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date submitted 16.12.2008
date updated 02.02.2012
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Comedy, Gay
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The Free

M.Gilliland

One lonely abused schoolgirl 'OCCUPIES' herself.. and sets off an explosive social and economic Revolution..

 

.The State is going bottoms up, the Climate is going crazy,
......we’re living the collapse of capitalism, blow by blow,
...............................with a rainbow.
..............Linda changes her name to Maxie
.....She and her new friends get free of their traumas,
..and get into dealing death blows, to a skinhead gang,
....a bankrupt school and the testerical special police.
.........Next thing they flee to Ragwort CoOp Pool,
........ in a big safe occupied working class area.
.......We play the adventure live through their eyes,
..laughing and lamenting... inventing social revolution.

..The PIF soldiers eventually arrive, to restore capitalist chaos,
............Macker and Maxie are missing, the hunt begins,
....while the spaced out invaders get subverted, corrupted,
..............................swallowed and digested.
Our odd family puzzles with the pieces.. finding a fun lifestyle,
......a coppice farm, and bright ideas for saving The Planet,
but keep your hankies handy, folks.. click on your giant wings,
........................... for the fantastic FLYING finale!

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                **********

            The Free  

                     by  M.Gilliland   

 

                                Welcome aboard with love and rage, for a trip

                           through Crumbling Kapitalism and Climate Kaos.

                                        Take a wild ride with the rebels,

                              Via Social Revolution, to a Money-Free World. 

               Hooligan Press

 

                  ’This is a really intriguing idea, of an economic apocalypse that leaves

                our familiar physical world more or less intact but opens up possibilities

                                       for real change.’’ Karen Eisenbrey TIME SQUARED

 

                              Table of Contents

                                      Act One

                                  Maxie Moon

 

     History/The Writer /References /Glossary /Friends of the Free

  1 Smashing  my Aquarium.................................A big, wet, pouting, splash of a kiss..

  2  Linda Leaves Home...............................-'Don't be silly, little darling, don't be bad.'-

  3  Linda is Maxie Moon............................Running through that suddenly golden snow.

  4  Wonderful Maggie ........................................-‘'You can trust me, you’re my sister.’'-

  5  Barney the Play Worker.............................-‘'Just bop Groucho Marx on the nose.’'-

  6  Testerical Morons.................... -'‘Now now darling, don’t get naughty and emotional.’-

  7  Maggie's Secrets................................She whispered something shocking in my ear.-

  8  Christo joins the Free.......................... -‘'Hey here comes the old lap dog himself.’-

  9  Sliding through Walls...............................I’d just spoken the unspeakable in public.

  10 Horny, Bossy and wild….....-'Shaking out the feathers of my giant snowy wings.'-

                                   Act two      

                                  Remaking   

 

  11 Cuddly Toys..........................................Lizards hunting in orchids and twisting lilies

  12 Macker the Magician....................... -‘I am here to astound! I am here to amaze!'- 

  13 Maxie and Macker..................... -'You’re the magic boy I found on my doorstep..'-

  14  The Ragwort Free.............. -'Then I find out Maxie has you captured in her bed!'-

  15 Homosexual Sinners....................................................... -‘God be with you my son.’- 

  16 Spot a Shit-On.................................... -‘'For this I come to see the horse’s mouth.’- 

  17 Mexican Friends …............-'Maybe you’re not a real man if you don’t act that way’-

  18 Punky and Perky................-‘'There’s a fierce lot of pairing off down here tonight.

  19 Balihoki shoes............................-‘'Why can’t she have you as well. Oh bloody hell!’-

  20  Gobble-de-Gook Cafe.................................. -‘How can it be free? It's impossible.’-

  21 Remaking James……....-'Dangerous Anarchist Subversives.. High Value Priority'-

  22 The Green-Air Factory.............................-'That's if this contraption ever gets up.'-

  23  Rocket Homes..Away!.................................... -'Closing down? But how will I live?'- 

  24 The Coppice Party............................ Ripples of  pleasure ran up and down my body..

  25 Gloria's Fine Shot............................................. -'Shut up and listen you stupid cow.'-

  26 The Anti-guru Guru.............................. -'How to turn goatshit into Irish Whiskey!'-

                                   Act Three  

                             Social Explosion  

 

  27 Imploding Institutions........... running and laughing together down the concrete highway

  28 'Revolution Day'.........................I could hear wild cheering as the crowds merged.

  29 Lerriman's last plan.............-'We need them dead. Just announce they're dead'-

  30 Bye bye Maggie.............................Being famous won't give Moonie her mama back.

  31 Dinner at the Grand.................................................. -'You're a spy, man. Admit it.'-

  32 Smash the Prison Gates....................... -'Also I'm thinking Maxie wanna suicide..'-

  33 Kazoo.................................................................Waves of happiness radiating off her.

  34 Up The Cable Railway...................-'subvert them, seduce them, bamboozle them! -

                                   Act Four 

                             Love is a Battle  

 

