The Legacy

I love your writing style, very unique! I like the colors for visual effect. I feel sorry for the MC, poor boy.

I do not have time to read much more, unfortunately, but will get to it when time permits.

Will be on my bookshelf later today!!

Denise

Backed.

Off the cuff? Okay, very good. Unlike the others I found the colors of print distracting. I'm very visual as most writers are and I didn't need it to 'see' your vision, well done. Backed with pleasure. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Adam, nice one! on my shelf. love the font dynamics.
i said i'd pass on some picky comments. first though, this is a cracker. my micro bs is only meant to push it farther, if the bs makes any sense ;) i don't mean to mess with your style - it's great and you know what effects you need.

Not sure about some of the ( )
e.g, do you need them around "I never saw daddy again"
Maybe you don't even need to say (Had I known what was ...) - i think it detracts from the flow.
also, do you need them around "And from that point ..." - seems that the narrative momentum would be stronger without the ( )
"Like an ant. An alient ant." - don't think you need to repeat "An alien ant."
ok, enough picky bs.
best wishes with this fine tale. andy

Brilliant and fascinating.. I LOVE the childish font and colour art.
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Okay Thatcher and the Brit Establishment won.. but other countries
DID fall apart.
Shelved for more entertainment
Congratulations....mikegilli The Free

Welcome aboard, Adam. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. The short pitch should read: 'It's 1980s lawless England ...' With the long pitch, break it down into smaller paragraphs so it reads faster and expand on it. End it with one succinct question. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

THE LEGACY
This is a good story. The mark of it is your writing style: the story has some spelling errors (should be fly “through” the air, not fly “threw” the air) but your writing is so crisp and engaging, it’s easy to ignore those and just sink into the story. Loved the line about worrying about turning into concrete. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

The "threw the sky" is intentional. The boy is only five years old and I wanted to drop a spelling mistake in! Maybe I should just spell it correctly?! Thanks for the encouraging comment.

THE LEGACY
This is a good story. The mark of it is your writing style: the story has some spelling errors (should be fly “through” the air, not fly “threw” the air) but your writing is so crisp and engaging, it’s easy to ignore those and just sink into the story. Loved the line about worrying about turning into concrete. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Half-way through the second chapter. More like poetry than prose. Extraordinary narrative!

Some typos/spelling errors and missing words - but hey, I would guess that this is written off-the-cuff? It has a beautiful spontaneity; don't change that!

Very different. Probably hard to find a large following; but I like it!

Luke Warm

I'm busy reading it, and love the start. Come back to you with a review when I'm through. Shelved already on the basis of the excellent start and premise.