Destiny of Dragons

Hiya Billie- Well even though I said I was going to have to wait a few days before reading your work, I decided to take some time out of study (needed a break) and start reading the first couple of chapters of your work. A couple of hours later I finished at where your upload of chapters end. I suppose to keep me reading for so long your work was superb. Your characters developed and changed well, you always kept the reader well informed of their setting. I do have a dilemma with it though...what happens next???? This one is definately going on my shelf.

Andi
Chronicles of the Knights of the Code.

WOW. I thought your A Matter of Life and Death was written well but is it just possible this is better?? The only shame of it is that when I come to have a closer look it's not completely uploaded and I'm going to be left wanting more from what I've read so far! Is it wrong to like Len even though he`s a vile human being? This will definitely be shelved and definitely be published.

From what I've read of this so far, this is amazing. So much more reader friendlier than A Matter of Life and Death, I can tell this must be a more up-to-date project...? I already feel so sorry for Kai Canarbis and dread reading about the troubles!

I've backed this because I know it's going to be great and will read on with great interest.

Love

Marg

Very good opening chapter, I've added you to my watch list & hope to get around to reading the rest in the near future. Will comment more fully when I've read more.

Any chance of a return read?

Best Wishes

Pam Balsdon
The King's Blessing

Hi,

I just read your pitch and part of the first chapter as I don't have too much time and I wanted to do a review from the Stampman's Group. I'd call this a partial. :)

The first thing I could say is that I think your pitch might need to be a bit shorter, a bit less in order to leave readers wanting more. Sometimes its so wordy that I got bogged down and started to skip through. I had to stop myself and go back and reread.

I'll come back and read more. I think you've got a nice story here. :)

Sherry

I looked at parts from beginning to end. You've created an intricate world but not quite the one I expected from the Japanesy cover. (Lovely btw). You seem to be about half way?

I think my main criticism is the dialogue. It is useful to impart information to the reader in this way, but it has become un-subtle in many places. There's also too heavy a weight of explanation. Some character displays or experiences an emotion and then there is a sentence, sometimes several, explaining the import of events.

The exposition is otherwise polished and readers of fantasy will enjoy this.

Backed
Lara
Good for Him (Stampman's)

I looked at parts from beginning to end. You've created an intricate world but not quite the one I expected from the Japanesy cover. (Lovely btw). You seem to be about half way?

I think my main criticism is the dialogue. It is useful to impart information to the reader in this way, but it has become un-subtle in many places. There's also too heavy a weight of explanation. Some character displays or experiences an emotion and then there is a sentence, sometimes several, explaining the import of events.

The exposition is otherwise polished and readers of fantasy will enjoy this.

Backed
Lara
Good for Him (Stampman's)

Heya! Been through your book...it is fast and reeling... loved it ...waiting to read how the story goes from here... Anna is quite amazing...

Best of Luck!

Ana

Heya! Been through your book...it is fast and reeling... loved it ...waiting to read how the story goes from here... Anna is quite amazing...

Best of Luck!

Ana

I think you've put a lot of energy and thought into the plot but not so much into the detail of the writing. I found many places where an edit would enhance things such as losing some adverbial phrases or adjectives. There were careless typos such as off for of and some misuses of words - e.g. in 5 'alleviate' = it needs an object

I'm not a great reviewer and I'm slow. Also I don't find alternative worlds at all easy to enter, our own being so fascinating. So take that into account

This is a review under Stampman's, I'm a new member. I backed = you have imagined a 17 chapter scenario.

Rick
Some Time Before..

This has all the ingredients expected of a fantasy novel and is as good as many published. I do sometimes wonder, though, where adherance to genre ends and cliche begins.

I loved turns of phrase like the opening "rogues to the left and brawlers to the right" at the beginning of the book. Other phrases, however, seemed a tad wordy or fantasy spouted, like "Six wings he bore" and "The basest of chambers to a princess". Some more editing may be called for to improve upon what you have. Likewise some of the longer sentences might benefit from some pruning or punctuation, an example being: "Anna seemed to increase her struggling as his words supported her arguments and Len was horrified"

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Superb opening: "rouges to the left and brawlers to the right." I really like the set up for this story. Kai as a somewhat common man, but working for the Emperor's man. He has deep compassion and it is easy to like him and root for him to succeed.

