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rank 438 (-4)
word count 88851
date submitted 01.05.2009
date updated 25.05.2009
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Fantasy, Young A...
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The Wicked Wish of Ulysses Baum

M. William Anderson

 

When Ulysses Baum angrily sends his parents to another world, he finds taking back his wish far more difficult than he ever imagined…

 

Aided by the mysterious Veigle, Ulysses, his sister, Phoebe, and their friend, Noah, must travel to a dangerous otherworld – the Lost Garden – to rescue them.

Once there, Phoebe befriends Barnacus Shellback, an old sea dog investigating a storm sealing off the island of Mont Kindlemas from all but children, while Noah and Ulysses are captured by a band of cutthroats employed by the townspeople of Purlieus to find another way of breaching the storm. Together, they strike a deal with the Purlieans: they will rescue anyone on the island in return for their help finding their parents.

But Mont Kindlemas is cursed – monsters roam the town, an insane creature of lightning haunts its streets, and all are scared of a vicious tribe of children called the idlewilds. With time running out they must find out why the place is deserted before they are hunted, eaten or worse.

But what is the secret the monsters are hiding? How is the idlewilds’ spirit, Taradiddle, involved? And how does it know so much about Ulysses Baum, the boy from the world next door?

A rich, dark metaphysical adventure with crossover appeal, aimed at young adults.

 
 

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Prologue

  

A BEDLAM OF BEASTS

  

Whereby, in an ancient and forgotten Garden,
 
the House of Blank falls

  

  

The girl pressed herself into the shadows, her heart threatening to give her away as a monstrous roar shook the Great House. Veryan Blank peered cautiously down the dark corridor, listening for sounds of pursuit. Although none of the rampaging beasts appeared to be following her she knew she wasn’t safe from their appetites or their claws just yet.

She left her hiding place, finding the spiral staircase that led up to her father’s study, and trying her best to ignore the increasing mayhem from the floors below as the monsters tore her home to splinter and scrap. It was only when the servants’ pleas for mercy reached her that she guiltily pressed her hands hard over her ears. This was the sound of Veryan’s world ending, of the House of Blank, in wood and mortar, flesh, bone and spirit falling.

Oh Papa, what is happening? she thought, imagining her father at his desk, unaware of the terrible fate befalling his household as he wrote away the midnight hours. Lord Augustus Blank had worked his pen through his grief each and every night since her mother’s death, scribbling the same word over and over, and over again: why? 

Veryan had asked that same question of her pillow every night as she cried herself to sleep. Why Mama? Why did you go and die?

But that wasn’t the only question Veryan asked. Other strange things were happening. Her beloved brother, Peregrim, had suddenly become so secretive as well. And what of the monsters that had appeared from this sudden storm, invading her home and devouring all who stood in their way. Why were things going so terribly wrong for the House of Blank all of a sudden?

The staircase came to an end at the door of her father’s study.

Thank the Garden! She rested her head against the wood, catching her breath. Papa will know what to do. He has to!

Pushing on the handle, she half expected the door to be locked but it opened easily. Inside, the study was dim, lit only by the lightning flashing down through the glass roof. The smoke of the storm pressed its face to the glass, threatening her with its growls.

She could just make out the room: a quarrel had taken place, and recently by the look of things. Logs smouldered outside the hearth, flicking shadows up into the deep scars now running the length of the walls. The guts of cushioned chairs were bleeding onto the rug beneath her father’s desk, its own face polished with gouges. And his heavy journals were strewn everywhere, their spines broken, their pages shredded so that his single question littered the floor like melancholy confetti. But there was no sign of her father wherever Veryan looked.

‘Papa?’ she called. ‘Father? Are… are you here?’

There was no answer but for the darkness in the far corner of the room shifting. It rolled toward her, an eerie singsong whispering freezing her to the spot.

‘Change… fluctuate… alter… mutate…’

As the darkness crept closer Veryan saw that a piece of the storm, like a thunderhead, had found its way inside the room. It muttered to itself with all the bitter unpredictability of a crazy man, flashes of lightning bursting within its body which caused it to cry out in pain.

The thunderhead twisted and sniffed about Veryan’s toes, and then coiled up over her. It scrutinised her with an intense eyeless stare, and she tried hard not to shudder.

‘Oh me, oh my! What delicious treat do I spy?’ it wondered aloud, giggling to itself.

