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rank 1841
word count 92544
date submitted 19.06.2009
date updated 12.06.2010
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Historical Ficti...
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ICON

Harold Alvin

Greco's well-heeled aloofness is a worthy asset in North Korea where the most seemingly inconsequential missteps could send him and his team to certain death.

 

On one level, Greco Mohammed’s story has the classic outlines of a familiar story of many first-generation Americans whose parents came to this country for a better life.

Greco’s mother and father came from the Middle East and had moved into the Detroit area more than 45 years ago with Greco being their first born. They spoke the Middle East dialect and Greco picked up the Arabic language before he went to school. His parents were raised as strict Muslims but as Greco grew older he learned English rather quickly.

Greco’s story, however, quickly sheds its routine character in three novels that send the American into the anti-American and terrorist cells of Middle East, Brazil, and North Korea. Naturally self-effacing and always discreet, Greco is an emotional challenge for loving family members who wish he would shed his aloof veneer, further deepened by the untimely death of his first love. However, that well-heeled aloofness is a worthy asset in the chronicled missions where the most seemingly inconsequential missteps are capable of unraveling the missions and sending Greco to a certain death.

 
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PCreturned wrote 271 days ago

Hi again Harold,

I was just wandering authonomy when your book caught my eye. As I started reading, I realised I'd read + backed your work ages ago. How could I ever forget a character like Greco? ;)

On my 2nd reading, I think this really is a great story and an amazing pageturner. Since the stars system didn't exist when i last read you, I'm taking this chance to give you 6 stars. :)

Good stuff. I hope you get this published and sell many thousands of copies. ;)

best wishes,

Pete

M. A. McRae. wrote 328 days ago

The writing is good, but it becomes clear that this can't be the first of your Greco novels, and maybe you should mention that it in your pitch. Reading this alone, I feel there is too little introduction to the man before things are happening. I was surprised at the detail of the bride's choice of dress, even the names of bridesmaids, and wonder if it is superfluous, or if it will become more relevant later on.
My knowledge of American history and politics is not extensive, but surely Rumsfeld is a real person, and therefore using him is rife with danger.
Summary: The writing is good, and the story promises quality. To be backed, Marj.

Pia wrote 379 days ago

Harold -

Icon - Identity buried - Greco enters the scene once more. To beat guerilla wars with guerilla security operations has it's cost, and Greco has m u c h to lose. A gripping tale, written with panache and in a setting usually hidden from the ordinary citizen. Came back here to refresh an earlier comment, update on stars and to thank you for your support. Pia

Conchvegas wrote 482 days ago

Your narrative is somewhat formal in tone which I'm not exactly used too, but you have a solid story reminding me a little of Jason Bourne. All the technical details seem accurate and you seem to be a well informed writer. As opposed to my more in your face style I'd describe you as a surgeon with words.
Best of luck,
Daniel

stevew wrote 484 days ago

A very well written title, that grips the reader.

You have a very talented pen!

Wishing you every success - BACKED!

stevew
The Ultimate/The Authors Cut

Lynne Ellison wrote 490 days ago

remarkable thriller, and good depiction of North Korean life

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

Daniel Manning wrote 491 days ago

For the recently married Greco, the ICON mission will a mean a trip to a country that has the fourth largest army in the world, and the possibility of a nuclear arsenal in direct violation of signed treaties. The impoverished country of North Korea, could pose a real threat to world security.
Given the amount of prolific description, the delays on the eastbound carriageway for Rebecca, to passenger numbers on jumbo jets, the adage ' Time Out' might be applicable. But I think it ceated a background of tension, for the believed dead ex goverment agent, because throughout the opening chapters I was waiting for the bomb to go off, or an assassin to step out of the shadows. When Greco finally made to the DMZ I felt I could breath a sigh of relief.
Backed with pleasure
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility
Chapter two.
Minor typos: When she finally approached the accident scene she noticed a sizeable corps of fire trucks, ambulances, numerous police cars and the county corner... Coroner
Chapter three:
Minor typos When get back, we will look for something in the georgetown area or perhaps around Fort meade area in maryland.... When we get back... we'll look...