I read this first chapter and then skimmed it a couple times to try to find something to 'critique,' but honestly I find this to be a well written and engaging story.

I'm putting it on my shelf.

Best of luck,

El
Reckless Scarlett

Epic on a Lord of the rings and a medieval Star Wars scale. Great distinct characters embedded in sharp imagery with a myriad details that make this world feel real.

This is great, direct into the action and very easy to read and follow. Besides the cover is cool.
Keith - Unit T

DESTINY OF DRAGONS - THE BOOK OF WRATH
Billie Jo Williams

I love the way this story begins. This tells me there is indeed a story here to be told. Never mind the edits. That is why the gods made editors. When writers have done their best to hold the reins of those slippery grammar beasts, it becomes secondary to the journey and the destination. Often the ride is with such speed and the road littered with potholes, the concentration must be on what is most important. The story is everything and you have a great one going here.

Backed with anticipation. I am reading this one all the way to the end.

Mary Enck
Author of A King in Time

You have a potentially rich and powerful story here. Your powers of description are, on the whole, excellent: The cold Chaos Dragon would've entered the tavern...

However there is a tendency to wordiness and typos: He felt empowered, even with the reminder he was helpless to (preventing)... I think you mean 'prevent.' ...populace's resentment towards him? The word 'populace' doesn't need the apostrophe or the 's', just... the populace resentment towards him? ...no matter their long and devoted meritorious service for gods and country. This sentence is a little wordy, would suggest restructuring it as: ...no matter how long their devoted service for gods and country were. ...with a man who could imprison them for life or (worst). The last word should be 'worse.' ...watching the door the entire time (with wariness). You don't need the bracketed words, the fact he's watching the door the entire time, spells out his wariness without you actually stating it.

As I said this has great potential, both as a book and commercially. However, a little judicious editing would perhaps be in order to tighten the narrative and dialogue. Because of the potential I am happy to back it.

I love the characters in this, and especially Kai's introduction: I don't have to know what a Cold Chaos Dragon is to appreciate Kai's personality.

The intro has a very actiony feel. With this in mind, shorter sentences would help a lot--I like the pace it sets, but all those clauses throw things off.

In general, the beginning feels like you're trying to cram a lot of information in. Since you don't have a ton of weird terminology you need to explain, and the problematic politics aren't totally unrecognizable...go ahead and enjoy writing the story before pushing all these facts out! (This may also help with the descriptors.)

I think you've got a lot more skill than you give yourself credit for--don't feel obliged to be prolix. Things are quite clear and vivid without it. :)

Billie,

You have an excellent vocabulary and you put it to good use; describing clearly and in minute detail everything that's happening so that we cannot help but become absorbed by what's going on.

Your main character, Kai, is fleshed out extremely quickly. The very first paragraph gave me the sense of the sheriff bursting into the western saloon, yet instead of twitching his fingers over a pistol, they hover over his sword-hilt.

We instantly recognise him as heroic. I can't exactly put my finger on why, but we like him immediately. Perhaps it's his fearlessness; his determination. I don't know. But I know it works, and that's what it's all about, right?

I've been picked up by a couple of people about using adverbs in my novel. It seems that a lot of people don't like them. But you've used them on several occasions and I think they add to the description. So perhaps they're the marmite of the English language.

Your dialogue is also used to good effect - it builds up the relationships between the main characters, but you've been careful not to overuse this technique.

I usually try to offer some formative feedback, but I'm pleased to say that I can't think of any suggestions to improve your work. Backed.

MK.

I love the cover, simple but effective. The pitch just makes you want to read on and I love the way the books opens. The Emporer's Man walks into the bar and commands an instant respect, nobody would dare cause trouble, wish I could do that. This is very well written with an excellent pace, backed with pleasure.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Hi Billie... backed your book, .. read a bit and found it very good read.

Green H * through green's eyes

Another extremely good fantasy fiction story from Billie-Jo Williams. As the author of my own dragon story it was difficult to look at this story without some sense of conflict, but the narrative and the story won me over and I recommend it without hesitation. Good luck with it.

