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date submitted 01.04.2009
date updated 20.04.2009
genres: Fiction, Literary Fiction
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Houseboat in the Pines; Memoirs of a Girl Named Poddy Green

Shannon Lee Wolf

Who is Poddy Green? Not even she knows for sure, as her idyllic, sheltered life has come to a sudden, screeching halt.

 

She was left as an infant on the Stevenson’s porch - only they were away. Illegally adopted by two women who are now both dead, Poddy is a young woman of twenty-six, and finds herself alone on the houseboat she grew up on. Not docked along a shoreline, but secreted away, deep in the Arcadian forest, in a grove of great white pines.


Yearning to learn of her mother, Poddy finds herself standing at the door of George and Elaine Stevenson. Enchanted by her familiar face, Elaine invites her in. But when Elaine reads the letter written in French and addressed to her, Poddy’s plan unravels.


Back to where she started, she reflects upon the lives of the people who had deeply influenced her. Their stories, and how each of them found their way to the houseboat become her companions, and as the harsh Cape Breton winter approaches, she cherishes them more than ever before. Yet her fears of going insane weigh heavy on her, as the longing for her roots remains. Will she ever find out who her mother is? Or like Alistair, will all that is left of her be the houseboat and the memoirs she leaves behind…

 
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Paolito wrote 1041 days ago

Houseboat in the Pines...

Now that I've read what you've uploaded, I see a real literary writer here...a rare breed on authonomy, IMHO. My only concern is whether your narrative drive is strong enough. It took Janet Fitch 20 years to learn how to create strong narrative drive, and a friend of mine (whose novel will come out via Doubleday in the fall, From The Distance) 15 years...and a lot of help from her editor at Doubleday. I'm not saying this because I write thrillers; I may write them, but I read literary fiction almost exclusively.

That said, I love this novel for its lyrical prose, strong characterizations and wonderful dialogue.

Shelved, of course.

Cheers,
Sheryl
IN ALL THE WRONG PLACES (would love your honest reactions)

Paolito wrote 1041 days ago

Houseboat in the Pines...

Lots of hooks in c.1 and great use of emotion. The only suggestion I would have is to reduce the amount of backstory (this, BTW, is the pot calling the kettle 'black').

However, I'm reading on because I'm dying to find out more about Poddy's beginnings...

Ancient Reader wrote 1092 days ago

Shannon. I am so glad I read this! I put it on my watchlist ages ago and just got around to it tonight.

I love it!! You are one of the finest talents I have read on Authonomy! Your prose has a lyrical quality that moves it along in such a beguiling way. I just wish it was all here.

You have managed in just three chapters to make me care intensely about Poddy, her story, Elaine's part in it, Callie's story, her aunt and uncle; just about everyone. It's genius to be able to capture characters--this many--clearly in three chapters. Most writers struggle to make one or two chacters authentic in five or six chapters.

Some phrases and sentences I was especially taken by:

Callie saying, "The body's just a vehicle to cart yourself around in." Oh my, yes!

"When you live in seclusion, parts of you are forever green and tender. The things that happen out there would simply shrivel what's innocent." Wow! Using ordinary words to say something so extraordinary!

"What was it in the coffee that made the life in you shimmer?" Who would think to use the word "shimmer" like that? Amazing!

A few typos but I'm only mentioning a couple important ones.

"They said heroine took hold of her." Should be "heroin"

Ruth's name changed to Ruby for a few times after the rape and then changed back to Ruth again.

A question about Poddy: where would she have come across the terminolgy "higher self"? Can you couch it in different words that mean the same thing?

You ability to change your word choices and tone between Miss Marple's story and Callie's story is remarkable and creates a whole different feeling to their backstories. It's really quite unusual.

My dear, you are vastly talented as this brief excerpt shows. Is there any more written? I'd love to see it! I am shelving this and I wish I could do more to promote this.

VisionScript wrote 1116 days ago

Hi Shannon: Typo--I had written it all in down my journal. Wonderful writing. Already some mystery and intrigue. "As she studied my face, her own became flooded with memories." as the scent of baked apples waft through the crack of the door, the chill of the wind, the ideology that it matters not what the body looks like, 'ceptin' I'd tell ya if something was in ya teeth! Okay, I exaggerate that last bit, but this is coming along with a good deal of promise.

I didn't quite get 'feeling warm, I turned toward her face and smiled.' Is she warm because she's inside now, or she's feeling the love.