Veryan held her breath, not trusting herself to answer. She now recognised what this thing was. It was a morpheme, a magic of sorts, and the rarest kind. Born from a word, as all magic was, this indecent miracle had been given a living consciousness and the free will to carry out its goal as it saw fit.

Now Veryan did shudder: this thing was obscene. The morpheme giggled, running its clammy fingers over her skin.

‘What have we here, I wonder? A child! A small snot of a thing,’ it sneered. ‘Scrawny of limb and fiery of heart, but a little girl nonetheless, and only ever at best.’

Be cautious! Veryan chided herself. It was now even more apparent to her there was more going in her Father’s house tonight than just the invading beasts.

She closed her eyes, concentrating on composing her thoughts and her breathing, hoping the thing would grow bored and leave her.

The thunderhead pawed its way round her, scratching at the floor with legs of lightning. When it failed to get a rise from her it chuckled to itself.

‘Quite your father’s daughter, aren’t you, little snot. He refused to give in, right up until the end.’

‘What?’ Veryan asked, breaking her silence as it leaked toward the open window. ‘What do you know of my father?’

‘Your father?’ it whispered over its shoulder with a malicious cackle. ‘Your father and I were on very close terms… once. But sadly no more…’

‘What do you mean?’

The morpheme didn’t answer, slipping from the study and leaving its cryptic answer hanging in the air like a rotten smell. With the fog of its body gone Veryan saw it had been concealing more than just itself in the corner.

A keening shriek shook what books that were still on the shelves to the floor. A monstrosity, no more than a walking bag of bones, shambled toward Veryan. She couldn’t help herself; she screamed.

The monster’s head was lumpish and huge, hanging from a neck so thin it was clearly unable to support its weight. Its skeleton pierced the skin at uncomfortable angles so that the monster mewled in agony with every step. Spit drooled from a lolling tongue, down into the torn ribcage below. Veryan’s eyes widened: where the monster’s heart should have throbbed there was only darkness, an emptiness that terrified her. How could this thing be alive?

The beast bellowed, and she stumbled back, falling as she did. Snatching down a heavy curtain embroidered with her father’s crest, it threw the drape about its shoulders to hide the ugliness as best it could. Only then did the monster calm a little, and turn to look at Veryan. For a moment they stared at one another, and the fear and the danger between them seemed to dissipate.

Perhaps there is more to this monster, she found herself thinking, than meets –

‘Sister!’

A boy, perhaps a year or so older than Veryan, burst into the room, pushing himself between her and the monster.

‘Peregrim! Don’t!’ Veryan cried as her brother pulled a short blade from his belt, ready to defend her.

The monster growled at the boy, and Peregrim brandished his knife in response. The creature easily swatted the attack aside but Peregrim countered quickly. He thrust the meagre blade forward, back and then forward again as confidently as if it were a long-handled sabre. Strangely, though the beast could easily have overwhelmed him, it fell back and refused to fight.

Peregrim stood his ground, squaring up to the monster. They eyed each other warily, wondering at the other’s next move. The creature abruptly sighed, turning its gaze from Peregrim back to Veryan cowering behind him.

‘Look away, sister,’ Peregrim commanded. ‘Look away, I say, before this creature bewitches you!’

‘Oh my!’ Veryan gasped, seeing something she hadn’t noticed before: the monster’s eyes were the same colour, the same hue, as her father’s had been. Exactly the same colour. She screamed, clutching hold her brother’s knife arm and pointed at the beast.

‘Aye, Veryan, I know. This creature, it… it has devoured our father!’ Peregrim cried, moving to block her view. ‘And now it is looking to eat you too!’

She hid her head, doing as her brother told her.

Could what Peregrim says be true? Is father really dead, and in this creature’s belly? But if it is so dangerous why was is the monster not attacking?

Beast, boy and girl regarded each other silently, and then Peregrim said quietly, but firmly: ‘Go. Leave now before you force me to kill you.’

The monster threw one last, sad look at Veryan before it fled through the window and was gone.

‘You’re safe now, little one,’ Peregrim whispered, pulling his sister closer and smoothing her dark hair gleaming hoary in the lightning. White filigree fell through his fingers, and Peregrim realised his mistake: it wasn’t the reflection of the storm that had bleached his sister’s crest white but the madness of what she had witnessed that night.