Regards, Chris Williams – The Stories of Rhys
www.thestoriesofrhys.com

Stampman’s Group, Fair Crit review:
You need to simplify the sentences of your long pitch. Involved, convoluted sentences lose clarity. Remember you don’t have to tell everything in the pitch. I notice that people have previously commented on your convoluted sentence structure, and I remember that flaw from your other book. This time, it was noticeable only in the pitch. Either you’ve improved your writing out of sight, or it was never an issue with this book.
The Destiny of Dragons is an ambitious and involved project. There are were-wolves, minotaurs, Satyrs, centaurs, and doubtless many other creatures. We sympathise with Kai, who has to look after the spoilt Prince Len. It was an excellent opening sentence, and most of the beginning chapter is well written.
The part starting with ‘The world as it was known,’ contains more errors. I had to look up ‘versant,’ which I’d never heard of, so most readers will also not have heard of it. It means on a slope, or sloping. You have used that for whole continents however, so I wonder if you’ve chosen the wrong word. You could have meant verdant, for instance.
You mention Tom Romsfeld, ‘the centaur stable-master,’ but this is the first mention of supernatural creatures, so needs a little extra to say that he really was a centaur. I found I had to backtrack to catch that bit, which is not good for the flow of the story.
‘ushered to condemnation?’ I thought the centaur was to be killed, but that sounds like he was only to be insulted.
There are other imperfections after Ch 1, eg. In Ch 4. ‘I regret having even abrupted upon you.’ Your MS still needs work to have it sufficiently polished to submit to a publisher.
It is a good story, that caught my attention from the start. Backed, Marj.

Hi

You start of with a hell of a cast of characters, each of them shows the promise of further and more interesting development as your story goes on. Poor Kai having to look after Len's sorry ase all the time, and poor Len he just doesn't know what to do with himself does he. It's almost as if his own personality flaws are a cage of his own making. I also thought you create a very realistic and expansive world here. Not often do I read books on autonomy where the world the characters live in seem as thought out and well developed as their characters or their characters actions.

Best of Luck

Deloris Collins
Dark Souls

This is a tremendously ambitious book and a tremendously large one. I would be happy to see it broken into three or even four separate books, considering what I have read about what is publishable and what is not. The old Greek poet Callimachus is known for a number of sayings that have come down to us; one of them is "Big book, big evil."

Some of the needed editing will involve reducing the description of character. Readers like to have the illusion of discovering significances for themselves. Character is best revealed through the person's words and actions. The description of a personality is less effective than simply seeing the person in action, and you have provided enough of this to reveal each person's nature without the redundant explanations.

Others have provided some detailed editing suggestions. They look good to me, but of course all the final decisions will be yours until the book is ready for print publication, at which time a publisher may make certain demands. I think chances are good that sucha time will come, but in the meantime there is much work to do.

Shelved.

Bill

THE DESTINY OF DRAGONS
Great title and loved your cover. You say you love writing in your profile and I can see you've put a tremendous amont of work into this. You've produced a huge word count. My reaction is that it is definitely too long. I don't know a lot about the publishing market , but others who are more aware than me, seem to think about 140,000 is absolute maximum for first novel, and shorter if genre is romance. So my advice is FIRST: really be strict with yourself and cut it down. Anything unnecessary to progress of plot should be out. Painful when you've worked hard on a piece, but you really have got to do this if you want to try for publication. I am being hypocritical here, because I have similar problem and know it's easy to say and hard to do. SECOND: you are working on a series, could this be divided in some way?
Now onto the story itself. I can tell you have fantastic imagination. You've created your own world with people, countries, towns etc. I saw a prevous comment had suggested making maps(perhaps you have already? You can't put them up on site).I think that is a good idea and add a lot to it as a story. I loved the maps in Lord of the Rings etc.
Looking at your writing, I think you've got an attractive MC in Kai...so that is a good start. The prince and princess are brats, but you've introduced a reason for it and maybe they turn out better in the end? I love a book where characters develop and change.
Your sentences tend to be long and complicated. I suggest trying to shorten them. You could break a long sentence down into two or even three sentences, especially if there is action and danger. It makes for more punchy and direct feel to the writing...eg.in the fight scene. This has the added benefit of reducing your word count.
Try to avoid repetition. This might be in a sigle word or short phrase used too frequently.. Chapter1 fo example, you use "at the end of the day" twice in quick succession. I advise getting rid of both of them . They add nothing to the meaning and sound cliched. Another example is in Chapter 2:(final sentence 4th paragraph) you use "soon" twice in same sentence. Get rid of one. In another sentence (in either that paragraph or next), "so" is repeated. I'd advise going through your text very carefully and taking out or changing these repetitions. And It's another way to reduce word count!
Another type of repetition is telling the reader something twice. I think you do this when you introduce Prince Len's gambling and drinking habits. If you look over the text careully, you'll find you can cut some of it. I realise you want to emphasise it, but you must get rid off some. Has many benefits. It will reduce wordcount, stop the reader getting bored and you can get to the action more rapidly.
You work hard to create this world, a world very different from our own. But some words pulled me up sharp and felt too "modern". When you describe Kai's feeling of despair and foreboding, you use words like"anxiety dream", "panic attacks", "paranoia" , "issues". and "breakdown".j I don't think they fit in with the world you want the reader to share with you. Definitely do not use the word "issues" when you refer to difficulties or problems...this is very modern, so modern I wouldn't use it myself in our real world. Ok, if you were writing dialogue for a group of young people in present day, it would be perfect, but not in your world. You can burst the bubble by using one inappropriate word...so tread carefully! (In case you think I'm going on about this, I have similar demands in my story of Ancient Greece and no doubt there are words in my draft that aren't quite right and I keep checking all the time.)
While I'm thinking about words, just a small point. In Chapter 3, when you refer to Kai as "infamous", I think you are being positive. So do you really mean "famous"?
You introduce the threat of other countries and the breakdown of talks etc, but I feel you don't introduce the dragon quickly enough. After all, dragons are in the title and readers may have bought it on the promise of dragons alone. I realise there's some reference in respect of the late king's mysterious death...but is that enough? An early scene showing how frightening and powerful the dragon is may help keep the reader interested.
All just suggestions and I read only up to Chapter 4.
Hope this is useful and I wish you all the best with this.
Cherry G.
The Girl From Ithaca.

