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rank 1862
word count 18435
date submitted 29.10.2011
date updated 29.10.2011
genres: Fiction, Fantasy, Young Adult
classification: universal
incomplete

The Dragon's Pendant (The Secret of Arking Down: Book Two)

Kira Morgana

Coping with day to day life is hard as a teenager. A bad hair day is one thing, but a bad scale day?

 

A Levels are always stressful. For Caoimhe they were about to become a whole lot harder. Losing her steady boyfriend to another school at the beginning of Sixth Form was bad enough; becoming a Dragon as well made things an awful lot worse.

I hope you enjoy reading my work and any comments of a serious critical nature will be appreciated. Please bear in mind that this is the first draft and I am aware that it may be filled with grammar and spelling mistakes - I'd prefer comments about the story if you can manage it!

Complete at 59k words

 
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angels, cats, dragons, fantasy, teenagers, ya

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Jo Hervey wrote 187 days ago

This is fun. I'm certainly not a teenager, but I enjoyed the ride. As you asked, I won't mention the little things. Each chapter ends with a hook, you have created a good character in Caoimhe - loved her encounters with her other persona. The talking cat is great and you have certainly given Snowdrop a personality, not so much Ghost. Having read thru Chapter 7 I've only just met Mike. I think perhaps it might help to add a little bit more about him when C talks to her friend at school so we have some background of their relationship. When you talk about the hockey game you never actually mention what the game is. That isn't going to work for everybody.

You haven't laboured the explanation of this world and I like that. I'd be interested to know what age you're aiming at. Early teens? Anyway, there's lost of action, a villain, a quest, talking cats and dragons. I like the way it's headed and I wish you all the best with it.

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John Booth wrote 206 days ago

I like this a lot.

I think the prologue needs a little modification here and there to increase the dramatic tension. But that's too complex for me to offer suggestions here. When my brain is working I could show you what I mean.

Chapter 1 and 2 are excellent. In fact, I have this sudden desire to write a story involving a talking cat :-)

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