‘Don’t be afraid,’ he cooed as she gibbered in his arms. ‘You’re safe now. Trust me.’

‘Wh… why?’ Veryan stammered, staring down at the pages of their father’s journals crumpled about them.

‘Why?’ Peregrim asked, not really understanding her question. ‘Because I’ve driven all the monsters away, little one. Because there are none left inside the Great House now. The nightmare is ended. There’s only you and me now, I promise.’

But even as he said this Peregrim knew he was lying. In the shadows behind them the briefest hint of a smile, so perfect and beguiling flashed momentarily. And then was gone. A shameful tear escaped down Peregrim’s cheeks.

Oh father, what have I done?

And despite her brother’s assurances Veryan Blank also began to cry, a howl so deep and so anguished it seemed to have no end. Peregrim was wrong: she wasn’t safe at all, no one was. There were still monsters inside the Great House, terrors hidden so deep and so cleverly disguised she felt her insides crawling to escape her skin.

Who will save us? she thought, hearing herself scream uncontrollably. Who will save us from ourselves?

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Andy M. Potter wrote 16 days ago

MW, kudos! you've pulled it off. not easy to occasionally adopt a 'poetic' style - e.g., 'now veryan did shudder' - and purvey terror. a fine balance of emotion and action as well.
thoroughly enjoyed this read.
on my shelf.
best wishes, andy

JD Revene wrote 17 days ago

There's an old-fashioned feeling to this, not just in the sub-headings of the chapters. The language is lyrical and the atmosphere magical. I do hope today's children enjoy writing such as this as much as I did when I was a child.

Backed.

mvw888 wrote 17 days ago

It is a testament to good writing when I am effectively drawn in within a few sentences. You start this en media res, with believable characters and an encompassing feeling of place. Really, there was no fighting it! A wonderful start, perfectly suited for YA in my opinion. Excellent.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

CarolinaAl wrote 20 days ago

An engaging fantasy with fascinating characters. Wonderful imagery. Effective dialogue. Evocative narrative. Fast paced. A pleasure to read. Backed.

SammySutton wrote 27 days ago

Hello...

Fabulous writing. Great premise with strong characters. My son is reading and I will return with his comments as he loves the story and is more profecient in this genre. However, I found chapter 1 wonderfully compelling.

Great Job!
Backed!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

Hi,
very well written. The plot is very good. A few corrections would give a perfect shape. However I enjoyed it a lot.

All the best,
Backed with wishes,
S. Vinay kumar

The ark and the aroma of peril.

Lara wrote 89 days ago

Backed - it's an interesting plot, but the dialogue is lack-lustre and sometimes unconvincing.
Lara
Good For Him

Suzie Q wrote 99 days ago

Dear David, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will also put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells of my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy.

Suzie Q wrote 100 days ago

Dear David, I love most of all the sentence you had after each title before you began each chapter - I looked forward to it each time - very unique & a great plus to your book. :) Hope you write more adventures. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch/prologue,which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book: When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)

jfredlee wrote 116 days ago

Hi, M -

I think your characters, the whole fantasy theme and the fast pace of your writing will make Wicked Wish popular with YA readers.

Good stuff, and I'm happy to back it.

And I'd love it if you could take a look at my book.

Best of luck.

-Jeff Lee
THE LADIES TEMPERANCE CLUB'S FAREWELL TOUR

Andrew Burans wrote 131 days ago

Your smooth writing style coupled with the use of short paragraphs is sure to capture the imaginations of your target market. Excellent use of imagery, the dialogue is tight and the story is a page turner. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Diane60 wrote 131 days ago

Have only read Chapter One,

Wow what an opener. There are so many questions which will propel you on into the next and so on.
Vivid descriptions and the beginning of a huge adventure.
Much good luck with this

Diane

scarletjg wrote 132 days ago

Publishers hated "Harry Potter" so what the hell do they know? :) This is great stuff! Your writing is smooth and intreaguing with a sophistication that is not often seen in YA.

I approve this book!!! Shelved.

