Confessions of a nightporter

Many thanks Nick, your comments are really encouraging.

I hope you like the changes to the short summary, as per you advice. I would like to spend the time revising the confessions to polish it up and modernise, but need an editor / publisher /agent to see the potential before I drop my other projects to spend the year doing this.

All the best,

Andy

Just read the first story of the Nightporter – loved it! Short stories are really like sitcom episodes – they can actually contain everything their parents do (full-length novels, or movies) if they are really good. I find this first story really darling and hope the rest are as good! Up on the shelf you go.

I must point you to my protégé Karl and his short stories. They are more of the morbid kind, but I think you’ll love them: The book is called The Evil People and you find it here:

http://authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=3177

Minor changes I would love:

Cut the tags. You don’t earn anything by tagging everything you can dream up.

The first lines in the pitch “Bristling with word-play, dripping with charicature. This book will blow the dust from the library shelves.” I find them unnecessary and a bit to blatant. As a reader, I would like to form those kinds of statements for myself. Use your charm and write something selling instead.

All the best!

//N.N

Just read the first story of the Nightporter – loved it! Short stories are really like sitcom episodes – they can actually contain everything their parents do (full-length novels, or movies) if they are really good. I find this first story really darling and hope the rest are as good! Up on the shelf you go.

I must point you to my protégé Karl and his short stories. They are more of the morbid kind, but I think you’ll love them: The book is called The Evil People and you find it here:

http://authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=3177

Minor changes I would love:

Cut the tags. You don’t earn anything by tagging everything you can dream up.

The first lines in the pitch “Bristling with word-play, dripping with charicature. This book will blow the dust from the library shelves.” I find them unnecessary and a bit to blatant. As a reader, I would like to form those kinds of statements for myself. Use your charm and write something selling instead.

All the best!

//N.N

Yet another item for my watchlist. I am out hunting now, will come back soon.

The words running together stops after a few hundred words.

Words running together do not appear on my computer so must be a feature of the uploading software. I don't know what I can do about them.

Surely. I guess the plot is about love and sexy time in 1999. It is about the relationship between two friends and their different approaches to love and fcking.

The romantic Nightporter fixes his broken heart whilst his laddish pal, Sebastian, falls crazily in love again. Then it all gets turned around and Sebastian's love ends like a car crash whilst the Nightporter redefines what he can fall in love with.

The plot meanders rather than drives the work, like the lives of the individuals described therein. The purpose of the book is to raise a smile per page on the basis that if one "laughs out loud" three times in a book it is "Hilarious - the best thing since Ben Elton".... ergo bestseller.

Perhaps it was meant to be comedy literature rather than plot-driven sitcom.

I need a plot.
I like ponderings, descriptions, quirky thoughts, but I need a plot.
That's probably why publishers insist on it too.