Crowel wrote 507 days ago

When the love between Greco and Maria comes in the writing is really good. The proposal is endearing and the dialogue is charming. But this first page is really, really long. Instead of putting several chapters on one page you should separate them each for an easier read. Also, the first several paragraphs have a lot of information in them and I wonder if readers and editors will find it overbearing. I did, but that could be just me. Regardless your writing is great and polished and I wish you the best of luck with this.

Lacey

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 511 days ago

I envy anyone who can craft a tale like this which dodges between known facts, journalistic guess-work and the public's assumptions. The edges can be blurred at anytime the author wishes as long as he presents a tale and you do exactly that, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

RonParker wrote 517 days ago

Hi Harold,

I'm afraid this story isn't for me. That doesn't mean there's anything wrong with it, it just isn't to my taste. In fact I was unable to spot a single error in the actual writing.

One thing that did strile me though was that you opened the story by setting the scene. This does need to be done quite early on but not right at the beginning. You need a more active scene to read the reader interested. Once you have them hooked, then you can revert back to describing the meeting. Remember, it's always best to start a story in the middle of something, not the start of it.

Ron

Pia wrote 519 days ago

Harold -

Icon - Identity buried, Greco enters the scene once more. To beat guerilla wars with guerilla security operations has it's cost, and Greco has much to lose. A gripping tale, in a setting usually hidden from the ordinary citizen.

Backed, Pia (Course of Mirrors)

CarolinaAl wrote 525 days ago

A captivating thriller with well rounded, complex characters. Wonderful imagery. Sparkling dialogue. Filled with action. Fast paced. Good hooks. Well textured. Brilliant writing. A pleasure to read. Backed.

Ruth Francisco wrote 530 days ago

I'm in the middle of a Vince Flynn novel, and I enjoyed your writing more. Be careful with your POVs, and balancing info with action, but you have the stuff. Try reading your first chapter out loud to yourself--I think it will help you enormously.

Backed and good luck!

PCreturned wrote 535 days ago

A fascinating read. Complex and believable. And Greco's a v interesting character,

I'm happy to back you. :)

Pete

J. Moore wrote 540 days ago

Well written. Lots of in-depth information about the government and its offices. The interworkings of all the different departments is fascinating. You obviously know a lot more about all this stuff than does the average American. Perhaps this will poke the complacency of our nation into paying more attention to what our so-called leaders do. My only nit-pick: Capitalize War on Terror, as it's the name of a specific war. There's a real market for this kind of novel, exciting and informative. Backed.

sye wrote 542 days ago

A well written and constructed piece of work.
Backed with plesure

Elijah Enyereibe Iwuji wrote 543 days ago

Hi Harold,

You have an interesting read and stuff here. I read though chapter one to three, and sound ineresting. Its very intriguing with a hook that calls for more. Your opening, plot and characterization excellent. Your plot is convincing as if it was motion pictures. I suggest you change your pitch, so as to do justice to this great story. All the best.

Kevin Alex Baker wrote 544 days ago

Wow, you've built a very intricate world here, and I'm very curious to see where you take Greco! You've got a great style that makes all the detail flow here naturally.

One thing to correct, in chapter 1, you forgot a period after "You're kidding me".

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

lizjrnm wrote 545 days ago

Move over Vince Flynn! This is so well written and engaging so far - easy to back and I will return to finish later- bless you for uploading the entire manuscript! Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

Andrew Burans wrote 553 days ago

I really like what I have read so far. Your plot is intriguing and very plausible. Your character development of Greco is well done and your descriptive wring makes your thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Despinas1 wrote 559 days ago

Icon is an action packed thriller, well written with twists and plots sure to keep the reader guessing at every corner.. Harold I commend you on your fine work, great pros and eloquent writing.
Wishing you much success
Sincerely
Helen
The Last Dream

