Take Me Drunk, I'm Home

Just read first two chapters, lovely writing style, good pace and well-observed humour, it's on my watchlist.

Loved every single word I read of 'Take Me Drunk'. It's laugh-out-loud funny, well written and pacy. Charlie is a great character and it's impossible not to root for him. There are some marvellous comedy moments, the meeting with Tarzan being one of them. Will be back to read more when time permits but in the meantime, excellent stuff. Highly starred and lined up for my shelf.

Melanie
La Vie en Rosé

Love the title, the style, the humor. I laughed out loud, particularly at the part about the wife-swapping (safety glasses to look at the women in Clonhill). I am going to shelve and read on.

I had to read the book. The title drew me in but thebook kept me reading. Michael Caine, Tarzan and to see his wife naked kept a smile on my face. I'm definately coming back to read more! Well done.
Cheers, Red
Illusions of Comfort

Comlit review of Take Me Drunk, I'm Home.

Loved reading Take me Drunk, I'm home. I would describe it as similar to a Nick Hornby or Mike Gayle book with a bit more intrigue and mystery.
All the time I was reading it, found myself wanting to read more and more , pushed on by little clues here and there.
The pitch which had me laughing out loud. Really draws you into the story.

Brilliant first few lines that tell us so much without having to say much at all. Instantly makes us like Charlie, feel a bit sorry for him as well
even though he seems a bit hapless and delusional- "pending her apology" bloody cheek!

Tarazan! LOL moment! There's loads of them- "splinter group of the mothers union" "stacking problems like beans at asda"

I've seen a couple of reviews from the editors desk lately that discourage the use of popular culture references.
this confused me a bit as you see them in published books all the time,
and I reckon if you want to throw in a Daniel O'Donnell or two, that's fine by me.
I think Malcolm being a property bloke is a brilliant touch.


End of chapter 7 really makes you want to read on. There's loads of stuff like that actually including him having to call Malcolm Palmer in chapter ten.


Wasn't sure what "after Barbara, he'd love to have Jill" exactly meant. Did it mean he wanted to get off with Jill? Why after Barbara.
Wasn't sure if this meant, he'd prefer Barbara and but settle for Jill, or if he was so fed up with Barbara, he might like to go for someone like Jill.
Might be worth expanding if it's relevant later? Could just be me not understanding properly.

Now I am going to say something weird- It was the title which initially made me want to have a look at the book-
It suggested to me it would be a very bloke-lit type book, but now I've read what you have here, I'm not sure if it fits the story?
Doesn't hint at the intrigue and unravelling plot. But like I said, it was what made me read it in the first place and I am so glad I did,
Thanks very much for the laughs, Robert! Thoroughly enjoyed it- real laugh out loud read.

Finally, I have to know, is this Ulster Fry actually available in a real place Benidorm?
Potato cakes AND soda farls trump the Full English at The Guiness Bar in Beni!

Loved the first chapter. Started a bit slow but as I read on it was really funny at times and I can see your MC is a little delusional and has a lot to learn. I'm interested to know if he can change enough to win back his wife even though at this point I think he'd be better off finding a new woman. Anyway giving this high stars and will back at the beginning of next month when some space opens on my shelf. Good luck.

Jennie Lyne Hiott
Hearts and Lies

Hi, Robert.

I just finished your first chapter and was rewarded with several chuckles. I really like Charlie and I'm rooting for him. I look forward to his further adventures and how he handles, and reacts to, his adversities ahead. He is delightfully flawed, which I love in a comic hero. Good dialogue, character, and situation in the first chapter. Look forward to reading more, but it's bedtime. I know, more information than you needed, but truth be damned. I'm putting this on my bookshelf and wish you well with this book. Writing funny is hard to do, and you are doing it well.

D.D. Larsen
The Legend of Butterfield Farm

Robert, what a cracking tale you have going here. I was looking for a little humor or is it humour and lucked out with your tale. I am putting it on my WL and will digest a few chapters tonight. I am sure it will be a great read. Swimming dialogue by the way. Chippewa Ferguson

Backed Take Me Drunk, I’m Home. Charlie’s made me smile, Barbara’s letter brought a chuckle, but Charlie meeting Tarzan was laugh out loud funny! I will definitely read further. Want to know if Charlie follows through on his three step solution for getting Barbara back or does it lead to an adventure he will never forget.