Your title caught me then your pitch intrigued me and then I was hooked into reading. You create a convincing world here and have a well rounded MC in Kai. Your style is mythic and and suits the genre. Some people are allergic to flowery prose however and want everything short and snappy. Do consider how much a reader needs to know in order to engage with your story and cut out everything else. I have trimmed 30,000 words already and it is hard but necessary. Just something to think about. Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown

you have set up a great world here, with wonderful sounding name. i think your descriptions of the lands and continents could be enhanced with maps with the finished work, in the manner of lord of the rings...
on watchlist...
su dan [PLEASE CHECK OUT SEASONS]

Hi Billie Jo,

This is a very imaginative story with a suspenseful plot that keeps you turning pages, and characters that are so well developed they nearly jump off the page. There is plenty of conflict to keep the story moving forward, which in turn will keep the reader moving forward as well. Very well done. I'm happy to back your work.

Backed 100%

Patrick Armstead
Dark Lands

Ponderous and pompous leap immediately to mind. On the face of it that seems harsh, but not necessarily so. This is heavy-handed and needs a lot of pruning, especially in the pronoun category; too many instances of he to keep track.

"In fact, as the bustling crowd suddenly silenced..." Keep the sentences short and sharp when there's action to speed up the pace and add immediacy and force. The dragon claims Kai enters with ferocity, but I don't see it here. Sound and fury signifying very little. The dragon states Kai is paranoid, but it's not evident.

A suggestion: Rogues to the left and brawlers to the right. Kai mentally marked their positions, hand near his sword, fingers twitching, muscles tensed. He dreaded going into the disreputable tavern, but he didn't fear it. The bustling crowd stopped as the doors slammed against the wall, all eyes on him, curious, measuring, wary. He felt empowered. No one would dare cause trouble. He was the Emperor's man and commanded respect. The denizens turned back to their drink, shoulders hunched and hands in plain sight on the tables.

You needn't use my style, but I hope you can see the difference.

"...any place thrown open to him always shows signs of his visitation." What? First you say the prince should be afraid because he's resented after having said the people wouldn't dare cross the Emperor's man, and presumably wouldn't want to incur his wrath if they hurt the prince.

Alari didn't compliment Kai. Prodigal is a wastrel who has squandered his inheritance and is welcomed back into the fold. It's not much of a compliment. Beloved by the father and hated by everyone else.

"...eaten, drank, snorted...and he ate and drink too much..." eaten, DRUNK, snorted . . . and he ate and drank too much..."

Lose the quotes around words unless they are quotes. Use italics to denote emphasis.

"Kai dealt with him quick, by forcing..." Kai dealt with him quickly by forcing...

