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date submitted 18.02.2009
date updated 19.02.2009
genres: Thriller, Science Fiction, Fantasy,...
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City of Masks

Mike Reeves-McMillan

City of Masks is a swashbuckling adventure in a setting reminiscent of Shakespeare's Italy (complete with twins).

 

In the city-state of Bonvidaeo, by custom and law everyone must wear a mask and act in character with it, or face civil, social and religious penalties. Gregorius Bass is sent to Bonvidaeo as the Envoy of Calaria, primarily to get him out from underfoot. Masked as the Innocent Man, and in the company of his radical young Bonvidaoan servant, Bass stumbles into mystery, intrigue, heresy and murder. It's speculative fiction (though it's neither science fiction nor fantasy). It's a mystery (with a serial killer) and an adventure (with a sword fight after a rooftop chase). There's intrigue, some humour and a little romance. Beneath it all, though, is a serious reflective point about identity and social convention.

 
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Chapter 1

Private journal of Darion, Lord Rivers, Undersecretary to the Foreign Minister of Calaria

The sixth of the first month.

Perhaps I might soon enjoy relations with my wife again.

Sir Willard Chase, that good man, is dead – and I mourn him as is proper. But with his death there comes available a post to which I may appoint Gregorius Bass, so that my honoured spouse may be reconciled to me.

It always astounds me that a woman otherwise astute should so romanticise such a one as Gregorius, half-brother or no. True, he bears a strong physical resemblance to their late father, and has even many of the old man's mannerisms. This circumstance has deceived others, myself included, though never for so long as it has deceived her. Their father was no fool; a badger of a man, black and white, solid and slow-moving, tenacious, fierce when cornered, but no fool.

True, also, that Gregorius is some years older than his sister, and she has often told me stories of how he was her hero and her protector when she was very young, and he not yet away to school. (I sometimes think that if I hear the tale of how he rescued her from the millrace once more, I shall not be responsible for my actions.)

It passes my belief, however, that she thinks him a brilliant prodigy, unfairly held back by his relationship to me; when in fact the exact opposite is the truth.

Many have been our late-night arguments, Katara insisting that he ought to be given a position more suited to his talents; I (having been a diplomat) forbearing to retort that I can hardly demote him, but protesting that I cannot be seen to be nepotistic. She, that surely all know his ability. I, again diplomatic, that no suitable position is available. She, to sulks; and I, alone to a cold bed.

Now, though, with the death of Sir Willard, Bonvidaeo has fallen vacant – a sinecure, made for a plodder, a clod, a filler of forms, a seat-warmer such as Gregorius. Almost a ceremonial post, a hangover from an earlier age, a token to prop the pride of a few Calarian mercers and fullers in that now peaceful city who, since the time of my predecessor's predecessor, have not required the services of an envoy for anything more than permits and official seals – the issuance of which is well within even Gregorius's competence. I believe there is even a book which sets out the procedures, written in a fit of boredom or zeal by some previous incumbent and handed down ever since. He can read, even if slowly, and it is not a long book.

"Envoy" as a title has a good ring. I think Katara may be satisfied with "envoy".

My only concern is that he may offend the odd customs of the Bonvidaeoans, and to that end I asked Tailor, through whose ears all knowledge passes, to search for some native of that city to serve him in the capacity of guide. Gregorius is looking for a new valet (he bored me almost senseless the other night with a long tale about how the present fellow can never heat his shaving water to the right temperature), so I can foist one upon him and not seem a meddler. Indeed, I shall be the solicitous brother-in-law.

Luck was mine again, for Tailor stated immediately that he knew of such a one; a youth, trained to service in one of the great houses of Bonvidaeo, who had sought adventure as a sailor, landed here for a season, and now desired to return to his native country.

(If only I could appoint Tailor to some post fitting to his worth! But were he not a commoner, or were he posted out of kingdom, he could not serve me by the wealth of contacts and the knowledge of the deep currents of the city that he has. I must be content with paying him a clear crown higher than his official post should merit. Had I but more Tailors and fewer Basses…)

The seventh of the first month.

The sun shines upon me, though outdoors it is winter and the trees display no leaves. I enjoy, again, the favour of my wife; and find myself much relaxed, and in good temper with the universe.

Today, also, I have met the Bonvidaeoan youth. He is a slender fellow, quick of movement, speech, and thought, and mature for his years, which number perhaps eighteen or twenty. He has the foibles of the Bonvidaoans: will not look one in the face, and wears the mask all his countrymen affect; yet his tact would not disgrace a man of my own profession. He is educated, he tells me, in the lore of masks of which that City makes so much, and will be able to serve as clerk and secretary in addition to his valet duties.

