I HAVE COUNTED YOUR TOES

Quite a devastating first chapter , which I can only assume must be a dream sequence , if not we're in trouble! very powerful and extremely well-written. Watchlisted ans starred. I wonder if you would be able to look at the first chapter of my book called 'A Buccaneer' which is about Pirates in the 17th century , with best wishes from Strachan Gordon.

Hi Sheila,
You have got this off to a great start. I imagine we’ll get linked back to the prologue later on in the book?
This is very nicely written and easy to read. You capture different scenes and emotions very capably. I particularly like how you seamlessly link in events or anecdotes from times prior to your main chronological story line. This can often interrupt the flow but in your case, does nothing of the sort.
If I have one suggestion, it would be to limit the times you use phrases along the lines of “If only we knew then…”. “Little did we know…” etc. Once you’ve mentioned it once or twice, perhaps give your readers credit that they have got the message.
Will be coming back to check if you put up more chapters.
Best.

Sheila,
What a tragic first chapter. It got my attention and i couldn't stop reading, wondering if this was a dream sequence. I felt your pain as you saw Andrew struggle, not knowing what was afflicting him.
Will look forward to reading more when you upload.Good start.:)
Maria
Dark of the Moon

I found this opening chapter very rich and moving, compelling me to read on. Chapter 2 set in Africa is beautifully written, colouful and sets the scene. I think the piece at the start would look better if you reformat and remove those big spaces between your quote, as it will look neater and easier to read. well done.
Lindsey J To Paint A White Horse

Having just read the first chapter, I can tell that this is a moving story. The words captivate like poetry and you're forced to join the story teller in willing her son's dead body to Live! Live! Live!
Applause for your book!