Wow. What a gripping first chapter. The description of the house and the characters has given them bone and marrow, the feelings of Poddy. This is great work. I love it.

I believe 'it was as if I (was) floating blindly down.... (second paragraph, second chapter).

You have a wonderful way with words, the way the parts of the sentence blossom into each other in surprisingly sensual combination, the way you allow the story to unfold upon eclectic surroundings.

I love the story of when Elise's parent's met. This chapter has a fairytale feel. I like the spiritual asides. Neat how the first man Poddy ever saw in real life, she ran right past him.

I suggest you give the backstory of Callie as in present past tense. Callie was born in the Bronx, as opposed to had been born. You know, make it feel more present. Although the backstory is great, I worry there's too much at the onset after the wonder first chapter, which has certainly already invested the reader. This will be on a shelf a bit.

RachelMay wrote 1121 days ago

I wish i could write you long flowing prose about how much this effected me in your first chapter---heck your first paragraph. Poddy Green with her lavender eyes. I don't know how to put this into words exactly, but this is so lovely and brave and all these emotions rolled into one, so tangible, so there. I am shelving this. It deserves it.

Wishing you the best with this
Rachel May

Going Twice

Pat Brehony wrote 1123 days ago

Hi Shannon,
Looking forward to having a look at this. Good synopsis drew me in.
Regards.
Pat

Karen Bessey Pease wrote 1127 days ago

Hello again, Shannon.

I found some time this morning to visit you in the pines. Thank you for welcoming me to the forest-- it's one of my favorite places to be! You are an accomplished writer, that much is apparent. Lovely descriptions, a MC who has my affection and sympathy. Nicely done.

The only thing that concerns me is the length of the narrative (and that's because people picked at mine! hehe). Those 'folks in the know' would like shorter chunks of it, less backstory and more action and dialogue. But I have to say... I liked this tale.

Best wishes for your publishing success, friend.

Karen

Pierre Van Rooyen wrote 1129 days ago



Dear Shannon,


Quantum physics? You and my wife will do well. She has a degree in physics. My daughter has a degree in accounting. I’m the buffoon who went to farm school. I know my place. Tee-hee.

The moment I glimpsed your pitch, I wanted to know how old Poddy is so I can envisage her. But you are too smart, you tell me soon after. Good for you in giving the synopsis air by dividing it in line-space paras.

I was drawn to this by the genre and then, don’t laugh, because we live aboard and have been doing so for fourteen years. I have an antenna on the deck connected to a cable plugged into the lap top. We communicate with the internet via radio. Some days I can’t connect at all. OK, you may laugh now.

In order to get a good hold on what was happening, I read your opening two paras twice. By the time I read the third para, I’m comfortable and smiling. It’s going to work out alright and I’m supportive of Poddy.

In my opinion, this is good old-fashioned writing. Accomplished, yes. A little long for the modern market? I’m not sure. People complain that my stuff develops too slowly for them. I am tightening the longer winded parts to satisfy them.

Ooh, you have a daunting paragraph there, over a screen deep. It stops the story dead. You’re also dumping information. Could you not pare on the one hand and divide the info into smaller paras on the other? If the characters could handle some of the info via dialogue, even better. It will bring it alive.

This writing is reminding me of Rosemund Pilcher with her work of art The Shell Seekers. So beautiful, it brought tears to my eyes. I have read it four times.

This is becoming lyrical. I’m falling in love with it. I wonder how much you have written. The whole novel?

I’m not sure what to say. Perhaps for work in progress write exactly as you have. But if you have a choice whether to write longer or write shorter, I would recommend leaving out the superfluous. Or edit it out later. I find I have to write long in order to paint a full picture, but at edit stage I rub out the unnecessary to expose the essential.

Houseboat in the Pines has become Houseboat on My Bookshelf on our forty foot sailboat.

Go well with your stuff. I really struggle to write.


Have fun,



Pierre Van Rooyen

The Little Girl in the Fig Tree.

dovergraye wrote 1129 days ago

You lived in a houseboat - that is awesome! Thank you for reading Houseboat in the Pines, and for your appreciation and support. I shall put Piazza on my WL, and try and get to it as soon as I can!