"...that is why he was loathe to..." loath not loathe.
The tavern master stepped into Kai's path. "Commander! Who's going to pay for these damages?"

Kai couldn't allow the situation to deteriorate--or the prince's reputation--to deteriorate any further. He pulled a bag of coins--his month's wages--from his belt and tossed it to the tavern master. The prince's money was tied up with creditors or had disappeared into some slut's ample bosom. It wasn't as if he had time to spend any of it chasing after his ward Prince Len.

"He simply counted his blessings he was fortunate enough..." Huh? Why is chasing Len a blessing? Doesn't seem like it. If this is supposed to be sarcastic, it missed the mark.

You don't need to reiterate that the tavern master has demanded recompense since he's already asked for it. That's redundant and unnecessary. Keep it simple. Show, don't tell. Make the tavern master a little ridiculous or bold or threatening or give him a wife who pushes him into Kai's path and urges him to do his duty. Give this scene some color. Right now, the characters are cardboard cutouts. Give it life. You have a wonderful scene and a great opportunity to further the MCs and the secondary characters and make this world vibrant and brilliant. And don't forget the dragon. Where is he during all of this?

This needs to be carefully and thoroughly edited.

Okay, now to the good stuff. This has the potential to be a great adventure with interesting characters, but they are drowning in words -- too much tell and not enough show. It seems like you're writing in a flowery prose, but it doesn't fit and it's not convincing, merely tiring. Clean it up. Mind the action and sentence structure. Short, sharp sentences with active verbs for the active scenes with longer sentences for back story and inner monologue. And what happened to the dragon? Len comes off as a spoiled brat and Kai, for all his bluster, isn't much of a threat. I like the kindness and tenderness he shows the prince as though they are close friends, or at least were, and he is mindful of his charge, but it is in direct opposition to the reckless anger and hostility we are led to believe from the dragon's opening words.

With work and editing, this will be brilliant. It's not there yet. It's rough, a first draft, but it is close. You've laid down the bones, now give them some flesh, blood and skin.

JMC

Billie,
Let me start off by saying that I think you have a good, solid, and intriguing idea for a story here.
I had a hard time with this book though. Reading it, I kept having to backtrack and reread, trying to make sense of each sentence. I had to concentrate so much that I sort of lost track of the story line. I finished entire paragraphs not quite sure what I'd just read. I know there's a story under here...I just can't find it under all the layers of rather convoluted prose.
My suggestion would be to simplify things. Find the essence of each paragraph and just write what that is. I think you're aiming for a richly embellished, poetic take on this story, which is admirable (and at 330,000 words downright impressive) but it slows the action, and at least for me, confuses the reader.
I can tell by your comments, though, that some love your style of writing. And in the end, if you are pleased with it as well, that's all that really matters, isn't it?
I wish you the best of luck!
-Libby

Great read, your writing has a nice ebb and flow to it. Imaginatively written and powerful characterisation throughout.

Happily shelved and good luck with it when you start sending it out.

Melxx

What an imaginative story. Good characters. Good settings. Makes this a good read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Dear Billie-Jo, I love your literary fiction romance story. :) It is a good read because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing/commenting on your book to help it advance. Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to back/comment on my TWO books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & the unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Very well written and with incerdible detail. I must back this.

This is really good. Kai is a believable and likable character. You tell us about his situation and keep the story going very well. I can't think of one thing to offer as criticism.

Nice work. Backed.

El
Reckless Scarlett

What a great opening line and it just gets better after that! loved this, Maggie P.

I do feel sorry for Kai with this idiot neer do well of a Prince to look after. Don't see this tosser could possibly be the heir to anything more than a barstool. Reminds me of our ruling class.

Tim Chambers
Moonbeam Highway: With Apologies to Miguel de Cervantes.

:) :) :) I'm laughing my pants off at this! Cheers for the comments; that was the general idea!

Acorok
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SHELVING you because Tim did. I can use your comments on my book when you can get a chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

This is fantastic writing. Your characters are well established and your premise is intriguing. Your descriptions are well developed and explained. You do an excellent job at describing this new world that you have created. Very imagintive writing.

Kristin
Demon in the Knight

I do feel sorry for Kai with this idiot neer do well of a Prince to look after. Don't see this tosser could possibly be the heir to anything more than a barstool. Reminds me of our ruling class.

