Diabolical

SPOILERS!!!!!!!!

I loved your book! I couldn't put it down! Although I had a hard time believing it was over. I want to see more with her and nick with their deal. Her real dad (i can only imagine her reaction!) Sam alec rachel dennis and marv. Theres def room for more than one more book. I love the world you created! Please tell me youre working on a second book!

SPOILERS!!!!!!!!

I loved your book! I couldn't put it down! Although I had a hard time believing it was over. I want to see more with her and nick with their deal. Her real dad (i can only imagine her reaction!) Sam alec rachel dennis and marv. Theres def room for more than one more book. I love the world you created! Please tell me youre working on a second book!

This book sounds WICKED!! ; ) I glanced at first chapter, and will certainly read more.

I NEVER do this, but I am backing your book on the first chapter alone. You had me laughing outloud continuosly throughout. I wish I had more time today...you're sense of humor and writing style are absolutely great! Oh, lord...still laughing. : )

The clever short pitch tempted me and I read the first couple of chapters. I thought this was funny and dark, the writing had me thinking of Dead Like Me and Dexter. Devon, Rachel and Shani are nicely-drawn characters, full of fun, quirky and amusing, and I thought the dialogue between them was excellent. For all his sins I couldn't help but feel sorry for Josh, I suppose it's a bloke thing. I thought the writing was good, full of delightful, inventive comic touches. Only nitpick, I thought the scene in the restaurant in c2 went on a bit. A very enjoyable read though. Well-starred and on my WL for further reading. Good luck with this.

Hi Nicole, I made a start on this tonight and what an opening! I love the feisty heroine. Anti-herione? No, definitely heroine! There's nothing missing, nothing surplus. Everything's just right. And there's some lovely comic touches - not least the the omnipresent broom. I'll be back to read some more and will be backing this as soon as I can free up some shelf space (hopefully tomorrow).

Mark, The Devil's Fan Club

very good, very very good, love the hip lingo, the visuals and the humor, a great package all in all (no pun intended)
5 stars for you Nicole
Daisy May Longwood
Backed!

HaHa fab........I will definitely be reading more of this. I love the dry humour, the quick pace, the small sentences, the thoughts and the actions of your character . She seems fierce and a little heartless yet although this should make me not like her it does the opposite, I find her Intriguing and this is down to how unconventional she is.

You have made me laugh so much already and I have only read the first chapter........ I will continue with this and let you know what I think.

ps if ya get time have a look at mine (A Rose so Deadly) and tell me what you think , its a fantasy/ supernatural/ romance. Thanks if ya get the chance.

Devon is a great character in this. The opening scene is well judged and the dialogue authentic. Read up to end of ch2 and the pace and interest is maintained. First person, present tense narrative is notoriously difficult but you are managing it well.With such a good MC and other realistic characters I am beginning to wonder why your tale needs to take the supernatural turn indicated in the pitch, but I'll certainly be visiting again to find out.

Nicole,
Loving the dark humor in this. I just read the first couple of chapters and plan on reading more, but I wanted to let you know that I'm totally enjoying this. Your characters are a bit over the top, but lots of fun. I want to know what Rachel was doing under the table when she overheard her husband's nephews. :-D

The only thing that made me go 'huh?' was the introduction of Shani. You start talking about her at the beginning of Chap. 2 and I couldn't figure out if it was a person (which I was assuming) or some kind of nickname for a type of person.

Fantastic work! Best of luck,
Em

Wow, like a shotgun blast to the face - straight forward and effective.
Love your sense of dark humor and strong female character, reminds me of my work.

I would change "Josh tries to impede me"
Something more simple would work better, like:
Stop, get in my way, prevent ect.
I do it all the time, trying to put fancy words where they dont belong.

Also, "And to think I was starting to like him"
To me that does not make any sense. They have been together for a year, and she just starts to like him? It made me pause and it did not feel right to me.

Great style, I love it. Looking forward to reading the rest. Why cant more women write like this, instead of the usual candyass rubbish?
/Gordon
Alex and Katija. Partners in Sleaze

I love that you've written this from your character's perspective, but maybe be careful when writing in her personality breaks rules of writing.

The broom element in this made me laugh so hard, you're great at balancing comedy with the seriousness of emotion in this.
:)

I'll read more when I'm not sleepy, but I'm glad I stayed up to read this!