God Made Me Yummy

Sharing my inner sunbeam and my book Be The Human Sunshine, I return all reads.

Blessings Clare :)

Hi Francesca, I like your children's story a lot. I'll read it to my grandchildren and then ask them what do they think God put in the recipe to make them. Highly rated.

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you have brilliant style and imagination. your crisp writing compliment your fabulous story well

So loved this book, I could image God heart as thought of how we should be the sheer love he had and passion to make us beautiful and unique ...but perfect in his eyes. This book is very much needed for our young people tp read as they see who they are in the world. A must

Angela,
Thanks so much for the read, also for the lovely comments on my blog. Your words meant alot for me, it's scary to put all that out there for friends and family, so to have a stranger come be blessed was exactly what I had hoped for. Please keep in touch, I will do my best to give your books a read soon as well. Thanks! Chessa

I love this, what an awesome concept :) Great story.

Angela
http://www.facebook.com/kingsdaughter21

Chessa,
This children's book is exactly what we need proliferating bookshelves because of its simple clarity and charm that anyone who reads it, from 7 to 70, would 'get it.' With all the information cluttering up people's minds these days, a slice of sunshine "God Made Me Yummy" serves to break up the grease and give us what we want, the genuine article, unadulterated and pure, straight from the heart. What a tasty treat.

Kenneth Edward Lim
The North Korean

Thank you Ben,
I appreciate your input. I love your ideas about addition themes. I hadn't thought about nature. I was thinking about doing one about adoption. You have caused my head to start churning again. : ) Thank you so much for reading!
Chessa (Francesca)

Fran,

This is such a lovely story told through some imaginative dialogue. I don't have any children myself, but it's a great story for parents to share with their kids. The 'where did I come from' question is one that most inquisitive minds like an answer to. I'm wondering whether you could expand upon your book with the introduction of a few more short stories?

Perhaps a story explaining how God made the trees/plants and animals. It could be along similar lines and would fit well with what you've written so far. I think, in my opinion, if you took this to a publisher right now, they 'may' (I'm no expert) ask for more content. As it stands, your narrative dialogue flows nicely. I like the idea for centering your story on a specific activity.

There's plenty of learning involved, and let's face it, all kids love to cook. I think the clinch is Sarah's final line - "Good thing we don't make people, Mommy!" - Yes, exactly. We're all different with unique qualities, but we're also prone to making silly mistakes. This is an easy, enjoyable read, one which should reach its target audience with relative ease.

Ben - The Frogness of Being

I loved your note here! You cracked me up! I would have said the same thing! Thank you for reading, truly, I hadn't put any thought into my pitch, I just threw it up there. I guess I will have to think that through a little when I have time. With 4 kids, I have no idea when...lol! I'm gonna have to do a little research on what to write. Thanks for the insight! I'm gonna try to figure out how to add you to my friend list!
Blessings,
Chessa (Francesca)

I noticed your pitch today while I reviewed the top-rated Christian books. What an adorable premise!! I think this would make a fabulous picture book. Sarah is a believable, realistic child and Mommy a kind and loving parent. Kids will like being compared with one of their favorite treats, and parents will like reading this to them.

I am no expert on pitches, but I recently asked fellow members to help revise mine on the forums. I learned that a pitch shouldn't be a summary of the story, but instead an enticing glimpse of what your story has to offer. I think you might want to revisit your long pitch, which doesn't really 'grab' the reader.

And now I've said your pitch attracted me, and that you should change it. Surely you think I'm a lunatic.

When my daughter was little, she kept asking where she lived before her dad and I were born. Kids!!!

~AudreyB
Forgiveness Fits

I noticed your pitch today while I reviewed the top-rated Christian books. What an adorable premise!! I think this would make a fabulous picture book. Sarah is a believable, realistic child and Mommy a kind and loving parent. Kids will like being compared with one of their favorite treats, and parents will like reading this to them.

I am no expert on pitches, but I recently asked fellow members to help revise mine on the forums. I learned that a pitch shouldn't be a summary of the story, but instead an enticing glimpse of what your story has to offer. I think you might want to revisit your long pitch, which doesn't really 'grab' the reader.

And now I've said your pitch attracted me, and that you should change it. Surely you think I'm a lunatic.

When my daughter was little, she kept asking where she lived before her dad and I were born. Kids!!!

~AudreyB
Forgiveness Fits

I love this, what an awesome concept :) Great story.