  35 On Broken Tree Hill.................I was turning into a powerful switched-on woman.

  36 The Ice Queen...................................................-''All nature was just.. wiped out?'-

  37 Maxie's Fall.......................................I settled down to spend the whole day crying.

  38 Macker's goats..............................................I really could hear bagpipes far away!

  39 Adventure Way..... -' I hardly shave and I'm 13. My feet smell, pus squirts out.'-

  40 Maxie phones home-'Run for your life missus. The monsters are in the village.'-

  41 Love is All you Need..............................-'Oh Lulu lululu.'- Barney gurgled, urgently.

  42 Back to the City......................-'Oh my god. An unborn baby! We didn't know that.'-

  43 Clanners Way..............................It was snowing red rose petals in Foxford Bridge.

                                  Act Five 

                                    Flight 

  44 The Ultimatum............................................ -'Have you ever heard of Shari Paba?'-

  45 The Trap...................................-'Quick quick disguise me girls. The punky wig, the hat!'-

  46  Chained to Wainy..........................................-'Freedom for the child in your head’-

  47 Permaculture................................................ They'd finally figured out what wild is.

 48 Killian Bate Shot Dead.................................Maxie Moon.. voted 100% Bravery levels.

  49 Bye bye Maxie...........................Flocks of dunlin and starlings, wheeling as one soul.

  50 Free as a Bird...........................-'All my nerves were screaming -'You can't fly.'-

  51 Glossary..   Contacts..   References..  Summary.. Afterword..

 

 

                  History of 'The Free'

 

The first version came out in 1986 in Brixton, by Hooligan Press. from the gang who ran 121 Anarchist Bookshop, Brixton Squatters Aid, with its revolting paper The Crowbar, and Sth London Stress etc, linked to both Black Flag and Class War. It sold out and was reprinted in 1992 by Attack International, and in German by Killroy Press.

In 2007 I began to update it and realised it needed a rewrite. Inspired by the Barcelona anarcho-squatting scene, where I live, this new edition is 3 times as long and 10 times better, with lots more humour, sex and triumphing alternatives. (E.book only for now) It does have a following (1200 Friends on Farsebook, plus the Wordmess blog for free downloads (http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com), and on Scribd, Authonomy, Google Books, the Anarchist Library,etc

                     About The Writer

   ’’..here I play around with gardens and mechanics and look after children and horses. I can cook a deadly vegetarian paella, and my hobbies include solar powered internet and, um, rooting in bins.

…we have a wizard windmill and dispose of excellent compost toilets..’’

 

                          Glossary 

Free Credit Cards*

  Introduced before the uprising, popular everywhere,You don't have to pay for Pools goods or services

but the Wurt Value is recorded, ..

Gay Rescue*

..See 'Women's Rescue'. If you're oppressed  for being gay you can get and give help discreetly online..

Shit-Ons*

A Shit-On is an attempt to control or intimidate using unfair authority or power, usually sexist or racist..

CLAN Fashions*

  We include here the prevalent hot climate body art. Stick-Ons are removable tattoos which tend to replace clothes in CLAN crazes and belonging symbolism. Various fashions include; Functioning Air-Tails and Crests that mimic birds and animals. Peek-suits and pants,are….  See back of book… CONT/

 

                       Friends of ‘The Free’..

Check out the blog. http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com 

http://www.facebook.com/?ref=home#!/profile.php?id=100001284179241&sk=wal

 

            ************

                        Act One

                          Chapter One

           Smashing my Aquarium

 

                   -'A big, wet, pouting, splash of a kiss..'-

                                 Linda

    I should’ve known what he was up to all right but I hadn’t a clue. It was easy enough to see what he fancied in her. That Janice was a real beauty. Besides being a stuck up bitch.

 

    She used to have fellas queuing up to go out with her. I suppose we were a bit jealous. But sooner or later she’d tell all of them to drop dead. Which only spurred them on more, men being what they are. There were a whole gang of them in our school had their eye on Janice. Like a pack of randy dogs sniffing after her.

    But my dad wasn’t one of them. When he took a fancy to Janice he swept her off her feet. You wouldn’t believe the nerve of the old bastard, and him married with four kids. Of which I, Linda, was the oldest, being about fifteen at the time.

    Maybe I loved and feared him so much I was blind to his faults. But this time I couldn’t close my eyes.

 

    It all began one day I was walking back to school after the dinner break. It’s a big wide road and windy, and the rain was beginning again. Rubbish and dust blowing. A few old cars and air-vans whizzing by, and the wide road as grey as the sky.

 

    Well, didn’t I come by the corner shop. There were a crowd of girls milling about and inside sheltering. It was half dark in there, the electricity was cut off again.

    And there was stuck up Janice herself coming out, and she done up to the nines.

    Looking down her snooty nose at our tatty uniforms.

    Just because she worked in a fancy hairdresser's.

    Just at that moment didn’t a little car pull in by the shop.

    Pulls up. And in hops Janice.

    -'Hey look at Janice going off with your dad!'- said Fiona from my class.

    -‘You’re asking for a slapping.’- I warned.

    There were girls pushing out of the shop. And I staring.

    -'I wonder does he pay her.'- said Beatrice, loudly. -'Look look!'-

    -‘Shut your gob my father never would…’-

 

    My dad and Janice were embracing.

    It couldn’t be. But it was.

    Hot flushes started rushing up my body but I couldn’t stop staring.

 

    And just before that air car hissed away,

     didn’t she slip her elegant hands up his saggy cheeks,

    a brown arm gliding snakelike round his stringy neck.

 

    As she kissed him on the mouth..

    Rolling her big eyes back at us girls.

    A big, wet, pouting, splash of a kiss in the mouth. And him responding.

 

    She knew we were watching of course. And she was laughing!

    The girls started squealing and cheering.

    But I was ashamed and shocked. Hiding my scarlet face in my long fair hair.

