Butt Naked

Larry, I have read six chapters of this book. I think it is well wriitten and has beautiful descriptive writing, which both paints a visual picture of beauty and a devastating and horrifiying emotional picture.

I am sure it all seems so surreal, it always amazes me when the people in power bend and break the law as it suits their needs, they turn around and call it Justice, it sickens me...Law should be apllied equally to all men. I truly am sorry that lies and deceit are what put you in jail and the real criminals are out there ploting against working class people, very sad indeed.

I hope your story gets told and investigated, since they hold government positions can't you go to the attorney general?

All that aside, my only nit would be that you thin out the building of the cabins a bit..ie aluminum nails, measurement of the wood, it kind of reads like a manual for log home building and slows up the pace,(for this woman anyway) I found myself skimming paragraphs till I got to an informative paragraph relating to the story. Other then that well done,,,Wish you all the best... Backed ....Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

After your first scene, I wanted to read on to find some answer to the question you posed :
'Look at the beauty, which surrounds this place. This is God's country! How could people be unhappy here?'

I think of the information you've supplied in your bio, then think of the gulf between that innocent dream of forming a homestead in the hills with Mona and her family and now your incarceration. To me, that's poignant, knowing it's based on true life but, to you, I can imagine how you must ache to see justice.
The description of your sometimes difficult task of funding the preparations for the homestead and then the complication arising on Mona's pregnancy are in crystal clear straightforward prose which is easy to follow and reflects the urgency of the narrative you need to unfold.

Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

All the right elements. On shelf.
The Wonder of Terra
Tom Balderston

Hi Larry,

Based on the small section I've had time to read, this is good and shouldn't have too much difficulty in finding a publisher.

T ere are a few small errors. The most important is that you switch tenses sometimes, watch out for that. Also throughout the whole of the the first chapter, we never learn the narrator's name. You have the opportunity to correct this when you have some dialogue with the father.

Other small errors are you have a line reading 'days are enchanting' where you need a 'as' before enchanting, and you have 'along side' which should be 'alongside'.

Little things, but the kind of thing that makes a potential publisher stop reading.

Good luck with it.

Ron

Lovely descriptive passages of the mountains. Flowing style that is only slightly slow in places.. I wish you good luck. Backed K.J.

Have backed it, hope you get your retribution.
Check mine out and back if possible.
David J Pickering
CONVERGENCE
THE CIVIL UNREST

A great start to the story. It is well written and full of promise for the rest of the novel.

Just have a look at the pitch, "Stipper" almost made me not bother :P

However the first chapter is really good and worth the backing.

Kindest Regards
Alan Dartnall
~The Demon's Vengeance~

I came back and read the rest of this. It's an incredible story and I really felt I was with you in it all the way. Well done Larry. Kudos.
Best wishes,
Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Dear Larry Scible,

Can’t say it any other way, but I feel bad for you. Thank goodness you can write and use Authonomy because that sure can whittle away the time. I like Butt Naked and like your down-to-earth, no pretense style.

(Wow, West Virginia, check out the end of Section One for my West Virginia experience. Country roads, yeah, right.)

I wish you the best, friend, with your manuscript and all things.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

You have great style, Larry. This is a truly beautiful literary piece. I hope you do well with it.

Lacey

A riveting true story with original, quirky characters depicted with skill and keen observation. Vivid sense of place. Compelling, thought-provoking storyline. Impressive writing. A compulsive read. Backed.

Curiosity demanded I give this a read. It's easy to see the attractions of West Virginia and of the estate you bought: acres of mountain land with trout rivers. Less enviable is the amount of work and hardship required to build a cabin. Just reading about it is draining, especially as winter approaches, increasing the hardships. Then the ruddy wasps!

Sadly, marriage is not the start of a happy new life. Neat new line of work though. Again, things change. Plans to build a club. You're either a brave man or a glutton for punishment, Larry. Enemies, opposition, so sod the drinks licence, bring on the strippers. But that also means bring on more trouble. And trouble comes thick and fast. In the end, the extent of the stitch up is spectacular. I wish you every luck in getting your story out there, and finding justice.

Possible nits: I think it would help if your pitch was longer and gave a clearer indication about what the book is about.