Shannon

Hi, as an ex house boat dweller I was really drawn to this. You work suspense well; I kept finding my eyes flicking down to get to the truth of the matter: always a sign for me that I can't put a novel down. There is something rather luxurious about being kept waiting. All the best with this and I am putting it on my shelf today.
Hilary waters (The Piazza)

Hilary Waters wrote 1130 days ago

Hi, as an ex house boat dweller I was really drawn to this. You work suspense well; I kept finding my eyes flicking down to get to the truth of the matter: always a sign for me that I can't put a novel down. There is something rather luxurious about being kept waiting. All the best with this and I am putting it on my shelf today.
Hilary waters (The Piazza)

dovergraye wrote 1130 days ago

Now I'm more confused than ever. I am looking at Chapter 1, and I don't see the typos at all. Everything is in place for me. :- /

Shannon

Hi Gemi,

Thank you so very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed field of comments! You nailed with such clarity what I am attempting with Poddy and her thoughts, going through her daily routines - the only life she knows.

I'm perplexed about the typos. I have fixed them, yet they keep coming back on me. Must be a glitch in the system.

Thank you for your backing - I shall put you on my WL right away, and get to you as soon as I can...

Shannon

dovergraye wrote 1131 days ago

Thank you Poppet, for such lovely compliments, and for backing Houseboat! :-) I shall put Exploits on my WL right away...

Shannon

I love the breezy flow. The internal dialogue is my thing. I am such a sucker for it and you have done it SO WELL! It makes her Immediately available and approachable and so likable! I also found it intriguing and a fun read! Shelved!

Poppet
Exploits of a Good Girl

dovergraye wrote 1131 days ago

Hi Gemi,

Thank you so very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed field of comments! You nailed with such clarity what I am attempting with Poddy and her thoughts, going through her daily routines - the only life she knows.

I'm perplexed about the typos. I have fixed them, yet they keep coming back on me. Must be a glitch in the system.

Thank you for your backing - I shall put you on my WL right away, and get to you as soon as I can...

Shannon

Hi Shannon,

I always like finding something that's a little bit different and Houseboat fills that order. First, you have a distinct voice and ability to convey emotion through simple reactions and thoughts, all of which gives us a clear sense of Poddy's anxieties about approaching the Stevenson's, her sorrow and loneliness, and the niggling curiosity about her past that keeps resurfacing. When Poddy runs from the Stevenson's house and returns to the empty houseboat, at times it seems like she's just going through mundane chores, but in these small tasks we get a sense of who Poddy is - her self-reliance, her routine, her appreciation of small things like the eggs she collects... in a word, the 'security' of her sheltered life.

Now, I must admit that at first when Poddy slipped into the recount of Miss Marple's childhood, I wondered where it was going and thought it was a lot of backstory all in one place... but at the same time, the switch to more of a third person, in-depth retelling drew me very deeply in and I must say it worked rather well. When we got back to Poddy in real time, the transition was very clear and in her reflections of these people around her I felt I was being treated to stories within a story - stories that engaged me and helped me understand Poddy and her connections to these people. So you're writing outside the box and I find that refreshing and it makes this story stand apart. Poddy's world was small and insular, but safe and comforting. Now the people that made it so, who filled the hole of her mysterious past, are gone. Will the loneliness and unanswered questions drive her to uncover her past, or will her mistrust of the outside world keep her where she is?

Two minor typos in the first chapter. First paragraph: 'I had even written it all [down in] my journal.' And 'She stood up and [the] note dropped to the floor.'

This is fresh, original and engaging. Well done and on my shelf.

All the best,
Gemi

Cader_Idris wrote 1132 days ago

Hi Shannon,

I always like finding something that's a little bit different and Houseboat fills that order. First, you have a distinct voice and ability to convey emotion through simple reactions and thoughts, all of which gives us a clear sense of Poddy's anxieties about approaching the Stevenson's, her sorrow and loneliness, and the niggling curiosity about her past that keeps resurfacing. When Poddy runs from the Stevenson's house and returns to the empty houseboat, at times it seems like she's just going through mundane chores, but in these small tasks we get a sense of who Poddy is - her self-reliance, her routine, her appreciation of small things like the eggs she collects... in a word, the 'security' of her sheltered life.

Now, I must admit that at first when Poddy slipped into the recount of Miss Marple's childhood, I wondered where it was going and thought it was a lot of backstory all in one place... but at the same time, the switch to more of a third person, in-depth retelling drew me very deeply in and I must say it worked rather well. When we got back to Poddy in real time, the transition was very clear and in her reflections of these people around her I felt I was being treated to stories within a story - stories that engaged me and helped me understand Poddy and her connections to these people. So you're writing outside the box and I find that refreshing and it makes this story stand apart. Poddy's world was small and insular, but safe and comforting. Now the people that made it so, who filled the hole of her mysterious past, are gone. Will the loneliness and unanswered questions drive her to uncover her past, or will her mistrust of the outside world keep her where she is?