    Then they started to hoot and laugh at me.

    So I took to my heels, and ran off down the street.

    As the thunder clapped and it began to rain.

 

     I'd never hear the end of it, I was mortified. It may not seem much to you, but such scandal would zoom round and round our area. Like a bee in a jar. I was in a state of shock, running the wrong way down that road.

    I had the idea that my father was great. It’s true he did shout and roar and get drunk. But I was his own big girl.

    It’s also true that he would always cuddle and pet me, and my mum would go mad. I used to hide my face in my hair and blush. Getting waves of panic if he didn't stop.

    Like what happened when Pado tried to dance touching me at the Clan Disco and I nearly choked.

 

    But I still believed my dada was the best. For me he'd always been the bee's knees. And I didn't dare doubt it

    Now with just one jokey kiss, Janice had smashed the nice aquarium I lived in.

 

    When I thought about my marvelous father now I felt quite queasy. So I stopped running and I walked. And I walked right round the block. Because I was afraid of arriving back at school early, of getting jeered and laughed at by the others.

    I took it hard, my father getting off with Janice. And the whole of my youth took on a different light in a flash. I arrived at the school gates before I knew it. And stopped. Afraid to go in and afraid to be late.

 

    I hated that school, and I hated the gossiping girls. And for the first time I began to hate my dad.

    One thing I was very good at was hating. I was a bad girl, a menace, and a mischief maker and I screamed and fought back since I was a baby. My brother was bad as well. If I got in a panic I would do anything. The worse the better! And as for my folks.. My mum and dad got on like an almighty riot.

    I hated that Sister Bernadette and she hated me. I'd have to bite my tongue when she gave out stink, to stop myself getting up and throttling her!

 

    Well my feet carried me through them big black gates all right. But I felt sick and it seemed like my life was crashing down, like the thunder grumbling behind me. There was a big lump hurting my throat, and I was muttering to stop myself blubbering

     When I got to the class it had already started, and the lights had come back on. I didn't even bother knocking and walked straight in.

    It was cold and grotty up there and it smelt bad. There were ninety six girls and boys in our class, in theory. But lots were absent, or off doing Clan projects. The State couldn't pay the teachers, and Sister Bernie had come back as a marvelous selfless volunteer.

    -'Excuse me please.'- I shouted aggressively, heading for my seat.

    Sister Bernadette glanced me daggers, flashing her ratlike eyes. She had Trishia Conners up reciting poetry at the time. That woman spotted that I was in bits from right up front, and she seized her chance.

    -'Next, Linda Moon.'- she announced happily.

 

    Now one thing I was proud of was my memory, and I never forgot anything. That is if I bothered to look at it at all. But this day I stopped short. And my mind went blank with fright. It was stupid really, like everything in school. We learned off all this poetry without understanding a word of it.

    Now instead of a line of lofty poetry I got flashes of my father spanking me. Sister Bernie prompted me. I said a line.

    But I couldn’t come up with the next.

    She used to come down with a ruler, and whack with the edge on the knuckles. They weren't allowed to hit us of course, but wonderful Sister Bernie had come out of retirement to save our souls, and she was doing three classes in one. It was a rare treat for her to catch me and down she came.-'Whack, whack.'- and me stammering and starting to cry.

    -'Again, again from the start.'-

    And I had to start again, it was groaning brutal.

 

    Well, I’m a lovely big girl for my age, as my dad always says. And Sister Bernie is a short shriveled woman. I made two of her.

    And me coughing and sniveling and stopping, while the others were enjoying my terror. And now I was feeling sick. But I didn’t dare say it.

    Then it happened, I can see it now. What a shocking horror.

I gasped and I felt it coming and I couldn’t stop it. And she ..whack.. underneath.

    I coughed once and ..whoosh.. like a bleeding yellow volcano.

    I puked on poor Sister Bernie, on her hair and down her habit.

And a bit on Rosaleen and all over the desk. I was only after eating my dinner.

    But why didn't I just turn my head and miss her? I'm still not sure sure that I didn't vomit on her on purpose.

    Sister Bernie squawked and Rosaleen screeched and ran for the door. I was still sobbing and choking.

She had to half drag me out of the class. Even the big bad Clanners were dumb with horror.

    I thought she might explode. Her face went purple red.

    Bits of meat and potato in her hair and down her neck.

    It was only after that I saw anything funny in it. But all the rest, excepting Rosaleen, thought it was brilliant. They used to jeer and sneer at -'Sister Barf'- behind her back.

    My cruel classmates put the mockers on her.

 

    Sometimes I still feel guilty for vomiting on my teacher. And when I'm really bad I still need to be punished for it.

A wretched sinner who spewed vile puke on a retired nun.

    They always have their hooks inside your head.

 

    She marched me down the corridors to the sick room, I was shaking with shock, and she with fury. She sat me down in a chair, and began to clean herself off with paper towels. Giving me a roasting all the time.

 

     -'Get up off that chair Linda Moon.'- says she. But I wasn’t listening. -'Get up you dirty little brat!'-

    She went to give me a slap. But I turned my head at the same instant. And she hit me smack in the eye.

    -'Go to hell!'- I yelled, half blinded.

    -'Now we hear it'- she said –'Now we hear the filth coming out.'- She was spreading vomit down her face with a paper towel.