Janice (Blood of Eden)

zan wrote 133 days ago

The Wicked Wish of Ulysses Baum
M. William Anderson

This is a fantastic short pitch which should grab the attention of your YA audience - "When Ulysses Baum angrily sends his parents to another world, he finds taking back his wish far more difficult than he ever imagined…" How many young people do not wish they had the power to send their parents to another world? Had a good laugh here. Happy to see Ulysses is a good egg though, after all, he puts himself and his friends in great danger to go and rescue them. This is a wonderful match for your YA audience. Inventive plot and the writing is good too.
Best,
Zan

Famlavan wrote 133 days ago

The Wicked Wish of Ulysses Baum

What an amazing and very powerful start to this. I very much like the feel of the myth (Campbell’s Hero’s Journey) to this, it the structure looks to be right.
You have very impressive sensory narrative that builds the storyline so very well. Great dialogue between fantastic characters weaved into a brilliant storyline.

eloraine wrote 134 days ago

I agree keep writing, don't get discouraged. Backed E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

M William Anderson wrote 135 days ago

I read your forum post about reviews of your work. What more do they want, for God's sake?

It is heartening that you haven't given up. Don't. You will get there and show 'em all...

Did my bit: backed.
Philip (Interview With An Angel)



Thanks, Phil. Your support and belief - along with all the other kind souls on this site - keeps me going. After the comments from the publishers, I seriously began to doubt my talent... or rather if I had any. There is a fine line between taking criticism and believing that it is something to be acted on or rather simple hyperbole and the subjective thoughts made manifest by said editors. One can start to worry too much about what others want, and cherry pick only the good while refusing to learn from the bad. Thankfully, I have gone through my "time in the desert" and come out the other side a stronger writer. I can't call myself an author but I do think of myself a writer more than I did before.

A Knight wrote 135 days ago

M,

I've only read the start of this, and I'm having to shove aside the green-eyed monster to get the words out here. This is simply breath-taking. Your work is concise, edgy, perfect for a young adult audience, and the foreboding is masterfully constructed.

Fabulous work.
Abi xxx

Philip Antony wrote 135 days ago

I read your forum post about reviews of your work. What more do they want, for God's sake?

It is heartening that you haven't given up. Don't. You will get there and show 'em all...

Did my bit: backed.
Philip (Interview With An Angel)

olga wrote 135 days ago

Hi

This is an intricately woven story which unfolds well. Great characterisations and storytelling. I liked Veryan Blank. She is well described. Great names too. Great chapter endings.
Shelved.
Cheers Olga

carlashmore wrote 140 days ago

This is truly wonderf fantasy writiing. A YA audience would lap it up - imaginative, fiercely intelligent and one that could easily be enjoyed by an adult readership.
Happy to back
Carl
The Time Hunters

missyfleming_22 wrote 156 days ago

Such an interesting read! You have a great narrative voice that is easy to read and follow. It starts off really strong, with an intense opening and it just continues strongly from there. There are some wonderful characters in here too, very memorable. Liked this a lot.

Missy
Mark of Eternity

gerry01 wrote 163 days ago

Hi, Hope this registered. To add to my previous comments: The writing is excellent and do I detect a hint of comedy between the lines? I certainly had a laugh at the images in my head. Maybe I'm just a little weird that way, or maybe your ability to conjure imagery is masterful. Either way, the writing is very good.

Burgio wrote 164 days ago

This story is a good slant on both "Be careful what you wish for" and "Acts have consequences". On top of those lessons to be learned, it has good characters who have been dropped into horrible situations. Should have a wide appeal to your audience. Burgio (Grain of SAlt).

gerry01 wrote 167 days ago

Hi, This is a great yarn which reads like an epic. You are a master storyteller! I'll be back for more of this. All the best, Gerry

Quenntis wrote 169 days ago

Nice and dark! The idea of a MORPHEME, a magical creature made of words, is great. I also like the use of the family name BLANK, hinting at more things to come. Overall, a good first chapter (or prologue), throwing the reader into an invasion and destruction of the family home. Just one note on the ending paragraph: Is it possible to scream uncontrollably and still think coherently? I'd like to read further. Is there anything you'd like me to look at specifically? Q

Salude El Dia wrote 188 days ago

I think this could become an instant classic. Wildly elegant and creative, it has all the elements for some type of visual representation, either heavily illustrated, animation, or movie. It is definitely a classic of the "old style", not much prevalent today, but sorely missed. I would buy this book! Backed.

Fromante wrote 191 days ago

Why has this not been to the editors desk? It is an excellent and beautiful story that deserves to be published. I did not have to read a great deal to know that this is a special book, I love it to bits.
Norman. The Witch of Hambone Bk.3. And, Muddledydo.