Hi Larry, what a great start to your story. It is well written superbly paced and your characters spring to life. I loved it. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Larry:

Amazing that such nonsense goes on in positions of power, though not as shocking as it ought to be, I guess. Kudos for telling your story in such an honest, forthright way.
Best of luck.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

BUTT NAKED - 8/6/2010

Chapters 1 and 2 - good opening. I like the way you brought me into the story with a vernacular style. It suits the story line. What I didn't like was the precise descriptions of situations and procedures that slowed the story down. At times, it was as if I were reading a textbook. Building the cabin could be shortened to a brief narrative and retaining only those parts that actually are important to the story. The breakup with Mona was more important than that, but received only two paragraphs.

In Chapter 3, we go through it again with the club. Later chapters dealing with the trial and appeals get the momentum back. This is a fascinating story and, although most people refuse to believe it, corruption is in every facet of our society. But, then, it has always been that way. After all, we're human and humans have the ability to make choices. Unfortunately, some of them have no means of accountability. You were caught in that trap.

I wish you good luck with this story and I hope it moves enough people to start a trend of reversal of the corruption. That, though, will take much time.

Marc - Where's The Ivy

Hi Larry - Just checked out the first few chapters of 'Butt Naked' as promised.
Loved the pitch and liked the first few chapters too. Good, natural style to the writing. I could almost smell the fresh air & pine trees in chap 2! Backed.
Adrian Lee

Hi Larry, I don't usually read biographies so don't feel able to comment on the format of your book. The content is compelling. No one can read this and not feel for your plight. The writing is very good. I wish you every success, both with the book and your appeal.
Best wishes
Kristen Stone
Kianda Mala - The Monkey Man

Hi Larry, I don't usually read biographies so don't feel able to comment on the format of your book. The content is compelling. No one can read this and not feel for your plight. The writing is very good. I wish you every success, both with the book and your appeal.
Best wishes
Kristen Stone
Kianda Mala - The Monkey Man

Why does this have a red arrow?? - I love this for its tongue in cheek humour and op-ed style. You have talent! Backed 100%

Liz
The Cheech Room

I have read up to ch6 so far, and the injustice suffered is appalling. This is a powerful story you have to tell. I sincerely wish you the very best for the future. Your book is on my WL for now and I will shelve it next week.

Best wishes

Sarah Louise

This first chapter is a real attention grabber. Vivid descriptions. Raises curiosity. Tighly writen. Fast paced.
Backed.



Nit: I really LOVED your first sentence EXCEPT for the word "often" wondered. You already said you wondered "every night," so often is reduntant.

Larry,

Wow, this is excellent writing, made much more powerful because it's true! I'm amazed something like this could happen, but I'm glad you were able to take that experience and turn it into something so well received.

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

Thank you for backing Kidnapped: The President's Family. I took a look at your book and within half a chapter I was hooked. I have read three chapters and I enjoyed it very much. I will read more tonight and each evening until I finish it. I have backed it with pleasure. I love your use of detail to move the story.

Mark Mane Kidnapped: The President's Family and other titles.

THis is so well written and so incredible to read that I didn't actually realise at first that it was biographical. WHat can I say, truth can indeed be stranger than fiction.

Your writing is a joy to read, obviously not the subject matter, that is painful and achingly real, but the style with which you write.
Lots of luck and best wishes.

Jo G

Butt-Naked - This is an honest and gritty story written in a strong voice with lots of heart. I have a family member in a Prison camp now and my only advise is 'when happiness is elusive, keep your head down and plow'.

I scanned your comments a bit and I don't agree with the 'thining out the building of the cabins" I kind of liked the toil and construction of your cabin. It shows how hard you were willing to work for your family.

All the best,
:-) Summer D'Vine

I'm probably not the best person to comment on your work because I can only read one chapter at a time from the screen - and your first chapter describes an idyll - which I know is not the story at all. However, what I can say is that your writing flows like that river and is a pleasure to read. Hopefully, I'll get back to the rest of the story soon.
Katy Christie
No Man No Cry

I really like the narration here; it makes everything come to life, even if that life is a tragic one. I loved this line: "But I know it's probably more junk mail from my public pretender, siphoning tax-payer's funds, ,while paying lip-service to the tune of justice."