    -'You touch me again'- I said. –‘And I’ll break your horrible neck.'-

    -'You’ll suffer for this,'- she spluttered. –'You and your thieving brother and your stupid whoring father. And get that idiot grin off your face, I'll...'-

 

    She was going to slap me again. But I lifted my arm. I had risen out of the chair before I knew it, brushing her blow aside.

    She stepped back. Her face suddenly white, as I let fly a punch to her face. Hurting my hand on her solid bony nose.

I was hopping with pain -'ow ow'- as I watched her totter.

    Sister Bernadette fell back on her bottom.

    I stood there staring, paralyzed and sucking my knuckles. And just watched, as she half crawled, half ran out of the room.

Gibbering threats and clutching her bleeding nose

    Oh my god.. Maybe I'd killed a saint!

 

    I'm sorry I hit her. At least I'm sorry I hit her to defend the family name. Especially as she was telling the truth.

 

    I did it because I'm bad down deep inside.

                     ***

    As I say, I just watched her go, dead calm, like in a dream, and I watched myself walk to the basin. Splash cold water on my face and my sore fist. Dabbing at a blotch on my skirt with a wet towel. Then walking through the open door. Down the dark paneled corridor. Out the front door, past the big board listing Head Students.

    My feet went crunch crunch down the graveled drive, like a zombie late for lunch. That's how I react when I do something shocking. I never turned my head and no one followed. . Just as I was

coming to the door, hoping it would be open, I noticed that the entire iron gates had disappeared.

I heard this shout from behind me.

    -'Linda Moon come back here!'- The Headmistress yelled.

 

    But I didn’t turn a hair, just kept walking...-'Crunch, crunch.'-.. down the drive. Then again.

    -'Come back here this minute!'-  She commanded. –'Right now. Or you’ll be expelled from The School.'-

 

    I felt the eyes of half the school, gawking down from the classrooms at my back. And I knew those kids were dying to giggle with glee.

 

Then a rush of joy flushed through me, thinking I’d done something good after all.

    So I stooped and snatched up a bunch of the first precious yellow daffodils, which grew there under an oak tree by the gates which weren't there. I turned around.

    Dancing and whirling, waving the flowers at the old grey building.

    Till I was sure my yellow knickers showed.

    White faces gaping at the windows..The head right out the door.

    Then a hop and a skip, and around the corner laughing.

                       ***

    The black clouds were hanging, lower and heavier, and the hills had vanished.

My jacket was back in the school but why should I care.

    I had the conviction right then that I’d left that  school forever. Maybe I was right.

See I was born just too soon to go to the De-School, I'd never get to learn like the Clanners, doing projects they chose for themselves. …................. [glos and ref ]……. Ctrl +  Click to see

    That school didn’t work. Even the teachers knew it. They were just putting in the hours and hadn't been paid in months. Upset and all irate because their retirement scheme had crashed.

     That school might close down soon at any rate.

 

    It just didn’t click for most of us girls. And for messed up kids like me it was worst of all.

    If they didn’t throw me out they’d have to drag me back roaring

    I stuffed the flowers in the bus stop bin, what a waste, and walked quickly up the road.

    Glancing behind me and obsessing with my father.

 

Then I thought maybe I was wrong about him.

     Wasn’t he always chatting up girls, and he was just giving Janice a lift, and what harm really. Of course. He was great. And she had just kissed and cuddled him to start more nasty gossip.

    And I swore revenge.

    But I thought I might as well check up, Crafty bitch that I am. So I went into Devenney’s shop and looked up the Bottle Factory and Maxine’s Hair Salon in their phone book. They let me use the phone coz I said I was sick, and I tapped out the first number

    -'No, its Miss Martin’s afternoon off.'-

     Then I rang the factory and, sure enough,

    –'Sorry Mr. Moon takes a half day off on Tuesdays.'-

    Well that was proof enough for me. But funny enough I felt better then, and pleased with myself. Thinking how I could trip him up and all, not that I would ever dare.

I pulled some leaves off a garden hedge and threw them up into the wind.

    I'd like to say I couldn’t care two drops of diarrhea what he done. But that would be a sinful lie.

    I thought I loved him then. He had me in his power, like a mouse being toyed with by a tom cat. Okay I was a bit paranoid. Often imagining him behind me, and glancing back to check. .

    And the nun, the girls, my brother, my mother, those skinhead Hoods..  All chanting in my head that I was bad. A bad and dirty girl and guilty as sin.

 

    I never dared think before that, about why I was so scared. Only now, walking glumly from that school, did the questions come.

    Why did I have to provoke my dad? Why was I bad? Why was it me got caught copying? When everybody did it. Why did they have to pick on me? Like a flock of hens, pecking an injured chick.

    They'd reported me to my mother, who blackmailed me and finally sneaked to my dad anyway. 

    And why did my father enjoy so much punishing me? Slapping my bare bottom till it stung.

 

    I was crossing the nearly deserted Bayford Road where you're not allowed. The traffic lights were dead anyway, so why walk round?..

 

    About the short skirts scandal, here's the truth. Some Clanner girls changed our yukky medieval uniform.

    They would pull up their skirts at the waist, under their regulation blue woollies. So they rode up high, round their sexy thighs. Instead of just drooping under their boring knees.

    Provoking a ferocious scandal and a shocking rumpus in the school.

 

    Of course who but Linda Moon was branded behind my back as a raging pervert. Contaminating pure girls, god help me, with thoughts of fornication.. Just coz they thought I was laughing at them, I mean, I never even had a boyfriend!