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 196 days ago

This reminds me a bit of Lewis Carroll--overlapping fantasy and reality; lots of symbolism; lots of word play. I think that if your target audience is young adults, you might want to move the prologue back and get right to Ulysses's dilemma. Well-written and engaging. Happy to back.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

M.C. Holman wrote 204 days ago

This is great work. The only suggestion I would make is a single word change- when you say 'short blade,' I immediately imagined a shortsword, like Sting. Maybe change it to knife. That's the only problem I had. Good job, keep up the fantastic writing! Backed with enthusiasm!

Thanks for the backing, would love to hear what you thought about mine!

M.C. Holman
Dragon-Children: The Secrets of Tarenhavdel

Rosali Webb wrote 212 days ago

M.
An absolute gem of a book and mega-adventure for those young ones, and anyone else actually such is its charm. The description of monster in chapter one is excellent. Shellback, standing on deck od f the Mirabilis and uttering 'there's something strange in these waters tonight', was very atmostpheric, very Captain Ahab in Mobey Dick mode. Immaculate piece of imagery. Backed definately. Rosali
Fieldtrip to Mars

Francis Albert McGrath wrote 232 days ago

Not my normal genre, but I have read enough to see this is an astonishing work of imagination. My only advice would be to watch the Latin and Greek ... since it is set in an otherworld, that world should have no knowledge of Latin or Greek (Ulysses being a Greek name). Although perhaps you intend it as an alternative future which grew from the same Latin and Greek civilisations? These are the kind of things editors get worked up about!
Well done
Frank

gillyflower wrote 234 days ago

A fascinating book. Ignato N. Veigle is an amazingly well drawn portrait of Satan, tempting Ulysses with his snake cufflink in one sleeve and the apple with one bite out of it in the other. It is so easy to relate to Ulysses, whose father treats him really badly, refusing to listen and believing the worst. The Prologue, telling us something of the world to which Ulysses and the others will travel, according to your pitch, is chilling, and your descriptions of the monsters are very effective. It seems that the second monster may be the father, whose continual writing of the word,"Why?" has called up, perhaps, the morpheme who can be born from a word. The girl begins to see that this may be her father, but the boy refuses to consider it; in an almost parallel situation to that of Ulysses. This book is full of allegory, and your writing is fast moving, exciting, and poetic in the extreme. An excellent book. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Barry Wenlock wrote 237 days ago

Excellent - a truly Gothic start. Backed!
Barry
(Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys)

Jupiter Echoes wrote 239 days ago

A really well written book for the younger market.
Did listening to bob dylan while i wrote help?

Perhaps.... but i felt myself really enjoying your tale.

BACKED

Beval wrote 254 days ago

Wonderfully dark with a delicious brooding quality that draws the reader in deeper and deeper.

B. J. Winters wrote 254 days ago

I love the names that you have chosen Peregrim in particular. The visual image suits the character - and Molyon D'Quill, another great choice. Placed beside the classic Noah and Phoebe the uniqueness shines.

I liked the drama in your uploaded chapter 8. I suspect the 'know thyself' will return as a theme. I've been reading for longer than I planned, and I'm going to have to force myself to stop here. I plan to share this with my son tomorrow. I can recommend nothing from a critical perspective. Don't let this languish in a drawer!

alias miss ferkit wrote 256 days ago

Whoa, M. William. This is the genuine article. Richly conceived, layered, oh-so darkly sung. Scary and creepy and...(sniff - taste...) tastes like spiced chocolate! With just the faintest, homeopathic dose of an ancient poison! I so agree with Jane about the virtues of YA exemplified here. . (Why is much of the classiest writing on this site for the YA market?) I find myself wishing I had this book already in papyrus and stitching, in my hands. Backed.
A couple of edit questions to be disregarded - as you wish? All optional, season to taste:

a) insert a comma: 'although none of the rampaging beasts appeared to be following her (,) she knew she wasn't safe...'

b) omit the 'of' here for better cadence? "This was the sound of Veryan's world ending, /of/ the House of Blank, in wood and mortar, flesh, bone and spirit falling."

Once again, this is quite splendid.

(whew! this is really a scary book. love it!)

Andrea

(Last Days of the Transitional Objects Institute)

Nick Poole2 wrote 256 days ago

I'm sure I've looked at this excellent work before.

what the hell.