Miguel Martins de Menezes wrote 560 days ago

Dear Harold,

I want to thank you for your kindness and the lovely comment you have made to my novel. I had a good laugh with it.
Your work reveals an excellent work and a well done narrative. Your writing capacity reveals a highly skilled writer, mainly which concerns the genre. It gave me the impression that you are a men with a great knowledgment, mainly regarding the action and location, it seems a real description of events and I thought you have lived it in your reality. Your work it’s a very intelligent construction, it deserves to be published!
I have enjoyed this story, if we compare it to what really happens within clandestine organizations we do find it quite real. The details along the story are absolutely wonderful, I got hooked till the end.Greco it’s a very well designed character, the conflicts kept me attempt on the descriptions and questioning the following steps.
I do like the way you write, using a clear style!

Well done,
Miguel

scorselo wrote 568 days ago

Harold you've got a good story, action packed. I read the first two chapters chock full of information maybe thin it out a little, but a good read. has Maria maid a mistake??

Backed

Scorselo

Laurel Lamperd wrote 569 days ago

Well written chapter, Harold. It seems thrillers are always popular and North Korea is the latest bogeyman. My only thought with the first chapter is you have given a lot of information which slows the chapter down. Some of this information could be placed later in the book. You say 'The CIA was always searching to kill him'. Is this is correct. I thought Greco had retired from the CIA. Otherwise it looks like it will be a good story.
I'll back it. Thank you for backing my book, Murder Among the Roses. I appreciate it.
Laurel
www.authorsden.com/laurellamperd

fletcherkovich wrote 569 days ago


Harold,

Standing Ovation to your book.
I have read your work and found it fascinating. It is clear that you have put a great deal of effort into your writing, are committed to your content and serious about the development of your craft. What I like about Authonomy is that it allows writers, of all abilities, to share their work with other keen writers and readers, work that might not otherwise become published—and not necessarily for any reasons related to literary merit. I have backed your book since I felt that your efforts deserve my backing. Best of luck with your writing.

FLETCH
STORIES FROM A LEAKING MIND

E A M Harris wrote 578 days ago

I haven't had time to read much, but I liked your characters and I think the idea of the book should appeal to a lot of people.

There are rather a lot of adjectives for my taste, e.g. slipped cotton-rich white robes over their nude, still wet bodies.' You don't need 'nude' it they're wet and getting dressed that's enough. Also do we care if the clothes are 'cotton-rich'?

Apart from this I think it reads well and has a lot of potential.

I think I have backed it before, but I'll put it back on my shelf in case I haven't.

Cheers
Elaine

Telegraph wrote 583 days ago

This is a facinating read with well developed charcters and diolouge that keeps the pages turning. C W

NA Randall wrote 584 days ago

Harold,

This is a very assured, highly readable opening. You write with that unfussy economy which is the cornerstone of all the best thriller writers. You seem to have an inside handle on the kind of covert, undercover political operations you are writing about, which have an authentic, well-researched feel. Happy to give you my backing.

Regards

NA 'A Red Sky in Morning' & 'Tales of Ordinary Sadness'

Marcus Fisch wrote 584 days ago

Excellent story. Brilliant narrative.
Backed with pleasure
Abel Kane
The Alchemists' Cookbook

LeClerc wrote 592 days ago

Hi there Harold,

first, who does your cover art?

Do we like Greco or do we hate him? Are we supposed to know? Great character, great premise, beautifully and skillfully told.
Backed.

Phil
Danny Murphy

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 594 days ago

Good writing and excellent cover art. Your story explores espionage and undercover operations. I confess that I don't have a mind for this type of story - it's normally hard for me to follow. You've done a great job here of making your story understandable to those like me. BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

Euphemus wrote 595 days ago

Hi Harold, Thanks for backing Flawless Murder.
I read some of your book previously but bcan't remember if I backed it. I liked the storyline and your style.
I am backing it now,
David.

CraigD wrote 596 days ago

This is an intricate and well-researched narrative, and the straight-forward writing serves it well. One thing I'd suggest is watching out for the word "really". It came up a few times in the parts I read, and it doesn't add anything to the otherwise efficient writing. Other than that, nothing to critique. I hope this does well here, and I'm happy to back it for you.
Craig
The Job

alicev wrote 598 days ago

Hi Harold!