    Killian Bate had said I was a slut, and he was the Supremo of the Young Hoods.

 

    Through the flats and into our nice little street. I was arriving home at the wrong time and quite mixed up.

 

    I had adored and feared my dad, if you know what I mean. I had to believe in him.

    Because the sun and the moon and all of the stars shone out of his arsehole.

    I was lying to myself, that's all, it was obvious now.

I'd done it for years but Janice changed all that.

 

    With one big sexy kiss she gave my dad.

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Fred Le Grand wrote 789 days ago

Hi,
I'm not in the least surprised you're at number 7 with this.

It's powerful, raw writing at its best. it's emotional and precise in the POV.

A very professional bit of wrting.

I have no complaints and feel you don't need a critique, just support.

Backed with no hesitation.

mikegilli wrote 191 days ago

E Book OUT NOW as a Free Download, from the Blog and ''selling well''.

Also available on Gooogle Boooks, Scribd, Issuu and the Anarchist Library
and publicized via its blog and FarseBook pages.

I'm finally updating this 'authonomy edition' so in a few days there will
be an amazing improvement, at least in my dubious opinion

Thanks everyone for your help and support with this project.
**********************************************

...............After reaching Rank 7 again the book has been neglected for over a year on this shite.
........................................I'm now hoping to get more active again here
...................I'm still happy to review or comment on your book, but just for fun.. ON REQUEST.

.......................I do try to return all shelvings, unless your book is fascist, sexist or racist.
...............This is complicated, as there's no point backing for less than a few days it seems, so
.....................................................please let me know if I screw up!
............. .The BLOG/site is now worth checking out....http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com/
Plus it has a super page on Farcebook http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=100001284179241&sk=wall

..........I'm also using the book to promote CO2-Free fuel, now integrated into the text, as I'm now convinced
............................that the whole planet is being ever more rapidly and irrevocably trashed.
..............check it out here: http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com/category/ammonia-nh3-co2-free-fuel/

.............................................Thanx a trillion to all supporters of The Free

HannahWar wrote 462 days ago

Mike, The start of your book is incontestable, the first chapters make shivers run down your spine and provoke intense sympathy for the MC. Next to that, your humour, your control of language, your powers of observation are eviably correct, powerful, authentic. There is no other writer like you and that makes you stand out. I think that the dropping of your book in the ranks may have something to do with the fact that it portrays a view on Western life that people may find "amusing", interesting, unusual but are not ready for. You're a head of your time but because you believe in your philosophy with all your heart and make no attempt to disguise it, it loses part of the cheerful lightness that your writing absolutely has. Maybe you should write in your profile that you are a successful CEO and let the book tell it's own story. It's just a matter of finding what is more effective. I currently am rewriting a true-life story in a fiction-like way, which wasn't my original idea. Anyway, to me you are an exceptionally gifted writer whose book deserves 6 stars and a place on my shelf right now. Hannah

Elizabeth.NYC wrote 459 days ago

Hello Mike,
What a ride for me to revisit the illustrious Linda and the land of the free - I remember this as one of the first books I read on Authonomy--way back when--and thinking how I wished I could write with such flair. I'm so happy The Free is being published. You first chapter is a great example of hooking through both characterization and your dark comic voice. Your choice of words are priceless from the bleeding yellow volcano (such a visual, that scene) to a zombie late for lunch. And has their ever been an antagonist more perfect than Sister Bernie. Not that I can remember. You've got the antics, and the adolescent rationale behind the antics, down pat. It's a great story and I'm so happy I came back.
Lizzi
(Out of Sync)

jlbwye wrote 6 hours ago

The Free. Dont know how I got you on my to-read list - you must have asked for my attention some time. Now I'm here, I am attracted by your humour. I like your cover and title. (You've been here a while).

Ch.1. Oh - Karen Eisenbury is a great writer. What she likes is always worth reading. And I, too, love horses (see my first chapter).
Such easy-going thoughts swinging along. Poor Linda. What a cruel world. I hope she stops hating in time.
Random thoughts, a touch of brave humour, a dont care attitude, but deep hurt. You show it all so well.
Love her not caring two drops of diarrhoea (have you spelled it right?) Where do you get such notions?

Chs. 2-3. Jaqnice had smashed a hole in my private aquarium and I got washed right out. Says it all.
I cant stop.

Ch.4. I was going to leave you now - your perception and skill are extraordinary. But after that hook, I just have to read on.

Ch.5. Yes - what is going to happen about that generation our so-called developed world has spawned...

You've written a masterpiece. I dont have a Kindle, and am of the age when I prefer to turn real pages. But I'm maxi-starring your book. I dont do that often, these days.
Thanks for a great read.
Jane (Breath of Africa).

Stark Silvercoin wrote 12 days ago

The Free is a story with a serious message, and the real joy of it is how author M.Gilliland disguises that within a very good story. Almost every other “message” book I’ve ever read has been a bit ham-handed and clunky, but The Free is, well, Free of all that.

Based on the somewhat disjointed pitch, I was expecting a fairly wacky tale, but The Free has many serious moments that could give literary fiction tales a run for their money. Dialog is spot on perfect and it’s easy to emphasize with the main character as either Linda or Maxie. In fact, in a lot of ways, Linda/Maxie and to some extent Macker are the normal ones, the straight-man role for the crazy world Gilliland has created.

It’s also interesting to note that The Free is quite a timely tale given what is happening in the world. We’re killing our climate and our economy is going down with it, making The Free an admirable anecdote to represent our somewhat lost generation.