This is fresh, original and engaging. Well done and on my shelf.

All the best,
Gemi

dovergraye wrote 1132 days ago

Michael, thank you for backing Houseboat! I very much appreciate that your support. :-)

Hm. There are a couple of references to National Geographic. Do you remember by chance where the one in question was?

Shannon

(I'll get to The Last Coming Out Story soon as I can!)

Hi Shannon! I find this book especially well written. Well done! Love the name Poddy Green, and I really like how you pay attention to details like, "I ran my finger across the tea cup rim." The story is compelling, and I want to know what happens, and not only because I'm adopted as well. The only thing that jolted me was the bit about "like the ones in National Geographic Magazine." I don't know what "ones" refers to. Besides that, this deserves to go far and I wouldn't be surprised if it was published very soon.

Michael
The Last Coming Out Story

JasonDiggy wrote 1132 days ago

Hi Shannon! I find this book especially well written. Well done! Love the name Poddy Green, and I really like how you pay attention to details like, "I ran my finger across the tea cup rim." The story is compelling, and I want to know what happens, and not only because I'm adopted as well. The only thing that jolted me was the bit about "like the ones in National Geographic Magazine." I don't know what "ones" refers to. Besides that, this deserves to go far and I wouldn't be surprised if it was published very soon.

Michael
The Last Coming Out Story

Suzanne Ahern wrote 1132 days ago

Hi Shannon
Just stole the chance to read a few things on my watch list and I LOVE this. Apart from one other I've read so far, this is the only one that's really intrigued me. It's the kind of book I would buy. I'm definitely going to read on in the week. And I'm going to shelve it now too. Please hurry up and write more chapters! Best wishes, Suzanne Ahern (Joaquin's Dream)

madhattie34 wrote 1133 days ago

What a beautifully written story. It's so visual, you really have a gift for bringing scenes, characters and emotions right into the hearts of the reader.
My only complaint would be that you have a large number of rhetorical questions that seem to somewhat interrupt the prose.
Still, that's only a small thing. Shelved.
Hattie
xx

Duane Simolke wrote 1133 days ago

Shannon,

>…to fold in, in places.

Is there a way to rephrase the sentence without the double in?

>Her lips were poised in an “I did it..” smile.

Leave out the .. ?

>When you live in seclusion, parts of you are forever green and tender.

Such an evocative statement, expressing her fears, her life, and her wisdom!

Some of your long paragraphs could be broken up more, especially when they mix dialogue and narration. I think that would help move the reader along.

You have a gift for descriptions that engage the senses, and the narrator almost lists what her senses detect. It could easily be overdone, but you select details that are important to the life she portrays. You pull the reader in with the character’s odd name, but her quirks and her spirit keep the pages turning (virtually speaking).

dovergraye wrote 1133 days ago

What an incredible comment, Jeff - thank you! And for backing Houseboat - you made my day! I'm putting you on my WL, and will get to you as soon as I can...

Shannon

Shannon,
What an amazing and original story. Such a surprising and unique idea. Your characters are refreshing, well drawn (especially Poddy) and....wow. Every time I think there are no new ideas left, here is another fresh story.
Well done and on my shelf.
Jeff

Jeff Blackmer wrote 1133 days ago

Shannon,
What an amazing and original story. Such a surprising and unique idea. Your characters are refreshing, well drawn (especially Poddy) and....wow. Every time I think there are no new ideas left, here is another fresh story.
Well done and on my shelf.
Jeff

dovergraye wrote 1134 days ago

That's incredibly kind, Marion. Deepest gratitude...

Shannon

I love your turn of phrase ...eyes wetly behind glasses... I felt for Poddy and just for the record I love her name! I will write again but I just had to let you know I'd buy you... Marion

dovergraye wrote 1134 days ago

Thank you so much for your support, Celtwytch! I appreciate your comments and your of backing "Houseboat."

