The Hoodie and the Humpback

Thank you for your backing Pete... I have placed your book on my watchlist and will give it a read! I hope you find the time to read some of mine, and give some honest feedback! JF

Ch1 worked as a scene for me, like the opening sequence in a film, but didn't give me a handle on where you are taking the story. I think you might need a hook that has some promise of what is to come. The story itself is somewhat depressing (not the writing I should add) and I am starting to think we are returning to an Elizabethan world of grubby Baldricks with blackened teeth and a middle class who suffer them. Perhaps it has always been the same. Anyway your story evoked some contemplation. These themes are becoming quite prevalent. I would use a different word to 'relieved' in your third last sentence, it is far too polite given the language. Overall very competent. If there is to be some joy and relief as your title suggests you may have to get readers through that first chapter or perhaps have something before it that alludes to something more than the misery of the estates. Most readers here review Ch1 and move on. I'm not saying dumb it down, but if you are not getting the reads or comments you want it may be something to consider down the track.
Cheers
Norton