Stories From the Sky

Backed on premise by a fellow flight attendant.
Let me give it a good read and then I'll leave some better comments!

Michael
Kiss Me, Straight

Dear Rachel,


Tee-hee. What you moaning about being laid off twice only? I been outta work five times and survived. I once went for eighty four interviews before I got a job. No tertiary education. Only farm school which ain’t much good in the city. No hay to bale in the city.

I approve the sky-diving and bungee jumping though. My crazy daughter does that. She also comes here to Malaysia and skin-dives with sharks. You two should get together.

Stories From the Sky is on my bookshelf.

I read chapters one and two and checked what you have in #4.

The good comments you have received below are all partially correct. I would agree with most of them.

But if you want feedback from a writer who has dealt with literary agents and a publisher, I would edit your writing tighter. By deleting a lot of superfluous stuff you’ll make this much brisker.

You tend to over-write and explain too much. Editors will appreciate leaner writing.

Not difficult to delete the fat.

I spend my evenings editing a new novel by one of the Authonomites and polish his writing by chucking about 20% of his words out the window.

He ain’t complaining neither. His stuff comes in like a shaggy dog and goes back to him like a poodle leaving the doggie parlour.

All the best to you and go well with you writing. Hey, I don’t have it any easier than you. I struggle to get it right and am currently at my fourth rewrite. Keeps me out of mischief.



Kind regards,



Pierre.

The Little Girl in the Fig Tree

Hi Rachel,
I have often wondered what it is like to be a flight attendant, is it glamourous and fun like they say? You tell us how it is here and I enjoyed the trip (no pun intended!) I was quite surprised that sometimes working with your collegues was harder than dealing with the passengers. I enjoyed the humour running through this, I laughed out loud numerous times. I like your style of writing and your set up - this should be issued to passengers by all airlines *grins* On my shelf!
Bests,
AnnabelleP
(Adelaide Short)

Hi Rachel,

This really grabbed my attention, coming from a travel background I could instantly relate - the pressures of being "observed & marked" while you work, rang so true.

it's is also a very funny, girl power story that you are telling here - the unitard made me laugh out loud.

Shelved and definately staying on my watchlist so I can catch up with Abby's antics.

Love Bev ;0) x

This is just plain interesting to me. I think all of us wonder what the experience of a flight attendant is, and now we know.

I think I am among many who will enjoy your tale.

I didn't know that there was that differentiation between management and flight attendants concerning such minute things as an elevator.

Best of luck with it!

And many smiles!

Debbie
Also thank a million for your edit!

Hello,

This is on my shelf because of the first chapter alone. I hope to goodness this is meant to be funny, because I actually spat some cider over my screen.......so, you were nearly responsible not only for me nearly choking to death, but also a cider stained laptop!

Brilliant. Look forward to reading more.

Martin (My House on the Fjord)

LOVE IT! Well-rounded characters, witty, good insider POV.... It's very interesting. Can't wait for more chapters!

Really interesting inside information into the behind the scenes life of flight attendents. Very good writng You held my interest througout.

On my Watch List.

Joanna

I have so enjoyed reading this. You have a light touch - yet manage to capture the reader's imagination. Your descriptions are vivid - utterly compelling.
One grumble - the opening. I wanted an episode when . . . . rather than 'usually' - to be thrown into an event and then shown how typical/atypical it is, rather than begin with generalities.
But maybe that is picky - this is good enough for a turn on my shelf. good luck!

The Airport Reserve chapter will not be the first chapter... it just happened to be the first that I finished. Thanks for your comments!

Stories from the Sky

Hi Rachel, This is great, you have a light and humorous tone and you have a quick and very effective way with words. You manage to sum up so well the early morning drive to the airport in around eight words, there is a kind of magic in this kind of description because I can't quite work out how you did it, but your words managed to evoke both the time of day and the sizzle of excitement we get when we are about to be whisked away somewhere new. This is very accomplished and confident writing, the narrative voice is unobtrusive, the story flows well, enjoyed very much, watch-listing and will be backing at the next shelf rotation - well done, looking forward to reading more - Andrew W.

this has some great one liners in it-i won't write them down and spoil them for anyone.

worth a read-TJ

sounds intriguing...on watchlist...looking forward to checking it out...good luck

Dear Rachel, I have been enjoying reading Stories From The Sky. As a regular flyer of old, it has been fun to read the flight attendant's take on their passengers. You write about the subject as one who has lived this life herself? Many thanks for an enjoyable read. With best wishes, Andrew (author of BIG FISH).