Shannon

Shannon, thank you for recommending your book. I've read about half of it, and, so far, I'm intrigued. Your have a lovely writing style, and paint vivid pictures with your words. I look forward to reading more about Poddy.

marion wrote 1134 days ago

I love your turn of phrase ...eyes wetly behind glasses... I felt for Poddy and just for the record I love her name! I will write again but I just had to let you know I'd buy you... Marion

Celtwytch wrote 1135 days ago

Shannon, thank you for recommending your book. I've read about half of it, and, so far, I'm intrigued. Your have a lovely writing style, and paint vivid pictures with your words. I look forward to reading more about Poddy.

dovergraye wrote 1136 days ago

Rona, what a kind and thoughtful response! I will be sure and keep you updated on more chapters added. And I will get to Stars as soon as I can...it looks like an awesome read!

Shannon

Shannon,
I love this. What a pity there isn't more. Please keep me updated when you post more. I absolutely loved the first chapter and the tension mounting and Poddy's obvious discomfort in her surroundings. Poddy is a great character. The story unfolding in chapter 2 is great - there is quite a lot of information in it and I wondered about perhaps considering splitting it into two paragraphs. However, that could be my pregnant brain and inability to retain much information causing this. More than likely.
Beautiful descriptions.Keep up the good work and best wishes.
Shelved.
Rona

Name failed moderation wrote 1136 days ago

Shannon,
I love this. What a pity there isn't more. Please keep me updated when you post more. I absolutely loved the first chapter and the tension mounting and Poddy's obvious discomfort in her surroundings. Poddy is a great character. The story unfolding in chapter 2 is great - there is quite a lot of information in it and I wondered about perhaps considering splitting it into two paragraphs. However, that could be my pregnant brain and inability to retain much information causing this. More than likely.
Beautiful descriptions.Keep up the good work and best wishes.
Shelved.
Rona

dovergraye wrote 1136 days ago

Thank you, Andy! I'll get to Crier soon as I can...

Shannon

hi Shannon, had a chance to read on. very enjoyable. on my shelf!
sorry, w-i-p -> work-in-progress. crier of kath is very much in progress ;)
looking forward to your read. best, andy

Andy M. Potter wrote 1136 days ago

hi Shannon, had a chance to read on. very enjoyable. on my shelf!
sorry, w-i-p -> work-in-progress. crier of kath is very much in progress ;)
looking forward to your read. best, andy

dovergraye wrote 1137 days ago

Ruthy, thank you for your comments, and for backing Houseboat!

Hm. Like most stories, as you read on, you will get to know Poddy much better - this is the slower pace you are looking for, perhaps... You know that her name is made up, that she doesn't know who she is in the world other than she is adopted and has lived in complete isolation all of her 26 years of life, that she looks like Elizabeth Taylor and her accent is strange. That's a lot to know in the first chapter!

Again, as you read on to the second and third chapters, it's pretty easy to imagine what her accent would be like, having been raised by an English/Scottish woman and a woman raised in the Bronx. I honestly don't like (and no offense to people who do) sounded out accents when reading/writing. I feel it makes for a difficult read and is distracting. For me, part of the beauty of getting to know a character, is in the reading - the unfolding of the tale - particularly one that is about reflecting...

Best,
Shannon

Dear Shannon,
I am interested in Poddy Green, but I want to know her better. For example, you tell us that she has a starnge accent yet when she speaks it does not seem strange. Cna you give us a flavour of the accent in her dialogue?
I would have liked a slower start to the story, just a way to be with Poddy before we follow her to the Stephenson house, as I was trying to take in the scene, but still working out Poddy. Maybe you could start with her fascinating name.
You end your chapters well, with hooks that draw us on. The story itself has a quirky feel which I like - great title too.
Best wishes,
Ruth

Ruthy wrote 1137 days ago

Dear Shannon,
I am interested in Poddy Green, but I want to know her better. For example, you tell us that she has a starnge accent yet when she speaks it does not seem strange. Cna you give us a flavour of the accent in her dialogue?
I would have liked a slower start to the story, just a way to be with Poddy before we follow her to the Stephenson house, as I was trying to take in the scene, but still working out Poddy. Maybe you could start with her fascinating name.
You end your chapters well, with hooks that draw us on. The story itself has a quirky feel which I like - great title too.
Best wishes,
Ruth

dovergraye wrote 1137 days ago

I'm always happy to correspond with fans of Joseph Campbell! Not to sound like a total dummy, but what is w-i-p? So, let's do an exchange here on Auth for starts, and see if we'd like to take it further after that? Glad you liked your first peek at "Houseboat!" Looking forward to your "Crier of Kathmandu"...

