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rank 3227
word count 19482
date submitted 29.11.2008
date updated 10.02.2009
genres: Fiction, Thriller
classification: universal
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"The Other Place"

Jane Doe

Kay is pulled to the Other Place and is seized, both body and mind. Is it Epilepsy? Mental Illness? Or something darker?

 

Kay is the daughter with the affliction. She is diagnosed with Epilepsy and she and Joyce, her mother, struggle with the medical community to try to understand the illness and to find a cure or a way to adapt to the symptoms. Kay is later diagnosed with mental illness. The line between the two is thin. Then Kay is suspected of being possessed. Here the lines between the suspected reasons for the afflictions, become even more clouded. Kay is pulled to the Other Place and is seized, both body and mind. Epilepsy is, by definition, unexplained seizures. Mental illness is also medically unexplained. And then there is the possibility of evil seizing.

 
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JAK wrote 1264 days ago

Hi jane,
I don't think i've read any other book on this site (an i've read a lot of books) which is written in quite this way. I've just finished the third chapter and have scrolld up to the blurb again wondering if had been reading biography of some kind. The sincerity of your work is so evident as is the depth of insight. This raw edginess compelled me to read on and i am very pleased that i have done so.
In terms of conventional 'authorial skills' the Other Place is all over the place but i am not sure that it matters as you have discovered youyr own ways of telling your story and do it with utter conviction which I found very moving. Well done; good luck.

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zenup wrote 1264 days ago

Top marks for getting straight into the action, the 'turn' in the pool. I did have some problem with the changing POV, though: you start with Kay, then swap to Joyce, then to omni in the paragraph starting 'Father was rarely at home..' and, just a suggestion, if you tried the 'show' not 'tell' method, your backstory on the father would be more powerful, I think. eg show us the action.
..'told several people at church', this came as a surprise. Somehow I didn't associate the father with churchgoing but that's my reaction.
'Kay had never seen people with so little enjoying themselves'. also 'Kay began to befriend others less fortunate than her.' I'd be careful of making Kay sound patronising. You want the reader to connect with her, I think. You did a good job describing how she felt during the 'turn' - well done. I actually wanted to check this story out because 'The Other Place' is also a collection of short stories by JB Priestley, one or two of them haunting/memorable. So I definitely like the title!

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JAK wrote 1264 days ago

Hi jane,
I don't think i've read any other book on this site (an i've read a lot of books) which is written in quite this way. I've just finished the third chapter and have scrolld up to the blurb again wondering if had been reading biography of some kind. The sincerity of your work is so evident as is the depth of insight. This raw edginess compelled me to read on and i am very pleased that i have done so.
In terms of conventional 'authorial skills' the Other Place is all over the place but i am not sure that it matters as you have discovered youyr own ways of telling your story and do it with utter conviction which I found very moving. Well done; good luck.

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