He strikes me as the ideal guide for Gregorius. I cannot imagine a youth more suited to keeping a fool out of trouble.

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Sue G. wrote 1035 days ago

Mike---this is great stuff and a brilliant concept---really like the theme of the masks and the play with identity.

Your opening is very engaging and your style is excellent.

Just one thing---especially if you're planning to approach publishers/agents---I think perhaps you should change the title, great as it is-----there's been a very successful YA book published in the UK by Mary Hoffman with exactly this title 'City of Masks'-----it's part of her 'Stravaganza' series, set in a parallel world that is very like Venice.

Rocky Lastinger wrote 1077 days ago

Interesting concept, and I've never run across anything remotely similar (the masks, the offhand mention of Carvival, the wearer of a mask due all the respect and honor the original person, diety or royalty commanded).

Thought the descriptions of the houses were great, the opulently furnished rooms of the highly ranked masked ones, and the threadbare, nearly vacant qualities of the "servant's quarters." Loved the "Bridges and walkways strung from roof to roof," as well as the---upper stories=upper class---depiction. Very evocative

And FELKIOR = Lover/Philanderer/Successful/Unrepentant---hey, let me know if there's an opening in that department. WHOOPS---wait, wrong Felkior! Okay, maybe The Innocent Man---nope, that isn't me either..."offends no one..." (maybe I could play the part when I'm asleep)

Thought chapter four had an interesting, come hither ending, a hint of things to come after the Butcher mask is taken. Chapter five---Ahhhhh! Finally---the Countess...

You tell a wonderful story, my friend. Watchlisted, awaiting space on my shelf.

Mathom wrote 1078 days ago

I found the book through iTunes and though they started me somewhere in the middle, I was hooked enough to hunt down the beginning chapters. I thought the premise of the masks fresh and well thought out. The social customs felt natural as I was reading/listening and it allowed the mystery to shine without being hampered--I thought it enhanced, in fact-- by the fantasy setting. The book left me satisfied with the conclusion and wanting to hear more about this strange city where everyone wears a mask and fills the roll it defines.

oniongirl999 wrote 1083 days ago

I read this book with my ears, thanks to the posting by the author on my favorite podcast website. So, I'm not sure if it has evolved since his initial recording, but I really liked the version I've read. I especially enjoyed the unique storyline, the characters and the setting. One thing Mike brought to this book is something so many authors have left by the wayside in the interest of simply enteraining readers and that's a social conscience. I think we can expect great things from this author. I for one can't wait to see what else he has in his bag of tricks.

Deanna Lie wrote 473 days ago

Intriguing. I'm not sure I'm totally sold yet, but I did find the first parts compelling. I am so-so on the journal format. I felt as though a great deal of story and atmosphere were being withheld from me with this limited viewpoint, but time will tell.

yasmin esack wrote 482 days ago

Bravo bravo! you are a literary genius.

hats off

backed
the mind setter

Mike Reeves-McMillan wrote 482 days ago

Thanks, that's pretty much how the limited perspective does end up working.

Ottery St. Catchpole wrote 482 days ago

An interesting concept and an interesting story. Your world building is very interesting, I love the details and how you chose to write it as an epistolary novel, something I don't think is done very often now.

Using limited point of view works really well in your story and I'm sure it'll come in handy when revealing and hiding information and playing with the reader's perceptions.

The religious and political aspects of the masks and the people and the world is engaging, very well thought out. Interesting story, concept and world. Good luck.

Mike Reeves-McMillan wrote 1010 days ago

Mike---this is great stuff and a brilliant concept---really like the theme of the masks and the play with identity.

Your opening is very engaging and your style is excellent.

Just one thing---especially if you're planning to approach publishers/agents---I think perhaps you should change the title, great as it is-----there's been a very successful YA book published in the UK by Mary Hoffman with exactly this title 'City of Masks'-----it's part of her 'Stravaganza' series, set in a parallel world that is very like Venice.



Thanks very much, Sue. Yes, I became aware of Mary Hoffman's book after I was well along in the process and in fact I've now read it. It has a few other coincidental similarities with my book too.

The title does make for Google confusion. There's at least one other novel called City of Masks as well, and there's a movie. Perhaps I'll Google "The Innocent Man" and see what comes up.

[Edit] Nope, The Innocent Man is a book by John Grisham. More thought needed.

Sue G. wrote 1035 days ago

Mike---this is great stuff and a brilliant concept---really like the theme of the masks and the play with identity.

Your opening is very engaging and your style is excellent.