Shannon

hi Shannon, just had a chance to read your opening and kept going. well-crafted prose, well-told story. on my wl immediately. will read on when i can shuffle the ole shelf in 2-3 days.
i see you are interested in swaps. i've done a few email exchanges with other auth writers for in-depth edits. if you like - my w-i-p is crier of kathmandu - we could exchange about 8000 words to start.
potter_andy@hotmail.com
also a fan of joseph campbell! best, andy

Andy M. Potter wrote 1137 days ago

hi Shannon, just had a chance to read your opening and kept going. well-crafted prose, well-told story. on my wl immediately. will read on when i can shuffle the ole shelf in 2-3 days.
i see you are interested in swaps. i've done a few email exchanges with other auth writers for in-depth edits. if you like - my w-i-p is crier of kathmandu - we could exchange about 8000 words to start.
potter_andy@hotmail.com
also a fan of joseph campbell! best, andy

dovergraye wrote 1137 days ago

Suzanna, I very much appreciate your kind words and your backing Houseboat. Muah!

Shannon

Hi Shannon, This is beautifully hypnotic. You effortlessly move your story back and forth between past and present, weaving intrigue and empathy for you characters. Shelved and will be reading more! ~Suzanna (Ashton's Treasure)

dovergraye wrote 1137 days ago

Arc, thank you for your lovely comments, and for backing Houseboat! You are awesome. :-)

Shannon

Very enjoyable read. I've always been fascinated by Newfoundland but have never made it up that far, so the setting alone was enough to grab me, and you provide the compelling and sensual detail that allows me to experience it vicariously. You delineate your characters very skillfully and with depth. Shelved.

Janet Marie wrote 1139 days ago

Hi Shannon. This is original. You hook the reader once it is established Poddy Green has been dead for a long time, yet it is understood who this is at the door. One can't help looking for clues as to the person's identity. Amazing intensity once the letter is to be read for the first time, you justify the significance of the visit. Fantastic feeling and imagery in chapter 2, proof you are a talented literary writer. Sailing to Newfoundland, searching for answers, intense feelings as her first time to wear and see a man. It's fantastic. Shelved. Warmest regards. Janet Marie

Arc wrote 1140 days ago

Very enjoyable read. I've always been fascinated by Newfoundland but have never made it up that far, so the setting alone was enough to grab me, and you provide the compelling and sensual detail that allows me to experience it vicariously. You delineate your characters very skillfully and with depth. Shelved.

James Stephen Rice wrote 1140 days ago

Hey Shannon!

Had to back you. Came at me from nowhere. My head kinda reeled when I git into this. Love the dysfunction - characters with 'issues'. Falling in love with this part of the world. The traveling Celt in me wants to roam and end up in N'foundland.

Keep writing, Shannon. Know you will.

James

Lord Dunno wrote 1141 days ago

Ha! This is not only lovely stuff, it strikes a chord too. I've got a nutty older brother who own't have mirrors in the house and I have alwasy used the self same bathroom template. Lovely new take on the abandoned child here. And another thing, I agree with RUssell. Newfoundland does have a wonderful ring to it.

Heidi Mannan wrote 1141 days ago

Hi Shannon,
To be completely honest I wasn't sure what I was going to think of this from your pitch. Not that your pitch is bad, it's just that sometimes literary fiction moves too slowly for me. I'm pleasantly surprised at how engaged I am with your story. You write very well and the story moves along nicely. I'm enjoying it. Best of luck!

Susan Muth wrote 1141 days ago

Shannon,,
I have you on my watchlist. Your book sounds interesting, unusual. I am looking forward to reading it. Should get to it next week.
Susan

dovergraye wrote 1142 days ago

Keith, thank you so much for your kind comments, and for backing Houseboat! I will have a look at your books right away, and put one on my shelf, for a read this afternoon.

Shannon

Shannon,

I just read three chapters and the story moved very fast; it's hard to move back and forth between the past and the present but you do it very well. You got to feel sorry for the little girl and you do a very good job with her and the other characters, a good story, chapter endings that kept me reading, believable and full of real-life tension and drama; what's not to like? I put it on my shelf. If you get a chance to read one of my books I'd appreciate any comments also.

