New World

P.S. change the first sentence of your pitch, it is rhetorical.

Cyrus

Clever enough stuff but far too didactic for my taste, I don't expect there are too many laughs in this book but I'll have a go at one of the others.

regards

Cyrus

Powerful and beautiful writing. I liked your poetry very much. To be publishable, it needs a little editing here and there to straighten out phrases which do not conform with normal written English, but it would be well worth finding someone who could help you with this,

regards, Rosemary

Having read your other books which were good , this I think is the best as it really makes you think and question what we take for granted - the combination of prose and poetry was risky but I felt it was effective for the subject of the book so well done !

Steph

A very profound read, especially liked the first two chapters. I had to delete The Flag to make room for A New World and will try to read the third when I have time. Please take a look at my books Partners and Donna632.
Richard McStay

Huerfo, You asked if I would read your books and I have read some chapters from two of them. In the one here, I can see where you're going with this. I am a Christian and therefore my viewpoint comes from that direction. For me, the only way the world makes sense is looking at things as they relate to scripture, and Jesus said, this world has serious problems, and will have. "In the world you will have problems..." but he also said don't look to the world for your answers. Now I am not making an attempt to preach to you. I am simply offering you my response to your own interpretation of things.

As far as your writing ability, I think you do well as a writer. (And I'm also referring back to one of the other books you wrote. "The Flag") I think at times it's a little hard for the reader (maybe just me) because you seem to mix poetry verse with storyline, but you certainly show great ability in both. There's a lot of depth to your writing. I think that's the word I want. You're expressive and you make an impression on the reader. Any cursing I would suggest you remove, but that would be my personal preference.

thank you, Hurefo, for the invitation to read your books. I hope you will continue on.

Long pitch - 'It has divided human being into...' should be human being'

Kia ora Hurefo,

Just time for one chapter before work but I really enjoyed your writing. It's strange how these venerated documents are not put under scrutiny; we do it with policy documents which influence our live -why not the most important and influential documents of all?
I like your open mindedness and humane nature - I especially liked your example about fate -can we swap a slum dwelling kid with a child born to be president? Of course! I worked voluntarily an impoverished village in Nepal and met some incredibly intelligent children who, given the opportunity and conditions, could have reached the lofty heights of leadership you describe. I also worked at London School of Economics as a helper to a disabled student and realised that I was not inferior to the privileged students walking those halls -all that separates us and them is to be born into wealth and opportunity - I don't accept this as fate. I have had some remarkable coincidences in my life and they only happened when my mind my clear and open -when I thought 'could' not 'should'..... perhaps there a predetermined plan for us -but we can only access that plan and that fortune if we have an open, free mind.

Thanks for the thought-provoking writing -I'll be back for more
6 stars for now -for your inquisitivenes

best,
Kaal Kaczmarek

Hi. Hurefo,
I thoroughly enjoyed your rebel-rousing as it tells of an inquisitive mind who is not contended with the established rules or historical downloads via the authorities. Your logical discourse shows a gift for thinking independently, something which separates you from many others in the world, as I hold the view that all of us live under conditions of a strange state of hypnosis which is fuelled daily by the media and the ruling classes.

I fear though, that your explanations will not be shared as a valid struggle for freedom of thought and mind, but instead might offend - not only your muslim kinfolk, but a whole range of different believers, in which case you may be aligning yourself with the negativity of an atheist cause.
However, the arguments are intriguing and will probably upset many, but that should not stop you from finding what you wish to find - a living Almighty force which satisfies tradition as well as providing a path of personal communication with mankind.

I think you are very brave!!

Ame
Normsville Trilogy

Dear Hurefo,

Your writing tells me that you think in your native tongue and then you translate that literally in English when you put your pen to paper (or rather fingers to keyboard); Interesting.

We all want to change the world, my friend. But no single idea is strong enough. And removing religion from the sombre face of Mother Earth will certainly not make her smile. Trust me, I’m not religious, but I’ve given it some thought as well. Men fought and killed each other even before they invented fire.

You see, the spiritual are somewhat fortunate in this regard. Do you know why? It’s because they realise that the only way to live life meaningfully is to face each day with courage, integrity and love. Because nothing lasts forever and nothing is real. And for this, they don’t need to depend on or offer prayers to an idol.

But do you think everyone’s equally fortunate? Sadly, the answer is no. The collective majority is troubled and misguided and is in need of someone or something outside of their own self to show them the way forward. There can only be two answers to this problem, literacy and religion. At a deeper level, both were designed to serve the same purpose. Ironically, today the former is only accessible to a limited number, whereas the latter is practically free.

So, what is the real problem? Is it religion? money? societal norms? Hard to say, really. But if you ask me, I think its people. Not all, just some of them. Religious scriptures are subject to interpretation. And interpretation requires literacy. Think about it.

Best regards,
AGC