Closure

Strong dialogue and Alex is a flesh and blood character; very genuine. My only complaint is the opening. Usually, opening a story with dialogue isn't a good idea. But otherwise, your premise is strong and so are your characters and their interactions. WL.

Hi Tarquin

I think you have a good concept here, so I have backed on the basis that it has potential. Chapter one is fine, with some decent authentic dialogue, but you probably need a stonger event to begin the book.

Keep it going. I'm sure you'll get plenty of encouragement.

Cheers
Bill

Hi Tarquin, I have read the four chapters you have put up and feel that there is great potential in the book. I am WL it for now, hoping to see more later. Meanwhile I invite you to take a grander at A Matter of Face. I need the support. All the best. Bruce

Tarquin,

I just read through three chapters of "Closure." In the first chapter isn't tonnes spelled tons? I'll overlook the yellow highlighter in chapter three where you have more things to add but I doubt if an editor would. The dialogue and characters are interesting enough and make for a good storyline, a large subject that you are tackling here but, so far, it looks good and I put it on my shelf and wish you all the best in your future literary career.

Peace,

Keith G.

Sweet. I'm in for the ride.

Interesting book and writing. Not sure you should start with the chapter you do start with - chapter two might make for a more arresting prologue. But then that might mess with the nice alternating narrations you have set up (assuming that's the plan for the rest of the novel). It's a weighty subject you've chosen to tackle - does it come from personal experience, I wonder?

No matter. I wish you good luck with this and I'd be curious to see where you're going with it, so let me know when / if you're going to upload the remainder!