The Salad Days

I have to say I am really intrigued by this title... very original! But then looking at the short and long pitch I wonder why you've called it that... guess I'll need to read it to find out!
A few small points to help you tighten your writing... watch your tenses - you have "I shout" but "He cried"... you need to be consistent about whether this is happening in the present or the past. Also, there is a school of thought that says that the most common dialogue tag should be "said", and not the variations on said like "begged", "cried" etc. that's because our brain tends to filter out "said" and so it doesn't draw too much attention to itself, so we get to stay in the story. Also watch out for adverbs. You probably don't need "angrily" since you have "shouted". Or you could show us he's angry, eg "his nostrils flaring"....
Hope that's helpful, but if not - ditch it.. I'm an unpublished writer after all!

After reading the first few chapters, here are some thoughts -

Amaya is a girl unsure of herself, who wants to be loved, and puts herself in some awful situations. I think you made that very believable. Without unnecessary back story you jump right into her abusive relationship with Rex - which is good. I found it easy to picture Amaya as an insecure girl who has no idea how to get out of her relationship, and so far, it isn't clear that she wants to...but I am rooting for her.

I think an edit with a fine tooth comb would clean this up a lot - there is definite potential.

I agree with elle. This has strong potential.

Rex is such a jerk! No, worse, and I hate him. When a man lays a hand on my bottom, I want it in a good way. You do a great job depicting him to bring out black anger as you did in readers like me. You don't overdo it but reach a good balance, so that we want terrible things to happen to him.

Thanks, Vaiish. It's on my shelf!

Thanks so much, means a lot to me!

Good pace and a strong opening.
Nice introduction to your characters, that are well rounded and convincing.
The dialogue adds to your writing and fills out this well written piece.
Well-written ending to the chapters that I fell will entice readers to carry on into the next chapter.
I found this a very good read, which is easy to read.
Well done.

Thanks Michi... Coming from a wonderful author like you... it encourages me more! Thanks a lot!

Your book is moving and emotionally riveting. I can relate to the conflicted emotions of your main character, the fears and the hooked feelings to the creepy guy. Very easy to read!
michelle
Dummies for Dating

awwe! Thanks...really! :)

I liked your pitch as it had a little of everything to it. I read the first three chapters and I'm enjoying the story so far.
5 stars :) Good luck with getting this to the ED's.
:)
Christina

Thanks a lot... First comment... Me happy! Glad you enjoyed it!! Would love to here my flaws...

I've added this to my watchlist :) enjoying it so far, I'll give a detailed review once I've read more. Keep up the good work.