John Breeden II
Old Number Seven

scarlettwarrior wrote 25 days ago

Great! Virile and aggressive, honest and funny. I like it, I like it a lot. I've only read a little so far, but you sure pack a punch with it! Good show!

RoyEarle93 wrote 27 days ago

I don't have any critisism to give you, just praise for a very strong and emotional story. This is a very well executed and powerful story with very well drawn out characters and vivid descriptions.

Best Wishes,

Roy Earle, "Bad Men and Bad Odds"

FrancesK wrote 37 days ago

you are on my shelf. Dystopias rule!

FrancesK wrote 37 days ago

Love this. Love your world and your wacky protagonist. Can I put it on my [free] Kindle app from your blogsite? I've read 7 chapters so far. What we need is a Dystopia Press that specialises in weird worlds. Love the comedy - and the Irishness. Fair play. Go maith!

coloratura wrote 38 days ago

Hi Mike
Finally got to reading the first three chapters of The Free and wow! what a brilliant, sassy, voice you have created for Linda. I fell in love with her right away and though not surprised was very sad to see the truth of her life in chapter 2. Very moving, gritty and real. Enjoyed your turns of phrase , e.g. 'like a bee in a jar' and 'Janice had smashed the nice aquarium' - find the dialogue very fluent and it's a hard-to-put down read. well starred and on my bookshelf for the first week of January. Best, Coloratura

JDalton wrote 52 days ago

Backed the book - feel free to back mine :) I saw you wrote to me over a year ago, sorry, had a long hiatus from the site!

mikegilli wrote 191 days ago

E Book OUT NOW as a Free Download, from the Blog and ''selling well''.

Also available on Gooogle Boooks, Scribd, Issuu and the Anarchist Library
and publicized via its blog and FarseBook pages.

I'm finally updating this 'authonomy edition' so in a few days there will
be an amazing improvement, at least in my dubious opinion

Thanks everyone for your help and support with this project.
**********************************************

...............After reaching Rank 7 again the book has been neglected for over a year on this shite.
........................................I'm now hoping to get more active again here
...................I'm still happy to review or comment on your book, but just for fun.. ON REQUEST.

.......................I do try to return all shelvings, unless your book is fascist, sexist or racist.
...............This is complicated, as there's no point backing for less than a few days it seems, so
.....................................................please let me know if I screw up!
............. .The BLOG/site is now worth checking out....http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com/
Plus it has a super page on Farcebook http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=100001284179241&sk=wall

..........I'm also using the book to promote CO2-Free fuel, now integrated into the text, as I'm now convinced
............................that the whole planet is being ever more rapidly and irrevocably trashed.
..............check it out here: http://thefreeonline.wordpress.com/category/ammonia-nh3-co2-free-fuel/

.............................................Thanx a trillion to all supporters of The Free

nuknuk wrote 242 days ago

Your pitch drew me in and i'm glad it did. It was a great read and I hope it goes far.
Leslie
"Love has no borders"

neoman-keith@hotmail.co.uk wrote 296 days ago

Hi Mike,
I love this storyline, and I love your description and the use of similes. It rolls off the tongue very easily and flows. Your characters are strong and believable. A great read so far. I gave it six stars.

I now have several books on my list, feel free to have a look and give them a view.
All the best with this novel.

Keith.

Kim D wrote 334 days ago

A well written story with nicely drawn characters and a unique voice. I loved some of your descriptions (for example the one of Sister Bernice - a short, shriveled woman) and you certainly made me care about Linda. I have no choice but to read on to make sure she's ok in the end.
Good luck with publishing your story. I'm sure it'll do brilliantly.
Kim
St Viper's School for Super Villains

neoman-keith@hotmail.co.uk wrote 334 days ago

Hi, I have read your blurb and provisionally given you a 5 star rating. I will get to read some of your book asap. Keep in touch. Keith.

Nanty wrote 342 days ago

The Free.
Act 1 - Linda.
Poor Linda, discovering her father having an affair with awful Janice in front of an audience. This passage works really well, oscillating between Linda's horrified embarrassment and her friends hilarity at what's going on. I could not only visualise this but hear the girls squeals and jeering comments.
'Oh my god... Maybe I'd killed a saint!' Really amusing, shows the uncertainty Linda has about religion despite the sister being a right harridan. Daddy's behaviour towards her isn't right as Linda is just beginning to understand, thanks to Janice. No wonder she's so angry.
Vibrant prose with realistic dialogue. Teenaged Linda's thoughts and actions are nicely observed and come across really well. Who couldn't like her or fail to empathise with her?

Nanty - Chrys!

LintonWood wrote 362 days ago

Not my thing - but it is very well done and written with a sassy verve that allows the reader to relate to the central character. I read the first two chapters and could find no real errors of note and I wish you all the best with it.

Best wishes
Linton Wood

Marie Crist wrote 366 days ago

Hello,
I have just rated your book 6 stars!

Phyllis Burton wrote 367 days ago

Hello Mike, This is not my favourtie genre or style of writing, but I can see as obviously a lot of other people can see, that your writing is very good. Your characters are rounded and appear real. I wish you the very best with this story. I would like to read more than the three chapters, so it is going on to my Watchlist for a spell.
Perhaps you would like to read some of my story PAPER DREAMS.
Best wishes to you

Phyllis
A PASSING STORM & PAPER DREAMS

Brian Bandell wrote 388 days ago

What a book. This is quite the unexpected gem you have found here. I'm glad this made it into English.