Consider yourself backed, sir.

Melissa (+Amanda)
Burns Like the Sun

You know what this hits like an on set of deja vu (our own thoughts returned to us with an alienated majesty...(sic) Emerson)...it is not shocking to me but rather honestly written, which is good writing as far as I am concerned...a great telling

Yeah, Uncle Sam is the greatest pimp of them all. We the people keep getting bought and sold on a regular basis. Katie may have been a sacrificial lamb to the War on Drugs, her and millions of others. I love your description, 1972 Jeep Wagoner and all. It takes me back a little. Simply, been there and done a lot of that so I'm more than willing to back you on this. The situation with Genie and Tina is intriguing. Sounds like a lot of raging hormones going down. I'll read more of this when I get a little more time. Backed for now.

Larry (and Nancy),

What happened to you is indeed very tragical. I only hope that you'll be able to find a way out of this mess... My heart goes out to you.

Now, my complements on your style - it is flowing, precise, and very skillful! You are a very good writer!

I do support and love this book!

Backed with pleasure

Johanna Kern
Master and the Green-Eyed Hope

I really enjoyed the first 4 chapd of your book where you portrayed your dream and worked hard to achieve it . I must admit that some of the descriptions about preparing the trees wern't really necessary for the narrative but they did establish what a hard worker you were. Your love for your daughter and lack of self pity after Mona left you also gave an insight to your character. I hope that you are soon freed to live your dream again. Shelved Regards, Anne

Yep, backed with British gusto and verve! I know little of mountain country or Mary Jane or US Penitentiaries but you do and therefore have more stories in your little finger than I ... damn you, sir! (and bravo!) Luke, The Kingdom Within.

This book is well written, informative, powerful and leaves a bad taste in the mouth...Well Done, Sir!!
Backed with pleasure. Good Luck.
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book.

Engaging and powerful. I would buy this as I think true stories give significant insight for all sorts of reasons.

I wish you all the best,

ww Lisa

There has to be a ready market for work that is so honest and down to earth...it's from experiences such as this that the rest of us can learn...what a pleasant change from the world of elves, goblins, fairies etc. I wish you and your book the very best of luck in the future
Stewart

Barry,

Returning your read. Thank you for your support.

I notice in the Acknowledgements you have '. . . for use [on] his passage on Ganja', should that be 'of'?

Reading on, this memoir is simply told, but the style is engaging. There are odd issues that an edit should pick up--changes in tense for example--but all in all an easy read.

Happy to give this a spin on my shelf.

Hi Thank you for your interest
Larry has gone back several times to no avail.
He should be getting work release soon.

Hi Larry, Why not ask for a change of venue? reguest a different judge. The inequities to mankind does exist and most courts take the statements of law enforcements personel over the accused. The really should outlaw (in USA) the use of cell phones while operating any motorized equipment .especiallky cars on the highways. i'M SAD AND YET I BACK YOUR BOOK. Harold Alvin(ICON)Wesley

Hi Larry, Why not ask for a change of venue? reguest a different judge. The inequities to mankind does exist and most courts take the statements of law enforcements personel over the accused. The really should outlaw (in USA) the use of cell phones while operating any motorized equipment .especiallky cars on the highways. i'M SAD AND YET I BACK YOUR BOOK. Harold Alvin(ICON)Wesley

Butt Naked is certainly compelling, with prose that borders on the poetic.. hard to imagine that someone's incarcerated for smoking MJ, I certainly find that tragic.. a thought provoking read - well worth reading!
Backed and best wishes
Diane
Good Blood

BUTT NAKED

Larry's stand-in: you are a true and noble friend to Larry and worthy of the highest praise for sticking by him. His book is straight in your face realism. I would rank it among the best books describing imprisonment serving the interests of corrupt justice: Dreyfus comes to mind, The Count of Monte Christo, The Man in the Iron Mask, Mandela too and Papillon. I am sure it will find a publisher. Backed. Thank you for Backing my book - I came to Butt Naked not because I was looking for a quid pro quo but recognised it as the genuine article. These final words are not mine - I appropriate them - IT BURNS WITH A GEM-LIKE FLAME.

