Hell bent on Success

ARISE, AUTHONOMY GHOST!

Ease those weary, withered limbs from your coffin. Push away the stone from the mouth of the tomb.

You have one last task to perform. One last, sacred shelf to confer.

Whether you were plugger, spammer, gusher or troll, whether you flirted or fought in the forum or beavered away in the shadows, now is the time for your resurrection.

One last time. Marshall your strength, muster the last vestiges of your power and carry out your final Authonomy act:

Back my book, MIRROR IN THE SKY.

Then, only then, you may rest easy in your Authonomy grave.

Nick Poole2 (formerly known as NickP)

Hello! I am must say sorry, because yours is one of the first mss i read and I liked it, alot. However, way back when, I thought that whatever you backed were the only votes that counted. I have recently gone through my WL and found you still there. I liked this. It isn't my thing. I like Literary fiction, but as far as Commercial goes, this is awesome. I read this before the financial crisis, and having studied economics myself, thought it was prophetice, who knew how much. I usualy leave a bunch of nit picks, but I like this a lot. I hope you are querying. It has potential and is one of the first things that caught my eye in here. Best of luck and don't worry. HC is taking things from all over the rankings. You just might be next,

This really appeals to me. I like the witty view of our world. I'm putting this on my watch list

Interesting read, when I came across Gilgamesh, I half expected Enkidu to appear! I have read chapter one only at this point. It's not bad. Too many ing words for me. Some sentences could be better phrased for more impact. But I liked it, thanks.

Good fun- not sure we needed quite so much of Gordon at the beginning just to have him vanish (one hint,- no woman would ever use te terms 'attractive' and 'mousey haired' in the same sentence :-) ) but I love this gods in real time thing - ery Neil Gaiman :-) hope you do well with this, its fun fiction.

Hi Andrew, just wanted to say thanks for your kind comments on Scratch. I remember really liking Hades Inc on YWO and will have another proper read here asap.

Pacy, fast-moving plot coupled with funny well-observed dialogue.

I like that there’s almost screenplay economy to your writing that makes it exciting to read and very easy to empathise with the characters.

I think you’ve got the start of something here – would be keen to read the whole thing, but understand your reluctance to post on a public site. Good luck with the re-write/edit and I think you should go ahead and start pitching to agents/publishers when you’ve completed.

Try Michael O’Mara books if they’re not on your list – might suit their list.

Best,

Jon

Thanks for the kind words Lexi and Laura. I am blown away by them. Very pleased that you found it amusing (humour can be so subjective). Thanks so much for taking the time to read it.

Laura - yes it is a completed novel, though I am two thirds of the way through a re-write (should be finished in a couple of weeks) and I am at the point where I want to get a few more opinions before seeing if an agent might be interested in representing it.

I hadn't thought about posting all of it though. I'd be interested to hear what other people think on this topic (you know the fear and worry about whether it will be ripped off and so on). Perhaps I will post this in the forum. Thanks again.

I've read all 6 chapters and am really enjoying so far. Any plans to post more? Is this a finished novel or a work in progress?

The opening to chapter 5 is brilliant.

I think the dialogue is the strongest element of your writing, and I'm pleased that the story is moving nice and quickly. Would be good to see a female character emerge - Shannon is a bit mental and Gordon's gf a bit of a drip. Incidently I think it's perfectly possible to be both attractive and mousey haired. Keep it in.

A pacy, racy read, and amusing too. Opening with poor Gordon, the man who has everything and is about to lose it all (though his girlfriend Sarah is oddly described as 'attractive with mousey brown hair', when mousey hair is generally the province of the plain) you pull off the trick of interesting the reader in a character who is about to leave the narrative for good, and not making this annoying.

I'm already concerned about Duncan, and he's not yet appeared in the novel. I enjoyed chapter one. If this weren't my lunch break, I'd read on.