Brian
Mute

Athena Lyso wrote 390 days ago

I truly enjoyed reading Linda's story and her thoughts and feelings believable as a teenage girl. The narrative has a great tone and lends a wonderful flair of humor. The organization is a little confusing at first and I was not sure if we were reading Linda looking back to the past or telling things as they happen.

I suggest you may want to separated the chapter outline from the preface and the first chapter onto a different tab on the site. I didn't want to read the chapter outlines because I wanted to dive right into the story without spoilers. I jumped ahead to avoid this and had to go back to scan until I reached the narrative.

The scene that really grabbed me is Linda with her school friends seeing Janice kissing Linda's father in the car. That is a great hook and propels the story forward. You have a great style and I enjoyed the read.

Thanks,
Athena
The Raven and the Wolf

billysunday wrote 394 days ago

Wow! You really have something to say! Your characters are original and rich, but disturbing. I only read a few chapters was impressed by your victim's perspective. Your book kind of reminds me of It. You've tackled a real problem with major style. 6 stars and hope you get published.

Steveisinfrance wrote 398 days ago
Christopher Roy Denton wrote 399 days ago

Hi Mike!

What a wonderful narrative voice you have adopted. Linda is a fantastic, realistic fifteen-year-old girl. The opening of the story is gripping. The time setting is a hook in itself, set at a time when society begins to crumble as the government cannot pay its employees, somewhat like Russia not so long ago. Sister Bernadette is another well sketched personality.

Try to use the sense of smell a little to help the reader feel they’re there with Linda. When she passes the other schoolgirls, are some of them wearing the latest ‘Britney’ perfume, their parents showing off their wealth while everyone else has nothing? What about the lads? Do they stink of bo, or too much cheap deodorant? Since the school is so rundown and lacking staff, do the corridors stink of urine?

Use a few less exclamation marks, and those you must use will become more powerful.

The initial quote, a sentence from later in the story, means nothing to the virgin reader looking at this for the first time. Me? I read the quote three times, trying to understand what I was missing. ‘Was it a famous line?’ I wondered. Imho, lose it, mate.

The first few paragraphs are misleading. They don’t introduce the character very well (I assumed she was an adult to begin with because she says ‘men are all like that’ rather than boys) and don’t hook. About a page later, you have a fantastic scene outside a shop where the mc sees her father kissing a girl her own age. If you begin the whole story with that scene, you can very easily draw the reader immediately into your mc’s world.

Imagine an opening to your book something like this:

***

Well, I was passing the corner shop on my way back to school when a large group of other girls started giggling and pointing at me. What the fuck?

I stormed over to the tallest, a fourteen-year-old lass I vaguely recognised from the year below me, and shoved her. “Whatcha laughin’ at? You think I’m funny?” I thrust my fist against her chin and pushed her head up. “I’ll show you funny.”

To my shock, the smirk didn’t slip from her ugly gob. Was she brave, or just plain simple? She glanced at a car parked nearby, a familiar grey Volvo. My dad’s car. Why wasn’t he at work?

I let go of the bitch and wandered over to ask my dad what was going on. What I saw through that steamed up window stopped me in my tracks. What was Janice doing in our car? What happened next made me want to puke something chronic.

***

Also, consider making her just one year older. It makes a big difference legally, and will help readers to identify with her a little better. If you wish Janice to be fifteen to make Dad's actions illegal, fine.

But, having mentioned how wonderful the actual story is, I have to say that all the stuff up front, the contents page and introduction, is distracting. I felt obliged to read the introduction, thinking it might be important to understanding the beginning of the story, but it wasn’t. I suspect there will be people on this site who give up during the first section before sampling your actual story, because they think the whole book is going to be like that. I strongly suggest you abandon the contents page and place the historical notes at the end of the story, so that your wonderful, natural narrative hooks the reader from the very first sentence.

Anyway, as I said in the beginning, this is a wonderfully crafted story with a great first person narrative voice. I’m going to find room for it on my shelf, and wish you all the best with this!

Chris :)
Sally & Jack

Jules Carlyle wrote 401 days ago

i have rated for you but i'm sorry its just not my kind of book but not every book is to every persons taste, i'm sure its well written though and other people seem to be enjoying it so good luck! jules x

mrsdfwt wrote 402 days ago

I like your style . Good luck :)
Maria

LL Su wrote 405 days ago

Mike,

You've uploaded a very aesthetic looking book here, my friend. Oh............and the story's not too bad. Exciting stuff..................

;)

LL Su ~}¡{~ WONDERFLIES~}¡{~

(If only I had your skills to make colorful butterflies. Mine are the poor man's version.) ~}¡{~ ..................

flower girl wrote 406 days ago

Your style is unique and the story hooked me from the start. I'm no judge of grammar or punctuation but I loved what I've read of the story and hope to return to read more. Your characters leap out from the page (or should I say screen) and the imagery you use is subtle and very descriptive.
I'm highly star-rating this and backing it too.
Gill

ClaireLouise wrote 412 days ago

Original, funny and well-written.