Tony Brady - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1,2 & 3.

Hi Nancy (Larry?), Your opening few paragraphs had me hooked. How could that happen? For one toke? Ah, yes, this is America.
The writing is strong and the pace fine. I'd separate dialogue for easier reading online.
BACKED with outrage,
Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Alice,
i am replying on behalf of Larry.
this is a true story and Larry is not available.
He is hoping to get out on a work release program this summer.
SoThank you for your support.
Njoy *moods and expressions*

A riveting and 'straight from the heart' account of injustice (hope you aint fooling us Larry!). I read a lot of it last week and have come back for more.

Hope your book gets to be read by those that can make a difference to you and those like you.

I thank you for backing my book today and wish you the very best with yours
Alice Haro
Interfering busybody

A riveting and 'straight from the heart' account of injustice (hope you aint fooling us Larry!). I read a lot of it last week and have come back for more.

Hope your book gets to be read by those that can make a difference to you and those like you.

I thank you for backing my book today and wish you the very best with yours
Alice Haro
Interfering busybody

Larry this is a beautifully written, thought provoking read. Not the sort of book I would normally read but the title grabbed me then the short profile left me wanting a little more. Your characterization is marvelous, and it did take me to sadness that was honestly felt. BACKED Larry. Could you please read some of my work, very different to yours, non-fiction also. Could you read some of my non-fiction and give your comments. much appreciated. BEST of luck
Denise
'The Letter'

I know little or nothing about the american legal system, but if only a quarter of what you have told here is true, there is a crying need for some sort of reform.
As to the drugs...you have merely confiormed what I have thought for many, many years. Legalise everything and tax it, just as we do over here with drink and cigarettes. You can't stop people going to the devil in a hand cart, but you can tax the devil for doing it.
Good luck.

This is a heartfelt tale filled with passion. Technically it could do with some tidying, but the story is strong and descriptive, engaging the reader from the outset.

I don't pretend to know the first thing about the American legal system but I wish you well in your fight for justice

Best wishes
Gail
NEW BEGINNINGS

Larry, I have read six chapters of this book. I think it is well wriitten and has beautiful descriptive writing, which both paints a visual picture of beauty and a devastating and horrifiying emotional picture.

I am sure it all seems so surreal, it always amazes me when the people in power bend and break the law as it suits their needs, they turn around and call it Justice, it sickens me...Law should be apllied equally to all men. I truly am sorry that lies and deceit are what put you in jail and the real criminals are out there ploting against working class people, very sad indeed.

I hope your story gets told and investigated, since they hold government positions can't you go to the attorney general?

All that aside, my only nit would be that you thin out the building of the cabins a bit..ie aluminum nails, measurement of the wood, it kind of reads like a manual for log home building and slows up the pace,(for this woman anyway) I found myself skimming paragraphs till I got to an informative paragraph relating to the story. Other then that well done,,,Wish you all the best... Backed ....Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

A gritty, thought provoking and sad story which is finely crafted and well written. Good luck in your quest for truth and freedom. Backed.

Cheers,
Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

The characters are as clear as the scenic descriptions. It's simply excellent writing. Backed. lynn

This is a wonderful story, very well written and laid out, exciting and thoroughly engaging. I shall back it and recommend it to friends.
BADD

After your first scene, I wanted to read on to find some answer to the question you posed :
'Look at the beauty, which surrounds this place. This is God's country! How could people be unhappy here?'

I think of the information you've supplied in your bio, then think of the gulf between that innocent dream of forming a homestead in the hills with Mona and her family and now your incarceration. To me, that's poignant, knowing it's based on true life but, to you, I can imagine how you must ache to see justice.
The description of your sometimes difficult task of funding the preparations for the homestead and then the complication arising on Mona's pregnancy are in crystal clear straightforward prose which is easy to follow and reflects the urgency of the narrative you need to unfold.

Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Read 5 chapters. An intriguing story with a little of everything. Very descriptive work about the log building.
Your story is well written and deserves tomdomwell.Good luck.
I have backed it.
David (Flawless Murder)