Angela
http://www.facebook.com/kingsdaughter21

Fran,

This is such a lovely story told through some imaginative dialogue. I don't have any children myself, but it's a great story for parents to share with their kids. The 'where did I come from' question is one that most inquisitive minds like an answer to. I'm wondering whether you could expand upon your book with the introduction of a few more short stories?

Perhaps a story explaining how God made the trees/plants and animals. It could be along similar lines and would fit well with what you've written so far. I think, in my opinion, if you took this to a publisher right now, they 'may' (I'm no expert) ask for more content. As it stands, your narrative dialogue flows nicely. I like the idea for centering your story on a specific activity.

There's plenty of learning involved, and let's face it, all kids love to cook. I think the clinch is Sarah's final line - "Good thing we don't make people, Mommy!" - Yes, exactly. We're all different with unique qualities, but we're also prone to making silly mistakes. This is an easy, enjoyable read, one which should reach its target audience with relative ease.

Ben - The Frogness of Being

Francesca,

This book is so cute! I love your title and plug-the message being fantastic. I totally had to shelve you!!

I decided to come back to this with my 7yr old nephew to get his opinion & he really enjoyed it. I even found myself chuckling at the humour second time round! Great read and highly starred with Dan's 'approval'

Lee :-)
"Elton: The Different Kookaburra"

Thank you so much! I watchlisted you too, can't promise how soon I'll read with 4 kids, but I'll try soon!
Thank you, thank you, thank you,
Francesca

I decided to come back to this with my 7yr old nephew to get his opinion & he really enjoyed it. I even found myself chuckling at the humour second time round! Great read and highly starred with Dan's 'approval'

Lee :-)
"Elton: The Different Kookaburra"

Francesca,

I am a mommy and have made lots of cookies with my kids, but I have never thought to use that time as an object lesson. Nor have I even imagined the correlation between how we make cookies and how God makes us with perfectly measured “ingredients” to make us all unique according to His purposes.

It takes someone with a creative mind and a heart in tune with God’s to relate such truths to their children. Your children are very blessed to have you as their mom. You are a wonderful storyteller with a voice as inviting and warm as a fresh out-of-the-oven cookie… I’d love to read more heart-felt talks between Mommy and Sarah. Six Stars!

Dianna Lanser
Nothing But The Blood

I love this! Highly starred.

A really good book for children. I remember asking a similar question when I was young. Needless to say I never got the answer in your book. Well done on such a good little read.

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This is a special book. It is a fun way to describe God creating each of us in the form of a recipe.
It is something easy to understand.
The innocents of the child is so real but then understanding catches on easy.
I love the way this is written.
It is six stars for sure.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

A beautiful book for children. Captures those sometimes difficult to answer questions that children put to us...so very well. I love the 'message' that shines through your writing.

The world needs more books like this.

Well done Francesca.

nice read for kiddies, tying in truth practically and teaches foundations and biblical principles...
j
what every woman should know

Francesca,

What a cute little story! I like the parallel between the cookies and God creating us. Seems like a concept kids would easily be able to understand.

Blessings!

Patti

What a sweet story - can I have some more like this, please? It is refreshing to read a kid's story with such a light touch! Thank you.

Fran Macilvey, "Trapped" xx :)

Dear Francesca,

'God Made Me Yummy' is such a charming title! How lovely to capture this precious banter between mommy and daughter Sarah. You have used a concrete, typical event to steer a conversation toward rather abstract (and sometimes confusing) concepts for children. This book will give children something to hold onto when it comes to ideas such as "in God's heart" and "God made you special." A lovely piece. Well done!

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

lovely book. a nice idea with some good writing; innocent and true,,,a good read...
backed...
read SEASONS...

I loved it so cute. very well written. I like the idea behind it too. on my bookshelf.

Very sweet beginning. I am confused though it appears you have numerous chapters that are the same?? Well written and clear dialog between Mommy and Sarah.

It is only the first chapter, however I had to load it numerous times to hit the word count to post it. It is short, aimed at 3-6 year olds. thanks for looking, I'm gonna try to give yours a read later today when my little ones are sleeping. Francesca

Very sweet beginning. I am confused though it appears you have numerous chapters that are the same?? Well written and clear dialog between Mommy and Sarah.

nice little story -I think my son will like this.
Debbie Richardson, Replacement Mothers and The Lightning Tree

Hi,
I am not a religious person at all, but when i read the ingredients that makes Sarah who she is, in the most loving way of mommy, I am smiling to myself and thinkng wow!Such great work. Star rated.
Josphine
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