Your pitch doesn't do justice to the actual story which is much better than I expected. Backed!

Alice V
The Shoes that Charlotte Wore

Larry HCC wrote 603 days ago

HI Harold
Icon caught my eye and I gave it a backing and read from Larry and myself. I'm more the poet but here goes
I like thrillers with an authentic ring to them, and yours lived up to that. Your characters are authentic. Certainly Greco is very real, has real loves, concerns and more. He and Maria add some spark and romance.
Very intriguing story and extrememly well written. You kept my attention happy to have backed
Njoy *moods and expressions*

Rakhi wrote 604 days ago

I don't normally read this genre, but what pulled me from your pitch was your character, Greco. I wanted to read about his story, his life, his emotions and I'm gald I did. Your write vividly and in detail. What an extra-ordinary character and his relationship with Maria and his family is beautifully described. The mission is dangerous and mysterious which will hook your readers. But for me, the story really revolves around your character and his life and you have dome a splendid job of expressing that.
Backed with pleasure.
Rakhi (Sir William...)

Suzanne Adams wrote 606 days ago

Icon. What a great, eye-catching title! The premise is complex and intriguing; well thought out and a clue to what might be wrong with the text of the novel ...
Mohammad's story/familia story Perhaps, Mohammad's account?
Greco picked up Perhaps, first language or learned?
- he quickly learned English.
Icon is dotted with stuff like this e.g.- he noted the rock had two holes bored through the rock -
Read it aloud, as for an audio book an you will soon realise where things need changing for the better. This is a brilliant story Harold and I wish you well with it.

Silent Storm wrote 607 days ago

Harold Alvin:

You start the novel off filled with intrigue; it is so life like. It reads more like non fiction than fiction, albeit you make it clear that this is a historical fiction. Using life like figures only adds to the mystic. Please note that my opinions are those of my own. Use if you feel it is helpful.

Your plot appears to be well thought out. We know what the mission is almost from the start. That in and of itself ushered in a certain amount of intrigue. You do a great job of setting the stage in the first page or so. However, I found in reading the script the following: One sentence read: "getting back to his old self revived those dormant yens for the tightrope action." (Did you mean to say 'years'?)

I noticed some paragraphs had too many simple sentences - making it rather wordy. For example: "the next day, she called the Archdioces of Sao Sebastiao de Rio de Janeiro. It would be a Catholic wedding. She called Cardinal Archbishop Eusebio Oscar Scheid. Since he had baptized her as a baby, she wanted him to handle the wedding"

The above sentences could be combined for a tighter fit. Consider:

"It would be a Catholic wedding; Maria called cardinal Archbishop Oscar Scheid, the same archbishop who had baptized her as a baby." (Notice how the points are made, but with less words, making the script tighter. We really don't have to know when Maria made the call- which is why I omitted it in my version. Nor do we really need to know exactly which parish she called.

A lot of detail seem unnecessary as it doesn't appear to move the manuscript forward. For example: Repeated use of 'The next day' tended to get redundant. "The next day Maria went to the hospital and requested a sabbatical leave for at least one year."

Consider: "Maria requested a one year sabbatical from the hospital." Again, we really don't have to know that it was done the next day.

In one sentence you state: "Al Sheik called his wife while Rafael called his. They both said they were over at their parents home and would be a little late getting home. All three families lived within a few blocks of each other." (the fact that the boys lived close together was mentioned in a prior paragraph.) "They lived close to each other, no more than a few blocks apart and they always rode to and from work together."

You mentioned that when traffic was heavy the ride to and from Al Sheik and Raphael was about 30 minutes, but only 10 in clear weather. It is not necessary to mention the length of time it takes for the trips to and from home unless that directly impacts a particular incident. If, for example, there was heavy traffic that somehow interfered with the characters trying to accomplish something - it would be necessary to use it.

