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rank 3540
word count 12748
date submitted 11.01.2012
date updated 07.05.2012
genres: Fiction, Comedy
classification: moderate
incomplete

The Man with the ants in his eyes.

M P Thorp

The Man with the Ants in His Eyes is Oliver's tale, it has bikes, boobs and bubbles, donkey jackets, Doc Martens and a dead workman.

 

If you read only one book this year you're obviously a bit of a moron. Prove me wrong by making sure it's this one. The Man with the Ants in His Eyes is Oliver's tale, it has bikes, boobs and spirit level bubbles. It has donkey jackets, Doc Martens and dead workmen.

Enjoy his gentle nature as he reads his precious books. Marvel as he tapes Top of the Pops off the radio. Gasp in horror as he steals cars. Blame the parents when he throws stones at windows. Shake your head when he’s found fighting. And tsk when he is suspended from school for burning down the science lab.
You may want to cover your ears (or eyes) when he says “f***,” and “s***,” “w*****,” and “b******.”
Oliver is a sensitive, intelligent, thirteen year old trying to survive in a harsh, financially-derelict environment. He urinates into buckets of potatoes from the chip shop wall. He and his snot-nosed companions throw stones, smash windows, practise swearing, set fires and start fights. They play football, ride bikes, break bones and find dead workmen with ants crawling on their sightless eyeballs.
Pretty standard stuff.
He also loves his dear old mum.

 
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, 1970, adventure, adversaries, bikes, broken bones, childhood, crime, delinquents, escapades, friends, growing up, murder, police, racism, swearing, ...

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SaeraWrites wrote 44 days ago

hi. I find the story you have posted here, and began to find myself really fascinated and will read more as time permits. Very good!..and thanks:)
Saerawrites

philip john wrote 54 days ago

A lively mind at work here. With lively writing to match. I have enjoyed what I have read so far.

Philip John

Heisenberg wrote 88 days ago

Thank you, Cariad,
Your words are very kind and I'm glad you like it.

Cariad wrote 88 days ago

I really like this. First little bit I wasn't sure who it was aimed at but then the voice kicked in and I raced through the first couple of chapters. Will read more. Have some stars and will watchlist for later shelving (bit of a queue.)
Cariad.

LizX wrote 91 days ago

You really are a top class first person narrative writer. You get your teeth into the heart of a character like a bull mastiff grabbing the postman's leg and never let go. Brilliant!!

Heisenberg wrote 114 days ago

Thank You, your comments make me happy.

I actually finished the story a few nights ago. I will post the finished script soon.

Cyrus Hood wrote 115 days ago

I like your work - evocative of Roddy Doyle but actually an easier read. The style is loose, flowing and relaxing despite the subject. I think this book will do well and I would be surprised if it did not make the editor's desk.
Well done

Cyrus

Heisenberg wrote 120 days ago

Thank you Bea, I hope you continue to enjoy it. Good luck.

Bea Sinclair wrote 121 days ago

A great story so far. This book really captures the mood of your chosen setting. It explains the situation and experiences of your characters without moralising. The decriptions are under-stated yet vivid and the discovery of the corpse is a fantastic opener to the story. High stars and on my watch list awaiting promotion. yours Bea

Aesop wrote 126 days ago

Wow!!! My favourite opening chapter of all the books I’ve read on this site so far. How vividly and captivatingly you described life through the eyes of a twelve-year-old boy on a seventies working-class housing estate. I finished the first chapter and felt compelled to shelve this book on that one chapter alone. And I usually read at least three chapters before deciding whether to back a book. I’m at a loss to describe the effect of your first chapter on me in its equal measure of grit and wit.

I howled with laughter at: ‘Who would leave a pair of feet and a perfectly good body lying about on the forest floor?’ ... ‘My theory is all rumours are piles of shit that are spread around by dickheads.’ ... ‘Had an allergic reaction to the big-nosed idiot that stood next to him at the bar talking bollocks.’ And the whole two paragraphs after Cow Head appeared, distracting Oliver on his bike, starting from: ‘You mount the hillock at a slight angle...’ was hysterical even as it was brutal.

In the last paragraph of your pitch, did you mean: ‘Lee is free of CONSCIENCE...’?
Same in your first chapter: ‘I was shocked to discover I had a conscience.’

Could I suggest you try a different font for your story? This one is hard on the eye and might put people off from reading it. It almost did me.

Loved your profile, particularly the ‘...corrupted in Manchester’, and ‘...have managed to retain the majority of my teeth’.

Minor technical details here and there to clean up, but nothing that stops from making this an absolutely refreshing and inspiring opening read. I’ve watchlisted this for shelving when I have space... soon!

This is what I call being a writer! I would buy this book in print in a heartbeat.

Su Dan wrote 128 days ago

very good story. l like clever humurous style. first person works, too...
l have backed already...
read SEASONS...

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