Tim Chambers
Moonbeam Highway: With Apologies to Miguel de Cervantes.

Written in the flavor of Middle English, but understandable! Very tricky to do, I would imagine. Bravo. Backed.

Awesome opening, but the ending of the chapter left me hanging a bit, as you didn't end it with as big of a bang as I had expected while reading this. But....it was appropriate, and I was eeger to read what else would follow hehe. So I guess it was somewhat of a "bang" ? lol...

nothing to say about the writing except that you are definetly a writer, and a good one too boot.

Adventures, and good fun to read. It is one of the best written books on this site. Keep up the good work, you could fill my library behind me. Good luck Billie-Jo. Backed.
Norman. The Witch of Hambone Bk.3. And also, Muddledydo.

I enjoyed the dialogue exchanges they were entertaining and did not slow down the reading.

The adventures of Kia kept me engaged. Best wishes with a wonderful story

Scott
The Esrevinu Chronicles/Secrets of the Elephant Rocks

Another good one. You're very talented. I liked the second chapter better than the first because it was less heavy on description and came alive with dialogue. That pulled me into the story and got me really interested in the characters. One thing: the name Canarbis is going to automatically create associations with a similar word. If that's OK with you, then by all means keep it.

Nice. I fell into your book and stayed there. Enjoyable read, with good characterisation and tightly written - fluid prose that carry one along nicely. In the end, I got pretty into it. No grammer king, so cannot give any advice on punctuation, spelling etc. (I'm atrocious), but from where I am standing I am impressed. Happy to back this.

BACKED

Hi Billie

Good AGAIN! You DO know how to weave a tale! I love the name Kai, very evocative.

Happy to shelve 'Dragons' too for a time!

All the best
Elaina

Hi Billie,

Sorry it took me a bit to get to the review. Life with young kids...it's chaos! From what I've read so far, you have a strong voice and good command of the "technique" of writing (grammar, phrasing, etc).

The only nit I have is that there are some longish periods of exposition. A little more "show" via action might help speed it along just a weensy bit.

Good work!
KinDallas
SWITCH

Hiya Billie- Well even though I said I was going to have to wait a few days before reading your work, I decided to take some time out of study (needed a break) and start reading the first couple of chapters of your work. A couple of hours later I finished at where your upload of chapters end. I suppose to keep me reading for so long your work was superb. Your characters developed and changed well, you always kept the reader well informed of their setting. I do have a dilemma with it though...what happens next???? This one is definately going on my shelf.

Andi
Chronicles of the Knights of the Code.

Hello, Andi!

I wasn't entirely serious about placing this book on the site, as I'm promoting "A Matter of Life and Death", even though I much prefer this book! But there you go. Perhaps I will upload some more for those morbidly curious enough to know what happens! It's going to get far darker, if that's possible!

Thank you for the great comments and the backing! It's always appreciated.

Billie
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Hiya Billie- Well even though I said I was going to have to wait a few days before reading your work, I decided to take some time out of study (needed a break) and start reading the first couple of chapters of your work. A couple of hours later I finished at where your upload of chapters end. I suppose to keep me reading for so long your work was superb. Your characters developed and changed well, you always kept the reader well informed of their setting. I do have a dilemma with it though...what happens next???? This one is definately going on my shelf.

Andi
Chronicles of the Knights of the Code.

WOW. I thought your A Matter of Life and Death was written well but is it just possible this is better?? The only shame of it is that when I come to have a closer look it's not completely uploaded and I'm going to be left wanting more from what I've read so far! Is it wrong to like Len even though he`s a vile human being? This will definitely be shelved and definitely be published.

Thanks for the really kind comments and the backing for Dragons, Scarab! It is a completed book, but I haven't really been focused on uploading/publishing that one. It's just to show the range of my writing, I suppose.

Many thanks again!

Billie
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WOW. I thought your A Matter of Life and Death was written well but is it just possible this is better?? The only shame of it is that when I come to have a closer look it's not completely uploaded and I'm going to be left wanting more from what I've read so far! Is it wrong to like Len even though he`s a vile human being? This will definitely be shelved and definitely be published.

Thanks as always, Marg.

I'm still not sure about the title; it's very much a working one. It suggests it's really high fantasy and it isn't. In fact, it doesn't even relate to actual beasts but characters.

Still, hope it doesn't disappoint.

Billie
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