Kind Regards,

Keith G.

dovergraye wrote 1142 days ago

Kathrine, thank you for your wonderful comments! Chapter 4 has a few typos and may need some polishing up, but I hope you enjoy it, and Houseboat finds a space on your shelf. :-)

Shannon

Hi Shannon, Classic quest and at the edge. It's a strange bunch of characters but the interior voice and style, almost nagged to tell all with visual details, kept me spellbound. Poddy: "never seen my actual reflection, except in the houseboat windows and in the ponds we frequented in the summertime..." and then she ran past the first man she had seen. Poddy not being related to the two women who brought her up and her issue about being normal. "Everything seemed spiny, cold and withering, withdrawing from a preened and human society..." and later "People dying in their sleep, with dried tears on their cheeks. People who are left with no one, walking up trails to confess it all to the Stevenson's." Those are sentences that drew me into the story. The histories of the women in the houseboat were fascinating and your detail was excellent. This is a story that prods reading for its own value. I'll save Chapter 4 for another day and when I have more shelf space - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)



Keith G wrote 1142 days ago

Shannon,

I just read three chapters and the story moved very fast; it's hard to move back and forth between the past and the present but you do it very well. You got to feel sorry for the little girl and you do a very good job with her and the other characters, a good story, chapter endings that kept me reading, believable and full of real-life tension and drama; what's not to like? I put it on my shelf. If you get a chance to read one of my books I'd appreciate any comments also.

Kind Regards,

Keith G.

klouholmes wrote 1142 days ago

Hi Shannon, Classic quest and at the edge. It's a strange bunch of characters but the interior voice and style, almost nagged to tell all with visual details, kept me spellbound. Poddy: "never seen my actual reflection, except in the houseboat windows and in the ponds we frequented in the summertime..." and then she ran past the first man she had seen. Poddy not being related to the two women who brought her up and her issue about being normal. "Everything seemed spiny, cold and withering, withdrawing from a preened and human society..." and later "People dying in their sleep, with dried tears on their cheeks. People who are left with no one, walking up trails to confess it all to the Stevenson's." Those are sentences that drew me into the story. The histories of the women in the houseboat were fascinating and your detail was excellent. This is a story that prods reading for its own value. I'll save Chapter 4 for another day and when I have more shelf space - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)



dovergraye wrote 1142 days ago

Ali, thank you so much! You couldn't have offered kinder words, and just totally made my day! :-D

I don't know Thin Air, but you have got me curious - I'll see if I can grab a peek on Amazon...

Shannon

This is just so engaging!
This puts me in mind of Sue Gee's book called Thin Air, (although I know it's very different!).
I must tell you this book really appeals to me. I've read lots of books on here, some of which I can see are well written though they might not be to my taste. Whereas this - this is exactly the sort of book I would buy and really enjoy reading.
I think you write beautifully, I like the rhythm of your sentences, the simple clarity in your prose and I am captivated by your story. I will return to read more when time allows.
Shelved
Ali Mair

dovergraye wrote 1143 days ago

Thank you Darla, for your lovely comments and for the backing of Houseboat! Can't say for sure where the story came from - just bubbled up - the storyline, the characters, the whole thing. So very glad you appreciate it!

Shannon

What a seriously interesting book. I wonder sometimes where people come up with their ideas. Very creative. The writing itself was fluid and very smooth, easy to read. The character of Poddy Green was terrific. From her name, down to her descriptive nature. Nice work. Shelf for sure.

Darla Ferrara wrote 1143 days ago

What a seriously interesting book. I wonder sometimes where people come up with their ideas. Very creative. The writing itself was fluid and very smooth, easy to read. The character of Poddy Green was terrific. From her name, down to her descriptive nature. Nice work. Shelf for sure.

dovergraye wrote 1143 days ago

Thank you Annabelle - for your kind comments, and for backing Houseboat! :-)

I love the name, Poddy Green - it's what caught my eye ;-) This has a very intriguing plot, it's different to anything else I have read on here. It is well written with a good pace, your narrative is strong and your descriptions are vivid - I can imagine the backdrop to your story. Your MC is likeable, immediately I want to empathise with her. I'm not going to nit-pick as there are others on here better qualified to help with anything 'writery'. Good luck with this, already shelved.
Bests,
Annabelle
(Would love your thoughts on Adelaide if you can ;-))

dovergraye wrote 1143 days ago

Thank you, Joanna! I'm looking forward to your shelving Houseboat, and am so very pleased that you found it engrossing!

Shannon,

This is wonderful. I was too engrosed to see anything to critize. I've got a full shelf, but it's on my watch list and will definately go on when I make room.

Joanna

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