Full Moon City

Read the first 2 chapters and I've got to say, you can write. Besides the excellent writing, your characterisation is solid and the dialogue is realistic. Your descriptives paint a vivid enough picture in a way that makes it feel like watching one of those Denzel Washington movies.
There are enough characters to go around which gives the story a more realistic feel, not like some of those stories that are so focused on the protagonist, they could be the only ones in the world.
I particularly loved the relationship between Jaxon and Lupe. Seems complicate and filled with a lot of drama. Implies an intriguing past, something many readers could relate to.
Basically, it's good stuff and will take a turn on my shelf when some space opens up.
Highly Starred.

I planned to read and review a few books over my lunch hour but I could not tear myself away from yours. From the very first moment you manage to pour the reader into the head of the main character, Jaxon, and from there the action doesn’t stop. You balance your duologue and narratives beautifully and you’re gift for holding a reader’s attention is fantastic. I wish I could find something constructive to say but other than a minor typo here and there I simply couldn’t find anything else wrong. Great work. I will keep this one in my watch list for future shelving. Get this one out there, it’s terrific!

Hey, just read the first chapter and so far I really like your writing. It flows really well, and is easy enough to get into and keep reading. You have created some great characters, they seem very realistic and interact very well with each other.
I don't know a whole lot about grammar or anything, so I won't be much help in pointing out anything like that. Although, there wasn't anything that I tripped over while reading, so that's gotta be good.
Highly starred and will read more when I get the chance.
Karen. =)

Your dialogue is your strength and you use it to good effect. I found myself eagerly googling to find out what the Spanish words mean. I'm looking forward to reading more of this action-packed novel.

Ch1

Good stuff! Didn't know what to expect from this but it's an intriguing mix of cop drama/supernatural that flows very well.

'wondered if Lupe had warned them stay out of arms reach' may read better as 'wondered if Lupe had warned them to stay out of arms reach'

Read the first 2 chapters and I've got to say, you can write. Besides the excellent writing, your characterisation is solid and the dialogue is realistic. Your descriptives paint a vivid enough picture in a way that makes it feel like watching one of those Denzel Washington movies.
There are enough characters to go around which gives the story a more realistic feel, not like some of those stories that are so focused on the protagonist, they could be the only ones in the world.
I particularly loved the relationship between Jaxon and Lupe. Seems complicate and filled with a lot of drama. Implies an intriguing past, something many readers could relate to.
Basically, it's good stuff and will take a turn on my shelf when some space opens up.
Highly Starred.

I planned to read and review a few books over my lunch hour but I could not tear myself away from yours. From the very first moment you manage to pour the reader into the head of the main character, Jaxon, and from there the action doesn’t stop. You balance your duologue and narratives beautifully and you’re gift for holding a reader’s attention is fantastic. I wish I could find something constructive to say but other than a minor typo here and there I simply couldn’t find anything else wrong. Great work. I will keep this one in my watch list for future shelving. Get this one out there, it’s terrific!

Like the first page, everything in the beginning with the car chase and all that seemed to be all over and dealt with way too fast, and were it says, "good luck making your evidence to stick in court," shouldn't you either change the "making" to "getting" or simply remove the "to".
Also in the interrogation it says,"I just wanted to talk at you," shouldn't it be "to" not "at" unless that's just the way he talks.
Other than that I think it's a great start to the story and I'm going to rate it and put it on my watchlist so I can finish it tomorrow.
p.s love the book cover

Thank you very much for your feedback! I'll fix that typo and yes talk at you is intentional slang

Like the first page, everything in the beginning with the car chase and all that seemed to be all over and dealt with way too fast, and were it says, "good luck making your evidence to stick in court," shouldn't you either change the "making" to "getting" or simply remove the "to".
Also in the interrogation it says,"I just wanted to talk at you," shouldn't it be "to" not "at" unless that's just the way he talks.
Other than that I think it's a great start to the story and I'm going to rate it and put it on my watchlist so I can finish it tomorrow.
p.s love the book cover

Now you've got my interest piqued... loved the Spanish bits! Dios mio, mi novio, es un perro! Hehe. Have wl'd you and will be back for a proper read and comment during the week.

Thank you! I'm glad to hear there are people who get what i'm striving for here.

Now you've got my interest piqued... loved the Spanish bits! Dios mio, mi novio, es un perro! Hehe. Have wl'd you and will be back for a proper read and comment during the week.

Redux!

:) Thank you!

Redux!

Full Moon City is a romance in the guise of a paranormal police procedural. It carries a bit of a hard edge, but the writer slows down for the curves– the womanly curves.

It's smart and sassy, clipped and clever. The main characters have a history, but one that barely slows them down. I like it, I back it.