that we get to follow. I have noticed some words missing in some of your sentences. We can fill in the blanks but I think you need to do that. For instance "What was real name again?" You get the point. I like it and I'm sure the audience you are looking for will too. Please check out "Just Out of Sight". I hope to make your bookshelf soon.
Craig (Bandof1)

Thanks for the heads-up. I made the fix. Do you recall where you might have seen others? For the life of me, I thought I'd taken care of all of those nasty typos! I'll definitely check out "Just Out of Sight" for you. It's the least I can do.
Lee Enderlin

A real who done it. You have a mystery that we get to follow. I have noticed some words missing in some of your sentences. We can fill in the blanks but I think you need to do that. For instance "What was real name again?" You get the point. I like it and I'm sure the audience you are looking for will too. Please check out "Just Out of Sight". I hope to make your bookshelf soon.
Craig (Bandof1)

:) I will comment on your book as soon as I have read it :) - let me know. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I have gold ******-rated your book because of the suspense of your "closed-door mystery."

If I get this website correctly, it looks like you're number one already—hope you hang on to get a read by editors. Good luck.

I'd say a good opening 2 chapters for this kind of genre. Not long but full of mystery, murder, suspense ... all causing intrigue for the reader. Good hooks. - I won't comment more as it's not really my genre but I'm sure you'll get a lot of comments and interest.

John
'The Lunatic Sings'

:) I will comment on your book as soon as I have read it :) - let me know. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I have gold ******-rated your book because of the suspense of your "closed-door mystery."