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Good luck on Authonomy. Hope you will find time to take a look at our book, Dark Side.
CC Brown

Hi Robert

I've read four chapters, and I like it. It is humorous, of course, and well written. Very little stood out to me over those chapters:

I can't make sense of the line 'True, they had learned a valuable lesson.' Or the fact that the next bit starts with 'But'.

Hang on! I'm confused - I thought Charlie THOUGHT that he'd left of his own accord, when in reality she'd kicked him out - I thought that was the humour of it.

'to who it matters' or 'to whom it matters'? I can never work out who/whom when it comes to plurals :(

The fact that whathisface souns like Michael Caine might mean more if we know this is Ireland beforehand. It made me assume it was London.

bee-line

Is it 'if he were' or 'if he was'? Isn't 'were' for a more hypothetical thing, rather than he IS in trouble, but past tense?

'Talk about a lack of trust' is not a question.

'fitter, richer and happier, all the things Charlie was not.' That doesn't read right to me - first, I think it should be a semicolon rather than a comma. But most of all, I think it would read better as 'fit, rich and happy; all the things Charlie was not.'

'Close one door(,) open another'

So far, no laugh out loud moments, but as I said, very good. Charlie isn't entirely likeable; I don't know if that's intentional or not, but Palmer certainly is unlikeable. Babera, I'm not sure about. There's not much of her there in order for us to be rooting for Charlie to get her back - aside from our dislike of Palmer. Anyway, I'll back it. Good luck with it :)

I'd appreciate if you have a chance to give my own book a read and a comment, too. Thanks :)

I've read the first five chapters and found it hilarious. I want to finish reading it before I give a full comment but you've written some great stuff here. Six stars and immediately backed. I'll finish it all shortly and I'm sure I'll enjoy doing so. All the best.

High stars and on my WL. Yours Bea

Take Me Drunk, I'm Home is a fun, fast-paced read. Despite his many flaws, the reader roots for Charlie as he attempts to regain his wife and his life. The writing is slick and polished. I've given it high stars.
Good luck with this. I think it would be highly marketable.
Valerie

This is really funny! Reminds me of Colin Bateman's writing, the OCD detective in the Damn Sexy Trousers book.

Need more of that kind of thing around.

Keep writing and keep plugging :)

Best wishes, Lisa

Hi Robert
This is top-notch entertainment - sharp, witty and extremely well-written to boot! Great fun.
Kat xx High stars.

A style and sense of humour close to my own heart...great fun to read!
Good luck
Stewart

You had me at 'transgender thug on a zimmer.'

Will get back to you when I've read it.
Cariad.

Hi Robert!

I read and reviewed this book on Youwriteon a while ago, and enjoyed your first 7,000 words, so I thought I'd back it on here.

Cheers,
Chris :D

Intelligent and slick, lovely stuff, you are clearly writing about a subject that you know well. I enjoy your easy style, the dialogue is smart and crisp.
The comedy is convincing and a delight to read, a book to savour!
Only read a couple of chapters so far but will definitely pick this one up again soon. For the moment I will give this work 5 stars but am confident that it will make six.
Well done, let me know if you want any vocab or grammar comments - some writers object. Not that I've seen anything untoward yet.

regards

Cyrus

Funny! Love the dialogue. Happy to place your work on my shelf. Hope you have a chance to take a look at Dark Side by CC Brown.
Sue50

This sound like someone who has published for years. This is a best seller. Highly rated
I wonder if the title might sound too flippy, though - screening out all the very intelligent readers as moi :-)
I opened it only because of Joe's love for it
best of luck here - your book will rise fast!
if you have time, would you take a look at "when fear comes back to Love" ?
best
Leelah Saachi

I could not stop laughing as I read through the first chapter. I'm impressed that the writer is a man. The woman's POV was certainly nailed! I got a kick out of some of the words that must be unique to Ireland. I love how Charlie is in denial. He is the one who left, but insists she threw him out. How funny...and typical :) I can't wait to read more.

