A Bias Made of Ribbon

Absolutely beautiful. I'd pick this up in a bookstore any day. You have an incredible voice.

What strikes me the most about your writing is the very unique voice that you write with. Not only do you start out with this voice - but you maintain it - well.

This is a really interesting opening - not gripping or action-packed - but it definitely kept my attention.

I think I would like to cozy up with a long tall glass of sweet southern iced tea and read this entire book...

Great stuff - very well written. There were simply no errors that stuck out at me - no part of the narrative that didn't flow.

Fabulous read.

- Rena (Bunderful) author of Master of the Miracles

I finished all you have uploaded and enjoyed every bit of it.
Well done.
Bill

Rhonda,
Two was splendid as well. The imagery of Aunt Irene as train taking her to knew places was beautiful.
Reading and writing all day isI turning me into disgusting ball of flab, so I'm off for a run. I'll go to three tonight or tomorrow.
Breach is breech when referring to upside down babies. Homonyms will be the death of me, so I'm glad one snared someone as talented as you. It makes me fell like less of a hack, petty yes, but less of a hack.

Best
Bill

Rhonda,
This is absolutely lovely. Lovely, that's not a word I use often, but it's the best descriptor for this. The opening paragraph is fantastic "it's like breathing air that's already been used." The voice is spot on, Twainesque, "I couldn't breath real good."
I'm off now to grab lunch (pho tofu, delicious, btw) and run errands. Will finish 2 and 3. I hope to rearrange my shelf in the upcoming weeks and will place you there.
If I have one critical suggestion it would be to lose the parenthetical, it seemed intrusive. easy enough, if you agree. you can just say he said the dingbats had written, then explain he said the dingbats were blah blah blah. Your words will be better, much better, than mine.
Bill
HAKTAW HEART

Rhonda,
I read the first chapter of A Bias Made of Ribbon and was enchanted by the chance encounter when Delores Maloney meets Bo Marks. You paint vivid images with words and these characters came alive in my imagination while I was reading. How charming for Bo to recite poetry to Delores. He's quite sophisticated for a supposed hobo and I found it delightful how these two young people connect in such a short time interval. I love these historical novels where the reader has the pleasure of coming to know fictional characters with the backdrop of real events which would have affected their lives during this time period. I found the narrative believable and wanted to know these characters better from having sampled some of the story they have been placed in. The dialect is sometimes unfamiliar to me as should be the case with historical fiction which transports the reader to another time and place the author has imagined while having researched the time period to become familiar with the people who lived then and how they would have talked and behaved. When one can envision the scene and wish they had time to read more of the story, the author has succeeded in capturing a reader and drawing them into the narrative.

Walden Carrington
Titanic: Rose Dawson's Story

'A Hist. Fic. group review'. Hello Rhonda ,greetings to Georgia from England! I'm going to put your book up for a group review , I assume you don't mind , but if there is a problem let me know. I have to be honest and say that i am a huge enthusiast for the American first person narrative(demotic or semi -demotic ) - Huckleberry Finn the Catcher in the Rye and a book which I feel might have been an influence on you - 'To Kill a Mockingbird ' - another of my favourite books is 'Little Big Man' by Thomas Berger ;I did actually once try to write a book in his style in that book (I'm 100% English/Scottish!) called 'Bloody Bill Anderson' , set in Missouri and Tennesse during the Civil War. I really liked your book enormously - the milieu , the speech ,the descriptions all flowed very naturally and were completely convincing and ,of course , the encounter with the hobo is highly reminiscent of the confrontation between Magwitch and Pip in 'Great Expectations' , I wish you all the very best with it. I wonder if you have the time to look at my novel 'A Buccaneer' an historical,adventure romance set in the 17th century and includes lost love , Cambridge University , the Great Plague of London , Sir Henry Morgan , the attack on Panama 1671 , a five handed duel , Spanish ladies and much more , with best wishes, Strachan Gordon

I really liked the first chapter! Rated it,and am gonna put on my watchlist.

The "U boat bombing off the coast of Georgia" was what got me in the pitch.

The dialogue is great and authentic enough without coming off as too "slangy" . I read a story recently,that was so thick in slang that it made it nearly impossible to get a flow going when reading it..

Anyhoo,Good start,gonna read the next Chapters,,hope there is more to come .

A heart warming tale that reveals the very best in us.

good story...you write it well and use effective dialogue. this is original, so l shall back...
read SEASONS...

Such a unique and fascinating story. Well written and easy to back.

Skater