Hi, thanks for the comments on my book and for backing it. I have only had time to read the first chapter of yours. The pitch is very good, i really like the idea behind this book. I thought the first chapter was quite good but the first eleven paragraphs were too 'wordy'. it feels as if you've gone... view book

Hi Denise, Yesterday you asked me to have a read of your work and give my opinions. so here we go... I think you have a good story here and the writing is to a good standard. But you should try to focus on the pacing of the writing. When I read chapter one I was instantly struck by the contrast ... view book

The short pitch is very good. It instantly made me want to read on. Good display of imagination here. view book