This is the first book I’ve read on here that I’ve immediately placed on my shelf only half way through the first chapter!
Read it as if I was reading a published book. Saw no errors. This is extremely well edited and hugely entertaining. Your first chapter had me chuckling out loud, my husband wanted to know what was so funny! As did the end of chapter 4. Charlie is fantastic. I’m hoping he and Barbara get back together at some stage, unless he meets someone better.
Happy to give this some shelf time, and have given it six stars :-)
Tammy Robinson

Charlie is obviously in a bit of a sorry state, he comes across as an unmotivated waste-of-space drunkard, yet I still feel sorry for him! What a cow Barbara is as well, not even having the guts to ask for a divorce face-to-face, sending the sleazy Malcolm to do her dirty work instead.
I like your writing a lot. It is easy to envisage the people and places you describe. It’s not hard work which means you can just enjoy the story instead.
If I had one nit-pick it would be when he returned to the house to reconcile with Barbara and found her with Malcolm – why does his front door key still work?! If I had separated from my husband I would have changed the locks, I wouldn’t like the thought that he could still walk in whenever he felt like it. Maybe even though his key didn’t work he remembered where the spare was always kept? Only my personal opinion/suggestion, this was the one thing that stuck out to me, feel free to ignore!
Best of luck with this, I will be treating it to some shelf time.

Hi Robert,
This is a great romp of a read. I just started and have already reached the end of Chapter Four – still waiting for the dead body wrapped in the Shroud of Old Trafford though!
I love the irreverent humour and will definitely be reading on.
I haven’t much in the way of constructive criticism. The only thing I would suggest that in the first chapter Barbara would be more likely to wrap the towel around “herself” rather than “her”.
Wishing you every success with this.
Best.

Hi Robert,

This was recommended to me by Joe K so I had a read.

It's a light-hearted, enjoyable story with well-worked observational humour. It reminds me of Simon Pegg's film 'Run, Fatboy, Run' in terms of storyline and Nick Hornby/Tony Parsons in terms of the wry, mannish humour. But this has got the added plot bonus of a murder mystery. Lovely!

Btw, I think Joe k's suggestion of 'Get Palmer' as an alternative title is inspired.

Not much to crit: I think some of the dialogue is over-written (only just!) and the old 'show/tell' balance may need a little adjustment, but again, not much.

Overall, this has a lot going for it - good luck.

Best wishes,

Terry

ps; my shelf is over-laden with commitments, but I know a joiner who can help ....

This story immediately appealed to me as i love the idea of a whodunnit with humour. Wonderful.

Though some of the humour was distinctly boyish, who cares? I have read the first three chapters and the story is unfolding nicely. You manage to weave the different strands of the story with a light touch and empathy that keeps us interested.

All the best with this. Rated.

Fran Macilvey, "Trapped"

This is priceless.... laugh out loud funny. Got to hand it to you, buddy, great dialogue, great premise - does remind me a bit of High Fidelity - the voice I mean, just to clarify - but hey, Nick Hornby - eat your heart out! Good stuff.

Starred and shelved.

Mick

First-rate narrative, cracking dialogue, and funny as hell without sacrificing pathos. Charlie is my new favorite protagonist on Authonomy (and I'm only three chapters in).

(Last line of Ch. 1 had me slumping in my chair from laughter. Brilliant set-up/comic timing.)

Welcome to my shelf. (Thanks to Wussyboy for highly recommending I take a look.)

Prepare yourself for a rapid rise up the ranks.

Best,

GL

Good comedy is notoriously difficult to write, Robert, but you've managed it. This is wonderful stuff - kind of like Get Carter meets Nick Hornby, but with an Irish twist. I loved the Michael Caine refs ('Get Palmer' would be great alternative title) and the dry, witty, snappy dialogue. Based on the first two chapters alone, I think you're onto a winner.

High starring you, mate, and will return to read more.

Joe Kovacs
Rupee Millionaires

p.s. My eye only caught in two places: chap 1, where there are 3 'you's' or 'your's' in two lines. Might read better as 'That's right!' or 'Dead right!' instead of 'You're dead right'. And chap 2, para 1, which might read better as 'Not surprising THEN, that when...' Only suggestions, feel free to ignore.

Oooo...this looks like a good one! I'm adding to my watchlist and will make comments once I read more. Georgia
ESCAPE (young adult fiction/urban fantasy)

I was pulled into this story immediately, and I think your storyline is fantastic! Backed, and I would really like to see this one succeed!

Best,

Michelle Mills
~ Willow Lake Manor ~

This is a fun read helped along by some fine writing. Charlie is an endearing character brought to life by some skillful dialogue and narrative. I'm through the first two chapters after telling myself, "just another few paragraphs". My God, this is hard to put down.