In the sentence: The live band was playing samba and rock and a special area near the dance floor was marked as reserved for the Mohammed Family. Maria danced with his brother and his father. Greco danced with his mother, his sister and Maria." (spell out who Maria danced with. Consider "Maria danced with Greco's brother and father."

You mentioned in more than one paragraph that Maria's niece was going to be flower girl. (Watch for redundancies) Decide which is the better spot to put the info.

When talking about Rebecca you mentioned that: "She had received permission to take a few extra comp days, thus she would have a five day leave." This sentence seems to contradict another in which you say: "The university granted Rebecca's request and gave her a thirty-day leave." Consider going through the manuscript for other such occurrences. You have the basis of a very good story. With editing no doubt this will be a real winner. Shelved.

Ida L. (Silent Storm)

BJ Alexander wrote 610 days ago

ICON-

What you have here is a complicated thriller, deep in plot and, I suspect, action as it moves along. It's obvious you've worked hard to concoct this story. It's far-reaching and well-researched.

In my opinion, it would benefit from less telling and a slower pace. At times the story moves along at breakneck speed, switching from one character pov to another sometimes without warning. In three chapters, we learned Greco's past, the world of spies he worked for, been introduced to his large family and seen him married off. All that and we don't really know any of the characters yet.

A little detail goes a long way. Make sure every one of them counts toward moving the story or contributing to characterization and avoid including anything that could be considered over-writing. Good luck. -Barb



GK Stritch wrote 610 days ago

Dear Harold Alvin,

ICON is a highly intelligent, sophisticated read that deserves a place in the published world.

Backed and good luck.

Please have a look at CBGB Was My High School.

GK Stritch

quackers wrote 611 days ago

This is my sort of book - I love it and should go all the way. Backed
Keith
Unit T Special Forces

D. L. Stroupe wrote 611 days ago

This is out of my genre but I'm sure it would appeal to its target audience. Finely detailed. Good luck with it!!

Laurie A Will wrote 614 days ago

Harold,

I like the premise and your writing is a easy to read. Greco is a great character and this is definitly a thriller.

Happily backed!

Laurie - Into The Master's Lair

Barry Wenlock wrote 614 days ago

Hi Harold,
This is a great read. It's thrilling, well paced and completely original, which is a relief on this site.
The only nits I have are in your pitch --
why rather quickly? why not just quickly?
Then, you use quickly again in the next sentence -- you could miss it out here.

I hope that's helpful. Thanks for a riveting read.

Best wishes, Barry

Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Rusty Bernard wrote 614 days ago

Hi Harold,

I have backed your book because I was hooked by the pitch, loved the introduction and read on. How much more I read depends on time and commitment.

Enjoy everything and good luck.

Rusty Bernard
Psychiatric Evaluation

Poppa4x wrote 616 days ago

Great book, and I confess I have not read it all yet. My adventures are a little more mundane than yours, but I wish you the best. I am not sure I have the resources to write a book like yours. So, reading yours will have to do. However, that is why we read in the first place....to go where we have never been. I am making time to finish it. I backed it so I would have it.

Euphemus wrote 618 days ago

Harold, it's a grteat book. An excellent story and well written. You have or have researched well.
It must be a success. Backed,
Euphemus (Flawless Murder)

Sly80 wrote 618 days ago

This is a complex and detailed story of an agent who operated for a super-clandestine organisation; a man who risked everything and lost a great deal, both he and his family. Now free of it all, and happy with Maria, Greco is tempted back into the work that almost killed him, a fate he assumed when he went into hiding. First he has to make amends, marrying Maria and letting his parents know he is alive, but for how much longer. Fascinating ... backed.

Possible nits: 'some of them in his own office ... make their own mark' omit one of the 'own's. 'sacrifice that his wife would offer ... she wanted him to marry her', a bit confusing. Don't have characters address each other by name a lot in dialogue as it sounds unnatural.

eloraine wrote 620 days ago

Really good, I got hooked right from the start and pulled effortlessly along, great job. E.Loraine Royal Blood chronicles book one.

Mooderino wrote 623 days ago

An interesting and original approach to the espionage world. All the tell tale signs of a complex thriller. Backed.