Just one thing---especially if you're planning to approach publishers/agents---I think perhaps you should change the title, great as it is-----there's been a very successful YA book published in the UK by Mary Hoffman with exactly this title 'City of Masks'-----it's part of her 'Stravaganza' series, set in a parallel world that is very like Venice.

Mike Reeves-McMillan wrote 1038 days ago

Thanks for the comments, Edd. In brief: There is a standard mask for _a_ butcher (the trade) but not for _the_ Butcher (the serial killer).

Edd wrote 1039 days ago

I'm fascinated, and would read more.

The language and style of storytelling is consistent and archaic-feeling without descending to caricature. A minor point - to be in keeping, should the dates be "The seventh day of the first month"?
Ch3 "bourne" should be "borne".
It's hard to believe that there would be no standard mask for Butcher - what do they wear if this character is unavailable?
Ch8 - Corius goes for the second time to talk to his "associates". Have we heard any results yet from the first such consultation?
Is Bass's voice sufficiently different from that of his master? Sallia's certainly is different.

It appears at first that little is happening, though we learn much about and with Bass, which keeps the interest up. The murder hits very hard as a result. The use of guts as a mask maintains the consistency, turning "any old slasher slaughter" into a feature of the society we do not yet understand.


Rocky Lastinger wrote 1077 days ago

Interesting concept, and I've never run across anything remotely similar (the masks, the offhand mention of Carvival, the wearer of a mask due all the respect and honor the original person, diety or royalty commanded).

Thought the descriptions of the houses were great, the opulently furnished rooms of the highly ranked masked ones, and the threadbare, nearly vacant qualities of the "servant's quarters." Loved the "Bridges and walkways strung from roof to roof," as well as the---upper stories=upper class---depiction. Very evocative

And FELKIOR = Lover/Philanderer/Successful/Unrepentant---hey, let me know if there's an opening in that department. WHOOPS---wait, wrong Felkior! Okay, maybe The Innocent Man---nope, that isn't me either..."offends no one..." (maybe I could play the part when I'm asleep)

Thought chapter four had an interesting, come hither ending, a hint of things to come after the Butcher mask is taken. Chapter five---Ahhhhh! Finally---the Countess...

You tell a wonderful story, my friend. Watchlisted, awaiting space on my shelf.

Mathom wrote 1078 days ago

I found the book through iTunes and though they started me somewhere in the middle, I was hooked enough to hunt down the beginning chapters. I thought the premise of the masks fresh and well thought out. The social customs felt natural as I was reading/listening and it allowed the mystery to shine without being hampered--I thought it enhanced, in fact-- by the fantasy setting. The book left me satisfied with the conclusion and wanting to hear more about this strange city where everyone wears a mask and fills the roll it defines.

Mike Reeves-McMillan wrote 1081 days ago

Thanks, Onongirl9999 and Bob for the good comments. The Podiobooks audio version was read straight from the printed (self-published) book, so barring slipups they are identical.

You can find out more about the book at: http://city-of-masks.blogspot.com.

I ended up self-publishing because I couldn't hook a publisher based on a description of the book. Because it is a bit unusual it doesn't fit neatly into a genre category. It's not really fantasy or science fiction by any strict definition, even though I've called it that here. But the feedback you're giving me is typical of what I've received, so I'm hopeful that it will rise to the surface here at authonomy and get noticed. Tell your friends!

zenup wrote 1082 days ago

My only complaint about this interesting set up is the time it takes to get to the first murder plus the distance all the masking-manoeuvres put between me, as reader, and the action - but it's certainly well written.

oniongirl999 wrote 1083 days ago

I read this book with my ears, thanks to the posting by the author on my favorite podcast website. So, I'm not sure if it has evolved since his initial recording, but I really liked the version I've read. I especially enjoyed the unique storyline, the characters and the setting. One thing Mike brought to this book is something so many authors have left by the wayside in the interest of simply enteraining readers and that's a social conscience. I think we can expect great things from this author. I for one can't wait to see what else he has in his bag of tricks.

Mike Reeves-McMillan wrote 1084 days ago

Thanks, artful and Bob/Akisdad.

Gregorius is certainly not the fool Darion takes him for. He's an entirely different fool altogether, one of the holy sort.

I actually wrote it without "chapters" per se, just as a series of journal entries and the odd letter. Authonomy requires chapters, though, so I have just broken it into digestible chunks.

artful wrote 1084 days ago

This is a great book! i read an early draft (which was very good) but this version is much improved, and i would heartily recommend it to any fan of fantasy novels, especially if the quality of the writing is important to you (it also has a great story in case you were worried!). a twisty turny thing, and it is also quite short for a novel, which is nice in this genre. there is also plenty of room for more stories in the same world.

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