Best of luck-starred

"Stolen Childhood" wrote 414 days ago

I have backed your book
Have a lovely Christmas
Laila Bevan

Beccy Blount wrote 415 days ago

Greetings, Orlando Furioso suggested I shelve you ... should you be able to give said Orlando's WATCHING SWIFTS a 24-bask in the sun on your shelf I wld be hugely appreciative ... and keep you on mine awhile.
Clancy

mala iyer wrote 415 days ago

i enjoyed the pace and the cadence; you paint an extremely vivid picture with marveloously broad brishstrokes. behind the humor there's a definite pathos that is all the more moving for not being maudlin....high stars and on my watchlist to read more. good luck !!
mala

SamanthaV wrote 416 days ago

I was curious about this, but I'm not quite sure I "get it." Maybe I'm having a bad hair day?

stoatsnest wrote 422 days ago

Very powerful stuff. Five stars and a backing as soon as is decent.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 423 days ago

OK, hopefully you go all the way this time. The change-over hit a lot of us, myself included. Hope things will be better for all of us in the future.

FEL

BTW: Fascinating first 3 chapters.

EltopiaAuthor wrote 427 days ago

This first chapter was simply delightful. I found myself chuckling all the way through. The depictions were vivid and believable, right down to the fight with the nun. This was .. delightful. I alaready said that, I know, but I am still feeling amused and entertained. And yet, the author has set things up in such a way that I am expecting to encounter a variety of ways that people can be subversive. I think this book is going to be a real find.

FEL

EltopiaAuthor wrote 427 days ago

The Free: OH yes, this is good writing, the kind of story I love to read myself. The author takes me inside the colorful, if sometimes depressing, worlds of governments, schools an family, and makes them really come live. I will be starring this heavily and place it on my wachlist to come back to soon. FEL

Walden Carrington wrote 433 days ago

Mike,
The Free is a one of a kind story with an enthralling plot. It reminds me of nothing I've ever seen before so it must have come out of your brilliant imagination. Backed with six stars.

Walden Carrington
Titanic: Rose Dawson's Story

rivergirl wrote 434 days ago

hi mike -- i like linda moon -- i can't believe she decked a nun. iheart-wrenching and funny simultaenously. starred with pleasure!! k x

DMHeadley wrote 434 days ago

Hi Mike,
I really enjoyed reading your story and have given you six stars!
Unfortunatly I am having problems re- backing books, but will keep trying

Good luck
Dawn
Sammy and the Wise Willow

RonParker wrote 434 days ago

Hi Mike,

I wish I had time to read more of this. From what I have read so far, it's an excellent story and I'm not surprised that it's so high in the ratings. I found no errors.
Good luck with it.

Ron

tillerman7 wrote 436 days ago

M. Gilliland,

Didn't have to read much to see we see life through two completely opposite prisms. While you seek out the next great social revolution, I'm enjoying the greatest one in the history of mankind, the United States of America. We've been going strong for 234 years and counting. So I have less interest in reading about the fall of "Predatory Capitalism" but more in learning why you hate it so much.
The opening of your story highlights the greatest problem in your dream. You talk of one revolution going bad, replaced by another, seeking yet another. Good luck with that, and your book.

Steve Kemp

Desta the Book wrote 436 days ago

Great imaginative writing... beautiful story

Getty Ambau, author of DESTA.

celticwriter wrote 438 days ago

Hey Mike, happy to re back your work. Placing on WL for now, as its in line with a few others. What I really wonder about - is - one should be writing about YOUR life and making it into a movie. Sounds fascinating. See, that's what you get when you ask a scriptwriter what he thinks...

heh heh heh
jim

todd89 wrote 439 days ago

I've read the first chapter and liked what I saw. Have you considered Create Space, it has all the publishing needs.
I know it doesn't sound like much, but I thought it might help for you to take a look. I'm going through with it with one of my unpublished books, and they have treated me with all due respect. I've written six books but only two of them have been published so far.

Jedah Mayberry wrote 443 days ago

I'm just getting to overdue reads. I'm happy to hear you are progressing with the manuscript. It is deserving of serious consideration.

Jedah Mayberry

Linda Lou wrote 444 days ago

hullo mIke you are shelved for a good read!
Already shelved and backed and soon to be starred.
Please take a look at my book and thanks for that if you have.
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

Pat Black wrote 445 days ago

A re-backing and a six-starring from me - this is another original piece of work, the pitch is striking, the form us unusual, the characters are great and Linda's metamorphosis is well-handled. Glad this is moving on up; all the best to you

P

Francene Stanley wrote 445 days ago

This is my second reading of your excellent story, and I went for Chapter 2. I found it so good that I read 3 as well. The writing flows, and I found the young girls' voice charming and believable. Everything she experienced seemed real to me and the actions and thoughts flowed well.

I'm pleased to shelf your book again, and star rate it as promised and would love you to do the same for me.

Francene. still Rock Water.

karenrosario wrote 448 days ago

Looks fascinating and very unique. The chapters are hugely thought provoking and there is a lot of energy. Skimming through it all felt a bit too 'in your face', possibly because of the colours, large font, etc. Probably it would look good like that in a book but on screen is a little offputting (just my opinion, ignore it if no one else has said it!).
Well done!
Karen Rosario

Justis Call wrote 449 days ago

Only at the beginning of this wonderfully told story, I can relate to the rebelliousness of sweet little Linda Moon. She seems to do all those things many of us would have if we could have at some point in our adolescent growth spurt. Excellent work, happily backed!

Justis Call
Prestidigitations

ccb1 wrote 450 days ago

Added The Free to our watchlist. We liked it the first time and will be happy to rate and back as soon as we rotate a few books. Good luck!
CC Brown