The Take and Go

Hi Angela, me again. Just read the other chapters and loved em; so much so I've put your book on my shelf. Your writing is unpretentious, under-stated and simply wonderful. K J

Hi Angela,

Just read your first chapter and really enjoyed it. I'm already hooked on the narrator and can already tell that she's going to tug at my heart strings as the story progresses. Really looking forward to reading more and seeing where the story leads me. Well done. K J.

p.s. Favourite line from Chapter 1 - 'Her blue-hot stare theatens to melt the wax doll face I wear'. Excellent.

Hello Angela--

book- Take and let go--

Read the four chapters posted and although written for teenagers I got totally interested in Rita Young-
and her thoughts about life and all that surrounds her-
Her trip the Macey's amusing and having got her make up experience at the counter just inside the door,
many teenage readers will relate to. And yes, there is always a smell of perfume as you enter the door and beautiful girls at work on faces.
The trip to see Uncle Lim is really good and keep the interest in the story to the fore.
Some nice and well written dialogue and deft characterisation as it moves along.
I can see this book rising in the charts and doing wel

I wish you the best of luck with it Angela-
tom bye Dublin Ireland-

book -from hugs to kisses-
please oblige and read a chapter or two of mine about a young boy growing up - that some people have compared to Huckleberry Finn- Irish version that is-
thanks, and good luck in the new year 2012

I love Rita! She's a darling girl anyone would let into their heart. You are a talented writer who, I believe, should be much higher. Backed and with 6 stars.

Lynn Scanlan
Losing Hazel

Dear Angela, I love that I identify so much with Rita, as you will notice in my memoirs book :) - small world, isn't it? :) I loved at the end of chapter 4, "A butterfly of hope flutters in my chest" because I had millions of them & that's what keeps me going. :) I love that you have crisp dialogue & paragraphs that make for a nice read. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. Thank you for backing my memoirs book :) I have ******-rated your book & will go to your other 2 books to read & comment on. :)

Just found your book and added it to my watch list so I can continue reading. Love your first page; such wonderful flow! You just carry the reader right along don't you! I'll be back when I've finished. Please take a peek at mine; "Losing Hazel" and let me know what you think.

Thank you,

Lynn

Wonderful, authentic writing. So why isn't it moving up the chart faster? I'm putting you my WL so I can check back.

SC Dwinnell, "Nobody Liked to Say"

Excellent writing. This will be on my shelf soon.

Hi Angela: I love this. I find nothing to critique. The lie about owning the dealership is cliche, but I can't complain about that as it is probably something that happens quite often. I've read one chapter so far but am seriously enjoying this. I've got several things I should be doing, yet I read to the end not even wishing it would be over. This is very good writing and on my shelf. Good luck! pun intended. Rachael (American Clique).

i just read a few paragraphs, and I can tell your writing is superb. backing it. by the way, i'd get rid of the word and in the sentence, I'm fourteen and I know better. I'm fourteen. I know better. It sounds more dautning, serious, foreshadowing ...
I don't have a lot of time to read, but if I did, I'd read yours.
backing it regardless.
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=5810
if you get a chance, check out my book.
best,
Rebecca

I just finished reading this and so far it's excellent. I can perfectly imagine each character. Don't know if I have any major criticisms for it as there's not that much up. Good luck getting it published, I'd love to read more.

This caught my eye right away. I kept in my mind that this isn't complete, and just a draft, but I think it shows a lot of potential. I enjoyed it. Great premise. Keep working at it!

I started reading and it looks good. I will put it on my watchlist and give it a more serious read later. Good Luck.

This is an excerpt from my completed novel, The Take and Go. My previous writing credits include an unpublished memoir, Red Eggs and Good Luck, which won the 2003 Mary Tanenbaum award for creative nonfiction.