Projector (Book 1 - The Making of Leon Black)

amazing opening. "and something in my head called the projector" its so good man. oddly i'm drafting a comedy horror set in edinbrugh too. You can tell that u have put effort into the craft of writing, tight and fast paced, and no over descriptive bollocks.

PROJECTOR!!!!

This was a fantastic book to read. Fun and fast paced I finished what you have uploaded without taking a break. Good luck with this!

I like the premise and detest bullies! Go for it! Backed!

Dear Philip,
I know you are not seeking feedback on 'The Projector,' but after reading all eight chapters posted here, I simply must comment. This is such a well-written, powerful piece! I was right there in Leon's head from the very first paragraph. I love it when that happens! You have perfectly captured the use first person. Leon's voice is believable and straightforward, remaining consistent in his five-year-old days clear through to when he says: "I was 15, not five."

In addition, your writing style is wonderfully natural and engaging. You have impacted this piece with witty humor ("Einstein") and some really powerful, touching lines: ("...unloading the trappings of our old life..." and "The world is such a big place when you're small").

The themes of grief and bullying tugged at my heart and prompted me to keep reading, even though this genre is not my typical read. The authentic human elements here make this story relevant to so many young adults today as it connects with struggles they actually face. Highest compliments and stars for this piece! A job very well done.

All the best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

PROJECTOR
This is an interesting story: a mixture of sci fi and bullying. The first chapter is a good introduction to Leon’s powers (altho it seemed to go on a little longer than necessary to make the point). The prediction that things would go wrong at the end of the chapter is a good lead-in to the rest of the story. Chapter 2: I think someone before Mr. Spock said nature abhors a vacuum, but okay. Because bullying is such an “in” topic, I think you’ll find a young adult audience waiting to read this. I’m adding it to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

Phil, I really enjoy the story so far - wasn't sure at first but it has great interest and is developing into a 'I have to know what happens with Leon and how does he combat Carl'. Very easy to read and many will enjoy the story. Looking forward to more. Jim

Dear Philip,
‘Projector’ redefines the dark superhero / antihero genre. But, hang on. That’s still an understatement. The story is not only well conceived and beautifully written, but every word of it bears testimony to the author’s intelligence and the careful thoughts that he has put into every sequence. I read it till chapter 8 and it was one of my smoothest reads yet. I was swept along by the powerful but easy narrative. At the end, I was only reminded of two of my favourite quotes from this genre: ‘It’s not who you are but what you do that defines you.’ (Batman Begins) and ‘You always have a choice.’ (Hellboy, I think).
6-starred and backed with pleasure.
Regards,
AGC

Thanks Janet but all of the editing has been done now and it has been posted to Kindle and Smashwords while I continue approaching agents. I didn't actually put it here for the Ed's desk but it might be interesting if it got there.

You book comes highly recommended by my good friend, John.

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your narrative and dialogue both work very well together to make this story work...flows well too and easy to read...
on my watchlist...
read SEASONS...

Hi fellow YA writer. This was an interesting read. I guess it's written from a future perspective? I found the phrase 'and knew little about the evil ways of man....' quite chilling, since before that, I'd assumed it was a young boy speaking, but that is such a world weary phrase that I realised that it wasn't. It made me start to wonder what was going to happen to make him feel that way.

The idea of the projector is good, and you set things up in chapter one so that it seems that this gift could only be a good thing, but then you let us know in that last line, (and in that chilling foreshadowing) that this is not to be the case. Reading on.
Cariad.