The Adventures of Annie Pippit. TWIST THE MIST AND THE ISLAND OF DANGER

This is a lovely idea, especially given that cats are notoriously curious. I agree with another comment that the cats - other than Annie - don't have their personalities brought to life enough. But otherwise it's a nice tale - I like the little language lessons we get along the way - plurals (fox and foxes), difficult words that adults use (whence) and an example of bad grammar (Twist's speech). In that respect I think a pretty and simple story will help children to learn without realising.
I would be interested to see the rest of the story though, to see how you further detail the island and connect the mysterious mist.
I wish you the best of luck! On my bookshelf.

Clare Morris
The Cloud Drivers: The Giant's Storm

Cute. My daughter is nearly four and loves kittens- no, she's obsessed with them! You need a bit more punctuation though :-)

I loved it, i would read it to my daughter. backed.

This is fun. I love the name "Purring by the Sea". It is a perfect name for a seaside cat town.
Some comments:
1) A few typos and misspellings. Such as "It says here," not "It say's here". "Flicking " not "Flishing.
2) Emerson, Amy and Mushka start out as just names. Meaning, you could really add some description when you introduce them. What sort of cats are they? Colour, size? Otherwise I get a bit lost in 3 descriptiveless characters. Let us know what you see here. Anyway, kids love to hear about cats, what they look like, distinctive markings.
3) In general, you use lots of conversation (and this is done effectively). However I don't get a picture of the surroundings. you could add a lot more description, so we see, smell and hear the places they are.
Nice idea! I think kids would love a story about cats like this!
I'll back it in support.
Giulietta

Martin,
Yours is the first book I read. I typed in "childrens" in the search column and your book came up. You might want to add some more tags on your personal page, like "cats" or "fantasy" then someone putting in those words in the search line might find your book too. This is not the style of children's book I would read to my own kids. It is too long. If you want it to be a chapter book for young kids say in third grade, your vocabulary is going to be too hard for them, like using the word persuade, or just plain odd with some of your expressions they may not be familiar with. Think about who your audience is and adjust your vocabulary to their level.
I'd appreciate it if you would check out one of my books, Antidote for Anxiety, and see if you like it.
I wish you the best!
Mary Wilkinson

Just a few comments. You don't need a forward. That isn't done in kid's books. Also, you might have better luck changing your format. Short story collections are pretty well unheard of in kid's books unless you are a household name. Doesn't mean it won't happen, just really unlikely.

Your writing has an old fashioned feel. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing. But it must be purposeful. Contemporary children's stories are much different than the ones we read when we were young. Some common advice is to read at least 100 books in the category of fiction you are writing for so you get a feel for its conventions. Plus, studying punctuation and grammar wouldn't hurt. I noticed your dialogue isn't punctuated correctly.

Good luck!