In my search to find people to read mine, I'm pleased to come across such highly backable work.

Raymond Nickford wrote 260 days ago

Your Prologue distinguishes itself as such because it throws the reader into the action of the narrative as much as preparing for your first chapter.
The setting of the Great House and the storm, together with the 'rampaging monsters,' provide a tension which, almost by definition, many a prologue can fail to do.
Even when the description is vivid, it's never static but charged with a tension that comes from ominous events.
For example, on reaching her father's room, Veryan finds, 'his heavy journals were strewn everywhere, their spines broken, their pages shredded so that his single question littered the floor like melancholy confetti.'
A metaphor as fit for the young and discriminating reader as Tolkien could be said to be.
The idea of a 'morpheme' [granted that it is the linguist's term for the unit of a word] is 'born from a word, as all magic was,' is a thought surely bound to tantalize your reader - and why shouldn't magic be born from a word; if the word is in the right place, amongst others, at the right time ?
When Veryan is reduced by the trauma - and the Prologue is a trauma as much as a drama - to 'gibbering' and 'white hair,' then many a young mouth will fall agape.
Veryan's brother, Peregrim, for the sake of his sister's sanity, denies that monsters still lurk in the Great House, but knows that they do, so that your reader would have to be brain dead not to read on. Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

John Harold McCoy wrote 260 days ago

Hi William. Great pitch.
Excellent book. Went through the prologue and 2 chapters. I think you've done a great job on this. Lots of things going on, good characters, believable dialog and the beginning was excellent. Very polished and deserves to be noticed. On my shelf. Best of luck with it.

John Harold McCoy - Bramwell Valley

John Harold McCoy wrote 260 days ago

Hi William. Great pitch.
Excellent book. Went through the prologue and 2 chapters. I think you've done a great job on this. Lots of things going on, good characters, believable dialog and the beginning was excellent. Very polished and deserves to be noticed. On my shelf. Best of luck with it.

John Harold McCoy - Bramwell Valley

M.A. Hoak wrote 262 days ago

This is a wonderfully compelling read. Your attention to deail and descriptive language are absolutely wonderful. I've only made it through the first couple of chapters, but I'm already hooked. Backed with pleasure.

- MA Hoak
The Secret Diaries of Alex Barnett

Melcom wrote 275 days ago

Exceptional writing for the genre.

Backed with pleaure.

Melxx
Impeding Justice

C.P. wrote 296 days ago

Your tittle in itself is worth backing. It's hard to come up with just the right on and you did it in spades. As for the story that was another gem. Can't think of any nits. All I can say is it is a fine piece of fiction. Well worth it to put it on my shelf. Good luck. Connie

Helena wrote 296 days ago

Hi M, this is an intriguing opening. The story gets off to a flying start I was swept up in the mayhem of the house that night. The monsters downstairs, the morpheme in her fathers study and the bony beast all set up terrifying scenario. I was a little confused by some of the creatures you have invented but I am sure they are explained further on in the story and this only compels me to read further. Also the fathers disappearance raises a lot of questions. This is extremely well written and an intense fantasy read so far. Its on my shelf. Helena (A Load of Rubbish)

T.L Tyson wrote 302 days ago

What an idea! What great novel.
i love your writing, the style the characters. I think you write this great. Geared towards YA but you dont dumb it down, that is what I like. I love the fact that you incorporate heavy real life dramas into this. I think you have done a great job and I am definitly placing this on my shelf.
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

InternetG33k wrote 315 days ago

Hi M. William,

That eye has been staring at me from my watchlist for a couple weeks - I finally gave in to its gaze this afternoon. This is incredible - your story is like literary fiction for children (and I mean that in a very good way). I've only read the prologue and Chapter One, but I would continue on until the end if I could have this in book form - i could also see my twelve year old son being enthralled by the world you've created. Any chance this might be a series?

Sorry for not having anything useful to say - about the only thing left to do is to pop this on my shelf.

~Traci
Tangled Web

David Fearnhead wrote 318 days ago

well-written and certainly appealing to it's intended audience. Happy to back.

soutexmex wrote 321 days ago

BACKING because Bob Steele did and I trust his instincts. Think you can make it to the Ed's desk with this effort. I'll swing by later to give you a right and proper comment.

Do look forward to your comments on my book when you get a chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau File